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  • T The Golden Armor: Part II

    Life seems like it's finally going Comet's way. Yeah right.
    45,256 words · 12,436 views  ·  2,027  ·  36 · sex
  • E A Narrow Scope

    Princess Celestia and Prince Solaris each have a Royal Guard who is devoutly loyal to them. The only problem is that they both have trouble around the opposite sex.
    6,388 words · 6,474 views  ·  974  ·  15
  • E Compassion

    Timberwolves don't have hearts. Right?
    2,277 words · 1,487 views  ·  259  ·  2
  • E Slide

    Thunderlane and Derpy have an interesting relationship, one that started with a simple mix up.
    9,746 words · 1,328 views  ·  208  ·  2
  • E My Little Pony: The Zecora Tales

    A silly little storybook about a zebra and her quest to make friends.
    8,898 words · 2,222 views  ·  352  ·  6
  • E A Day in the Life

    Big Gala, Sugarsnap and Thundercloud are the three prettiest mares in a Ponyville overrun with stallions. How do they deal with that?
    8,218 words · 3,660 views  ·  378  ·  8
  • E Everypony Talks

    Celestia has dealt with many things in her life, but one thing still surprises her.
    9,166 words · 5,126 views  ·  891  ·  28
  • E Hey There, Cheerilee

    Cheerilee finds a note tucked in a card from Applebloom, but it isn't from her.
    1,559 words · 3,080 views  ·  246  ·  5

Blog Posts31

  • 1w, 5d
    I hate me

    Dear FIMFic,

    God, life has been really mean to me recently. I can't write, think or be creative here in any way.

    I want to finish A Week In The Life, TGA PII and others like Rosetta and Unicorn: Gundam, but I feel like my dog after she chases her tail for fifty minutes straight. Nothing I write comes out the way I want it to, all the chapters I've left them on make it extremely difficult to pick back up, especially for A Week In The Life, since my rough drafts of them were deleted long ago. Then there's the problem of wondering if any of you care that I'm working on anything anymore, especially with the absolutely horrid responses I've gotten from my last two stories. While I know not everyone likes the same things, it makes me wonder if being 46 on the Top 50 authors means anything.

    I know I sound like some whiny teenager or whatever else you can come up with, but bottling this up only makes it worse for me. I can't tell you how nice quitting has sounded over the last few days, but there is far too much to be done before I can consider it. Too many promises I've made to break and just drop off the site or declare I'm finished writing. So, with that in mind, I want to say this:

    I'm sorry. To all of you.

    I'm sorry my quality of updates has dropped to almost non-existent levels, that I've published stupid ideas and that I can't make myself write.

    I'm also sorry to my friends Cerulean Voice, vren55, Nomad Sigma and Celestias Paladin for the mud and terrible lack of concern I've put them through.



    29 comments · 217 views
  • 2w, 3d
    Well, that's one way to send a message

    Dear FIMFic,

    So, I guess people are loving the new Favorite system, mostly because I got this today.

    aquapunkchick added A Week In The Life to THINGS THAT NEED TO FUCKING UPDATE BECAUSE I MISS THEM 2:46pm


    I guess that's one way to send a message.

    And last week, I was asked this, too.

    Autumnfire said: do you ever plan on continuing "a week in the life?"

    So... you guys want to see that story be updated? I guess I should admit that the rather lackluster response is most of the reason it hadn't been updated, especially since I thought many of you were upset with the way I was portraying Rainbow Blitz.

    However, if you all are wanting to read more of Butterscotch and Red Gala, I do have a partial chapter written for A Week In The Life and I can devote my efforts into finishing it. Let me know!



    10 comments · 169 views
  • 6w, 1d
    It is finished

    6 comments · 297 views
  • 6w, 3d
    What a day...

    Dear followers,

    As the title says, I've had quite the day. I know many of you may lose respect for me or think I'm being whiny, but I just need somewhere to vent as of right now.

    Okay, so I've been writing a covert project to aid me with the next chapter of The Golden Armor involving a really depressing death scene. Going to sleep in a depressed mood already, I had a really strange dream that involved the nuking of my state and the crushing sense that it was about to happen in my hometown next. Surprise, when it did, I woke up sweating and clawing at the wall. Needless to say, things went downhill from there. Stressed from sleeping, I learned what I thought was a half-day at work was not only a full day, but an extra two hours of OT were tossed on it.

    Throughout my day, I was checking FIMFic and noticed some awesome things happen to some of the people I follow. Rainbowbob got Obselescence to do a new Feature Box group, Cerulean Voice was made admin of a new story reviewing initiative and Autumnschild has a schedule to start writing again. Then I came to my page and realized I offered to do a live writing over a week ago. Seems like other better authors come through on their promises more than me.

    So, I've come home and sat down, hoping to feel slightly better when I start writing, but realized that I probably am just going to refresh the page again and again, hoping for something to hit me. Anyway, I've got a date for the live writing if you all are still interested. This Friday at 10 o'clock AM, I will officially begin crafting the next chapter of The Golden Armor: Part II. If you all would like to join me, I'll release the link the night prior.

    To all of you, I hope you all had a better day than I did.



    16 comments · 231 views
  • 8w, 1d
    Live Writing, anyone?

    Dear FIMFic,

    Life has gotten a bit too tiring for me. But then again, what did I expect when work dumps 10 hours of mandatory OT on you?

    So, in an effort to liven up my inspiration tanks, I will be taking yet another leaf out of my friend's book. I think it would be cool to do a live writing of a chapter to one of my stories and I want ALL OF YOU to decide which one I'll do. Once a story has been decided, I will set a date and time to start the chapter and have all of your input on it.

    Think of it; you can correct my writing, toss out ideas or ask/comment on the story as it's being written!

    Oh, and voting begins now. Majority wins!



    26 comments · 189 views
  • ...

Comet takes his job too seriously. Angel doesn't take anything seriously.

Comet joined to protect kingdom and princess(es). Angel joined for adventure and danger.

Comet isn't interested in mares. Angel can't stop talking about stallions.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

Together, this unlikely duo goes through life as Royal Guards from basic training to fully fledged guardsponies. Who knows? Maybe they'll even start to get along.

Cover art by slawomiro.

First Published
20th Jan 2013
Last Modified
31st Mar 2013
#1 · 92w, 5d ago · 8 · 32 · Being Recruited ·

Is he gay or somthing can :rainbowhuh:

You sir have intrigued me I shall be following you. Cheerio!

#3 · 92w, 5d ago · 13 · · Being Recruited ·


No, my OC is not gay. He takes his job too seriously and has no interest in finding a special mare at this time.:ajbemused:


Glad you like it!:twilightsmile:

#4 · 92w, 5d ago · 4 · · Being Recruited ·

Sry if I said somthing wrong :ajsleepy:

#5 · 92w, 5d ago · 1 · · Being Recruited ·


It's okay.:ajsmug: I was going to clarify that as the story went on.

#6 · 92w, 5d ago · 1 · · Being Recruited ·

Wow you just got me sad and shit lol I give you :moustache:

Pupils expand when interest is piqued, a retracting pupil is characteristic of shock, horror, or repulsion on the part of the wearer, usually manifesting in a strong desire to get out of a situation. :twilightsmile:

Other than that, I liked your start, and hope for good things from this fiction.


I'm interested, do continue :pinkiehappy:

I'm still reading through the story, but I just want to say that, while it is interesting, it does have one very annoying formatting problem

Whenever a new character speaks, there should be a new paragraph, because itherwise you end up with blobs of text where it's hard to know who's speaking at times.

Tiny comment; I really like this story, but its kind of hard to read. Here's a tip; a new paragraph starts every time a new character starts to speak. Sorry, Sometimes I can't control the Grammar Nazi :twilightsheepish:

Also, Angelbeats reference! You, sir, win a free mustache. :moustache:


I have altered the story to where a new paragraph starts when the characters talk. I'm a grammar nazi too, but I seem to have forgotten the basic talking rule.:twilightblush: Thank you for correcting that!

#12 · 92w, 5d ago · 6 · 38 · Being Recruited ·

i like your OC despite what others say

p.s. maybe you can read my story called my day in ponyville

This is good, I like and watch

I have a weird feeling that he is going to be infatuated with her

>>1987975 It's very bad form to advertise your own stories in the comments section of someone else's story, just so you know.

This chapter has earned a like, we'll see about earning a fav or watch in the training now won't we

wait wait wait hold up, so its practically forbidden to have any prior romantic attachment before joining but during and or after signing up boring recruiting officer practically says go for it... can someone clarify please is he just needling him or does tia just want to see how guards can get dates without moving or speaking

#18 · 92w, 5d ago · 1 · 1 · Basic Beginnings ·


That is a contradiction, but there is a reason he basically turns around what he's saying. Angel laughs at the guard when he states that rule, thus leading to him figuring out it's a joke. Also, the rule is no recruits have prior relationships with each other to avoid "compromising situations" like sharing a bed or stuff like that. The guard also knew Comet would not accept him having a small attraction to Angel, thus using reverse psychology to make him resist being attracted to her.

All in all, it's a rule for recruits, but not the guards themselves, as I was also going to explain later.


Oh good I thought the guard was practising double standards instead its just another obviously good natured guard with completely pure intentions looking to uphold the rule by suggesting Comet chase after Angel in response to her overt flirtation, good job random guard that will help with the situation:trollestia:

and on a more serious note this is without a doubt worth reading later, earned the fave

>>1988548 :twilightsmile:

The road to bad things is paved with good intentions.

I like the OCs, lets see where this goes

Just saying, you left Shining Armor's tail on the cover pic :twilightblush: Welcome

Let's see how this goes.

So far Angel pisses me to no end, and Comet has my deepest sympathy, even if he allows Angel to treat him like a chew toy.

Again, let's see how it goes.


I love bat ponies, they're so sexy.

Oh God, after seeing this picture I've been waiting for this:pinkiehappy:

Humm, fun and distinctive OC's, good character interaction, a funny situation with potential for future hijinks.

Very promising. I'll keep following. Can't wait to see what happens next. :rainbowderp:

I'm not entirely a huge fan of pony oc's, but this is one of those rare occasions where I absolutely adore them. And not only that, you're using a bat pony, I LOVE bat ponies. Sad that we haven't seen anymore of them since the Luna Eclipsed episode.

But anywho, Faved, looking forward to how this story progresses. :moustache: and here, have a stache for good measure.

#28 · 92w, 4d ago · 4 · 4 · Basic Beginnings ·

I predict great shenanigans, awkwardness, and clumsy attempts at romance. I also predict I shall squee like a fangirl throughout it all. :raritystarry:

Which in itself is odd, as I usually prefer Stallion/Stallion romance.

"Angel Beats"..... i see what you did there.... bravo and good choice

BAHAHAHAHAHA!!! :rainbowlaugh: OK, officially faving this! My first non Pen Stroke fav. Way to go!

Can't wait to see how things go. Keep it up.:twilightsmile:

Simply amazing. I will continue to look into this story in the future. :rainbowdetermined2:

Keep at it.:ajsmug:

This story has potential I tell ya! Keep at it :raritywink:

ops I think is it the equestria prevails OC:rainbowwild:

Comet takes his job too seriously. Angel doesn't take anything seriously.

Comet joined to protect kingdom and princess(es). Angel joined for adventure and danger.

Comet isn't interested in mares. Angel can't stop talking about stallions.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

THEY FIGHT CRIME :rainbowlaugh:

Couldn't resist, sorry.

The writing was more than adequate and fun, can't wait for more. :rainbowwild:

Bad Cop and Good Cop :rainbowlaugh:

Walking in on the wrong class then grtting beat up by a mare in front of said wrong class poor guy:fluttershysad:

Hmm, this was...rather short.

Heh maybe tommorow he will learn what to do to if you startle a bat pony. And quick question did you pre write this part or are you just a shockingly fast writer

Comet has to meet twilight!

Nice timing therer Comet, must have been 40 minutes tops since I favorited it and already I get another chapter.

Comment posted by Paperbag Wizard deleted at 11:34pm on the 20th of January, 2013

Your grammar is still a little funky. When leading out of a quotation, such as ("It's none of your business." he stated...), the period after business should be a comma. It's just a grammar rule about punctuation inside quotations. The way you use question marks and exclamation points is fine, though.

"It's none of your business." he stated. WRONG

"It's none of your business," he stated. RIGHT

"It's none of your business!" he stated. ALSO RIGHT

Also, when leading into a quotation, like in (Comet rolled his eyes and said "We're not a tour group."), put another comma after said and before the quotation mark.

Comet rolled his eyes and said "We're not a tour group." WRONG

Comet rolled his eyes and said, "We're not a tour group." RIGHT

Otherwise, this is a fun story! Keep it up!


Eh heh, the publish and edit buttons are pretty close, so I accidently published it while I was editing it.:twilightblush: Oh well, enjoy it though!

I will also edit my quotations too. Thank you for pointing that out!

It seems to me that you consistently say comet "Doesn't like mares" and then negate your own point!  So, what is it? :rainbowhuh:

Daww. They are so cute together.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

No, Angel is a rabbit, dummy.

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