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    • Far From Home
      Semi-dark HiE story inspired by JasonTheHuman's "Anthropology" fic

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    [Author's note: Sorry this took so long. If you've been paying attention at all you know that my other projects are massive time eaters and they unfortunately hold priority over recreational writing. Not much I can do about it. And yes, I know it's a short chapter even though I said I would try to avoid short ones. Oh well. Enjoy.]


    Everyone was feeling a bit more confident about this whole situation now that Taylor was sporting his "falsie" cutie mark. Bon-bon's artistic skill had been a great help in painting it on. Both Lyra and Taylor seemed both surprised and impressed by her hidden talent.

    "I guess it's just practice. I have to decorate a lot of cakes and stuff at Sugarcube Corner, maybe that has something to do with it." Bon-bon said, waving a hoof dismissively.

    "Well, however you managed to get so good with a brush, I appreciate the effort. It's very convincing." Taylor wiggled his rump for emphasis, eliciting a smirk from Bon-bon.

    "Just try not to get wet. I don't know how that paint will hold up to water. We can't have your mark falling off in the rain, you know." She dabbed a bit of paint on his nose playfully.

    While Taylor worked to remove the paint from his face, Lyra pulled Bon-bon aside, keeping her voice low. "What's with the change of heart? You didn't seem nearly this pleasant earlier, especially toward him."

    Bon-bon seemed lost in thought. Her mood had indeed changed drastically, as had her opinion of Taylor. She couldn't quite place it, though. With how dangerous Humans were and how dangerous it would be to have one living here - even if was only temporary - she still felt strangely safe.

    "I can't really explain it, as much as I wish I could. There's just something about him. I feel like he's not as bad as the legends would have us believe. You may actually be right about him."

    Lyra was giddy. Maybe Bon-bon was finally starting to come around!

    "I still don't trust him, at least not completely, but he seems harmless enough." Bon-bon added, before Lyra could get the wrong idea.

    Taylor had finished getting the paint off of his nose, now sporting a blue smudge on his foreleg. "Alright, now that I'm presentable, who else feels like grabbing something to eat? I'm starving."

    Lyra and Bon-bon both looked to the clock on the wall. It was already half past four and none of them had eaten anything all day. As if on cue, Lyra's stomach began to growl.

    "I could definitely go for a bite," said Lyra. She had been using Human colloquialisms like that for several weeks, and with great enough frequency that Bon-bon had reluctantly begun to accept them as normal.

    "The market's still open, we can take Taylor out and show him the ropes. Let him sample Ponyville so he can fit in a bit better," Lyra suggested.

    Bon-bon considered the possibility. If anyone stopped them, they might have a problem - especially if they talked to Taylor - but Lyra's premise was sound aside from that. Getting this human to adapt to a pony's lifestyle and mannerisms would help avoid suspicion. The process would be dangerous, but the rewards could save them a lot of trouble.

    "Alright, that makes sense. Let's go." Bon-bon said after a brief delay.

    The three ponies set out for the market, sticking to the least-populated paths they could. Lyra pointed out the various sights - what few there were in such a small town - as they passed, attempting to familiarize Taylor with as much as she could.

    At one point, they were walking by several carts in front of a shop. Lyra gestured for the other two to keep going while she examined them. Bon-bon shrugged, wordlessly continuing toward the market.

    "What do you think she's doing?" Taylor asked. He wasn't too concerned with what Lyra was up to; he was mostly trying to strike up a conversation with Bon-bon.

    "I don't know. Ever since she started digging up old books about your kind, she's been so... erratic. It's frustrating, but at the same time..." she trailed off, seeming reluctant to finish the sentence.

    "At the same time... what?" Taylor prompted.

    Bon-bon sighed softly. "It's just her way. I can't be upset with her - or you, for that matter - for what happened. At least not anymore. I mean, I was ready to kick her out of the house before you showed up, but now everything's changed. Before, I thought she was just obsessed with a fantasy world, and it was getting to be too much for me to deal with. Now I have no choice but to believe her. It's hard not to, when you're standing right there."

    She poked his shoulder with her hoof for emphasis. There could be no doubt, Taylor was definitely real, though the question of whether or not he would be trouble still remained.

    Taylor was pleased by her response. "Well, it's nice to see that you're not upset. I wasn't sure you and I would be able to... coexist, I guess is the word I'm looking for. You didn't seem to take kindly to me at all. At least not at first."

    He craned his neck, looking back to see if Lyra had finished whatever she was doing. As expected, she was still examining the carts at every angle, making a bit of a spectacle of herself.

    "No, I certainly didn't. It's not every day that a creature of myth just pops into your house. It was frightening, and I reacted badly. It actually says a lot about you, if you think about it."

    Taylor cocked his head. "Oh? How do you figure that?"

    "Well, a human showed up in my house and I panicked. That same human - who had just been dropped into a completely unfamiliar world - was calm the entire time. It's a little embarrassing, really." She tripped over her words a bit, clearly uncomfortable.

    "Can't really blame yourself for that. If the situation had been reversed, I doubt it would have played out too differently. The real kicker is that this place isn't all that unfamiliar. Everything looks eerily similar to my world. A lot brighter, but still similar. It's both unnerving and not at the same time."

    Bon-bon's eyes met Taylor's briefly before she turned away. "Well, I'm sorry about that first impression. Not exactly my proudest moment."

    "Don't worry about it. Nopony's perfect. Besides, it's all good now, right?" Taylor smiled reassuringly.

    The cream-colored pony was appreciative of Taylor's words, and impressed by how quickly he was adapting to using the native phrasing, though she wouldn't show it.

    "He seems to fit right in here. After all this time, it's not what I expected from a Human."

    "Wait up, you two!" Lyra called, trotting over to them. She seemed excited about something, though Taylor and Bon-bon were hesitant to ask what.

    "I'm going to need your help when we get home. I have an idea, but you're the only one that can help me work out the kinks." She didn't really give Taylor much of an option.

    "Alright, I guess." He shrugged, uncertain of what he was getting into.

    The trio arrived at the bustling market, which was crowded by a whole spectrum of ponies of every color imaginable.

    "My god, it's like a clown exploded."

    "Heartstrings and I will go get something to bring home. Why don't you browse around, try to learn as much as you can? Just try not to talk to anyone." Bon-bon suggested.

    "Sounds good. Don't worry about me, I think I've mastered the art of avoiding conversation." He said, half-jokingly.

    Lyra started to protest, insisting that she should stay with Taylor just in case, but she was stopped by a sharp look from Bon-bon, and reluctantly followed her lead.

    Taylor began perusing various stands and buildings. He found himself drawn to a book store display, with several titles stacked together on a metal rack. Most of the books were typical of Ponyville - things for the science-minded pony, a few history books, most of which specifically involved Celestia, but there were a few that seemed to stand out as unique. Picking one at random, he found himself holding a red tome with no title on the cover or spine. He flipped through the first few blank pages until he found one with text.

    "Wow, for real? 'The Lusty Draconian Maid'?"

    He shuddered, quickly putting the book back, trying to shake the images out of his head as he walked to a nearby cart, overflowing with assorted vegetables. He noticed that they looked a lot better than what he was used to seeing in his world.

    "Maybe I should look into that before I go back, see if I can figure out how they grow them like this. A man could make millions off that kind of knowledge."

    After passing several other carts, he began to wonder where Bon-bon and Lyra had gone to. His question was soon answered as he approached a stand loaded with apples and apple-themed baked goods. The two were arguing over what to buy, something that must have been a regular event, judging from the expression on the orange pony's face as she listened to her bickering customers.

    "Would y'all please just pick something? Mah head's start'na hurt over here" Applejack pleaded.

    A wry smile came over Taylor's face as he approached quietly, then poked his head between the two ponies. "We'll take that, that, one of those, and be on our way."

    Applejack hastily gathered up the three items Taylor had chosen, grateful for his intervention. "Thank yeh for comin'. Enjoy."

    Bon-bon placed a small pile of bits on the stall and each pony delicately picked up their treat, carrying it away.

    "Y'rly shun've dunnat, y'know" Bon-bon said. It wasn't easy to talk while carrying an apple pie in her teeth.

    Taylor grinned, placing his dinner down momentarily to avoid dropping it. "I know, but if I didn't, we could all have starved to death before you two came to a decision. Besides, I'm being careful, and to be honest, assimilating is easier than I thought."

    Lyra had taken a seat in her usual fashion on a nearby bench, devouring her pie. Several ponies looked on disapprovingly. Bon-bon raised a hoof to her face. "Yeah, I'd say you're blending in better than she is right about now."

    Lyra looked offended, but said nothing, far too busy with her food to respond, prompting a smirk from Taylor, who dug into his own pie shortly after. The three ate in silence, eager to fill their bellies, though it was certainly uncomfortable for Taylor to eat off the ground.

    By the time they finished, the sun had begun to set and the crowded market had become desolate. All that was left were a few ponies cleaning up their carts and stands before calling it a day. Taylor, Lyra, and Bon-bon were all quite full and not looking forward to the walk home.

    "Show of hooves, who feels like crashing here until we've had a chance to digest?" Taylor asked jokingly.

    "Can't. You have to help me with my project." Lyra poked him with her hoof, seemingly unfazed by the massive quantity of pie she had eaten.

    "Yeah yeah, I'm gettin' up," he groaned, standing slowly.

    The three made their way home slowly. The air had become cool, the breeze had died, and the only sound was of their hoofsteps on the cobblestone path. Somehow the silence was both pleasant and uncomfortable for Taylor, so he decided to ask Lyra about this project of hers.

    "Well, I got the idea when I was looking at those carts we passed. I was reading about something similar before I brought you here. It's like a big metal cart that moves by itself."

    "Oh jeez. I already know where this is going."

    "Yeah, I know what you're talking about. They're called cars and trust me, it's best if you don't do what you're thinking of doing."

    Lyra scowled. "Well, why not?"

    Taylor sighed, beginning a long discussion of all the complications and dangers involved. They became so wrapped up in the topic that they failed to notice they were being followed by two robed ponies...

    [I know I said I'd get to Taylor's pony name and cutie mark in this chapter, but I decided to push that back a bit. It didn't fit anywhere in this one. You'll get over it.]

    Comments ( 49 )

    #1 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    :eeyup:

    #2 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>199168

    I know, right?

    #3 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    oshiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii.... 2 mysterious figures!!!

    Din
    #4 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    It was quite the long wait, but its to be expected I can't rightfully chastise you for living your life. In addition your not exactly doing this for any sort of profit, so I can wait for what you have to give.

    Overall it was a slow chapter nothing too exciting but it wasn't written poorly and it did keep my attention. And reading about Lyra and her shenanigans is always enjoyable. :rainbowkiss:

    To be honest I had completely forgotten about his name and mark, but I am sure my input is not needed on the subject.

    I have noticed one thing in every HIE fiction I have come across. The H in E, eats a bunch of food in every singe one. I guess we just love to eat? And its mostly pastries or pies, never "he gobbled down the whole basket  of flowers!" or carrots or beans. I bet they could grow beans right? Whatever :derpytongue2:

    Finally, do I sense some Bon-bon and H shipping? No? Mayhaps? And hooded ponies are never a good sign, more so when the appear at a cliffhanger with the words "failed to notice". Keep it up with the writing your doing good!

    #5 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh Bon-Bon, of course Taylor seems "harmless enough".  After all, we humans ARE mostly harmless.  (A reinforced towel to anypony who knows what I'm talking about.)

    I see that you are continuing to make this an amazing fic.  I approve.  Oh, and Dun dun duuun.

    #6 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh Bon-Bon, of course Taylor seems "harmless enough".  After all, we humans ARE mostly harmless.  (A reinforced towel to anypony who knows what I'm talking about.)

    I see that you are continuing to make this an amazing fic.  I approve.  Oh, and Dun dun duuun.

    #7 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Decent chapter, and I never really mind waiting for updates if there good.

    The Lusty Draconian Maid........ oh I see what you did there :raritystarry:

    #8 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    For some reason, it took me roughly 10 minutes to stop giggling at the "Looks like a clown exploded" and another 15 to stop laughing at the oblivion 'Lusty argonian maid' Refference... I think I may be a wee bit over tired...

    ANYWAY, glad to see your not dead! I nearly forgot about this fic.

    #9 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    The Lusty Draconian Maid. Do it. Next he'll find the Eldar Scrolls. Also, is it just me or does Bon-Bon suddenly like Tylor a bit too much? Shipping senses, tingling. Or I'm just looking too deeply into it...

    #10 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Nobody expects the pony inquisition.

    #11 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Trying.. to.. discern.. which.. voice.. I.. should.. read.. Bonbon's.. quotes.. as..

    #12 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>199325 Wow, you're having that problem too? :rainbowderp:

    #13 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>199308

    To quote from my blog:

    "I would say it's highly unlikely that there will be a romantic connection between Taylor and ANYONE in this story."

    More or less, she's being overly kind out of guilt for misjudging him. She's also a rather proud pony, so it's embarrassing for her to have to admit her mistakes and personality flaws to Taylor.

    Rest assured, there shall be no blatant romance/clopfickery in FFH. I'm utterly rejecting it, because it has no place in this particular story. Y'know, unless Lyra happens to stumble across an old copy of the Kama Sutra. Then everything's fucked (le pun). The fact is, even if the potential existed for Taylor to develop an emotional/sexual attraction to a cartoon horse, the entire story is currently planned to take place in such a short time frame that there's really no time for it to go anywhere. Just try to retain the mindset that FFH is pretty darn PG-13 - (barring things like language and violence, which may or may not end up a bit more R-rated later on).

    Rapidly addressing the rest of your feedback: I'm keeping the pacing in check until later when shit really starts to go down, so I can just actiongasm all over the chapter and it will be very satisfying for all those involved. I'm counting on the amusing internal dialogue from Taylor and the frequent humorous references to other media to keep people entertained until that time. Taylor is a bit of an over-eater, and when you couple that with having eaten nothing for nearly a day, I think he was within his rights to epiclynom (< this is now a word) that pie. Don't forget that Lyra and Bon-bon both did the same. Given the choice between delicious apple pie and some random veggies, I think the pie is going to win every time, especially when it's a Sweet Apple Acres apple pie. Best in Equestria, after all.

    #14 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Cool Chapter. It's the Equestrian Inquisiton! No one expects them!

    #15 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>199224 i get it, does my towel have nutrients in it?

    #16 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    "My god, it's like a clown exploded."

    :rainbowlaugh:

    #17 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    "My god, it's like a clown exploded."< LOL:rainbowlaugh:>

    Also @AliCentaur Br0ny > Is it Hitchiker's guide to the galxay?

    #18 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Don't worry about posting short chapters, you're certainly keeping my attention!

    #19 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Dun dun DUUNNNNNN!:trollestia:

    #20 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    LOL :rainbowlaugh:

    #21 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Someone's been playing Skyrim :pinkiehappy:

    #22 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    i felt like there was somthing between bon bon and taylor specially since its been clarified in this that lyra and bonbon are just roomies i dont want to nag at that but i do need more comedy/romance in my literature diet Grimdarks and Sad stories got me depressed

    #23 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    like i said dont bother if you dont want to write it but i think plenty of fans would enjoy it :pinkiehappy:

    #24 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy:

    then

    :pinkiegasp:

    then

    :rainbowderp:

    then

    :rainbowlaugh:

    then

    :pinkiesad2: and :raritystarry:

    #25 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    dont panic, its just the equestrian inquision with ther soft coushins and comfy chair.

    #26 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Sooooooo...

    Wich one did you choose?

    "its like a clown exploded*

    LOL

    Oh boy, Dark Brotherhood's following them

    #27 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>200508

    You'll find out eventually. I'm pretty sure I can fit it into the next chapter, but I promise nothing.

    #28 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>201039 Does that mean that....

    YAS!

    #30 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>201898

    Oh how that made me smile

    #32 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>199653 Sure, why not?

    >>199742 :eeyup: Ding-ding-ding!  We have a winner!  I WAS refering to "The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy".  Here is your lovely new reinforced towel my good brony.  Remember, when faced with difficulties, Don't Panic.

    #33 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>202186

    Masked, you say?

    That's news to me :ajsmug:

    #34 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>199403

    Wait, a HiE story without romance between a Human and a Pony? So happy. :pinkiehappy:

    I mean, there's nothing wrong with it. It's just that i rarely read a HiE story that doesn't have any romance in it at all. it's pretty jarring for me. It's like eating marsh-mellows that aren't roasted. Still tasty and good, but you notice the difference. Now i actually look at the tags and notice the lack of it. I should really start looking at your blog post more closely, but nevertheless, Godspeed Nethelli. Godspeed

    #35 · 66w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I don't think this is very short at all. For me, short would be somewhere under 1,800 words. I don't really care how long your chapters are, as long as I get something and you're not too overworked. :twilightsmile:

    #36 · 66w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>202856

    Yeah, I see it all the time, and that's why I'm avoiding it. I'm trying to do something a bit more unique (or as unique as it can be when I've borrowed the entire theme from JTH) because I wanted a story that wouldn't get lost in the "seen it before" pile. I can absolutely see how Taylor and Bon-bon's dialogue might have come across that way.

    Anyway, I can confirm that she's just being apologetic for her behavior, but doesn't she seem a bit... overly apologetic? Almost as if she's feeling guilty about something?

    How odd.

    #37 · 66w, 3d ago · · ·
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    fantastic

    #39 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>212265

    Magnets. And aliens.

    Magnetic aliens. :eeyup:

    #40 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>214150

    ..

    .

    seems legit

    #42 · 66w, 3h ago · · ·
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    I'm actually a little surprised nobody's said anything about the less-than-subtle nod to JTH's "Property Damage" chapter.

    Maybe it got overshadowed by our protag's visit to the book store, or perhaps the exploding clown. :pinkiecrazy:

    #43 · 65w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I was thinking to myself "this chapter better have AJ in it" as soon as they got hungry. And then...:ajsmug: BAM!! Then I thought "TAKE THE PIE!!!" :rainbowlaugh:

    #44 · 65w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>228531

    Just dropping by to say...

    Your pie-related wishes have been fulfilled!

    That is all. Back to writing with me! The next chapter is going to give me carpal tunnel, but it'll be so worth it. :yay:

    #45 · 65w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Nopony expects the-

    Wait, you mean that joke was already made?

    *Scroll up*

    NOOOOOOOOOO!

    #46 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Just wanted to give everyone a heads up so they can prepare their delicate little eyes if necessary. The next chapter will contain violence, strong language, and bad-assery which may actually push it slightly more toward a mature rating.

    You'll get over it. I promise.

    #47 · 65w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>229442 well that's my kind of story

    #48 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    When in Ponville: Pony as the ponies pony.

    #49 · 8w, 1d ago · · ·
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    robed pony stalkers?! let me at em let me at em,

    here hold me back.

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