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Twilight and Rarity are sent to identify a mysterious artifact found in the Crystal Mountains. The journey is long, and while traveling in the breathtakingly beautiful scenery of the North, Twilight starts to discover entirely new feelings towards her friend.
But their mission is not sugar and spice, for under the Northern skies, something ancient has awoken.
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Hmm, I like it. Keep it up amigo
Twilight and Rarity going on an adventure for once?
Alright, I'm interested
Objection.
All in all, it's a bit fast-paced for my tastes but I'm definitely sticking around for this
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Thank you.
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Thanks for pointing the error out.
Can't believe I missed that...
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No problem
That prologue was awesomely creepy.
(I think you'd do well with the horror genre) I guess we can only speculate on the fates of those four ponies for now...
I'm glad you're taking your time to flesh out the story before: *BAM! They're at the excavation site! Things happening!* It's nice to see the side of Rarity that's thoughtful and logical rather than the drama queen we often see in the show, but I'm guessing previous events in Hoofington/ being alone with Twilight/ knowledge that this is an important mission have drawn out her better side.
I only noticed a few errors: (In order)
- I had to admit that it maked sense. (Should be 'made sense')
- I silently thanked Celestia for getting use Business-Class tickets. (Don't you mean 'us'?)
- But it would also be an absolute was if you spent the entire time we have here to read some dusty books! (Not sure what you were trying to say here; it needs a little restructuring)
- None of them was bold enough to come and talk to us. (Should be 'were' not 'was')
- My ears ringed. (My ears rang?)
- I could smell faint amounts ozone... (Either 'amounts of ozone' or 'There was the faint smell of ozone')
- I and Rarity (Rarity and I)
Good luck carrying on with two ongoing fics! I await further updates!
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Thanks. Fix'd.
Reading books is an absolute waste
I'm in, and looking forward to more! Great start, and very mysterious!
RariTwiFan reporting in from Authors Helping Authors!
Northern Skies
Grammar:9
Pros:
-The mysteriousness of this story really has really got me excited.
-A RariTwi fic that features adventure...I've been waiting for this for soooo long!!!
-The Crystal Mountains are definitely a great area for an adventure so good on you for that.
Cons:
-It goes a bit too fast at times.
-It seems like Twilight falls for Rarity a bit fast.
-A couple of grammatical errors.
Notes:Slow the story down a bit and show us more of the area. Make sure not to let Twilight fall into OOCness...it's really easy to do...I know that from personal experience.
I really like this story! I hope you'll be able to review my story,Colossal, and I hope this review helped!
Chapter 2 is out and Chapter 1 has been revised/expanded per reader and editor feedback. Most sincere thanks to 59caddyel for editing the story and providing invaluable commentary!
Yeshhhhh!
Loving the story so far! I cant wait to see how things progress!
Two new updates and I haven't gotten around to reading this?
Apologies, but I've been swamped with trying to sort out updates to my own fics. I'll be sure to get back to this within the week.
Finally got around to reading this! I like the way you describe Twilight's 'nightmares', and I have q feeling that dark, terrible things are to come... Which is good.
The romance has been gradual, and it'll be interesting to see what happens when Twi exposes her feelings. Great stuff, as always.
Keep those updates comin'!
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Thanks. The next update might take a while, because I'm very busy with school as the finals are coming next month
oooh. Goosebumps. I like.
This has got to be one of the more entertaining fics that I have read in a long while. I hope there's an update soon!
You're back to posting again! It's been too long, my friend.
I guess we'll find out soon enough what's in store for Rares and Twi, though I already have my suspicions. I'm betting that 'Dark' tag ain't just for show.
If there's one thing that I'd change, it's that I'd have liked to see the dream sequence taken a little bit further. And no, I don't mean like 'OMG sxey teimz', but I'd have liked to have seen a bit more of Twi's personal musings and feelings when she's not constrained by reality.
Anyhoo... keep it up!
(And it says '1 views'? Am I the first one here? Victory lap!)
Twilight without magic!? DUN DUN DUNNN! It interests me how differently authors perceive magic and unicorn abilities, and I think you've got a good balance of letting Twi be powerful but not to ridiculous levels. And Twi cuddling up to Rares was cute.
Keep writing! I want to see where this goes.
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I'm determined to finish this story. However, I am writing other things at the same time.
Twilight, y u no have normal dreams!?
So there've been lots of travellers, eh? Methinks Celestia hasn't told them everything...
Keep up the good work.
Great chapter, though I must admit I am shocked Rarity saw anything when she read the book, but I love when a story does the opposite of what I was thinking it would.
Only error I saw was right here
I don't know how to fix it in all honesty though.
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Oops... I'm sure I had a 'would' there
Any money that book somehow heals itself or appears in another place.
I'm guessing Rarity read something about Twilight's feelings in there... Keep up the good work, and keep this steady pacing you've got going on. I'm anxious to see where this is all leading. 
Nice save there Prolet.
Damn it Grey Thunder! Where the f*** were you!?
So Celestia sends a pegasus who can't sly as a guide for her most faithful student? Nice one, Celly...
And you know, for a second there I really thought Rarity was swept away. (I didn't cry... honest...) They spend all that time making a rickety old bridge only for Twilight's magic to come back? 
I'd be pissed...
Looking forward to what comes next.
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The next chapter will be released tomorrow, and the one after that is in the workings already. I'm aiming to release a chapter a week until this story is finished.
Thanks for the feedback
Damn it, Twilight! Why did you chicken out!? Rarity wanted a kiss and you just turned away? You need to make your move now or lose your chance forever!
Another great chapter as always.
What's with the 'Rares' and 'Twi' thing? I've never heard them call each othe that. Mabey Applejack, but not them. I don't know just feels off. Still an excellent story though.
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I'd imagine they started to call each other by nicknames after spending a lot of time together. Perhaps it's just me, though.
2683513>>2686789 I like the nicknames. They fit with the atmosphere of hidden love. I have to be honest, though. I say "Twi" to reference Twilight all the time.
OK, so I finally got around to reading the 3 most recent chapters. Sorry it took so long! My thoughts as follows:
Hoo-f***ing-ray! We finally see Twilight and Rarity exposing their feelings for one another.
Though I do have a bad feeling that something might happen to Rarity... and I don't know how Twi would cope.
We finally discover the source of Twilight's voices. And it's... Twilight? I'm guessing this isn't the same Twilight we know and love, although... There's the whole thing with the diary explaining Twilight's most inner thoughts...
I'm thinking back to the four ponies who were originally at the excavation site. Did Princess Twilight kill them? What has been her plan all along? Did Celestia know about this? If so, why did she send... Oh wait...
Or maybe I'm just having a madcap theory moment.
Still, keep up the good work. This fic rocks! 
Not only that there have been many travellers, but that all of them have been heading further into the wilderness. No returners.
Why isn't he limpinggggggh.
Took me two pages to realise that, and then I was expecting the worst from him all chapter long.
Wow. I'm gonna be honest, after the previous chapter I didn't think it was coming to an end so soon, but actually... It works. And now that it's over, I can't help but feel kind of sad...
That's the sign of an accomplished story. 
I was half-expecting this 'other' Twilight to simply be the future version of 'our' Twilight, and I'm glad this wasn't the case. Though I felt it was a little strange to have practically all of 'other' Twilight's story explained right near the end, I'm not sure how you'd have gotten around that. Maybe with a dual narrative setup like I have with Legacy? But considering they're both Twilight that could have led to some confusion... Hmm. I guess it would have been difficult to do it like that.
As for Twi and Rares? D'awwwwwwwwwwwwww.
This was a really good story, and right now I'm hoping for the return of your excellent Lyra/Bon fic from ages ago. 
And to think I only browsed your stories on a random whim... Oh, the places life takes us. 
Much love!
This has been one of my favorite fictions on this site for a long time, and I can honestly say I am only sad to see it end. I like that you didn't state out right "We kissed, so we're dating." But instead let them linger on what their feelings meant. Excellent work.
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I'm not really into dual narratives. I have even considered rewriting the prologue to be a dream of Twilight. As for the Lyra/Bon stuff, likely not. At least not in its original form. I will continue to write ponyfic, but likely won't start big projects anytime soon.
I'm also glad you liked the story
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Thanks
I have over 600 stories in my favorite list here on fimfiction, and It's been a while since I've read something so exciting that i could not tear myself away from it.
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You really nailed the atmosphere, in a way few others have done. The one thing that surprised me most of all, is just how little recognition your story have gotten. It's a shame really, for this is one of the deepest most exciting fic's I've read in a long time.
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Thanks. Really, I think the biggest issue are the first few chapters and the somewhat disconnected prologue. Of course I could go back and revise them, but I'd rather write new stuff.
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
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I submitted it a long time ago and got a rejection.
I like the story and all, but "Twi" sounds more like something that would come out of Applejack's mouth.
This story has been sitting in a tab seemingly forever for me to read it.
I'm quite glad I did. There just simply aren't enough quality Rarilight adventure fics, let alone any at all.
The Alicorn 'Twilight' was surprising, felt a bit out of nowhere, but was far from disappointing.
Definitely earned a thumbs up, and a place in my Read it Later list, where I keep my good sh*t
One can only hope there's a sequel in the works.
I GOT CHICKEN SKIN!
I'm sad :(
GET SOME TWILIGHT!!
I found this in my to read later list and I finally read it. I was in the middle of reading it when my parents found out what I was reading and was and still am, grounded for several months probably until I graduate and move out for college. Great store. Though confusing here and there a great story nonetheless.