The Zebrahara is the most inhospitable place on earth. Yet even here, life holds on and invades. In a small Zebra village, a shaman dances a terrible ritualistic dance that unleashes a tide of death so strong that it pulls in Equestria and it's brave and loving ponies. As Celestia sends the Royal Army to assist the bewildered Zebra King, she and her loyal soldiers witness first hand the true face of madness. These are stories of the Mad God King D'Jalin and the Dance of Blood.
(Oneshots, updated every now and then, all connected but not in sequence per-se. I hope you enjoy these. Zecora picture relevant. Character tags added as characters appear. May or may not be as rad as the other stuff I write. Have fun!)
To Prevent All Other Breaking-- Bic Macintosh writes a distraught letter home from the front in the final days of the War.
Dark tag is right...
Poor, poor Mac.
Lack of space.
Extra space.
I'll let that slide.
Otherwise, I've also toyed with the idea of Mac having past military service. I actually wrote a brief war fic early on in a similar vein to this, except it was Soarin as the narrator. And it was AU, but anyway, this was pretty good! Once I noticed you used goddamn and then used lunadamned for the rest of the fic. Also, a couple of spacing errors as pointed out, but overall, an interesting take on pony war. Although I usually portray Mac similar to Martin Sheen's character in Apocalypse Now when it comes to war, I haven't really written something about him in a fictional war. Perhaps you have inspired me once again!
1882721 Hurray inspiration.
The rest of these will be waaaaay more polished. This one wasn't worth bothering randomguy or Lonely--er, NecroBrony now-- and it was me trying to get across a kind of freaked out scrawl. I'm still planning out what other POVs I might use here and there... Soarin' would be nice. I might use one or two of the Wonderbolts.
You and Razed and your hatred of my first and now defunct OTP
1882768 I guess I don't hate it, just that it doesn't make sense to me. But it's no big deal. So I guess Soarin is gonna be dropping napalm on the villages air force style or...?
1882779 Hm...
I'm not sure quite yet. But I am feelin' some Wonderbolts in the Desert being all RAF or something
Dude this is awesome
1882838 Thank you!
1882813 that sounds fun. I believe I'll set my war piece in the jungles, so that we get some separation. Consider this fav'd, and I look forward to more of Mac's self discovery. Will the horrors of war kill the idealist within him? I love it when a fic imposes such questions, and this one certainly does! Will he grow to despise all zebra? Will he begin to believe that all they deserve is death at the hooves of his men? Will their brutality be matched by his own? Good stuff you've got here.
1882847 Good questions all. There'll be a final one with Mac, but I'm going to come back to him as a kind of refrain, so we shall see.
1882868 Unfortunately, he would probably agree with that at this point in the telling of stories and such.
This made me think, and I like to think
I like.
1889530 Thanks! :)
1883656 And I like it when people think!
Don't think that this comma is necessary. (I might be wrong.)
Here either, but as it's being written hastily by Zecora, I think it's not a huge deal.
Hmm...
Extra space.
Dark Tower flashbacks... the world travelers.
Devil-grass.
Zecora had better make it... She's one of my favorites.
1988830 Yeah, these are quick both in composition and in actual composition by me.
DARK TOWEr
Nah, just in the name of the Manni. I was thinkin' hashish for the weed. :P
1988834
Yeah... Devil-grass has entirely different symptoms.
1988837 ONE OF US ONE OF US sorta symptoms
1988847
Those are useful for army formation.
"Knew it," he said, hating that he was right.
Isn't that usually "second"?
This deserves more views.
1995264 Thank you for saying so!
I don't mind, though. It doesn't really fit into what works here, and I knew that going in. I kind of use this as a framework for Thirty Minute Pony prompts. :3
That's probably because the only tag it has is Dark.
Soarin hit me harder than mac, even though he's less of a full character. I like the thought that the only happy ending is to run away as fast as possible. And soarinjack, that's a cheatcode to my heart.
2023898 I'm glad I was vague about his girl back home. :3
Why Virgil?
4852456 because I like Virgil and because he knew the human heart. And because yes better than homer
Lo' the mad king tumbles down brambles
broken, cracked.
Alight 'pon each spur till blood blossom forth.
And drenches we in his weeping fleshes.
This mad god is a fantastic asshole. Great antagonist that skirts the mine between malevolent villain and force of nature.
Nice alternate perspective. Cocky flyboy from the peaceful country.
I like that you made him leave, that Spitfires decision to have him survive is used, not to fight more, but to live.
6157562 I think about continuing this sometimes
Hurrah dark tag indeed!
I thought Twilight married Big Mac?