During their mission to defeat Discord and save Equestria, Rarity discovers her feelings for a studious lavender mare. When Twilight senses this, she does some research to find a way to make the fashionista admit her emotions.
Dude, this i great, keep it up!
Based on this it seems like Twilight is the one who is crushing, though she may not realize it. Rarity's behavior is all innocent on its own, especially when you consider that pony's don't care a whit about wearing clothes or not. Twilight, however, is imagining everything as titillating. Seems like she may need to do some more self-reflection here.
Very interesting, I look forward to seeing where this goes. Good job.
Taking innocent gestures and turning them into shipping fuel - Bronies.
I love it XD its also kinda obvious that its probably not Rarity with the crush
Alright, Fine. Twilight shipping is BEST shipping
pretty interesting even if this first chapter seems a bit bland to me, looking forward to the next one though
really liked this! from one new author to another: keep this up! we don't have nearly enough rarity shipping
Ooh. Interesting. Keep it comin'!
Oh, Ah kannot wayt fur the next wun!
Hmm int seems to be intrestingg, can't wait to read more of it.
but it seems twilight has the crush...
Thanks to all of you for the feedback!
The main idea of the chapter is Twilight realizes that Rarity perhaps treats her a bit differently (especially when compared to the other ponies). Right now Twilight is simply confused, and all revelations will come later.
Well, I got this idea when I noticed that of the three pairs of sovereigns/advisers in the Hearth's Warming Eve episode, Twilight and Rarity were more 'snuggly ' than the others, and during the final carol, they were the only pair that weren't shuffled. (AJ with Flutter, Pinkie with RD)
Oh no I know that makes my mind sound twisted or something...
Interesting, but if you're using stuff from the show consider. . .
S. 2 Ep. 10: Rarity takes time to help Twilight sort out her library and even makes her a dress.
S.2 Ep. 9: Her comment towards Twi. about being the best and she was going to pour herself into making an extremely fancy dress for her.
S.2 Ep. 1: Gave Twi her umbrella.
Ep. 14: Twilight was the first to be offered a dress for the gala (again with the dresses, I know).
Ep. 8: She was the one to suggest that they try and make Twi's sleepover a success.
I'm so grateful that you took the time to list those moments in the show
I also thought the Rarity giving her umbrella to Twilight scene was so I mean, she risked her glorious mane! I'll find someway or another to mention more of the points.
And to everyone who commented, I thank you again for the feedback and suggestions
There was a significant amount of ice i feel, but it was all in character, Twilights pulling back and detaching herself from the situation to analyze it was completely expected. Again, it's nice to read something where the characters feel so much like from the show, slight changes to make the story feasible but forgivable. great work
Twilight had a small habit to do that in the show I think. Take when Twilight was studying Pinkie's "Pinkie senses", she tried her very best to disprove it being able to work. Lets not forget when she was looking around trying to cause her friends distress only to fix it.
She spent most of her life by herself, reading. Her being a bit cold in times is pretty much in character.
Its a great Fic and I can't wait for the next one ^^
I'm glad I could help.
I really think I'd like this more if it's Twilight who's into Rarity. There's just too much evidence in the show that of all the ponies, Rarity is the one absolutely, positively into stallions.
I think Twilight was in her character and so was Rarity so I really liked the chapter, but It would be to show how the other girs see the whole thing.
Rarity calls her beautiful and not even a Blush. <----- LIKE THIS?!
Shame, Author. SHAME.
If you do romance, YOU DO IT RIGHT.
I want to say there's something that could be improved on but it's looking great. Really great. Keep it up!
Nice chapter. Looking forward to seeing more. There isn't enough Rarilight stories if you ask me, so nice to see a new one pop up.
As long as you're enjoying the writing process then it still counts as a vacation!
I enjoyed these little vignettes, too.
“Let us never speak of this again.” ..
I like this chapter. I think you put it together nicely.
I believe it's french for perfume?
not sure though.
it seems like the whole thing was a chess match for Twilight, where the game was too see if she could get Rarity to admit her feelings. However, she didn't plan what to do AFTER she got her to admit them.
This is good
>>163586163586 It is!
It's missing something, don't get me wrong the chapter is very nice, it's just that things feel a little rushed.
Or something like it, I'm not even sure.
Can't wait for the next one though.
liked this very much
however, i don't think spike will be very pleased
Wow I really like how you made this chapter.
Keep up the good work
Is that a sound indicating a nosebleed? If I'm wrong, no offence meant
Well I learned that word from some magazine I recall. But my french is not really good either so if there are any mistakes with the usage please tell me
to you too!
How is it you manage to summarize the whole chapter so well!!!
Thanks for the clarification and for replying to and reading the other chapters as well
I'll have to check on my pacing better, personally I think there are some things that could be better as well! And thanks for reading this, I'd love to hear more suggestions from you
Thanks!!! And I'm planning the Spike part already And a teaser: the chapter after the next will have a lot of episode 14
Thanks It means a lot to me that you like it!
Hey I remember you're the first one ever to comment on this fanfic lol.
And thanks to everyone for reading~
Rodeo? You mean the one where Rarity gets left in the middle of nowhere with Pinkie Pie?
Hopefully for Twilight she is the one that goes back for them. It would look bad it she completely forgets about .
im so sad,now i have to wait for more.
Alright, another chapter
To be honest, last chapter felt rushed and kind of forced. This one, however, had better pacing and detail. I'm also happy to finally find a Twilight/Rarity author who addresses the issue of Spike and how he might feel about this
Heh heh, u bad! Y u can think of stuff on my draft?
Awww, don't be sad please Though I admit the next few chapters are the toughest I've ever written, so I might have to take a bit more time than usual
Thanks~ for the support and comments! It's readers like you that give me motivation to write this
Thanks for telling me! And I do apologize for the last chapter, I know it's not the best I've written Hopefully future chapters won't feel as rushed. Perhaps I should expand the chapters a bit, I noticed that my chapters are a bit light in wordcount
Sorry for replying a bit late...
Thanks! And I'm also a fan of Rari-light, Twi-Rarity, whatever you can call it, haha
I'm glad you think so! I was unsure if I should post this chapter or not at first, but I decided yes in the end because it kinda explains (in a subtle way) how Rarity came to like Twilight.
Yeah, that Applemeanie...
Glad you did. And I really didn't know what to call this chapter at first. lol.
I'm sorry for the really late reply
I thought at first when planning this fic that I would like it to be pretty close to the episode, and it would be kinda like, something that happened offscreen? So I use stuff and lines from the actual episodes. It's great to hear that it feels like the show.
Glad you think so! To tell the truth, I found Twilight easier to write than Rarity. Maybe it's because there are more Twilight lines and scenes in the episode, or maybe it's just me.
Yeah, I know that too But... I just felt they could be together. Sorry
I'm trying to plan how they'll break the news, but since I refer to the actual episodes a lot, I think I'll just let Pinkie know at first, cuz she's good at keeping secrets And of course she would never let anything slip... ON SCREEN!
Thanks. You're awesome. I really hope my future chapters don't let you down.
Yeah, that was unforgivable of me, although I didn't want to mention it because this chapter was mostly from Twilight's point of view. But I really should have mentioned that 'Twilight didn't notice the faint blush' or something like that. Thank you! I think I'll make some slight changes in that part in the future. If you have anything else you want to tell me, please let me know
Thanks! I know my stuff is far from perfect, but I hope it does get better. It's really thanks to these comments that I can find some problems with my writing.
"Their finished their meal with herbal tea" "thought Twilight with a small sign" "so she decided to make thinking of a way"
Just a few errors around the end of the chapter but I'm really loving the this story. I like the awkward and nervous mood they have for their first date. The whole scene just seems so adorable.
This is episode 14 of season 2? But you didn't mention Derpy anywhere in the story.
derpy was with ranbow not twilight or rarity
Thanks for noticing those errors! You're awesome!
I cleaned up the first two but not sure yet how to change the 3rd one...
it will be interesting to see how you explain Twilight (and RD and Fluttershy) leaving poor Rarity alone in the middle of the desert with Pinkie ...