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    When Scootaloo loses hope, Princess Luna is there to help her learn to dream again.

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    Encased in stone, Discord observes the events around him and reflects on his life
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  • Checkmates
    After finding a chess set in the library's storage closet, Twilight is eager to play a few games and turns to Applejack and Rainbow Dash. Teaching the two most competitive ponies in Ponyville a new game should be a snap, right? RIGHT?!
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“Finally, all of these go in your front row,” Twilight said as Applejack and Rainbow Dash watched her position the last marble pieces onto the board.  Ever since discovering the chess set in the library’s storage cupboard, she’d been itching to test her skills again.  When she lived in Canterlot, she would occasionally play Spike for a change of pace, but Twilight was surprised to find that he wasn’t very interested in the game any more.  When she had shown it to him, he stomped off, muttering something about a two hundred and sixty-six game losing streak.  As Twilight stepped away from the board, Rainbow Dash moved in and scrutinized the gleaming stone pieces.

“Okay, I’m going first!” she said, jostling the board as she eagerly reached for the pieces. Twilight gently swatted her away and righted the chessmen.

“Rainbow, I haven’t even explained the rules yet!” she said.  Applejack pushed her hat back from her eyes and pointed at Rainbow, chest swelling.

“Yeah!  Ya' can’t just call ‘first’ before we even get started!”

“Well, I’m still going first!” Rainbow replied, sticking her tongue out at Applejack.

“Now wait a sec-” Applejack began.

“Alright, you two!” Twilight interjected, stepping between them as Applejack marched forward. She’d spent enough time at sporting events with her competitive friends to see where this was headed.  “We'll figure out who goes first later.  I need to tell you what the rules are before we get to that.”  Twilight settled into her most comfortable lecturing pose, but was left open-mouthed when Rainbow moved in front of her to study the pieces once more.

“Pssh!  This’ll be a snap!  It’s like fancy checkers.”

“No, it’s not!” Twilight replied, pushing Rainbow out for the way.  She had to wonder how Rainbow ever made it through her classes in Cloudsdale.  Getting her to sit still for five minutes was a major achievement in Twilight’s book.


“Well, it’s on a checker board!” Rainbow said, pointed to the playing field and regarding Twilight with a raised eyebrow.

“No, a checkerboard is black and red.  This is black and white.”

“Really, Twilight?  That’s the best you’ve got?”  Rainbow rested an elbow on the table and gave Twilight a half-lidded stare.  As an All-Equestria checkers finalist, Rainbow knew a variant checkerboard when she saw it.

“Ugh, never mind the board,” Twilight said as she picked up the smallest piece from the table and held it up for her friends to see.  “Now this is a pawn.  He’s your frontline soldier.”

“How come he ain’t called a soldier then?” Applejack asked as she casually fished out the hay and barley sandwich Apple Bloom had packed for her.  Twilight is a great friend and all, but a pony can get powerful hungry waitin’ for her to finish talkin’, Applejack thought.

“Yeah, pawn sounds kinda wimpy,” Rainbow said as she eyed the chessman closely.  It didn’t seem nearly as intriguing as the taller pieces that Twilight had left on the board.

“It’s just what they’re called.  It’s not important,” Twilight said, attempting to get back into the flow of a proper lecture.  “What is important is that they can move one space, unless it’s their first move of the game.  Then they can move two.”  Finally finding her rhythm, Twilight advanced several of the pawn to emphasize the rule.  Applejack chewed casually on her sandwich as she regarded the pawn.

“How come they can only move one after that?  Did they get all tuckered out or somethin’?” Twilight’s mane bristled as the unexpected question derailed her train of thought.  She shot an annoyed glance at Applejack, fumbling for an explanation.

“Huh?  No, it’s just-”

“Pawns are lazy!” Rainbow cut in, crossing her legs tightly across her chest and squinting at the row of pawns.

“They aren't lazy!” Twilight cried.  She could feel the beginnings of a headache building between her eyes and wondered if it was too late to pack up and read a book for the rest of the afternoon.  “They’re doing exactly what they are ordered to do!”

“Not my pawns!” Rainbow shot back.  “They’re gonna be a well-oiled combat battalion!  We’re gonna-”

“MOVING ON!” Twilight said, raising her voice to over the growing excitement of Rainbow Dash’s battle plans.  “Pawns move one square forward, but can only attack diagonally, like this.” Applejack stopped chewing and cocked her head to the side.

“What the hay?  Twilight, what kinda sense does that make?”

“Ugh, I don’t know all right?  It’s just the rules!” Twilight replied, massaging the area between her eyes.  Rainbow moved forward and pushed a few pawn into new positions.  Twilight’s hope began to flicker as Rainbow moved each of the pieces.  Maybe this could work out after all.

“So, pawns can only go forward, but can only attack diagonally?” Rainbow asked, looking over her shoulder at Twilight.

“Yes, Rainbow!” Twilight replied.  Now they were getting somewhere.  “Now-”

“Pawns are sneaky!” Rainbow hissed, rubbing her hooves together.  Twilight’s body sagged as she lowered her ears.  Her flickering flame of hope was guttering wildly.

“They aren’t sneaky, Rainbow!  It’s just how they work!” Twilight cried, stomping a hoof on the ground.  She had thought it was difficult to get Spike to clean the kitchen when he was done cooking. This was turning out to be worse!

“Hey, no need to get all worked up about it!  I like it!”  Rainbow launched herself into the air and fell into a power-dive.  “You come straight at your opponent and then fake them out at the last second!”  With a deft twist of her wings, Rainbow angled away at the last second and slammed into a nearby bush, twisting and rolling.  “Just as you get there, you dive to the side and pounce on the unsuspecting teammate!”  In an explosion of leaves, Rainbow’s head popped out of the foliage. “Applejack won’t know what hit her!” she snickered, picking twigs from her mane.  Applejack rolled her eyes and stuffed the last bite of her sandwich into her mouth.

“Ah’m right over here.  Ah think Ah’ll pick up on your amazin’ strategy, somehow.”  Rainbow worked out the last stubborn branch from her mane and approached the board again.

“So if I attack Applejack’s pawn with my pawn, who wins?” Rainbow asked.

“Yours does,” Twilight answered.

“Naturally!  Superior leadership,” said Rainbow, smirking at Applejack.  Twilight noted the involuntary twitching of Applejack’s strong back legs, as though she couldn’t wait to kick something very solid.

“Your pawn can’t beat my pawn!” Applejack growled, jaw jutting forward.  Twilight hurried forward to settle this before it got out of hoof.

“Anypony’s pawn can win.  The advantage always goes to the attacker,” she said, moving to block Applejack’s line of sight with Rainbow.  Her headache ratcheted up a little more as she contemplated if any two ponies had ever been this stubborn and competitive before.

“There’s no way-” Rainbow sputtered.

“But-” Applejack objected.

Enough about pawns!” Twilight shouted, waving her legs in the air.  She was definitely beginning to regret finding this chess set.  Once her friends had settled down a bit, she picked up the next piece.  “Now this is a rook.”

“It looks like a castle,” Applejack noted, reaching for its matching partner to take a closer look.

“Well, I guess it is a little castle,” Twilight replied quickly, working hard to stay on topic.  “So your rook can move any number of squares, but only in a straight line.”

“Wait just a gol-durn minute!  You’re tellin’ me that my soldiers can only move one measly square, but this here castle can move the whole board?  What kinda sense does that make?” Applejack said placing the rook back down on the board in one of the pawn’s opening positions. Twilight bit down lightly on her tongue while she move the piece back into place and tried to cast her mind into its most serene and patient state.

I can do this, she thought.  I’m a good student and I’m going to be a good teacher.  I just need a little patience.

“I gotta agree with Applejack on this one, Twilight,” Rainbow added, absently kicking a stone away and looking up to the inviting sky.  “Are you sure you know how to play this game?”  Twilight’s newly cultivated patience evaporated and she slammed both her hooves down on the table.

“YES, I AM SURE,” Twilight erupted, “and you two would know, too, if you would STOP INTERRUPTING ME ALL THE TIME!”  Twilight’s eyes bulged as she glared at them, her chest heaving.

“Okay, jeez!  Calm down, Twilight!” said Rainbow.  She shot a glance at Applejack and they both gazed with somewhat unconvincingly rapt attention at the board.  Twilight rolled her eyes at the display, but smiled inwardly at her friends' behavior.  They were only doing this for her, but she knew they would love the game in the end.  It really was right up their alley.  Twilight took a deep breath and decided to continue.

“So.  Rook.  Straight lines.  Any distance.  Got it?”  The two ponies opened their mouths, but Twilight rushed on.  “Good.  Now, next is the knight.”

“Oh, this is going to be awesome!” Rainbow gushed, snatching the knight from Twilight.  Quickly giving it a once-over, she tossed it to Applejack.  “Look, Applejack, it looks like us!”

“It’s a knight.  Wouldn’t it have to look like us?” Applejack said with a shrug.

“The pawns don’t look like us!” returned Rainbow, annoyed with Applejack’s lack of enthusiasm.  “This is clearly the most awesome piece!”  Twilight’s ears perked up as Rainbow’s interest rose.

Finally some engagement! Twilight thought.  This is what she had been waiting for.  “They represent armored ponies from the medieval period.”

“Yeah, I know what a knight is,” Rainbow said, giving Twilight a sidelong glance.  Grabbing her matching knights, she took to the air and flew in tight circles, making feint galloping noises as she buzzed Applejack.  “See, Applejack, I told you these were the coolest pieces!”  Applejack responded with a wide yawn.

“Yup, and they move differently than any of the others,” Twilight said, pulling the knights out of Rainbow’s hooves on her next pass and placing them back on the board.  “You see, they move either two squares left or right and then one square up or down, or two squares up or back and one square left or right.”  Applejack briskly shook her head and tried to follow the complicated maneuvering.

“Uh, come again, Twilight?” she said, drawing patterns in the air with her hooves while trying to picture all the formations.  Twilight rolled her eyes.


“Don’t overcomplicate it.”

“ME?!” sputtered Applejack, who had snapped her head back up so quickly that her hat flew off.  Rainbow swooped in and scooped it up, trying to fly away with it, but Applejack was too fast.  As Rainbow shot off, she bit down on the brim and wrenched it from Rainbow’s grasp.  Calmly, she placed it back on her head and motioned to the knights.  “Who trained them knights?  Pinkie Pie? They’re all over the place!”  Nearby, Rainbow was rolling back and forth on the ground, both laughing at and lamenting her near coup.  Twilight shot her a dirty look as she went through the motion again.

“It’s not hard.  Just remember this pattern,” Twilight said, allowing Applejack to run through the routine a few times.  Rainbow flew up over the table and watched.  Twilight partially covered the board as Rainbow’s downdraft threatened to launch a few of the pawns off the board.

“Wow, knights are sneaky, too!” Rainbow said, rubbing her hooves together.  “Maybe they’re, like, ninja knights!”  Twilight grabbed her tail and firmly pulled her back to the ground.

“Rainbow, come down here before you wreck my board.  The knights are simulating the flanking maneuvers of cavalry.”  Rainbow bumped Applejack lightly with her shoulder and pointed at the knights.

“I knew these guys were rad!”

“If ya' say so,” Applejack replied, wondering exactly how many trees worth of apples she could have bucked since Twilight started this.  As Applejack sighed and let her gaze drift to her orchard, Twilight picked up the next piece.

“Now, these pieces are called bishops and they move any number of squares diagonally.” Twilight said, doing her best to fill her voice with wonder.  If she could just get them interested enough to play, Twilight knew she would have some fierce competition.  Pulling her gaze from her fields, Applejack pushed her hat back to scratch her mane.

“Can they attack things?” she asked, looking from the bishop to Twilight and back again.  Twilight cocked her head to the side and raised an eyebrow.

“Of course.  Every piece can.” Twilight replied.  Applejack shrugged and turned to Rainbow Dash, who was still making battle noises as she moved the knights to and fro.

“Don’t that sound kinda, well, violent for a preacher?” Applejack asked.

“Hey, don’t count my bishop out!” Rainbow returned, dropping the knights and moving to defend her bishop’s honor. Grabbing a bishop from the board, she thrust it into the air above her head, catching it in a sunbeam.  Wrapped in a radiant corona, the bishop’s shadow stretched across the battlefield toward Applejack.  “She’s no namby-pamby egghead (no offense)!” Rainbow said, her voice swelling.  “She’s a spiritual engine of victory!”  Applejack squinted as she looked at the bishop and shielded her eyes with her hat.

“Ah’m just sayin’ that it don’t sound so holy to charge across the battlefield and knock somepony in the head,” said Applejack.  Twilight shook her head.  She’d never seen two ponies work so hard at not learning a game.

“Girls, we’re going off on a tangent again.” Twilight said, jumping to try and grab the bishop away from Rainbow, who kept the bishop just out of Twilight’s reach.  Applejack shot the pegasus a dirty look.

“Rainbow, quit it!” she admonished, receiving a raspberry for her efforts.  Rolling her eyes, Applejack turned back to Twilight.  “What in tarnation is a tangent?”  Perking up immediately, Twilight launched into a rapid fire explanation.

“I’m so glad you asked, Applejack!” she said, eyes shining.  “It’s a line that intersects the arc of a circle at one, and only one, point.  It’s a useful trigonometric principle in that tangents can be used-” Grimacing, Rainbow landed and slammed the bishop back into place, making sure to jostle Twilight as she did it.

“Oh, hey, Twilight, what about this piece?  It’s really big!” Rainbow asked as she displayed the next piece in the row. Applejack had to turn away for a few seconds, as she could feel a fit of giggles coming on.  Rainbow’s attempt at an expression of sincere interest was anything but.  Rather than seeming annoyed, though, Twilight grinned slyly at her friend.

“Rainbow, that is going to be your favorite piece.” Twilight said as she threw her leg around her friend and brought Rainbow’s gaze back to the board.  Rainbow’s eyes grew wide as she focused on the elegant piece that Twilight was holding.

“Really?  Why is that?” she asked.

“That’s the queen, and she can move any direction and any number of squares.  It just has to be in a straight line,” Twilight answered.  She handed the queen to Rainbow, who ran a hoof over the stylized crown that topped it.

“Whoa, nelly!  She can go anywhere?” said Applejack.

“Yup, she has a lot of power!” returned Twilight.  She smiled and let the tension begin to drain from her body.  Finally, both her friends were showing some real interest.

“I didn’t think it was possible for these pieces to get any more awesome than the knight, but I’m loving this queen!” Rainbow picked up the last remaining piece and thrust it out for Twilight to take. She knew that Twilight would have saved the best for last.  “What about this one?  I’ll bet it’s cool, too!”

“That’s the king.  He can move one square in any direction,” replied Twilight, moving the piece for her friends to see.

“That’s it?” Applejack said, arching an eyebrow.

“That’s it.” answered Twilight.  A silence fell between the three ponies and Twilight’s smile faltered as looked back and forth between her confused friends.  Finally, Rainbow swatted at the king with her tail, knocking it over.

“What kind of lame king is that?!” she exclaimed.  Rainbow couldn’t believe she had waited all this time for such a boring piece.

“Yeah,” Applejack added.  “No offense, sugarcube, that this king guy is kinda a let down.” Twilight began to lightly sweat as both Applejack and Rainbow began to fidget.

I’m losing them!” she thought, biting her lip.  I’ve got to get their attention, and quick!  Twilight concentrated on the board.  A glowing, purple aura surrounded it and Applejack and Rainbow’s eyes were irresistibly drawn to the action. The kings from both sides marched to the middle of the board, followed by their ranks in formation.  “Well, he’s the most important piece on the field!” Twilight said, leading the opposing sides through an intricate marching routine.

“Not for me, he’s not!” Rainbow shot back.  Scowling and crossing her front legs, she turned dismissively away from the marching soldiers.  “I don’t need two rulers anyway.  We can get along just fine with the queen.”

“Not if you want to win, Rainbow,” said Twilight.  “The object of the game is to trap the king.  If he gets attacked, you lose.”  Rainbow whipped her head around to stare at Twilight and unconsciously took to the air, sputtering and gesticulating wildly.

“WHAT?!  This guy is useless and I have to protect him?!” Rainbow shouted, making a face that reminded Applejack strongly of the time Big Mac had accidentally eaten some moldy hay. Twilight sat down, applying pressure to the throbbing area between her eyes.

“Rainbow, he’s not useless!”  Twilight whisked most of the figures off the chessboard with her magic, leaving just the king and a nearby rook.  “You can use him for castling.  If you take the rook-”

“Hold up a minute,” Applejack interjected.  “Make up your mind.  Is it a rook or a castle?”

“IT’S A ROOK!” Twilight cried into the sky.  She stared, wild-eyed, at her friends, her chest swelling and brilliant sparks of magical lightning arcing from her horn.  With a glance between them, Rainbow and Applejack wordlessly agreed this might be a good time to sit down and be quiet.  After a few calming breaths, Twilight continued.  “Now, you can use the king to swap the rook into a different position.”  Catching the blank stares of her friends, Twilight shook her head.  Sometimes you just had to throw out the rulebook.  “You know what?  Let’s forget castling.”

“So, he’s back to being useless?” Rainbow blurted, earning a hit on the shoulder and a glare from Applejack.  “Well, he is,” Rainbow muttered to Applejack as Twilight magically gathered the pieces again and place them all back on the board.

“Yes, Rainbow.  He’s useless, but you have to protect him,” Twilight sighed.  “If your opponent gets him in a position where he can’t move anywhere or he will get attacked, it’s called a checkmate, and you lose.”

“How did he get to be king when he’s such a wuss?” Rainbow asked, knocking the king off the board and moving the queen to straddle the two squares they would normally occupy together. Twilight flung herself down onto her back and threw a leg over her eyes.  Surely she would wake up from this soon.  This had to be a nightmare.

“I don’t know!  Maybe he’s sick!” she cried, waving her free legs to and fro in frustration.

“Aw, that’s terrible,” Applejack said, righting the king that Rainbow had knocked over.  “We really shouldn’t be makin’ him fight like that.  It ain’t right.”  Twilight sat up and stared at her friends.

Oh, you’re going to make him fight if it’s the last thing I do! she thought.  You two are going to play this game if it takes me all day!  Twilight climbed to her feet and dusted herself off.  This was the home stretch.  Just a little more and they could all play together.  “One final thing,” Twilight said, forcing cheer into her voice.  “If you get your pawn to the other side of the board, you can promote it to one of the other pieces.”

“Any piece?” Applejack said, taken aback.

“Any piece but the king.” Twilight said, relieved that she had their undivided attention again.  Rainbow looked over the pieces, calculating the advantages that she would receive with various promotions.

“So I could get a new queen or knight or whatever?” she asked.

“Yup!” answered Twilight, sharing in her friend’s excitement.

“That’s pretty awesome!” said Rainbow.  She envisioned a weeping, begging Applejack at the mercy of nine queens.  She had been working on a new victory dance and this might be the perfect time to show it off.

“Well, that’s it, girls.  Care to try a game?”  Twilight grinned, relieved that she had finally explained all the rules to her friends.  It had been quite a trial, but they seemed eager to give it a shot. Applejack and Rainbow now stood at opposite ends of the board, mulling over their opening plays and giving each other steely glances.

“Just one quick thing, Twilight,” Applejack said, staring down Rainbow.

“Yes?” Twilight replied, trotting forward to assist.

“Could ya' go over that again?” Applejack said, cocking her head to the side and scratching behind her ear.

“Yeah,” added Rainbow, shrugging, “I didn’t really get it.”

“UGH!!!” shouted Twilight, covering her eyes with her hooves.  Rainbow flew over and threw a consoling leg around Twilight’s shoulder, gently rocking her back and forth.

“Aw, don’t be upset, Twilight,” Rainbow said.  “We can just play some checkers instead!” Twilight gave one last pinch to the pulsing nerve between her eyes and then smiled at her friends weakly.  She had tried and tomorrow was another day.

“Sure,” she answered. “Let’s play some checkers.”

Comments ( 163 )

#1 · 67w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

*grins* Very cute, Bravo.

#2 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1868374  Thank you very much!  It's different than my other stuff.  A much smaller story, so I wasn't sure how it would be received.  :twilightsmile:

#3 · 67w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

>>1868617 *smirks* I can't resist. It's not the size it's how you use it.:scootangel:

#4 · 67w, 4d ago · 7 · ·

>>1868864  I have received no negative feedback from any women about my fic, so I will assume you are right.

#5 · 67w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

If I ever teach someone to play chess again i wanna make 'em read this fic first. Perfect teaching tool. Lol!!!! :rainbowlaugh:

#6 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1871624  Ha!  That would be awesome!  Gonna have to teach them about castling on your own, though.  Twilight wasn't up for that level of abuse.  :twilightoops:

#7 · 67w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

This was hilarious. Reminds me f when i had loads of trouble learning the rules of chess. [And i am one to question things that don't make sense]

#8 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1872727  I'm glad you enjoyed it!  I'm not sure where it came from.  I was just sitting around one day and the dialogue came to me.  It was so clear that I had to write a story around it.  

#9 · 67w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

I don't want to use cute to describe it.. but it was very adorable. Nice pacing, great characterization.

Left a like, hope to see more.

#10 · 67w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1876968  Thank you very much!  It's really cool when people enjoy the stories I put here.  Thanks for reading it.  :twilightsmile:

#11 · 67w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

Yep, I hate to sound like a parrot but this was very cute. :pinkiesmile:

I laughed in a way that reminded me of my elementary school days. :scootangel:

I loved it and chess humor will always be timeless, you should be proud. :rainbowdetermined2:

Also Applejack's reaction to the "sick" king was priceless. :facehoof:

Thank you for sharing this with us, it put me in a good mood. :scootangel::yay:

#12 · 67w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1884559  Aw, thanks!  I'm glad that you liked it.  I was a little nervous about the reception that this one would get, but some people seem to enjoy it and that's enough for me.  

#13 · 66w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

I wanted to see Rainbow and Applejack  playing chess!

#14 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

OK. That was freaking hilarious.  I can totally see this happening. Thanks for the laughs.

#15 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1923916  Perhaps in a follow up.  We will see how into it people are.

#16 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924065  It's awesome that you enjoyed it so much!  It's so hard to write comedy and be sure that people will find it funny.  :pinkiehappy:

#17 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·


With Rainbow Dash and Applejack? It will ALWAYS be funny.

#18 · 66w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

Why do I have this strange scene in my head...

Pinkie Pie shrugged.  "Well, sure, Twilight, I know how to play chess."

Twilight blinked.  "You... you do?  Really?"

"Yep!  Although, personally, I always preferred Go.  More to my taste.  I espcially like to play go with Jelly Beans, so I can eat the stones after I capture them."

"Of... course."

#19 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>1924101  That's not a bad thought, actually.  Much like Fluttershy's freaky knowledge of sewing, Pinkie could have an uncanny ability to know the rules of any board game she encounters.  You never know when one might be needed to liven up a party.  And with that Pinkie Sense, she'd make a formidable chess opponent.  

I'm kinda mad I actually didn't think about that!

#20 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924095  The spark for this story began in Sleepless in Ponyville where Applejack keeps interrupting Rainbow's story.  I figured expending on that would be amusing.  I don't know where the chess angle came from.

#21 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>1924135 Yes that "Spark" was still very creative.  Can't believe I never thought about this idea before.

(I see what you did thar...)

#22 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924163  Erm...EXPANDING.   Me spel gud todai.  :twilightblush:

#23 · 66w, 1d ago · 2 · ·


She wins at Tic-Tac-Toe.  EVERY TIME.  A game where a microcephalitic pygmy monkey can always force a tie.

So... yeah.  She can play chess.

#24 · 66w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

And yet Rainbow Dash could somehow keep track of that convoluted Battleship-esque game in "Read It And Weep," with all the bumblebees and seagulls and whatever else. Chess is just way too complicated.

This was pretty great, though. You got everypony perfectly in character, and somehow managed to make an explanation interesting and hilarious for 3,000 words. Nice work.

#25 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I can imagine one of them promoting a pawn into a king. :ajsmug:

Twilight did say any piece...

#26 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924251  Thanks for reading this!  Character accuracy is one of my main concerns, so I'm happy when people feel that I've nailed it.  

I'm sure Rainbow could easily figure out chess.  It's more that she didn't have the interest to learn until the very end.

#27 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Awww, I love cute little stories like this. Although, I do think Dash would be far to aggressive with her moves if she could actually understand what she was doing, and AJ would be the better, more strategic player.

Poor Twilight, having to see a favorite game get butchered horribly..... :facehoof:

#28 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Sequel with Pinkie Pie then?

#29 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I'd like this to be a whole series with the ponies all competing in Chess tournaments!

#30 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

It was good, and funny, and made me cry in sympathy for Twilight. Chess is a great and wonderful game...maybe next time she should try to teach them how to play RISK.

...nah, I don't want to break my computer when I inevitably try to force myself through the screen to give best pony a hug. :facehoof:

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Shire Folk

#31 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

A mighty thanks for cheering me up after a hard night ^-^

As I play chess since the age of 6, I can refer to all of these question. It's truely a very great story. :yay:

#32 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

That was hilarious. Good job bro. I actually feel Twilight's frustration.

#33 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I came for the castling reference. Leaving satisfied. Maybe Twi should have gone with loser's variant of chess.

#34 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Featured on EQD now! :raritywink:

Awesome story, and it pretty much describes what it's like trying to teach chess to my friends. :derpytongue2:

#35 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I wonder how those two would have been able to handle learning something like 3D Chess. :rainbowlaugh:

#36 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Actually, I've gone through almost the EXACT SAME THING while trying to teach my wife how to play Chess.

And oh yes!  Have Twilight try to teach Chess to Pinky next!

#37 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·


Yes! I'd love to see this, especially if she could stomp Twilight at Go.

As for the fic, everypony was in character and in top form, there were many laughs and it just feels good to read. Thumbed and faved.

Incidentally, I'm pretty sure I had this exact experience a few years ago with my little brother.

#38 · 66w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

.... I like it, I like it a lot. :derpytongue2:

This totally seems like something that three of the other ponies could be doing in an episode before one of the other ponies burst in the door and the main plot intruded on Twilight trying to teach the other chess.

That and it is very well written. Ther is a tendency when writing about the Mane Six to fail at making them act and feel like themselves, but you managed it with apparent ease. They seem to act very naturally.

#39 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I'll pretend to not know chess and ask one of my friends on how to play. Then I beat them :pinkiecrazy:

All. According. To. Plan.

#40 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·


Well... not STOMP.

It IS Twilight after all.  More like a friendly rivalry, with a 50/50 split in victories, between Twi's tactical perfection and Pinkie's often random but effective strategies...

#41 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Poor Twi. :twilightangry2:

#42 · 66w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

I want this story to be an episode.

#43 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Now she should have gone to Rarity, either she would have known how to play or have been willing to learn since it is a sophistacted game that one could find in high socity. Although she might have found the pieces drab and and been lost on making new ones out of percious stones.

#44 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

She’d never seen two ponies work so hard at not learning a game.

love that line

#45 · 66w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>1924562  That was certainly the feeling that I wanted people to get.  If Twilight could just get one of them (especially Rainbow) interested, she would be in for some great games.  I think Rainbow would be a very interesting player because she would be so aggressive.  She'd be that player who would want to play with a clock and stare you down as you made all your moves, then move hers super fast and hit the play-clock, staring you down again.  :twilightoops:

#46 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924587  It's possible.  I have to feel the stories inside in order to write them.  I'll probably be in the shower or something and a good Pinkie/Twilight game concept will hit me.  We will have to see.  First, I'll have to whip A Door Jam into shape and see if I can get it on EQD.  That's so much for reading this!:twilightsmile:

#47 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924653  I'd love that, but I'm afraid my own poor chess skills would be all too obvious if I tried to write clever, tense chess battles.  I probably have about one of those in me before I just start copying battles from YouTube move for move.  :pinkiesad2:  Thanks so much for your support of this story!

#48 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924783  I don't think I could write a RISK game without needed some sort of anti-depressant.  RISK seems to hate me.  I always have this great strategy going and then start rolling straight ones at a critical point, thereby ruining my game through sheer terrible luck.  I'd love to see that happen to Rainbow, though!  She'd probably blow a gasket.  Thank you very much for reading this!

#49 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924800  I had no idea there were so many brony chess players!  It's cool that people are interested in both.  I very happy this cheered you up  :pinkiehappy:

#50 · 66w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1924825  My very favorite thing in all of MLP is frustrated Twilight.  Lesson Zero is my Nirvana.  Nothing is as hilarious to me as Twilight getting irritated, so I tend to write about it a lot.  I'm glad that came through.  You always wonder when you are writing if people are going to feel it well enough from your descriptions.

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