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My name's Desten, my favorite pony is Applejack and I've wanted to write ever since I read My Little Dashie I knew I had to do fanfiction. I hope you all like my stuff!

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Fret Notehooves was a musician that married a beautiful mare named Azure. Their romance was a wildfire that now cinders as Fret awaits to join his beloved wife. One time shot at a one pager, this is what I thought of. Fret Notehooves is an OC of a friend please don't mind my spelling and grammer I know I'm horrible with that.

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Comments ( 6 )

Complete with just 1442 words? :unsuresweetie:

OC centered? Hmmmm... :moustache:

I will give it a go and return here after reading.

1968940 Just a one shotter in the dark, nothing special.

Read it and...

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A little grammar error here and there. You still could flesh it better, maybe try to aim to a 3k words long healthier chapter lenght.
But in general, good go, you won my green thumb.

The only problem that I need to point is the spacing. Always press the enter button when finishing a sentence, or your story ends up looking like a wall of text.

1969027 I know I've got a lot of terrible grammer and spelling mistakes, I'm trying to fix it. As for the lenght... eh maybe I'll go back and add a few more words to it just to strech it out. But it was just a first try at a one pager, I'm not experianced with writing 3k word chapters.

Well done, sir. You seem to have made a great piece of fanfiction:twilightsmile:. My only advice for you would be to increase the length of your story:raritywink:

1971472 I'll work on it later... probably tonight after I get back from work. :twilightsmile:

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