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Nny11
I've been writing for years and recently got into MLP fim, and you all know how that one works! Silly me thinking I might not post fanfiction or draw fanart. Friendship is Obsession!
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That was pretty good. But oh so short. Sequel?
Welp you just took one of the most hackneyed premises in FiM fanfiction and managed to redeem it by finding an interesting angle that hasn't been explored all that much. There are stories that relate the other characters reaction to this sort of thing happening. Yet none explore those reactions so thoroughly as you have here by completely internalizing the characters' reactions through a first person narrative and really showing the emotional cost entailed by someone's continued recklessness. Hence I found this more profoundly emotional that all the other stories I've read in this vein. Well done.
If I could explain all the feels that I have right now, I gladly would, but since I can't, I'll just say that you have done a magnificent job writing this. Explaining feelings is never an easy task, and you were able to do it smoothly. It's sad that this is such a short story. Short, yet sad and heartbreaking. So all I can say is that you're an awesome writer, and I sure do hope to see more from you in the future. 5/5
Oh, come on! It's an amazing one-shot, probably could win an award or something. But you could make it something great. Favorited anyway.
I can't pass judgement on this. It feels like it is crying out for more. I want so badly to rate this thing to my heart's content, but I can't until I have time to feel it more.
Dam that was good but sad you should try pull a sequel 5/5
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I can understand that completely. What I've found with my writing is I can do at least decent flash fiction that leaves people wanting more or I drag it out too far and it doesn't leave as good of an impression. *shrug* So I tend to just write them until I feel like there's nothing more I can add without messing up the feeling and leave it. Thanks for the comment though, I'll try to put in some more length on the next one!
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"So I tend to just write them until I feel like there's nothing more I can add without messing up the feeling and leave it."
Personally I think that's the smarter approach and the results of this story bear this out. To me it's not really a matter of length so much as whether the story does what it says on the tin and how well it accomplishes that. This does it in spades, and it captures the feelings of the narrator perfectly.
Though I can understand wanting more from the quality shown here. If you want to do something more lengthy in the future, handling a longer story structure might be a point of craft to work on.
I think I have lost all abilities in responding to sad fics.
Just realized I hadn't commented on this. I really enjoyed it. You took a situation that has its fair share of portrayals (Dash getting hurt flying) and put a new, heartfelt spin on it that was simple yet emotional. Really great work - I really don't know how stuff like this doesn't get more views. Have this Dash and Applejack for a lovely story
