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  • T The Golden Armor: Part II

    Life seems like it's finally going Comet's way. Yeah right.
    45,256 words · 12,537 views  ·  2,033  ·  37 · sex
  • E A Narrow Scope

    Princess Celestia and Prince Solaris each have a Royal Guard who is devoutly loyal to them. The only problem is that they both have trouble around the opposite sex.
    6,388 words · 6,543 views  ·  985  ·  15
  • E Compassion

    Timberwolves don't have hearts. Right?
    2,277 words · 1,526 views  ·  261  ·  2
  • E My Little Pony: The Zecora Tales

    A silly little storybook about a zebra and her quest to make friends.
    8,898 words · 2,267 views  ·  352  ·  6
  • E Slide

    Thunderlane and Derpy have an interesting relationship, one that started with a simple mix up.
    9,746 words · 1,362 views  ·  212  ·  3
  • E A Day in the Life

    Big Gala, Sugarsnap and Thundercloud are the three prettiest mares in a Ponyville overrun with stallions. How do they deal with that?
    8,218 words · 3,691 views  ·  379  ·  8
  • E Everypony Talks

    Celestia has dealt with many things in her life, but one thing still surprises her.
    9,166 words · 5,186 views  ·  893  ·  28
  • E Hey There, Cheerilee

    Cheerilee finds a note tucked in a card from Applebloom, but it isn't from her.
    1,559 words · 3,131 views  ·  247  ·  5

Blog Posts34

  • Friday
    Hey, wanna see me work?

    Dear FIMFic,

    Remember when I said there would be a live writing?

    Check this out: Newest Chapter

    That's right, I'm doing it again! Come by, join the chat and tell me what I'm doing wrong!

    It'll be going for about an hour or two, so drop by soon!



    4 comments · 109 views
  • 1w, 2d
    I ain't twiddling my thumbs here, ya know!

    10 comments · 105 views
  • 3w, 1d
    Hello... Again

    Dear FIMFic,

    I gotta say, you all really know how to keep me around.

    While I do suffer from a mild to intense form of depression (disputed by three separate psychologists), trust me when I say I'm not suicidal or on the verge of a mental breakdown, though it often feels like it. A lot of times, it hits me in waves with some being more gripping than the others. My last blog post was written in one such bout with a lot of things weighing on my mind, mostly the idea that no one wanted to read anything I wrote anymore. Deep down, I know that is further from the truth because I said a long time ago that if even one person reads what I wrote and enjoyed it, then the idea was a success. Judging from the 350,000+ views of The Golden Armor and its sequel, I'd wager it is the greatest thing I've done with my life at this point.

    So, thank you all. It means more than you know to hear or read what you all have to say when I'm fighting with my depression. I'd also like to give a special thank you to my good friends Cerulean Voice and vren55 for forcing me to admit I am good enough to be where I am and offering a swift kick in the ass when I tore apart the remains of my self-confidence.

    More than that, I want to thank Raul for PMing me and asking if I was alright and FluffyDoom for her obnoxious way of getting me to gravitate back here. With the amazing words Raul offered to me and the silly group FluffyDoom provided, I think it's about time I showed my thanks in the only way I can.

    There will be a live writing of The Golden Armor: Part II and a super special sneak peek at a fic I was working on before temporarily abandoning my pursuits. For fans of Slide, I imagine you will adore this.

    On top of that, work has resumed on A Week In The Life and, thanks to RainbowBob, I have accepted the challenge of writing 50k words in the month of November. Yes I am stupid enough to try it, but luckily he didn't say it had to be new stories, so expect quite a few updates to the collection this month, including the long overdue All That Glitters.

    That said, besides the one I'm sneak previewing, I do have several ideas for new fics solely for this event. Since your input matters so much, I think I'll offer a few of the ones I'm seriously considering. Do note that none of these actually exist, but they do have most of the framework set.

    Idea 1: The Greatest Gift

    Tags: Sad, Adventure

    Characters: Twilight, Princess Celestia, Tirek, Discord, Princess Luna

    Plot: During the Season 4 ending, Twilight used the power of all the alicorns to defeat Tirek. In the aftermath, though, she has a nightmare about watching Celestia fall away from her into a white abyss. When she investigates the dream's meaning, she learns Princess Celestia has a gift for her; the greatest one she can bestow and the final one she can give to Twilight.

    Idea 2: Sleeping With A Friend

    Characters: Soarin, Spitfire, OC Wonderbolt mare

    Tags: Comedy, Romance, Sex (Teen)

    Plot: Soarin and Spitfire have been friends since they made the team. As celebrities, it's no surprise when the tabloids decide to start the rumor they are seeing each other. However, after a night of drunken shenanigans and a rocky breakup with his marefriend, Soarin and Spitfire get to know each other a lot more... intimately.

    Idea 3: *no name as of yet*

    Characters: Applejack, Flim and Flam

    Tags: Dark, Gore (Mature)

    Plot: Flim and Flam try to take over Sweet Apple Acres again and decide that slandering the Apple family is the best way to do so.  Applejack knows the only way to stop them is to silence them, and there ain't no place quieter than the grove of apple trees to do it. Ever wonder why the trees are always so healthy and bountiful? The fertilizer may have something to do with it.

    Idea 4: The Paradox

    Characters: Twilight, Tirek

    Plot: Twilight receives a visit from her future self again, but this time to warn her to go back in time and mentally tell herself about Starswirl's spell to become an alicorn. Present Twilight refuses and the world warps around her, morphing into a hellish alternate world where she isn't an alicorn and unable to stop Tirek. Realizing her mistake, she races against Tirek to complete the gigantic bootstrap paradox that revolves around her ascension and the future of Equestria.

    So there are my ideas. Critique, comment and as always, tell me what you think!

    Highest Regards to you,


    22 comments · 174 views
  • 5w, 3d
    I hate me

    Dear FIMFic,

    God, life has been really mean to me recently. I can't write, think or be creative here in any way.

    I want to finish A Week In The Life, TGA PII and others like Rosetta and Unicorn: Gundam, but I feel like my dog after she chases her tail for fifty minutes straight. Nothing I write comes out the way I want it to, all the chapters I've left them on make it extremely difficult to pick back up, especially for A Week In The Life, since my rough drafts of them were deleted long ago. Then there's the problem of wondering if any of you care that I'm working on anything anymore, especially with the absolutely horrid responses I've gotten from my last two stories. While I know not everyone likes the same things, it makes me wonder if being 46 on the Top 50 authors means anything.

    I know I sound like some whiny teenager or whatever else you can come up with, but bottling this up only makes it worse for me. I can't tell you how nice quitting has sounded over the last few days, but there is far too much to be done before I can consider it. Too many promises I've made to break and just drop off the site or declare I'm finished writing. So, with that in mind, I want to say this:

    I'm sorry. To all of you.

    I'm sorry my quality of updates has dropped to almost non-existent levels, that I've published stupid ideas and that I can't make myself write.

    I'm also sorry to my friends Cerulean Voice, vren55, Nomad Sigma and Celestias Paladin for the mud and terrible lack of concern I've put them through.



    29 comments · 236 views
  • 6w, 1d
    Well, that's one way to send a message

    Dear FIMFic,

    So, I guess people are loving the new Favorite system, mostly because I got this today.

    aquapunkchick added A Week In The Life to THINGS THAT NEED TO FUCKING UPDATE BECAUSE I MISS THEM 2:46pm


    I guess that's one way to send a message.

    And last week, I was asked this, too.

    Autumnfire said: do you ever plan on continuing "a week in the life?"

    So... you guys want to see that story be updated? I guess I should admit that the rather lackluster response is most of the reason it hadn't been updated, especially since I thought many of you were upset with the way I was portraying Rainbow Blitz.

    However, if you all are wanting to read more of Butterscotch and Red Gala, I do have a partial chapter written for A Week In The Life and I can devote my efforts into finishing it. Let me know!



    10 comments · 189 views
  • ...

Comet takes his job too seriously. Angel doesn't take anything seriously.

Comet joined to protect kingdom and princess(es). Angel joined for adventure and danger.

Comet isn't interested in mares. Angel can't stop talking about stallions.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

Together, this unlikely duo goes through life as Royal Guards from basic training to fully fledged guardsponies. Who knows? Maybe they'll even start to get along.

Cover art by slawomiro.

First Published
20th Jan 2013
Last Modified
31st Mar 2013
#1 · 96w, 3d ago · 8 · 33 · Being Recruited ·

Is he gay or somthing can :rainbowhuh:

You sir have intrigued me I shall be following you. Cheerio!

#3 · 96w, 3d ago · 13 · · Being Recruited ·


No, my OC is not gay. He takes his job too seriously and has no interest in finding a special mare at this time.:ajbemused:


Glad you like it!:twilightsmile:

#4 · 96w, 3d ago · 4 · · Being Recruited ·

Sry if I said somthing wrong :ajsleepy:

#5 · 96w, 3d ago · 1 · · Being Recruited ·


It's okay.:ajsmug: I was going to clarify that as the story went on.

#6 · 96w, 3d ago · 1 · · Being Recruited ·

Wow you just got me sad and shit lol I give you :moustache:

Pupils expand when interest is piqued, a retracting pupil is characteristic of shock, horror, or repulsion on the part of the wearer, usually manifesting in a strong desire to get out of a situation. :twilightsmile:

Other than that, I liked your start, and hope for good things from this fiction.


I'm interested, do continue :pinkiehappy:

I'm still reading through the story, but I just want to say that, while it is interesting, it does have one very annoying formatting problem

Whenever a new character speaks, there should be a new paragraph, because itherwise you end up with blobs of text where it's hard to know who's speaking at times.

Tiny comment; I really like this story, but its kind of hard to read. Here's a tip; a new paragraph starts every time a new character starts to speak. Sorry, Sometimes I can't control the Grammar Nazi :twilightsheepish:

Also, Angelbeats reference! You, sir, win a free mustache. :moustache:


I have altered the story to where a new paragraph starts when the characters talk. I'm a grammar nazi too, but I seem to have forgotten the basic talking rule.:twilightblush: Thank you for correcting that!

#12 · 96w, 3d ago · 6 · 38 · Being Recruited ·

i like your OC despite what others say

p.s. maybe you can read my story called my day in ponyville

This is good, I like and watch

I have a weird feeling that he is going to be infatuated with her

>>1987975 It's very bad form to advertise your own stories in the comments section of someone else's story, just so you know.

This chapter has earned a like, we'll see about earning a fav or watch in the training now won't we

wait wait wait hold up, so its practically forbidden to have any prior romantic attachment before joining but during and or after signing up boring recruiting officer practically says go for it... can someone clarify please is he just needling him or does tia just want to see how guards can get dates without moving or speaking

#18 · 96w, 3d ago · 1 · 1 · Basic Beginnings ·


That is a contradiction, but there is a reason he basically turns around what he's saying. Angel laughs at the guard when he states that rule, thus leading to him figuring out it's a joke. Also, the rule is no recruits have prior relationships with each other to avoid "compromising situations" like sharing a bed or stuff like that. The guard also knew Comet would not accept him having a small attraction to Angel, thus using reverse psychology to make him resist being attracted to her.

All in all, it's a rule for recruits, but not the guards themselves, as I was also going to explain later.


Oh good I thought the guard was practising double standards instead its just another obviously good natured guard with completely pure intentions looking to uphold the rule by suggesting Comet chase after Angel in response to her overt flirtation, good job random guard that will help with the situation:trollestia:

and on a more serious note this is without a doubt worth reading later, earned the fave

>>1988548 :twilightsmile:

The road to bad things is paved with good intentions.

I like the OCs, lets see where this goes

Just saying, you left Shining Armor's tail on the cover pic :twilightblush: Welcome

Let's see how this goes.

So far Angel pisses me to no end, and Comet has my deepest sympathy, even if he allows Angel to treat him like a chew toy.

Again, let's see how it goes.


I love bat ponies, they're so sexy.

Oh God, after seeing this picture I've been waiting for this:pinkiehappy:

Humm, fun and distinctive OC's, good character interaction, a funny situation with potential for future hijinks.

Very promising. I'll keep following. Can't wait to see what happens next. :rainbowderp:

I'm not entirely a huge fan of pony oc's, but this is one of those rare occasions where I absolutely adore them. And not only that, you're using a bat pony, I LOVE bat ponies. Sad that we haven't seen anymore of them since the Luna Eclipsed episode.

But anywho, Faved, looking forward to how this story progresses. :moustache: and here, have a stache for good measure.

#28 · 96w, 2d ago · 4 · 4 · Basic Beginnings ·

I predict great shenanigans, awkwardness, and clumsy attempts at romance. I also predict I shall squee like a fangirl throughout it all. :raritystarry:

Which in itself is odd, as I usually prefer Stallion/Stallion romance.

"Angel Beats"..... i see what you did there.... bravo and good choice

BAHAHAHAHAHA!!! :rainbowlaugh: OK, officially faving this! My first non Pen Stroke fav. Way to go!

Can't wait to see how things go. Keep it up.:twilightsmile:

Simply amazing. I will continue to look into this story in the future. :rainbowdetermined2:

Keep at it.:ajsmug:

This story has potential I tell ya! Keep at it :raritywink:

ops I think is it the equestria prevails OC:rainbowwild:

Comet takes his job too seriously. Angel doesn't take anything seriously.

Comet joined to protect kingdom and princess(es). Angel joined for adventure and danger.

Comet isn't interested in mares. Angel can't stop talking about stallions.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

THEY FIGHT CRIME :rainbowlaugh:

Couldn't resist, sorry.

The writing was more than adequate and fun, can't wait for more. :rainbowwild:

Bad Cop and Good Cop :rainbowlaugh:

Walking in on the wrong class then grtting beat up by a mare in front of said wrong class poor guy:fluttershysad:

Hmm, this was...rather short.

Heh maybe tommorow he will learn what to do to if you startle a bat pony. And quick question did you pre write this part or are you just a shockingly fast writer

Comet has to meet twilight!

Nice timing therer Comet, must have been 40 minutes tops since I favorited it and already I get another chapter.

Comment posted by Paperbag Wizard deleted at 11:34pm on the 20th of January, 2013

Your grammar is still a little funky. When leading out of a quotation, such as ("It's none of your business." he stated...), the period after business should be a comma. It's just a grammar rule about punctuation inside quotations. The way you use question marks and exclamation points is fine, though.

"It's none of your business." he stated. WRONG

"It's none of your business," he stated. RIGHT

"It's none of your business!" he stated. ALSO RIGHT

Also, when leading into a quotation, like in (Comet rolled his eyes and said "We're not a tour group."), put another comma after said and before the quotation mark.

Comet rolled his eyes and said "We're not a tour group." WRONG

Comet rolled his eyes and said, "We're not a tour group." RIGHT

Otherwise, this is a fun story! Keep it up!


Eh heh, the publish and edit buttons are pretty close, so I accidently published it while I was editing it.:twilightblush: Oh well, enjoy it though!

I will also edit my quotations too. Thank you for pointing that out!

It seems to me that you consistently say comet "Doesn't like mares" and then negate your own point!  So, what is it? :rainbowhuh:

Daww. They are so cute together.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

No, Angel is a rabbit, dummy.

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