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Rainbow Dash’s past wasn’t all sunshine and rainbows, but she learned from it. She vowed not to make the same mistakes her parents did. Now, with a little orange filly thrown into her life, it’s time for the Element of Loyalty to put those vows to the test. It’s time to keep the promise she made to herself all those years ago.
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And this is complete ? We haven't seen the hospital scene
Anyway this was very good, I've always loved Scootalove fics
this cant be complete this could go for atleast 5-6 more chapters.
One main spelling error kept occurring over and over, you kept using the word "farther" instead of "father".
Good read, but can easily be expanded upon, and I think many have the desire to see more.
Wow that last paragraph was a little lengthy
So did RD go to her Parents?
This needs one more chapter. I like the story and I can see someone ending it here but I feel taht she needs to face her parents. Then maybe we can have some closer. IDK it is your story and I think it is awsome.
Thanks all of you for reading this. I really hope you enjoyed it. So it seems most people want more chapters added on, and I can do that if you guys really want me to. I have some great ideas going about a hospital scence and some other good stuff to throw into the mix. Thank you all for reading. Keep the feedback coming!
Thanks
TheFinebrony
Dude we need to find out what happens to the mother and father!
wonderful story and i agree you should add more chapters
I think I agree with the others and more chapters would help this story, you have a good story here. Even if you leave it as is it is still a wonderful story
next chapter please
Please continue.
Proofreading and editing required. Several paragraphs are mini-wall-of-texts and need revision.
Ending is abrupt, rushed and gives no resolution to the reader.
Good concept, but ultimately not all it can be.
Hello everypony! I am glad to say that this story is being re written! Yeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaa! I have been getting help from an awesome editor by the name of TheShadow. He is helping me improve everything on the story, as well as my writing style. It should be coming out soon! As always thanks for the support, and the feedback! I am working my hardest on getting the next chapter out, my life is currently crazy.
Thanks
TheFineBrony
2184428 looking forward to it
Only on chapter one so far. A little choppy throughout, with some missing ending punctuation.
Also, there are very few contractions when ponies are speaking. That makes it sound stilted and awkward.
The last paragraph had almost every sentence begin with "She". That feels repetitive and could use some re-wording.
Other than that, I enjoyed it.
Hello everypony! I am glad to say that the chapter 1 rewrite is complete. I am getting close to finishing the second chapter. I need a little more time for that. I hope that you will enjoy the rewrite. Thank you everypony for putting up with me.
yay new chap
Keep up the good work thanks
glad to see we wont have to wait to long now for the rest. great story
The suspense is killing me. This story is amazing. I can't wait for the next chapter.
MOAR!
typo, last paragraph
Should be sight. Site refers to location.
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Cool thanks. Hope u enjoyed the story. :)
So how 'bout them thousand views?
Dang it! This story is too good to stop here! I cannot wait for the next chapter! Probably going to be the longest wait ever for me
Oh god, the cliffhangers!
You're a good writer, I need MOAR!
Too long. Just finished, but there was no next button.
Too long to wait, I mean
The story is awesome. Here, have some happy Scoots.
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Argh I hate cliff hangers!
But I do them all the time in my stories so I guess I can't complain.
even through rainbow been though all that
i think everypony sould for give their parents
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I LOVE THIS STORY
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Thank you, glad you like it.
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Yeah, same here. I just love making them though.
Did you just make me.... D'aww? O.o
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idk, did I?
Did she go... Uncounssios? (Did i spell right? Im horrible on spelling...)
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Yes. The best I hope, is yet to come.
Dawwwww.
This chapter is too cute.
beautiful story.
BAM, a wild epilogue appeared!
FineBrony here improved a lot since the first chapter. So until then, enjoy the last chapter.
I'll take this chance to also thank all our readers. I hope I could make his story somewhat readable. Haha joking
i cried. i hate crying. but celesta be damned if this story wasn't heart wrenching. this is why dash/scoot is best sis group.
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Thanks. I love this pairing as well, I am glad you liked it.
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no thanks needed my friend. i just speak the truth. keep up the good work.
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I second this comment.
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my heart is full of feelz, and i love it!