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Hmm.. I'll keep that in mind. My personal preference while writing is to keep most of that kind of thing implied (it's how I've done almost everything I've worked on up to this point, and I'm in the process of editing two novels I've finished), but you definitely have a point. I'll see if can get some more expression into it as I go, but it will be a work in progress since I'm not too used to it.
Either way, I really appreciate the feedback. My entire inspiration for the story was the character, so almost all of my effort has been to making her stay believable (which is part of the reason why chapter three has been taking so long) . if there's anything you notice farther on down the line, feel free to yell at me. Any and all help is worth it!
2053260 nun with a gun
i really like it too and i have to agree with regolit on the whole blood & guts & boobs & butts (its fun to say) but other than that, Great job!
Because all the others have been rude and forgotten to say it, welcome to the Fo:E herd
It looks pretty good so far. Keep up the good work!
- Noakwolf
.45-70 is a hell of a big round for a handgun, a magnum .45-70 is just all sorts of nasty . I do not envy Evergreen's teeth.