Ah, here we go again!

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This.  Is.  Awesome.  Take my favorite and like, and use them as motivation to do MOAR.

Huh, well this is certainly different. You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention.

EDIT: So wait, does this mean that everything she did was just a hallucination?

Similar to that one episode of, stargate something or rather was it? I don't remember that well. I shall continue when the next chapter is released.

pity there isn't a real life console, "sv_cheats 1, noclip"

I hope it ends happy

This sounds like the Celestia one

Eh, can't say I care all that much for the premise (seen it done a few too many times), but the writting is excellent.

fuck i love these kinds of stories

IDEA- she goes back into her insane slumber, well aware of it, and does whatever the fk she wants in her made-up Ponyville. No repercussions.

>>19184071918407

Well thank you. Your favorite, it sustains me...

>>19184911918491

Possibly.

>>19185751918575

*Hands tissue*

>>19186771918677

Having noclip in life probably wouldn't change my life that much. I'd be using it to get to the car quicker, take the dog out without having to use the stairs, etc.

Yes, I am that lazy.

>>19190401919040

I like reading happy endings. I don't know if I like writing them. We will have to see, I think.

Unfortunately, I haven't read the Celestia one. Or at least thats my story. I'm original - I swear!

>>19192221919222

Well thank you. It's certainly not the most original overall theme, so I'll just have to stick with high-quality writing. Heh, couldn't say that with a straight face.

Also, whenever I read your name I seem determined to misread it as Kryten. My apologies.

>>19192761919276

I hope I don't disappoint then!

>>19197321919732

The ultimate example of lucid dreaming, eh?

what really strange is why the f**k her medicine erased her real memories, not the false one?

or her doctors really like to see her scream her mind off

>>19202831920283

Never trust doctors, I say. Which is why I am so healthy.

Next chapter should provide some more insight into what is going on... unless I'm lying, of course. I'm not to be trusted either.

>>19200861920086 AAHH, the good old "What is real and what isn't" with the possibility of some nefarious schemes!

Oh this is gonna be good!

>>19213041921304

It's a theme I quite love because I find it so evocative. As a student of history, reality is often framed in terms of fact versus fiction. Napoleon was the Emperor of France - George McScotsman wasn't. As long as the authors are reputable and the reader knowledgeable it is all fairly well defined - even the gray (grey for my non-American friends) areas are acknowledged as being such.

But when dealing with mental illnesses and medical disorders, the nature of reality is warped horrifically. To be honest, I can think of no more perfect hell than being told that most, if not all, of your life was not real. I don't know how I would react - would the fantasies become more attractive than the "truth" offered by others?

And in a world of magic, how can one be sure that what one is told is the truth? Is Twilight truly insane, and is her life as she remembers it just a delusion? Or is the hospital and its doctors the delusion, keeping her from the reality of her friends and loved ones? Or is there something else at work?

What I hope is that I can paint a picture for my readers of a gifted mind struggling through a terrible nightmare as her whole world seems to twist back against what she has known all her life, with some hot gypsies thrown in.

Spot the Black Adder reference, get a prize.

>>19213431921343

Thanks, and I hope I don't disappoint!

>>19213911921391 My thought exactly, aww, I never saw Black Adder

I have seen movies and read books of such theme.

I hope this one is as good if not better.

Huh, I'm pretty sure I saw a fic like this before but with Pinkie, and I was planning on writing a fic about Twilight in a mentaL ward... but oh well, nice to see a fic like this regardless!

Image: http://i695.photobucket.com/albums/vv319/daemonofdecay/MLP-AsylumTitle-Bar2_zpsf43b3582.png

If so, then please seek help. But before you do check yourself in, celebrate! For it is also your lucky day! Well, as lucky as I can make it over the internet, really. To help me better fill in my story Asylum with some background characters, I am accepting submissions for OC ponies to be included! Considering that the story is dealing with insanity and mental illness this course of action seems a thematic fit, for I am surely inviting madness by making such a request. The can of worms has been opened!

Image: http://i552.photobucket.com/albums/jj335/spacemanman/tumblr_lztpaw9vBp1qiklxro1_400.gif

Now to clarify, I'm looking for ponies to appear in the background, so we are talking about nothing more than a short description of a passing patient or a doctor's name being dropped in a conversation. That is it. So let me just lay down the two cardinal rules first:

1) No alicorns, non-ponies, or otherwise extremely ‘exotic’ characters. If your character is a zebra, yay! If it is a bionic-clockwork zebra soldier with a brass leg that is a combination sword/can-opener/teddy bear, it’s not going to be accepted. Common sense applies here as to what is suitable for a background character - I'm looking for Ice Cream Maker Guy, not Darth Vader.

2) Please don’t send me a full life story. While I would love to read them all, I won’t be able to include any of it in what I write. A well-written tale about a lost scion of the Equestrian nation who finally found his way home after years abroad living the life of a charming rogue to challenge those that had disgraced him would make for good reading and wonderful character development, but you can't express any of it through a one page description of a janitor mopping up the floor at night. *Takes down note for potential future story*

So if you are still interested just check my blog for the relevant post and respond to it there.

Name:

Short physical description:

Role preference (doctor, patient, orderly, or none):

And that's all you need to do! Pictures and such can help but are not necessary. Any illnesses you wish to ascribe to your character will be considered as well, although I can't guarantee anything considering I'm looking for background ponies. Cash gifts (bribe is such an ugly word) will be taken into account accordingly - no pun intended. The names are honestly the most useful to me, since I am absolutely rubbish at coming up with good ones, and having suitable names to call upon would help me add a little flavor to my scenes.

If I like the name or something about the description catches my eye, I'll reply to your IM to let you know if I'm going to include your OC in an upcoming chapter, and I'll give you full credit in a relevant future post.

Thanks in advance for any submissions! Now I'm off to see the nice young men in their clean white coats. They say they have a funny farm where life is beautiful all the time, but I just hope they have a petting zoo!

-Derek (aka DoD)

PS: Jesus I feel so damn old making a Dr. Demento reference.

PPS: What the heck happened to my images? They have been shielded! I'm too lazy to click a little cross to bring them up! Gah!

>>19215901921590

Watch it. Watch it all right now. Well, except for the first season, it's a bit crap. But the last three seasons are some of my favorite bits of television. I've seen them dozens of times over the years, and will continue to watch them eagerly.

>>19216441921644

Thanks! I hope so too. Playing with reality and mental disorders isn't new, but I hope to put my own take on it. Thankfully I haven't read any other fanfiction stories dealing with this exact topic, so at least I can convince myself that I'm being original. And yes, thats my story and I'm sticking to it!

>>19216991921699

Please, don't let me stop you! It's better to have more than less, after all!

>>19218001921800

It is really well writen.

All i saw was a few grammatical errors.

If I could only remember the names of the movies this reminds me of.

>>19218351921835

Oh, please let me know if you see them! I've tried to proofread and catch all the minor stuff I could, but my grasp of English grammar is always a bit weak. Unfortunately, unlike many who say that, I don't have the excuse of being able to call it a second language either. Mistakes and errors found are mistakes and errors resolved!

Funnily enough, the one I was thinking of as I developed the idea was A Beautiful Mind. While it has its flaws I really do like the movie. Of course this story isn't really like that movie, with no slow decline into paranoia and hallucination, but it is one of the films I have seen enough to be a definite influence on my motivation to write. If you remember, feel free to let us know!

>>19216991921699 Was it the one where Pinkie was in a ward for killing  her lover/partner?

.....oh god...I went through six months of this kind of treatment...just the walls were soild bone white not two tone. I was suffering from major chemical imbalances in my body and that coupled with autism and ADHD does not make a good combo. It took them six months of testing, meds, and as they slowly got everything settled on meds I found that those places are not ment to help anyone unless the people who put them there are willing to make sure they are getting the treatments they need. To say this place was just a massive daycare center so people could put the mentally ill out of the way.  

>>19218001921800 Hey, I have an idea - maybe I could type up a bit of it, then have you look at it and tell me what you think?  I'd love feedback!

>>19220031922003 No, I just remembered, I'm getting two things mixed up - I saw a picture of Pinkie Pie being in a mental ward, but I read a fic about Twilight actually being a human named Tara who was in a mental hospital thing and she imagined all of Ponyville and everything (said fic is here, but I found it through TV Tropes)

>>19220461922046 Ah the one I remember I had found on EQD a long time ago and it was centered around Pinkie in a mental ward and having conversations with her friends that weren't there, all because of what the pony she called her colt-friend did.

so instead of everything ussually being happy, it was actually similar to the human world?

>>19221341922134 Ohh, okay.

Welp... This was boss. You say you're taking OCs, right? Might place one of my own.

Cream colored earth pony. Short, messy black mane. Two crossed fencing swords as his mark (For the sport, of course. Though it gains a distinct meaning depending on the fanfic I use it on, but that's irrelevant right now...) He's mute. No preference in his usage although it'd be awesome if you went the 'One flew over the cuckoo's nest' way and made him like the chief

Don't think it'll happen, but it'd be sweet.

EDIT: Forgot to place a name... Oh wow brain, you're really messing with me aren't you? Whatevs... Name's Wave Breaker.

>>19218781921878

STUPID COMPTER SPASMS!!... *cough* anyway...

...like stepping unexpectedly stepping out...

That is the first one I saw, I will have to reread the story to find more.

But I won't now. When you computer spasms that should be a sign as you been on it too long and its time to get off.

The Ward is one of the movies. And now I have a movie to watch.

Edit: If the link doesn't work, you might want to google it. Like I said  computer spasms. *Stares menicingly at the tower*

>>19220101922010

I'm sorry to hear that! I have ADHD as well, but I never had to suffer through anything like that. You have my sympathies.

>>19220461922046

Sure, I wouldn't mind at all. Heck, I'm trying to become a teacher, so helping others is part of that whole deal.

>>19221951922195

Questions about what actually happened will have to wait for other chapters to really flesh out.

>>19223471922347 Oooh, yay!  Or should I say...

>>19223251922325

Thanks! And just send me a PM with that information so I don't forget. A PM will just help me keep track of it all. Now I don't want you getting your hopes up - I'm not looking to write in a bunch of OCs as major characters - but you might find a reference to your character in the story somewhere in a future update.

Also, I can't imagine having a Chief-like role for this story, considering he was the narrator of the book. Not so much the film, of course, but then nobody can narrate for Jack Nicholson!

I look forward to the next chapters, and I might ask to have my OC placed in the story even if its just a slight spot. The guys there with me were always fighting, I got into a fight myself once....well it was kinda one sided once I started fighting back....I was suffering from personality swings when it happened.

>>19223821922382

Done and done! Also, Asylum

story title got it into my mind.

Picture updates.

Was fooling around with the picture for the story a little more and came up with two slight variations. The top one is my personal favorite. I think it looks like she is giving a mad grin as someone opens the door to her darkened cell.

Image: http://i695.photobucket.com/albums/vv319/daemonofdecay/MLP-AsylumTitle-Long2_zps630ceaf0.png

and

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>>19197321919732

Twist:

The asylum was the insanity induced dreamworld.

>>19223371922337

Thank you very much - fixed it just now! And yes, I know those spasms well. Nothing you can do when the technology gods see fit to meddle in the lives of mere mortals. I suggest sacrificing a fattened calf and restarting the computer to appease them.

>>19225741922574

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What a !

I have some theorys but the biggest one is that she is not crazy. The characters seemsed anxios when she touched her horn. Maybe that is her way of getting out of there. But to say that your whole life isn't real is very crippling and I would be suprised if twilight didn't faint from this. But I can see there is still some things still missing so I say Fight on Twilight. Don't  give up.

If I was in this situatiuon I would have started working an escape plan as soon as they got me out of that room.

also even if you say everything was a lie, from what we see in the show twilight is learning. You can't lean something if your mind is being delusional. your mind would have taught you those lessons over and over. but twilight learned tons. I say she is being held there against here will.

These reality-perception stories are always interesting to read.

why do people like this story theme so much hated it when i saw it on charmed i hate it now. dont get me wrong its a good story so far and ill keep reading to find out what happins but the idea has always annoyed me.

>>19225741922574

^^^^^^^^^^^^

THAT MAN IS A GENIUS!

>>19227011922701

Ooo, thank you for posting! It pleases me to no end that I could write legibly enough to get others to think this hard about my work.

I don't want to ruin any plot points so I can't really comment on anything, but hopefully the next chapter should provide some more fuel for your mind.

>>19228861922886

I think so too. Glad to have you on board!

>>19229761922976

I had an early post about this ( >>19213911921391), but for me it comes down to enjoying that great division between reality and our perceptions, not to mention the tragedy of loosing memories or ones sanity, and the whole gamut of other issues (from mystery to terror) that such topics allow us to explore. I haven't seen the show in question so I can't comment there, but this is just one of those topics I find provocative. By the same token, I'm not too big into the romance stories even when well written - but that might just be because I'm an unromantic oaf.

I can only hope that I can write well enough to be interesting for those who don't enjoy the subject matter, and can keep the story fresh enough to avoid painful clichés.

Amazing.

Well, this is a damn sight better than my attempt at a story like this. Liked, faved, watching with interest.

Holy freakin' awesome, Batmare!  

I can't wait for more!  

>>19231001923100

Thank you very much!

>>19231021923102

Never sell yourself short, kiddo. My last story had 30,000 words of dry and somewhat convoluted backstory before you even got to Equestria!

Only recently have I started really editing my work and reworking what I write, and it has made all the difference in the world. It's painful to delete whole paragraphs when they just don't stand up, and I loathe editing my own stuff, but I've found it to be a sure necessity. Improvement comes from writing, writing, writing - and then editing, editing, editing. You gotta just keep at it!

... so sayeth an unpublished amateur.

I Go Insane - Tony Iommi and Glenn Hughes

Oh my god, those 7k words just FLEW by. ._. I was so absorbed by the level of detail and excellent showing. I'm on the edge of my seat right now.

I wonder how Twilight will come to terms with the real world, come to accept that her life is just a dream...

I wonder if she'll ask about her friends. O:

>>19231831923183

You are quite correct. I look forward to seeing more of this. Oh, and I do like the little nod to Harry Potter in there. Very nice.

>>19225741922574

But no matter what, no matter where she ends up in the end, she'll never be sure... she will always question her existence. always.

For some reason, this reminds me of a Star Trek: The Next Generation episode... Of course, most psychological fiction can remind me of one episode or another, so I guess it isn't that odd.

This is great so far, but the grammatical errors do take me out of the story a bit. Here are the ones I saw:

Twilight Sparkle’s was jolted awake by the...

Starting with the first sentence, can you spot the mistake? (What is Miss Sparkle possessing, per chance?)

...she tried to make head and tails of the indistinct blur...

Either "head or tail" or "heads or tails".

Twilight sitting upright but was pushed back...

There's a word missing here.

...as the façade of strength and confidence she had crafted began slipping.

...some sort of cloth sheathed wrapped around her horn.

One or the other, not both.

...a large stallion with a set of keys...

The nurse work set to work with practiced ease,

...what was colloquially be referred to as a ‘sippy cup’.

It was felt mildly offended to be offered...

I'm not exactly sure what to do with this one.

...but she there was nothing of the concerned caretaker...

The two other ponies visible visibly relaxed...

So if just finish your breakfast and we can go see the doctor.

This could either be "So if you just finish your breakfast(,) we can go see the doctor." (the comma is optional, but preferred) Or "So just finish your breakfast and we can go see the doctor." Like so many other errors here, it seems you have changed the sentence in your head halfway through writing it. This can sometimes be fixed by simply reading each paragraph through after you type it.

Like the simple two-tone paint on the walls,

...would ever call a hospital a warm and inviting,

She tried to cover by her embarrassment at...

...but she even the sight of open spaces...

...but from what she has told me(,) that you are having trouble...

“We don’t want out our patients thinking..."

She wished she was that talented and actor.

...is the one that between last night and this morning.

...were bags beneath her parents’ eyes she did remember.

"Didn't", or "did not".

...only her mother’s wasn’t obscured(.)

...too numb to feel anything anymore.

And that is all that I saw. It may seem like a lot, but this was a pretty long chapter. And I can't wait for the next one!

Congratulations. This story has presented an interesting concept with an equally entertaining delivery. It has not only earned a like and favorite from me, but has also earned you a watch. I look forward to the many inevitable plot-twists that await.

>>19231951923195

I feel like I'm going to need to set up a blog post with all the music videos people will post related to asylums and insanity. As the young folk say, rock on! \m/

>>19232331923233

That is some glowing praise there! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much! And I don't want to ruin anything for you or anyone else, so I'm not going to give away any spoilers. But if you look carefully, you might notice that the Mane Six tag is chosen for this story... *whistles innocently*

>>19232541923254

What's reference?

... oh! That reference! Um, yeah! That... that was totally intended. You know, because I'm able to do stuff like that, make references to other works, j-just like any half-decent author. I'm not, you know, unaware of what I've got in my own story. Hehe, hehehe... heh...

... not buying it? Dammit.

Okay, I actually didn't consciously put one in there. But now I must know what it is you saw! Please! I want to be able to take credit for it. My fragile ego demands it!

>>19238621923862 /

EDIT: That was embarrassing.

Anyway, ooh! :D I see what you mean...

>>19234691923469

>>19235091923509

You sir just made my day. Of course, you also made me feel like a fool, but then that sorta goes with the territory when it comes to writing a story about magical multicolored talking horses. I cannot thank you enough - every time I have the mistakes pointed out to me, it makes me a better writer.

One day I might even be halfway towards my goal - being somewhat decent!

Thank you very, very much!

As for the Star Trek thing... oddly enough, I only started watching that show on Netflix recently. As in, within the last month. So over the last month (I had no internet in my new apartment, so I had to fill the time somehow), I watched a huge chunk of the series. So I have seen more Star Trek than is healthy. But the really odd part is that I haven't actually seen that episode yet!

What a !

>>19237411923741

Thank you kindly, and I sure hope I don't disappoint!

... *turns down urge to end with a 'it was all a dream...'*

>>19239001923900

I didn't mean to embarrass you, I was just trying to sound slick and suave by not answering the question directly. But now that I think about it, whenever I try the same thing with the ladies it always ends up embarrassing them too...

Ah, they just don't know what class is.

Please to be posting new chapter soon yes? Is good. Thank you.

>>19213911921391 I'm literally getting this "Frame of Mind" vibe while reading this story.

>>19239331923933 No no, I pressed "add comment" when all that was present was a slash. :o That's what I meant was embarrassing.

I just noticed the story made it to the front page... thing... and is currently in the top-ten list. Now I know it is just a fleeting thing, so I will stay cool and I won't let it go to my h-

AND LO! I AM UNTO A FANFICTION GOD! MUAHAHAHAHAHA!

... ahem. Yes. Maybe I should save the megalomania for when I can write a chapter without having to worry about if I am keeping it in the same freakin' tense?

Also, I recently put up a different picture as the title within the chapter itself. This one, to be precise:

Image: http://i695.photobucket.com/albums/vv319/daemonofdecay/MLP-AsylumTitle-Bar2_zpsf43b3582.png

So let me know if you think its divine or if I just screwed everything up royally.

>>19239551923955

I'm currently about ~700 words into the next chapter so far.

>>19239971923997

Now I am very conflicted. On the one hand, this episode sounds like a very good one if everyone remembers it so well, and I feel like watching it so I can steal ideas draw inspiration from it.

On the other hand, if I did watch it and it turned out some of the things I had planned were frightfully similar to the story, then I would feel like more of a hack than usual. My ego and sense of self-worth is a house of cards balanced upon a series of elaborate delusions, chief of which is the bold-faced lie that I can be somewhat original now and again.

Nnnngh... why do choices have to be so hard?

>>19240001924000

Ah, okay. I was afraid I came off sounding like a dick. Not that I am not a colossal one anyway, but I at least like to hide my deep personality flaws from the public.

>>19234691923469 That sounds like Believing Stories to me.

Plot Twist...  Twilight is actually crazy

When I saw the title, all I could think of was Asylum by Disturbed.

As a digital art student, I can tell you it's not hard to rearrange a lot of small details in a photo. Obviously Equestria doesn't have computers, but it does have magic. I don't think it would be hard for Twilight to use a spell to scry the photo for any alterations, or perhaps magically date it to its creation to see if its a duplicate.

...although, getting that thing off her horn to do so could be a problem...

Also...this reminds me a LOT of Shutter Island. Does Broadsword Memorial Psychiatric Hospital happen to have a lighthouse?

I just had a thought.  Daemon describes perfectly how things are inside an asylum.  There are three ways he could have described it so accurately:

1. He works at an asylum.  This is probably a no, as you need a very specific set of qualifications to get a job at one.

2. He reads psychology textbooks in his spare time.  Who does that?  Exept for Twilight, that is.

3. That leaves him spending large amounts of time IN a mental facility, if you know what I mean.

Well?  Which is it?

As a post mental patient, I applaud this story.

Well Twinks, it's finally happened. Or rather, it happened a long time ago, and you're just now learning of it. You've snapped. You're nuts. Loony Tunes. Coocoo for Cocoa Puffs, fourth floor, a real basket case.

And then,

You forgot.

>>19242301924230

I glanced at the description and got a terrible sense of déjà vu. But then I remembered my story don't have no humans! That means they have to be entirely different. Right? Right?

>>19242541924254

Maybe we should start a betting pool?

>>19243331924333

You're not the first!

>>19244271924427

As a complete and total amateur when it comes to Photoshop, I agree completely. Hell, its difficult for me to do something as simple as create the title image for this story. Thankfully, I could use the great god Google for images to offset my natural talent for lacking natural talent.

Speaking of being digital art student, you do understand that I now have to make the obligatory request for free artwork, right? It's nothing personal, you understand, but I am a selfish bastard, descended from a long line of selfish bastards, so I have to make demands on those more talented them myself.

And since you are certainly more talented than me... gimme gimme gimme!

As for the magic idea, while Twilight can't cast any magic, she can certainly sense and feel it. Thus she could pull the power into herself but couldn't hold onto it for long enough to cast even a simple spell like levitating a blanket.

And I quite liked Shutter Island. Better than the other strange DiCaprio movie, Sleeping Dream Horns or whatever it was called.

Nurse Ratchet.

....

You bastard.

>>19244291924429

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>>19244371924437

I have to say that these sorts of comments do mean a lot to me. Knowing that I was able to give my story even a hint of realism is quite humbling, so thank you.

>>19244511924451

At least she didn't make herself a new pair of dragon skin shoes before the Fed's took her down. Or did she?

What a !

>>19244691924469 Probably something like, she DOES have some mental/Social issues*not crazy though*; being an element made her a Target; she Got kidnapped by people using a Mental Facility as a cover up and Celestia has no idea....

.....jeezuz....Did I come up with that in...*checks clock* 3 minutes?....Screw how quickly I did that, it's STILL something I've GOTTA see someday.

>>19245351924535

>>19245231924523

Yes, yes I am.

You're the first person to point that one out aloud. So either you're the first to notice... or more likely it was so blatant and annoying nobody wanted to bring it up.

But in my defense, I never did claim to have any talent.

I love how you use the name "Nurse Ratchet"  I'm guessing its a spin off from One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest?

Aside from that, great story, I love it.  

Ratchet, now i hate her!

Hmm, I don't remember getting a fiction written about me...

Does it make me vain to favorite this...

>>19245521924552

If you write it, they will come. *sage nod*

>>19246711924671

How could I not blatantly rip-off take inspiration from one of the great movie characters of all time?

>>19247401924740

Image: http://i42.tinypic.com/154vvjk.jpg

>>19247901924790

Dangit, it was supposed to be a surprise! Who told you? I mean, the big at the end was going to be you waking up from your dream about Twilight in a hospital.

Man, now I'll just have to come up with a real ending. This stinks...

Okay, i am excited, and creeped out.  

i can mot wait for the next chapter, and will hunt you down for it.  Unfortuenetly, i have no way of finding you, so i hsve opted to run up to every person i see, shake them and demand the next chapter of asylum.  

Honestly, im suprised noone has called the cops yet.  Has the weird shit o meater become that dull?

Write in author, write on

...Nurse Ratchet...

*opens mouth*

*closes mouth*

...how clever.

As a side note, this somewhat reminded me of a moment from 'The Darkness 2'. If you played the game, you know what I'm talking about.

>>19248121924812

Darnit! We can fix this, just let me think....

Oh I know! In the end it turns out that non of this ever existed and we are all characters in a fanfic about an aspiring author answering comments...

I choose the blue pill....please...

>>19248401924840

But then...

>>19248561924856

I think perhaps that I should be the one creeped out, yes? Just don't give me the John Lennon treatment and we will be cool.

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This made me laugh. Well done, sir. Well done indeed.

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Getting quite meta, aren't we? But we can go further!

Why not have the real ending be Twilight reading the comments from a story about her in a hospital off of a doctor's computer from the hospital she is in, which we then comment on, ad infinitum?

It's like fractals! Just, you know, without any of the neat graphics or relavent mathematical uses.

Is the Nurse a reference to the nurse in "One Flew over the Cukoo's Nest"?

That's one of my favourite books! Interesting read I look forward to the next part.

>>19249711924971

Careful I hear the mods don't like meta....

On a completely unrelated topic,

I'm totally ripping the cover pic for my profile

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png

Erm if thats ok...

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy.png

>>19250211925021

Please feel free!

ill be tracking this, great idea, and writing

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Yes indeed! Believing Stories is an old favorite of mine. But as you pointed out of course, that story involves Celestia in an entirely alternate universe with humans, whereas this simply involves an alternate timeline in which Twilight is batshit insane.

If I were in Twilight's position, this is what I would do:

First, try to prove the truth of my sanity through a couple methods. Counting on the fact that history should be the same between her 'dream world' and 'reality' (except of course for the differences her presence would have wrought), Twilight can assume that her knowledge of the world is far more extensive than should be possible of a mare spending most of her life in an Asylum. She (potentially) knows current events and information (such as advanced spells, personalities of the mane six, etc.) that she never was exposed to in the Asylum. If she can prove that she knows these things, and prove her intelligence, perhaps she can at least win the doctors' considerations. With luck, maybe she could gain an audience with Celestia, who may be able to figure things out. It really depends on exactly how divergent the timelines are, how much is different and how much has changed.

If this fails (which is pretty likely, all told), then I would just play along and bide my time. Pretend to believe them, make progress, and with patience Twilight might even be cleared and be free of the Asylum's grasp. Once free (or once given more free reign), she can then work towards figuring out what the hell is really going on. Go to a library, try and speak with the mane six (who do not know her in this timeline), do everything she can to gain their trust. Make things right.

And if all of that fails, there are two main forward routes to take: One, accept that most of your life has been a lie (pretty difficult when your life was freaking awesome like hers), and move on. Make amends, hook up with family, try to establish a new life in this universe. Two, mainly the same as number one, except that you keep believing and hoping. Try and move on, settle and live your life, but always hope that one day you'll wake up back in the world you used to know.

Or you can take a dive off a steep cliff and end that crap on your own terms, but that's a dangerous step that I would never have the guts to carry out.

As you might have guessed, I've thought about this a lot...

I would try to find things that the doctors should not know that where in my dreams such as what food I had for dinner and if I went back in to the other equestria I would do it again because if a person you dint tell something that only you would now about I would be slightly suspicious .....also they may have found the bodies in my-WAIT SHIT IGNORE THAT

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>>19250051925005

As soon as I saw "Nurse Ratchet" I basically went

On another note, it's nice to see I'm not the only one who got the reference, although I have only seen the movie.

Oh god, I swear, if Twilight is not going to end well, somepony will suffer a lot... you catch my drift? Ok, now, move on with the next chapter, please, I NEED to know more of what you have in store...