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Tired of doing the same thing every day, Nurse Redheart finally decides to quit her job. However, she is requested to take care of one last patient. Soon, Redheart will learn that a new day isn't always like the last one. Redheart will learn that Tomorrow Never Knows.

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Don't have time to read now, but...
Word count for chapter: 4,702
Word count for story: 0
Seriously, what! I don't even!:twilightoops:

Edit:
You do seem to have faithful readers. 0 view count, 5 likes. I know view count is not updating properly, but still...

Y U NO WRITE A HAPPY FIC?
Jokes aside, I realli liked this one shot, and having nurse Red Heart as the mane character is not very common. I'll wait for your next work. :pinkiehappy:

One of the most touching fanfictions I've read in a while.

Great work.

(Joke) Alt. Title: Tomorrow Never Comes
Ahem:

Dear lord....
My feels.

See, I like these kind of stories.. they make me feel, yes, but it's a good and bad thing. Like, I feel sorry she died, but in the end, there is a shimmer of hope, inspiration to do more...and it is wonderful.

Anyay, just wanted to say I enjoyed this, and leave a quick note. Being sick sucks, but reading helps.

I... Dem feels... :raritycry:

Beatles song in the title?
You already have my like

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>Penny Lane
I think yes

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her resign letter
~her resignation letter

1 through 8
~one through eight

which only illumination
~which was only illuminated

Her mouth almost shouted
~her mouth can shout? Cool. What about the nurse?

the chords on
~I believe you mean cords.

we aren't that close...never that close
~try different wording

"tomorrow"
~this is a bit overused throughout these paragraphs

but well
~but, well,

"we're, like, total strangers."
~"like" seems a bit out of character for Redheart, considering how she was portrayed through the rest.

blue code
~usually this is code blue, not sure about that.

a sudden flatline doesn't mean dead
~my last point. It's true.

Despite this, I like this story. I didn't really get in to the character, or feel bad for Lyra when she passed away, but... :twilightoops:

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Go be fuckwits elsewhere.

I just skimmed the story and it smacked me in the feels, now im all warm inside. DAMN YOU!

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The comment page: now with 70% less fuckwittery!

Do you have any idea of what is it like to be a nurse?

Is and it should be switched.

this is probably the only fic ive read that actually made me want to cry:raritycry: good job sir:moustache:

The Beatles song just hit me like a train. Short feely story :ajsleepy: nice job though.

Well that made me sad as heck. :raritydespair:. Good stuff.

Good fic, but really really sad.

Why do I torture myself with these feelings? :raritydespair: :fluttercry:

jz1

Manly Tears.

That is all.

I really like this.
A nice little dose of feels.
Keep up the good work.

You wrote Lyra's death as 11:15am, but didn't you say it was the night shift?
No one else pointed it out, so might as well.
now about the story
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Oh yeah, sorry, It's PM. Gonna fix that, thanks.

Enough of this "sweaty eyeball" garbage! I'm crying because that was awesome. period. :fluttercry:

Intriguing, well written and unique. Red Heart isn't a very used pony, so that added some originality too. The fact that Lyra agreed to be Red's friend while being a loner herself made it sadly ironic.

Overall very well executeded...:twilightoops:.....:facehoof:...bad choice of words,sorry

P.S. When the Beatles song was playing, I swear I heard the Alvin and the Chipmunks version:rainbowderp: not exactly sure why:rainbowhuh:
anyhow, liked and faved!

I guess I'm the only one who associates the title with this song instead.

I thought Lyra was going to die when she got the sandwiches, but otherwise it read like I thought it did. Which isn't a bad thing, but it means I've still got my Genre Savvy.

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