Well you definitely get points for creativity. I myself had an idea for a Matrix cross MLP fic, but mine was way more Matrix oriented. Had more of the serious machine and evil vibe to it. You made it alittle more....... i guess "Pony like"? Does that make any sense? Just how you converted alot of the scenes into a more pony related scenario, like the chocolate mirror, the egg capsule, the machines, everything was well done.

So far I'm really enjoying this fic. Can't wait to see more.

I haven' had a chance to read the whole thing yet but I definitely do not think you should stop. What I've read so far I've enjoyed. The only think I would suggest is that you ponify it just a little more. There should be no use of "someone" or "anyone". It should be "somepony" or "anypony" Other then that I'm good so far. I'll let you know it anything else catches my eye. Keep up the good work!

Pretty good

Now go and write the next chapter! I wanna know what happens next.

And don't come here waving some nonsense about not being good enough, you got yourself a track from me and I expect some chapters go and write now ok? Ok;)

This was fun. I can see why you say this needs a little more work around the use of writing language, but you are not bad. The story is so imaginative, it would be a shame if you don't put your ideas onto words, I'm tracking, hoping you will keep up.

truth betold its a little ruth, but i do belive it will be an amazing tale once you expande on this story.

-WW

"sigh" mate, this is an amazing story, but if you realy think you need to improve, then the best way is to take your time, you should spend at least two days writeing a chapter and half a day looking it over and editing it. even if you think it needs impoveing, i belive that its amazing, so keep at it and i hope to see a new chapter in a few days.

-WW

Don't stop writing!

I mean, yeah, every author needs to work on some aspect of their writing. But they all get better by continuing to write. Just keep at it. This is a really good story idea, and I would definitely like to see it continue.

I'm so happy you decided to continue this fic. KEEP GOING! Your fans will support you through every chapter.

Yay~! I really like this fic, so keep it up!

Icing!? lol love how you use candy.

Thank you for continuing this sweet story! I bet It will get better the more you write.

Twilight talking with her brain was priceless!

I don't have a single idea what happened in these 5 chapters. I just don't get it...

Oh god, I'm loving this story. Keep this gravy train rolling!

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why oh why did you take the blueberry?

Very intersting, "Smirk" a job well done, i think your improveing, i'll be keeping an eye on you. hope theres more soon.

-WW

Twilight got laid faster than Neo. never thought Id see that

Of course she did. With that flank? Who wouldn't, honestly. I'm following i'm reading, 5 stars, well done, etc. etc.

This is getting really good. So good it's delicious. *Yum*

Pinkie pie? Being serious!?

Yep we're screwed....

Very enteresting, flow on my man flow on.

-WW

You have talent. 5 stars

LOL

love the ending of that chapter. Tracking.

Without even reading, I can say, this has a lot of potential!

I'm still reading and I still like it. But it's ok if you want to improve the story. I just hope you keep uploading it here so the track still tell us once it's up again, please.

And fabolous chapter, can't get enough inner Twilight struggles,

Loved thr Activate Pony Joe Rush! And erven if it ends here i'll read the sequel.

Please make moar chapters

Dr. Tock-Doctor ohhhhhh i see what you did there nice

Oh come one,

ooops a slip of a key i see.