I Could Care Less About The Dress

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It was the perfect plan. Beyond perfect. Chrysalis had everyone right where she wanted them. But man, she should really watch her mouth.

Yeah, I dunno. This is long overdue, but I thought it was worth posting anyways. One shot.

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Luna Plays Minecraft

Luna Plays Minecraft #1 · Jan 6th, 2013 · 1 · ·

This is hooves down, my new favorite story.

The Rar

The Rar #2 · Jan 6th, 2013 · 1 · ·

1911808
I'm partial to agree!
Loved this.

eldersword35

eldersword35 #3 · Jan 6th, 2013 · · ·

someone should make a version of this for yugioh rules!

Seether00

Seether00 #4 · Jan 6th, 2013 · · ·

Oh.. I was expecting Rarity to barge in and assault her or something.

Allington Sinclair

Allington Sinclair #5 · Jan 6th, 2013 · · ·

“We are the Grammar Nazis, and we know everything that goes on in Equestria, you horrid beast! You have violated code number 98.3a, improper use of a common phrase, skewing your original thought! By saying “I could care less about the dress” instead of “I couldn’t care less about the dress”, you are implying that the dress isn’t something that you really care about but it’s still something slightly interesting to you, while in reality, you honestly couldn’t care any less about the dress, which you clearly stated, in your mind, was ghastly! You have disgraced the Grammar Nazi committee, and in turn, all of Equestria. Your treason will be punished with seven years in the Equestrian high security prison!”

Unendlicher Satz, Schande über dich! Rechtschreibprüfung über alles!

Ehrlichkeit

Ehrlichkeit #6 · Jan 6th, 2013 · · ·

1911967 This.

Fome

Fome #7 · Jan 6th, 2013 · · ·

Not bad, but "thine wrath" is doubly bad (don't know the formal terminology, but it should be "thy", and she's talking about her own wrath, so it should be "my"). I was hoping for something like "She's not stopping! Hold her down!" or "We need backup!". Or something.

The Enchanted Quill

The Enchanted Quill #8 · Jan 6th, 2013 · · ·

Wow, just wow. This was the most hilarious thing I have ever read and the most craziest. I loved it! Can't stop snickering to myself.

Narrative Style

Narrative Style #9 · Jan 6th, 2013 · 1 · ·

That was great. Plus, correcting that particular phrase is a pet peeve of mine, so I got major satisfaction from the imagery.

Now, to be the annoying guy that points out errors. (There's something humorous about correcting the grammar of a story with grammar nazis)

Usually when she gets up on her hind legs...

The tense disagrees with the rest of the paragraph.

...she couldn’t anything real with...

I believe you are missing a "do" here.

"...Do it”

The Grammar Nazi forgot his period.

...at the sight of the real Chrysalis...

What, there was a fake Chrysalis somewhere?

And though I found it hilarious, the ending only works if spelling is part of grammar. Just wanted to point that out. *hits fast forward to skip long argument on whether spelling counts as grammar*

1911885 That's what I was expecting as well. But I like surprises.

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