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This the story of Zeta and his adventure after he was exiled from his tribe. Follow his journey from the badlands of the Zebra Dominion to the ever peaceful Equestria. And join him as he finds out what friendship is. What perils will he and his companions face? Will they even make to the destination on one piece?

This is his story.

(Hey guys, I figured since my OC appeared in the Christmas story, I may as well make him his own story.)

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I am enjoying this. and also considering Person In Ponyland is one of my favourite Fanfic series, I am looking forward to moar

I thought since you posted the blog that there was another chapter or something. I have been mislead.

2151030 A new chapter is in progress. Sorry to have mislead you.

If you want readers to care about your OC, you have to give them a reason.
Don't just say "This is a story about my OC", sell it to me! Tell me why I should be interested in your story, in your OC, in your writing. What makes this fic unique in an ocean of self-inserts and Mary Sues?
Seriously, you can't just say "This is a story" and expect someone to care.

2411313 Kinda figured the whole "Exiled from his village because of something he cant control" and the "Never having any friends and now learning about it while traveling with two strangers" thing would at least catch some interest. But hey, I've been wrong before. I have noticed that this story is getting the least amount of attention. Am I safe too assume the reason is because it's an OC story?

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Kinda figured the whole [exiled for no reason, never had friends] thing would at least catch some interest.

No. If I had a quarter for every lonely exiled OC I've seen, I'd have... I'd have a lot a quarters.

Am I safe too assume in assuming the reason is because that it's an OC story?

Yes. OC stories attract fewer readers, especially when the supposed appeal is in learning about someone we've never heard about. Consider the following change:

This the story of Zeta and his adventure after he was exiled from his tribe. Follow his journey from the Zebra Dominion to Equestria. And discover the reason for him being exiled. This is his story.
(Hey guys, I figured since my OC appeared in the Christmas story, I may as well make him his own story.)

Zeta, already an outcast in his tribe, has been exiled for reasons that no one will tell him. In search of answers and a new life, he travels from the Zebra Dominion to the peaceful land of Equestria. Accompanied by a wandering magician and a sadistic griffon, Zeta will explore the limits of his sanity and fortitude on this perilous journey.

Note how I describe the story instead of telling you what it's about. Show, don't tell. You can't use this description because I just made shit up, but I hope you get something out of it.

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