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  • T Castle Bahamut

    Shackled and chained, Spike is sent to the dreaded dragon prison, Castle Bahamut, after a miscarriage of justice. Inside, while sad and broken, he is the target of a devilish conspiracy.
    54,856 words · 927 views  ·  86  ·  4 · gore
  • E Patience and Time

    Rarity wants to sacrifice everything she has to get what she wants right away. Spike has to show her why she should not.
    1,629 words · 1,670 views  ·  87  ·  5
  • E "I need cash..."

    Rainbow Dash ruined a borrowed item and the return date is the next day. She needs money... fast.
    10,129 words · 1,122 views  ·  26  ·  0
  • T Dragon Warrior

    Friends both old and new will watch Spike as his journey to find the answers evolves him from the little hatchling he was into the fearsome Dragon Warrior he will be.
    17,601 words · 636 views  ·  56  ·  3
  • E Hidden Depths

    What you see is not what you get.
    6,481 words · 695 views  ·  20  ·  0
  • T The Dragon's Notebook

    Spike makes a steel resolve to protect Rarity at [i]any[/i] cost...
    50,258 words · 2,786 views  ·  146  ·  19
  • T The Unicorn's Notebook

    Spike makes a steel resolve to discover the truth about recent deaths... at [i]any[/i] cost.
    29,689 words · 1,163 views  ·  59  ·  6
  • T The Dragon's Notebook: Scaled Tower

    An accident prompts Spike to do the unthinkable and claim lives in order to protect the one he loves from danger... before his protective instincts involve his friends.
    8,836 words · 259 views  ·  17  ·  3

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  • 4w, 4d
    I apparently have a boner for ruining Spike's life

    Dragon's Notebook: Scaled Tower's first chapter may be posted tonight, definitely tomorrow. Hurrah for more psychological pain.

    Arby Works

    2 comments · 31 views
  • 9w, 1d
    Dragon's Notebook: Scaled Tower Outline Complete

    The rewrite of one of my most popular stories is almost set to begin production. Just need to start chapter 1.

    New Short Description:

    An accident prompts Spike to do the unthinkable and claim lives in order to protect the one he loves from danger... before his protective instincts  involve his friends.

    New Long Description:

    People hurt themselves and in turn they learn from their mistakes. To Spike, Rarity seems insistent to keep learning from the same mistakes. An accident claims the life of a public figure and known only to Spike, he is to blame. This rattles his mind until he makes a resolution to  protect Rarity... and his friends from themselves and the ponies who wish to harm them.

    The only question plaguing Spike's mind is: How will this end?

    Rewrite of the Dragon's Notebook, crossover of Death Note.


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  • 16w, 1d


    I almost died last night. Twice.

    So I wake up at 1 am and really, really, REALLY want a Junior Chicken. Or just something with chicken; McDonalds was just the first suggestion Geoff Twist and Jon, and Danielle Toth also wanted beer. So being me, I instantly search for a 24 hour liquor store and find one that closes at 2 am, just down the block from a 24 hour McDonalds. 30 minute bike ride so I gear up and hop on my bike and depart. It's such a swell night, cool breeze, lovely night life in the city. Five to ten minutes later I arrive at a bridge and cross it as it means I've found my turning point. I proceed further ahead, ignoring the streets that may as well be called "Murder Ave." and pedal on forward.

    In a little while I wind up seeing the Westmount Centre, my destination and just as I pedal towards the sidewalk, some guys jump out of the bushes to scare me, I guess. I twist the handlebars to the side and instead of gliding onto the sidewalk from the ramp I slam into the curb and hit someone's foot, I suppose. Because he immediately turned into Gary Busey and flipped his shit, crying like a little bitch about his fucking toe or something. All five draw knives and I'm immediately like "oshit im gonna die lol" and I immediately start sprinting with the Furious Five hot on my ass like America and Oil.

    Continuing around the block, I manage to ignore the constant "Fuck you, nigga" that the hooligans continued to spit into the air and manage to get back to my bike that nobody in the Heist Squad decided to keep watch of. I hop on it and pedal forward once more, arriving at Westmount in one piece, well away from the League of Super Evil.

    I arrived at the Liquor Depot at 1:50, just shortly before closing and purchased the Coors Light, no problemo. Just a minute away was the McDonalds where I ordered three Junior Chicken's, a 6-pc Chicken McNugget and two large Fry. Ten minutes later, I have my food and I departed the McDonalds, ready to return home. I leave Westmount and immediately regret taking the same route back.

    The reason being is that the Furious Five had apparently spent half an hour level-grinding because they had gained the ability to summon bicycles of their own. Feeling my inner Joseph Gordon-Levitt kick in, I immediately booked it like it was Premium Rush and Agent Monday was hot on my ass. All the way back to the bridge on St. Albert Trail, rather than cross like a reasonable person I curved to the right and went down the off-ramp onto the highway. Once I cleared rail, I took a sharp left through traffic, barely missing a truck from behind as well as a semi. Getting to the barrier in the centre, I threw my bike over the rail, still on an adrenaline high. Like Jason Statham himself, I began biking against traffic in the centre of the lane until the intersection where I curved to the left, barely missing another car and my adrenaline high died off. Just in time too because it was a clear four minutes home, no Furious Five in sight and warm McDonalds, sweating up my back like a high school locker room.

    I totally fucking earned my Junior Chicken and I don't give a shit what any of you say.

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  • 18w, 2d


    So I go to leave home so I can do my orientation at Red Robin. Leave, get on right bus, get off at right stop. Here's where things get fun. I was told that I can take the 2 down to the university bus stop and walk the two blocks to Red Robin. My phone also says "take the 2" because apparently it's a "20 minute ride". I get on the 2 and then the adventure begins.

    Half an hour later, when I'm in the middle of fucking Chinatown do I realize I boarded the wrong bus... and I'm twice the length away from work than I am home. It only took some like shanghai buildings and a shitton of Chinese restaurants to clue me in. Asking the bus driver what the shit, he tells me that it's the "right bus, wrong direction". I wound up in Clairview, Edmonton.

    The driver then tells me to take the train; be at my destination in 10 minutes. I agree, board the train right there. Nervous as fuck as 9 am had passed henceforth I missed the start of my orientation at work. Phone resetting and not working, asking ol' Danielle Toth for help was goddamn impossible so I kept trying as the train took me downtown: I saw the stadium; I saw industrial buildings; I saw other trains.

    Eventually, I wound up at Central Station and this would be the point in the film where the main protagonist can't handle the shit and we have the quiet drama scene. Not me. I immediately broke down when the trains had left and the civilians cleared the area leaving me alone on the platform. I fell to the ground, repeatedly slamming my finger on the button to call for information and I'm sitting there, hoping I'll be alone and have quick help. HAHA NOPE the speakers blare out "HI PRESS 1 IF YOU WOULD LIKE TO..." and I'm sitting there going "oh shit there is no numpad". It finally tells me to wait to speak to a live representative and starts blaring elevator music; just as two trains and a metric fuckton of civilians converge on me like a swarm of locusts. All of a sudden, "HI HOW MAY I HELP YOU?" blares out of the speakers and I'm pressed right against the directory, whispering into the mic, "I don't know where I am". "What?" she asks, my soothing, sultry tone (not really) too low. After five more tries, I finally burst out crying, "I NEED HELP BECAUSE I'M LOST AND I DON'T KNOW WHERE TO GO" as about two hundred people eye this grown, 19-year-old man sobbing on the floor like Bane after Batman ruined his mask.

    After a while, I collect myself and tell her my destination and see that I'm at Central Station. Finally, she tells me that I just need to go to the street, go west and look for a hotel with a bus stop to board the 8 and that'll take me where I wanna go. I leave, get out, look to the left... and I see the exact bus stop where I got on the wrong bus. A full, full grating hour later, I had returned to where the madness had started.

    tl;dr, fuck mobile devices, you wind up in Chinatown.

    Totally made my orientation just fine, though. Thanks for your time.

    4 comments · 54 views
  • ...

A story of competition, friendship, rivalry and love. Rainbow Dash is thrown into the Market Harvest; a farming competition in which she aids Applejack and the Sweet Apple Acres team. Sacrificing some of her own time, Rainbow Dash does her best to support her friend in her time of need as a living model for the Sweet Apple Acres advertisement campaign: The Apple Spectrum!

First Published
20th Jan 2012
Last Modified
1st Apr 2014

Sorry Abry, I can't get as detailed as I'd like with my review- stressed for time. I'd say just look through it another time if'n you'd like to.

staring at Applejack in confusing              confusion*

said as she leaned placed                        missed an and

The Apple Family dining room was           The part in this paragraph with the sandwiches was off. I'd suggest removing it or making it not so specific.

Anyways, I really liked this chapter, and how you kept teasing me with AJ getting close and then backing off, or the water thing. You write AJ really well.


Oh good, it's on here too. Fanfiction has been claiming the chapter doesn't exist all day and I've been dying to read it.

Why do I have the feeling something's going to happen overnight in Troronto? :derpytongue2:

Thank Celestia I managed to get some writing in for chapter 2:2. It chronicles the epic... train ride. Note: I have written in a short OC just for a thingy... simply put, should I keep the OC? I REALLY wanted to stay away from Original Character's, even if they're minor but it's unavoidable in the case of, well, lack of characters to create for the story (Flat Breadbasket is such an example, he also has yet to enter) but... well, it's just a quick self insert of an artistic pony. Good or Not?

>>183929 OC's are generally OK...but self-inserts are weird. At least in my opinion. I get vivid memories of my first day in the fanfiction, clicking on stories with the tag self insert, and it was just a clopfic of some human getting it on. I was so innocent... :fluttercry: >>183929

Unless you make your self insert just a character, and not say "I woke up in Ponyville one day" or something. Give it a pony name too.

Of course they miss each other's blushes. :P

Things are really heating up now :3

Good story. I like it. It has a slower pace than a lot of stories, I think, but that suits it. Well done. :pinkiehappy:

It IS a badass name, isn't it? :pinkiehappy:

And this is a badass story. This chapter makes me wonder what's up with Scootaloo though -  hope she's okay. And even though I know you're joking I don't mind if you do slow the pace down - your writing is good enough that even the little things are fun to read about, so it'll still be an excellent story.

Spike must be absolutely devestated at all the pampering he's going to be getting. Poor Spike. :pinkiesad2:

And you're welcome - Thank you for the awesome story and free entertainment :pinkiesmile:

Wow, Rainbow is really getting into pleasing Applejack. I likey :pinkiehappy:

And many d'aaaaaaawwwwws were had. :rainbowkiss:

Finally I got some time to myself to read this...

Then I notice there are still 3 more chapters...

Crap. :facehoof:

And I'm just gonna catch up first, like I said, and then edit- I promise.

Gotta go, but I vow to read the rest of the chapters soon!


I want that Candyland game. :rainbowderp:

So, I've managed to truck through this many chapters before commenting... at this point, I feel I have to :P

Pay attention to your tenses! There's plenty of grammar errors in every chapter, and sometimes some of the conversations feel a tad... wooden, or forced. And when that happens, the characterization suffers a fair bit.

However, the setting and plot (no, not that one :pinkiecrazy: ) is pretty damn interesting, and the Appledash is just yay :rainbowlaugh::ajsmug: . It could just use a fair amount of cleaning up to make this fic much better than it is :x


OK so I'm reading this, and maybe it will improve in the future chapters, but at the moment I think you need to reword a few sentences. For example this one: "Twilight squealed with joy, Rainbow Dash sighed, Applejack finished loosening Rainbow's harness and Rainbow wiggled out of the harness."

You said harness twice. while that's not incorrect it's still a little awkward for the reader. Instead maybe you could have: "Twilight squealed with joy, Rainbow Dash sighed, Applejack finished loosening Rainbow's harness and Rainbow wiggled out of it."

You can say it because we already know the harness is the object being discussed.

Anyway beyond a few awkwardly worded sentences like that I'm still liking this story well enough. I'll keep reading it for now.

>>878710 this reminds me of a similar review on o_o

And damn, I done goofed.

ANYWAYS, thanks for reading and giving my story a chance!

“That load Big Macintosh gave me wrecked my ability to walk,” Rainbow spat out.

^ I laughed a bit too much at that :rainbowlaugh:

Some feedback:

1. I found the part where Dash was flying crates and stuff slightly confusing and repetitive in the beginning. The description felt... massive, and slightly excessive.

2. Applejack's dialogue feels a bit odd to read. Spelling out a few more words (too, for, the, an') would make it a lot easier to read.


This chapter. I really liked it. :pinkiehappy:

And you're really good at making me hate Fullbody. That bucking douchebag...

Also, It's nice seeing some obvious romance going on. I like the subtle thing as well, but it's such a damn tease.

One more thing: No comments? da fuck? :rainbowhuh:


1. Hmm, I may me rewrite that scene. It was mainly about Rainbow having to clean up a forced mess as practice since during the actual competition, there will be crates 'n shit everywhere.

2. She was trying to speak in a more proper voice for the sake of clarity; "Ah'm serious 'bout this an' Ah want ya to know it."

Fullbody was a little too... weird before. This new chapter I planned to make Fullbody seem more like a douche.

The romance? Chapter 3 was where I originally intended the romance to start and be fully realized by one of our main characters.

AND THAT'S WHAT I SAID! All these watchers and followers on many sites, and I've only had two comments/reviews since I posted. [img]//[/img]

FINALLY got around to reading this (and will most likely reread the whole rewrite at some point).

Is it sad that I want to punch the cops more than Moneybags?

>>1450606 Not really. Fuck the police, and all.

Ahhhh!  A talking dog!  :twilightoops:


Is it worth it?

Does anybody notice my writing style change? Before, I always thought, "How would others write this?" For this chapter update, I merely wrote how I would with no regards for the others (basically myself).

Is this update good? Does it meet expectations?

Has anybody read this update? I'll be very sad if I get no reviews this time. My last update only got two-three reviews on four sites. After several months. If it happens again, I may ragequit.

EDIT: Okay, so I have one comment, one favourite, and... one fucking downvote? o_e

I'm sorry this doesn't get the feedback it deserves, but it is very good, Arby. I'd hate for you not to finish it. :twilightsmile:

Not gonna force you to continue writing it if you feel it's not worth it though :ajsleepy:


It was about time!  :flutterrage:

I, for one, am very fond of this story and would hate for you to ragequit.  As long as you're updating it, I'll be here.  And I really like the change in writing style.  It's just that the progression with AppleDash seems to be a teensy bit slow, and I feel like that might be a turn-off to some people.

>>1525522 Considering Chapter 1 and 2 was about them building their friendship, eeyup. Chapter 3 is titled "Winning the Rainbow," so expect a lot more AppleDash. But regardless, my whole plan for this story was a slow-progressing AppleDash because real relationships don't instantly start. You have to act as friends to another and then allow the feelings to blossom, which is why I made a story with a farming compeition; it'l take a while and let me show the love develop. Chapter 3 will have a few more parts to it, which will come out soon.

>>1525522 OH, and how was the chapter? Any comments, any dislikes, etc?


I like the uncertainty surrounding Fullbody, and I wonder how it will all tie together as the competition progresses.  I don't mind the buildup, because it lets me wonder just how closer they might get in each chapter.  But by far my favorite parts of it are when AJ and RD at least talk or work with each other.  :yay:

>>1527771 Chapter 3 I planned on having little screen time showing Applejack and Rainbow Dash working together and focus more on relationship building and getting closer while the other teams got the screentime working. We've seen Sweet Apple Acres working the whole story with a bit of AppleDash buildup, Chapter 3 inverts that. Fullbody is definitely being built up as a villain. I'm also trying to emphasis how hard the competition is, hence AJ and Big Mac's reactions to the whole "Police Charges and injuries" bit.

Perhaps it's time I re-read the whole thing, cause I can't really remember if you've written exactly what Trixie is doing there :facehoof:

Good chapter, only one comment:

"A concept this simple shouldn't be so hard to execute.” I have a hard time picturing Rainbow ever using the words 'concept' or 'execute'

Anyways, looking forward to future updates along with that infamous chapter 3 of yours.

And, as Roughhouse wrote, as long as you update the story I'll be here to read it.


>>1545383 I made prior edits, and Trixie being in AS is only recent. She was originally supposed to appear near the end, but my rewrite dramatically shortened it so the story will only be around 100,000-150,000 words, so Trxie's role got bumped up.

As for Rainbow's line, I'm fairly certain I could picture her saying that. She is a Weather Team Captain as well as a stunt-flier. "execute" should be a common word while concepts are important to fliers.

Aww yeah!  I love how you explain all the subtle little movements with Dash.  It really brings her to life.

Applejack raised a hoof up to Rainbow's face, caressing the side. Rainbow's hoof removed itself from Applejack's shoulder and wrapped around your head.

Heh, you're not going second person on us, are you?    :rainbowwild:

>>1565326 did I seriously write "your!?"

*ahem* Thank yoooou for the comment. :3



And thank you for bringing out the AppleDash.  :ajsmug:

>>1565384 Eeyup. IT only took me a year.



Also, silly Arby updating when I have to study :rainbowlaugh:

>>1568407 I'm a dick like that. :3

>>1568814 THERE WILL BE. Not soon, actually. I'm waiting until after Episode 5 of Season 3 (because Trixie is involved).

>>1579315 Arby is pleased, and so is Colgate. [img]//[/img]

Triforce is pleased by giggling, love drunk Dashie. WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME HHHHHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGG

>>1609342 ohokay my mistake

Note: I'm not updating until episode 5 of season 3 is out since it deals with Trixie.

I finally got around to reading this. :yay: So, the only thing I noticed wrong is that you used the word people, instead of ponies in a sentence. Other than that, good chapter.:pinkiesmile:

:rainbowhuh: :ajbemused: When this competition is over Aj, Rd, buck his lower jaw off and break all of his legs and burn his left ear off. Wow I hate this guy, well I hate all stuck up rich f***ers honestly, but still.

>>2890472 My first comment in 5evr. Thank yoooou. Also, that may happen in a sense if I ever get back to writing this story.

>>2891006 No probs man, I love the story so far, just got to Gilda's addition, which you nailed btw, it has been totally worth the read :rainbowkiss:

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