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  • T A Song of Storms: Summer Lands

    The problems between the three tribes didn't end with the founding of Equestria. As the nation faces race riots, assassinations, and the threat of a civil war, it will take everything Commander Hurricane has just to see it survive the years.  · The 24th Pegasus
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  • T A Song of Storms: Of Skies Long Forgotten

    The pegasi that founded Equestria have a dark past, a past Commander Hurricane played a key role in.
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  • T A Song of Storms: Summer Lands

    The problems between the three tribes didn't end with the founding of Equestria. As the nation faces race riots, assassinations, and the threat of a civil war, it will take everything Commander Hurricane has just to see it survive the years.
    117,594 words · 684 views  ·  109  ·  2 · gore
  • T A Rainbow of a Different Color

    When Rainbow Dash wakes up in a strange land with no memory of who she is or how she got there, it's up to her and some new friends to try and uncover her past, and find out just what exactly she was running from.
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  • T Brother of Mine

    One rainy night, Final Hour searches Low Town Canterlot to find his fleeing brother, leading to a confrontation that neither pony ever wished for.
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  • E The Life I Chose

    While wandering the road between tours, Trixie stops and reflects on her life and how it has changed for the better since meeting Twilight.
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  • 3w, 1d
    AMA Redux Part 2 v2: Electric Scootaloo

    I have a bad habit of posting semi-coherent blog posts at 4 in the morning, don't I? Anyways, I figure it's been a while since I've fielded questions from the lot of you (over a year, in fact!), so I might as well do it again. Now's your chance to ask me anything, and I mean literally anything, and I'll give you some sort of answer. It might not be the answer you want, but I'll give you one, alright.

    I'm gonna get some sleep now. You better have questions for me when I wake up!

    Ante Legionem nihil erat, et nihil erit post Legionem

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  • 3w, 5d
    A Little Something You Might Find on My Desktop

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  • 10w, 2d
    Double Milestones!

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  • 11w, 8h
    Bronycon 2014 Day Three

    Bronycon 2014

    Day 3

    Plushes Bought: 1

    Shirts Purchased: 1

    Art Acquired: 10

    Other Swag: 5 Pony Badges, 2 Large Buttons, 2 Other Sized Buttons, 1 TSSSF Game

    Total Money Spent: ~$405

    Bronycon 2014: Dawn of the Final Day

    There’s nothing like waking up on approximately four hours of sleep, amirite? After finally clocking out at 2 in the morning the night before, I set an alarm to go off at 7 o’clock so that I could get up early enough to get Tabitha St. Germain’s and Andrea Libman’s autographs. Autograph signings began at 10, but the lines to get vouchers to get said autographs were so ridiculously long that that was the only way I could really get my autographs within a reasonable time. As I mentioned in an earlier post, she likes to talk with people (which is amazing) but thus the line becomes slow (which is unfortunate), and if I showed up a half hour, even an hour before, there was a chance I wouldn’t get her autograph that session. So early in the morning I rose. At 6. Because I have the habit/problem of waking up before my alarm goes off. So I’m functioning on 4 hours of sleep right now, dead tired, and everything above this line was written around 6 o’clock and I’ve been up for twelve hours after sleeping for four (I WANT TO SLEEP!!!).

    Showered. Got a chocolate croissant. Grabbed my art for signing and wandered over to the convention center. It was actually interesting how dead yet how populated the con center was at 7:20 in the morning. Like, I’m so used to seeing hundreds and thousands of people at one time, and when I was there, the halls were almost entirely empty. It was still fascinating because there were still a good number of people wandering the halls almost three hours before the first panels began. But, thanks to my being there so early, I was able to get a spot in line very close to the front. From there I sat for two and a half hours until the lines began to move into the autograph area, from which I had only a short wait before I was able to get Tabitha’s signature thanks to my being there so early. I got an awesome little message from Luna/Tabitha from it all, along with Andrea Libman’s signature on my Flutterbat picture. I felt bad for her, along with some of the other VAs and VIPs at the panel because their lines were almost empty, compared to Tabitha’s which had a waiting list. At least the number of people that came to see them, judging by the size of the line outside, should’ve kept them mostly busy throughout the allotted time.

    Oh, I also got to hear Claire Corlett (Sweetie Belle) shout “Oh come on!” per someone’s request. That was pretty spectacular.

    Afterwards, I managed to show up at the adventure writing panel just before it started and got to listen to another awesome panel by Aquaman, Chryssalid, and others (again, I’m too god damn tired to remember everyone on the panel. My apologies). From there, we went to a panel on psychology, where Dusk Watch managed to get us front row seats. Unfortunately, this had the side effect of me wanting to kill myself (not out of any hate or disrespect for the panelist [Clockwork, who was pretty cool {I can parenthesis again ||uh… shit, this will have to do for a fourth set of parenthesis //I’m tired, okay? /*yes, I know this is computer code. Deal with it *///||}]) because I was that damn tired. I could hardly keep my eyes open, and that’s no fun when you’re sitting front and center. Apparently Dusk Watch and Ruirik really enjoyed the panel; I simply couldn’t focus because it felt too much like another college lecture.

    Oh yeah. I go back to college in like, a little more than two weeks. Shit.

    After that we got food. Five Guys, again, but it was pretty good, again. We carried said food back to Q&S, where we spent the time talking with PresentPerfect, Wanderer D, and others again. Probably my favorite thing of this con was getting referred to by name by people such as CouchCrusader and Present Perfect. All you guys are amazing. I’m so happy I got to talk with you guys this con and I hope to see you all again next year. It is unreal that I got to speak with people so notable in the fandom on a one-on-one basis, sitting at the same tables with them and eating at the same restaurants with them. When the group shot from the writers’ dinner goes up, I’m gonna go nuts.

    The rest of the day passed fairly quickly and quietly. I went down to the vendors one last time and bought a few things, including Twilight Sparkle’s Secret Shipfic Folder and even MORE posters. Seriously, I’m going to end up plastering my dorm wall with pony. My roommate is either going to kill me or kill himself. Or be converted. Probably the second option.

    We had plans to go see the closing ceremony, but the line was so long that Skeeter and I decided it wasn’t worth it. Instead we spent some time with Chryssalid, Wanderer D, Applejinx, Pegasus Rescue Brigade, and PresentPerfect hanging outside of the now-closed Q&S room. When they all left, I rejoined with TheBigStallowski, Loyal, Ruirik, Dusk Watch, and Web of Hope for dinner, for which Gary Oak and others joined us. We first tried The Cheesecake Factory (yes, we parodied the damn song), and when that proved to be a 2.5 hour wait for food, we instead went to Dick’s.

    Oh lord, that place.

    It was a pretty awesome place. The thing about Dick’s is that the wait staff is paid to be assholes to you, and as a result you can be an asshole back. This wasn’t to say that they weren’t excessively impolite or mean; the most we got was the occasional witty comment or diss (our waitress asked if Loyal was on his period when he ordered a Pina Colada). Additionally, the wait staff made “insulting” paper hats for all of us at the table. For example, Ruirik had a hat bestowed upon him that said “I’m not allowed within 100ft of playgrounds or schools”, Loyal got one that said “My mom helped me pick out this outfit”, TheBigStallowski got one that said “I smell like a virgin”, and Leo got a hat saying he was “The pimp of Bronycon”. My hat, as I was seated next to him, had an arrow and said, “I’m his Mane Squeeze” (good pun, guys).

    Just like SolidFire shipped Ruirik and LoyalLiar the other day, apparently now Dusk x 24 is the new OTP.

    Then we returned from Dick’s, and we’ve been chilling out in the hotel room since, drinking, sharing stories, admiring the pic of Wanderer D’s horrified face (Skeeter showed him a terrible, terrible, terrible story at Q&S), and otherwise trying to stay awake. At least I’m trying to stay awake; everyone else seems to be making off better than me. Tomorrow, I’ll be heading back home, and having to say goodbye to all the amazing people I got to meet. It was really, really awesome to meet people like Loyal and Ruirik and Dusk Watch, who I’ve spent a long, long time talking with over skype but never had the chance to meet up in person. It’s going to be really sad, because I won’t see these guys again in person for probably another year. At least we have some pictures that we took to remind us of the good times; those will follow tomorrow when I get back home and get back to my desktop.

    Ironically, this post is probably going to wait to go up until tomorrow as well, seeing as my computer is a special device that really hates the wifi here and I don’t feel like going through the hassle of transferring this document to my brother’s computer (which is fine with the wifi) and posting it that way, as I have with the past few blog posts. [By the way, timestamp of 11:37pm 8/3/14 EST]

    What more can I say? This was an amazing con, even better than last year, and I can’t wait to do it again next year. My only wish is that I can see all the people I met this year again next year, and that more of you, faithful followers, will come out to join me. Hey, I might be doing a panel too, so you never know. It might be worth it.

    Until then, I’m going to catch up on some sleep. I mean it. I’ll probably sleep for like 10 or 12 hours or something. Once again, great con, great times, and I love all of you strange brony types that attended this thing with me. All 9,600 of you (from what I heard).

    UPDATE: I'll make a blog post with all the pictures that were taken tomorrow, once everyone in our party pools the pictures we took so we can all upload them.

    Ante Legionem nihil erat, et nihil erit post Legionem

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  • 11w, 1d
    Bronycon 2014 Day Two (Late Edition)

    Bronycon 2014

    Day 2

    Plushes Bought: 0

    Shirts Purchased: 1

    Art Acquired: 5

    Other Swag: 5 Pony Badges, 2 Large Buttons

    Total Money Spent: ~$244

    Bronycon Day Two. Fight!

    This day got off to a slow start, mostly because I was terribly tired and I ended up sleeping too late to go to the first panel of the day (The Do’s and Don’ts of Fanfiction). Instead I ended up wandering around the vendor hall, where I made the first purchases of the day: a large Rainbow Dash button, a Nightmare Moon t-shirt, and a simply framed Princess Luna photo. I forget what those expenses totaled up to; all I remember was the muffin I grabbed that morning was $3.86, same as yesterday.

    Afterwards, I went to the EqD Q&A (I refuse to call it by its pun name), where I happened to meet up with Ruirik, Skeeter, and Loyal (I honestly forget if Dusk Watch was there as well; I was like half-awake at the time). After that we went to Five Guys for food (so good), upon which we returned to the Quills & Sofas, consumed said food, and then went to the Crossovers panel, which had a host of awesome panelists. Said panelists included ABagOfVicadin, Aquaman, Pen Stroke, and a few others (sorry, I can’t remember the names of everyone on the panel and I don’t know what happened to any of the schedules in this god damn room to check). That was a blast; my favorite part was when someone asked “how do you go about writing a historical story without any real canon characters?” and I leaned towards Loyal and said, “Write about Commander Hurricane, obviously.” I mean, they were talking about historical fics and Game of Thrones spiritual crossovers, and I’m sitting there near the front behind Applejinx and Wanderer D with a smile on my face because that’s exactly what A Song of Storms is all about. Oh, if only they knew…

    More reason to do a panel next year. We even have a few ideas: World-Building, Writing Cooperatively, a few others. Who knows what’ll happen? I definitely want it to, at the least. It’d be a blast.

    Anyway, after that I went back to the vendor hall and blew even more money on four large posters, one of which is a Flutterbat poster I plan on having Andrea Libman sign tomorrow morning (alongside the Princess Luna I plan on getting Tabitha St. Germain to sign [Assuming I can get to her in a reasonable time {Is this how inset parentheses work?}]). When I was just about finished with that, I finally saw the one plush that was actually within reason in terms of the price-quality matchup. It was an awesome Spitfire plush by something-something Waifu Studios, excellently made, and only $180. Considering that I found out that aforementioned Cadance plushie I mentioned yesterday was NINE-HUNDRED DOLLARS (I know, right?!), this was by far the most reasonable plush at the con. I wanted that thing bad.

    Of course, Fortune had another plan.

    Turns out the people running that panel only take cash (you only take cash for a $180 plush?! Why not a card!), and I did not have $180 on hand at the time. What I should have done was asked them to reserve it and supply some collateral with the money I had on me while I went to get more. Instead, I left for the hotel room to deposit everything else I had with me at the time and to pick up the sufficient funds to acquire the plush. Of course, when I return, the vendor is already closing down and the Spitfire plush is nowhere in sight. I can only hope tomorrow that when they set back up again they have the plush I so desire so I can acquire it then. One can only hope.

    After departing from the vendor hall, I made plans to go to P.F. Chang’s with LoyalLiar, Ruirik, Dusk Watch, TheBigStallowski, Gary Oak, and Web of Hope after attending the Medieval Equestria panel later that day. Then I hung out again at Q&S, where I got to spend an awesome half hour talking with Cloud Hop about OSLF and other projects that I’m working on/have finished. He was an awesome guy, and I’m glad you’re so enthusiastic about my work, Cloud.

    Once we finished the Medieval Equestria panel (which was awesome, by the way. I am willing to pay money for that game, and they said that they’re looking to make it available on Steam and maybe even Xbox/PS4. Seriously, it’s built on the Unreal 4 engine, and it’s awesome), we went out to get dinner at P.F. Chang’s. It was amazing, and we took some pictures afterwards, but they may be shadowy because of lighting. If that’s the case we might have to take new pictures tomorrow.

    On that note, the PoL team took pictures (which we know we need to reshoot). Ruirik has plans for them. That’s all I’ll say about the matter now.

    After that, we went back to the room and chilled out for a bit. Then I made this post and am posting it now.

    Day Three tomorrow! The sad conclusion, but at least I’ll make the most out of it.

    Ante Legionem nihil erat, et nihil erit post Legionem

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This story is a sequel to A Song of Storms: Of Skies Long Forgotten

It has been twenty years since the fall of the Cirran Empire, and Commander Hurricane has led the pegasus pony tribe into a comfortable role in accordance with the Tri-Pony Compact. But a supernatural blizzard without end brings forth the suppressed hatreds that have festered among the three tribes, and the resulting famine threatens to eradicate all; earth pony, unicorn, and pegasus alike. With a bloody war looming on the horizon and the fate of their ponies at stake, the three tribes must find a way to survive together, or they will assuredly die alone.

Sequel to "Of Skies Long Forgotten." Reading of that story is not absolutely necessary to understand what is going on, but it is strongly recommended for you to understand the references.

Officially part of "The Price of Loyalty" storyverse, in collaboration with LoyalLiar

Editing by LoyalLiar and Ruirik

Cover art provided by SovietDash

First Published
12th Jan 2013
Last Modified
12th Jan 2014
#1 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Prologue: Frozen Caverns ·

Here we are! The sequel is finally here, and with it we get a look back at Hearth's Warming. What really happened during that terrible blizzard? Well, if you read on, you'll find out! I hope to get chapters out at a regular pace, at least one per week, but please don't kill me if I can't.

With the release of the story we also have some big news as well. Fellow author LoyalLiar, writer of the "Where Loyalties Lie" stories, has teamed up with me to create a single universe for our stories -- a "storyverse" I suppose you would call it. This effort of loose collaboration will lead to neat little tie-ins and references between our stories so that we can expand off of each other. For those of you who worry about how this might tangle the plot of your favorite stories, keep this in mind; LoyalLiar is continuing to write his stories as he planned, and I'm continuing to write mine as planned. The only difference is that we generate material for each other to use in our stories and we keep our works framed within the same set of events and times. I'll make a blog post describing it more.

Anyways, PLEASE comment, rate, and favorite if you enjoy the story. I would love to hear your feedback on my work, and what you think of this storyverse collab. Also, make sure to join "The Price of Loyalty" group to keep up with both of our stories.

Thanks for your time and views!

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#2 · 92w, 2d ago · 2 · · Chapter 1: Siege ·

Yay, finally here, time to start reading. I'll edit this comment later with comments on the first two chapters. :twilightsmile:

Okay, just read the first two chapters, and I surely approve of them. First off; the thought of two of my favourite verse's being put together is great, it makes it a lot easier for myself (and others) to remember what (for example) the different forms of magic of the different races are called. I also look forward to picking the stories apart looking for references between them.

I must also say I love your portrayal of Star Swirl and Princess Plast-ahem, Platinum, Star Swirl is probably one of my absolute favourite characters, and its unfortunate he is barely ever noticed at all, even in the Canon (A few passing mentions the only evidence he existed at all).

Wondering what has happened to the rest of Hurricane's family, and you have made me really curious about King Lapis, so I look forward to reading about all of them.

#3 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1: Siege ·

He didn’t notice the first flakes of summertime snow beginning to fall.

You have no idea how much that confused me for a moment.

I'm so tired.

#4 · 91w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

Earlier than I originally intended on releasing this chapter, but I can't imagine who would complain about that. As always, please comment and tell me what you think, and if you enjoy the story, then hit that favorite button and the thumbs up. 'Twould be much appreciated.

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#5 · 91w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

You've got me; the intrigue is killing me, and I want to know what's going on.  You're right when you say no one would complain; you clearly need to increase your update schedule.

“Cyclone would have lit them on fire.”

Despite how terrible this probably sounds, I had to stop reading so I could catch my breath after laughing.

Not make fics make me yell out loud, but I think my roommate was confused by an out-of-context "YES!", so you have that going for you too.

Of course, you probably already knew my opinion.

-Loyal Liar

#6 · 91w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

>>1971973

Glad that you enjoyed it. I got a laugh myself when I came up with that line.

Increase my update schedule? Would that I could, right now I'm averaging four days per chapter! :raritydespair: At least I take pride in knowing that I'll never let myself fall off the grid and not update for an entire month. Chapter 3, being a transition chapter, will be a little more difficult to eke out a suitable word count, but I imagine I'll have it done in short time as well (one of the benefits of having only two midterms :rainbowwild: )

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#7 · 91w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

>>1972023

Four days per chapter is an excellent rate; I'm just teasing of course, as well as alluding to my all-consuming desire for more.

-LL

#8 · 91w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

>>1972042

As much as I eagerly await the next installment of your own story

#9 · 91w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

Oh skysteel, where were you when the Gryphons were burning Nimbus?

I like how you insert RD and Twi into the story, it adds a layer of history to it all, but 8,000 years? That's a lot.

#10 · 91w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 3: Cursed Snow ·

And this my friends is when the excrement meets the ventilation unit.  :pinkiecrazy:

#11 · 91w, 7h ago · · · Chapter 3: Cursed Snow ·

I wonder what the Zebras were doing in this time period.  Heh.

Loved the chapter. :pinkiehappy:

#12 · 91w, 7h ago · 1 · · Chapter 3: Cursed Snow ·

>>1997622

Another story for another time, I'm afraid, but still glad to hear that you liked it :twilightsmile:

#13 · 90w, 3d ago · · · Prologue: Frozen Caverns ·

How rhe hell did I not know this was published?!

Definately wasn't expecting the story to start in the present. And Commander Typhoon... :duck: Wait. Wait a minute...

:applejackunsure::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::pinkiegasp::pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy: Its- no, I know who he is, but I won't spoils it for anyone else. :twilightsmile:

#14 · 90w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2: Troubling Winds ·

I knew Typhoon was Hurricane's kid (:trixieshiftright: well it was obvious) Shush Trixie. Didn't think it'd be a filly, or his second kid for that matter.

Gotta say, loving the story so far. Everything's building up perfectly. :twilightsmile:

#15 · 89w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3: Cursed Snow ·

Huh, I almost expected Clover the clever to be the unicorn diplomat. Things are starting to get interesting. :twilightsmile:

#16 · 89w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3: Cursed Snow ·

Alright, all caught up.

I like how this is going so far. And I really like the bits with Rainbow and Twilight at the beginning of each chapter. A nice little way of tying the past and the present.

I eagerly await the next chapter.:twilightsmile:

#17 · 89w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4: Heated Talks ·

Another fantastic chapter.  This Blue Coat unicorn guy is interesting, I'm eager to see what he's up too.

#18 · 89w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 4: Heated Talks ·

Then Typhoon and Cyclone walk out of the rumble saying:  "Don't look at us, it was burning when we got here."

Edit:  Poor Smart Cookie, he tries his damnest.

#19 · 89w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4: Heated Talks ·

It's interesting that even trying to get an unbiased account, there's still just a smidgen of pegasus bias in Hurricane's recollection of events.  That it's the other races that won't work together, etc.

#20 · 89w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 4: Heated Talks ·

:rainbowhuh: Something about Cyclone's sword missing its mark doesn't sit well with me. I'm gonna keep my eye on him.

#21 · 89w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 4: Heated Talks ·

I love this! Definitely as good, if not better, than your preceding story. Keep up the good work (if you'll pardon so trite a phrase).

>>1972159

very long by comparison at 6000 BC the first cities in Mesopotamia where being made out of bricks. The fact that ponies had a complex socio-ecomonic and political system and had developed metal working to an extent humans didn't master for another 2000 just makes me wonder why rainbow and twilight weren't exploring by remote controlled robot.

#23 · 89w, 3h ago · · · Chapter 4: Heated Talks ·

>>2073218

I'm guessing because Magic and Celestia/Luna, but who knows? Most fantasy worlds seem locked in the medieval period for thousands of years.

interesting take, but I figured you would have explained why he chose to take Pan Sea with him in this chapter

(I like what you did with the unicorn royalty, it fits a lot better than cannon)

>>2113115

Pan Sea fits in later, but Hurricane pointedly didn't take him along, or at least didn't plan on it. Don't worry, you'll see him in the next chapter.

#26 · 87w, 6d ago · 1 · · Chapter 5: Winds of the West ·

Many believed the Scourge to be a curse placed upon the royal family, likely the doing of King Electrum when he looked into the future and saw things that should never had been known to him or the Kingdom until their appropriate time.

You are an actual wizard, you know?  It's one thing for us to discuss things, and quite another for you to read my mind...

Anyway, yeah, fantastic chapter.  Lapis was awesome, Star Swirl was as classy as can possibly be, but I think my favorite part was this line:

Its gaze was fixed far to the east, in the direction of skies long lost, but not yet forgotten.

Keep up the good work.

-LL

Good to see Silver Sword remembered with the highest respect.

:rainbowlaugh: You kept Puddinghead almost entirely canon. Love it.

That part with the statue of Silver Sword...So many feels...

*refreshes updated chapter list*

...well, would ya lookit that.  Time for more reading.

[Fantastic chapter as usual, and now we get a Pansy to tag along. :pinkiehappy:]

I was wondering how Pan Sea would catch up.

:rainbowhuh: Where'd he find that axe... and what would a Legion axe be doing in the middle of nowhere...

CONSPIRACY! :pinkiegasp:

This is like the fellowship of the ring.

All three groups are looking for better land (going to mordor.)

all on a mission to save the world(their people)

Earth ponies = hobbits

pegasi = men and dwarves

unicorns = elf and Gandalf (but only clover is worth of the cool factor of those two but the parallel remains)

the only difference is that they all hate each other that only at the end will they unite instead of splitting up.

#32 · 86w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 7: Dreaded Shadows ·

Music worked well for me.  Definitely a nice touch.  As usual, excellent work.

#33 · 86w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 7: Dreaded Shadows ·

I definitely didn't miss the similarities between Cyclone and Halite. That's not very comforting...

Anyway, another awesome chapter! Really liked the new music system and the continued world-building.

Looking forward to more! :yay:

#34 · 86w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 7: Dreaded Shadows ·

Wow, lots happening in this chapter.

Hurricane barely avoids death, Clover and Platnium get into trouble... and, I hope I'm wrong about this, but I suspect that Cyclone might grow a red tail in the future if you know what I mean. It doesn't look like it now, but I'm getting a bad feeling about how zealous Cyclone is about the Blue coats.

Can't wait to see more. :twilightsmile:

#35 · 86w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 7: Dreaded Shadows ·

I like the music links, but to be perfectly honest, in my head, every scene with Commander Hurricane has "These Colours Don't Run" by Iron Maiden playing in the background. Even the sentimental scenes with his family. All of them.

I like music links. The downside, though, is that I can't enjoy them when reading the story on mobile. I can't actively run youtube and my mobile browser at the same time.

#37 · 85w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

huh,I wonder how you are going to work in the Crystal Alicorn; and the plot thickens in the present

#38 · 85w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

Had to read the whole first part with google translate to make sense of the conversation. Not the most conveniant experiance, but at least I managed to understand what they were talking about- Seems like trouble is also coming after Twilight and Rainbow, not just the ponies of the past, that'll be fun to see what you and Loyal do with trouble in that area.

The music this chapter was brilliantly fitting for the most part (I approve with your choice :pinkiesmile: ) and is a nice little thing that goes well with the tone.

Also, seems like everyone is going towards the same general location now, and OMG CRYSTAL PRINCESS ALICORN :raritystarry:! Can't wait to see where that one goes.

#39 · 85w, 1d ago · 2 · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

Не стреляйте, я тайну знаю

Мой сторон!  

>>2207858

The thing both here and in my similar segments is that in some sense, you aren't supposed to understand the dialogue.  You can translate it if you want, of course, but I would encourage people to read through without bothering, to stay in the say mindset Twilight has where the line quoted above doesn't make any sense, and she's only pulling random words out of the dialogue between Governor Serp (or as we call him, Grand Moff Serp), and Safe Haven.  That way, when you hit the "Oh shit, they're trying to murder one another!" segment, you maintain the same emotional state that Twilight has.

Alternately, you can go through a few hard ciders before reading like I did, and then be in the same state as Rainbow Dash. :rainbowwild:

Dear Princess Celestia,

I'm sorry about using a cocktail napkin, but I didn't want to tear any of the pages out of Commander Hurricane's journal.

Today, I learned that Fluttershy may have been justified in being paranoid about your reaction to her 'birdnapping' of Philomena.  It turns out that not all the guardsponies in Equestria are quite as nice as my brother's troops.  Sometimes, these guardsponies are very nice, giving out free drinks and making new friends all over town.  Other times, not so much.

On a completely unrelated topic, if you could have Spike send me A Beginner's Guide to Running from the KGB and In Stalliongrad, Big Brother is Watching You?  I'd really appreciate some reference material.  For a study I'm doing.  That in now way reflects my current situation.

Your faithful student who still definitely does not have a criminal record,

-Twilight Sparkle.

P.S. Sorry about the... lipstick there.  I'm not really sure what it says, but you can just ignore it.

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#40 · 85w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2208522

Brilliant, I'm going to find some way to work that into my next RD/Twi segment. It will be beautiful :raritystarry:

Не стреляйте, я тайну знаю

Мой сторон!  

Thank my AP Chemistry teacher for that one. That's about the only Russian he remembers from college -- that and 'Не спать, пить кофе.' Still, the guy knows Gaelic and forged a goddamn sword out of a hand-built forge he made in his backyard, so he's pretty awesome.

#41 · 85w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2209145

For those Breaking Bad fans out there, the aforementioned Chemistry teacher is the closest you'll get to Walter White.

#42 · 85w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

And now we are introduced to the Unionists. I was also wondering if Twilight and Rainbow would see any action. Keep it coming. :twilightsmile:

#43 · 85w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2209975

I was wondering if anyone was going to catch on. You win the prize for at least being the first to vocalize it.

#44 · 85w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2210188 :pinkiegasp: I get a prize? :yay:

#45 · 85w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

Somehow, I never expected that Twi and Rainbow would actually be in harms way... the book, or the events therein, must have something to do with it. But what? Also, I wonder if rainbow will attempt to learn how to use Empatha, now that she is both aware of its more active uses and knows that she may soon need it to defend herself and Twilight.

#46 · 85w, 17h ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

If the black coats were all pegasi, does that mean they could be remnants of the legion that was not willing to unify or possibly survivors of Streak Wing's group upon his eventual death?

#47 · 85w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2211312

Not here, but here. The events in the present timeline of Snow and Shadows predate Where Loyalties Lie by several months, and Rainbow doesn't really learn how to use Empatha until that story.

>>2211814

Black Cloaks aren't entirely pegasi, that just happened to be the group that their leader, Serp, brought with him for that little investigation-turned-revolution. Without saying too much, however, most pegasi in the Domain of Stalliongrad are descended from remnants of Cirra that didn't make the trip to the new Equestrian lands.

#48 · 85w, 13h ago · 1 · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2210411

Not really much of a prize, unless I happen to find a need for a unicorn OC in a later chapter and decide I am too lazy to make one and instead decide to select one from a random follower who's provided his thoughts on all my work to date... hm....

#49 · 84w, 6d ago · 2 · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2212296

I know it's only a suggestion, but this is my response.

#50 · 84w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 8: The Long March ·

>>2207687

An ancestor of Cadence? That's my guess at least.

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