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PresentPerfect


Fanfiction masochist. :B She/they https://ko-fi.com/presentperfect

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This a cute story about Fluttershy being adorable and going to Narnia and meeting Aslan and helping him defeat the Ice Queen because I haven't read a Narnia book since the first one and that was back in tenth grade so I really don't remember it at all because I found it tedious. But here's a crossover with it. And there is absolutely no swearing, I TOTALLY PROMISE*.

Hilarious reading by Brendaniel.

Not a sequel to Fluttershy Goes to Hell**.

*Not.
**Trufax.

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Comment posted by Nordlichter deleted Jan 31st, 2016

Watch the movies. They were good.

btw, was that a horton hears a who quote?:rainbowhuh:

Ezn

I loled (and squeed).

Filler's working on a for-serious version of this? Oh man... oh man... so much want.

Also, you should read all seven books. Like twenty times each or something. Because they rule.

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Golden compass was pretty inferior to the book. Except the polar bear fight. That was fucking badass.

THIS COMMENT IS NSFW Because apparently swearing is bad, mm'kay?

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DPV speaks truth.

The book series is an analogue to Paradise Lost. The movie is one good action scene and a bunch fumbled world building.


Also. This is WAY too long to be a successor to GDIPP :C
>One hour
Too much effort bro :unsuresweetie:

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Don't get me wrong, Filler's working on something completely different.

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Spiritual successor. :B

Point of correction: The working title of my story was "Fluttershy Goes To Fucking Narnia." Very important difference. :V

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See also: I had to change the main title but the title remains unchanged in the actual story. :B

everyone knows a dislike from me is indistinguishable from a favorite + detailed, helpful critique

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A more detailed and helpful critique I cannot recall getting!

There's a bit of nonsuccession with the description and first line - Holy Fuck, Fluttershy Goes To Narnia or some other exclamation preceded with a footnoteless one would be far more resonant - but besides that there's the unfortunate feeling of trying too hard and in the process sounding less genuine and more 'mainstream media trying to sound like the internet'; this is supported by the usage of 'ain't' and ''em' and various set phrases. There's some strange fluctuation between profanities, and this further attacks its case. The metaphor isn't exploited as it should be and the prose doesn't quite flow; the 'shit's, especially, terminate the sentences far too abruptly with their voiceless alveolar stops and ruin the piece's music.

Nonetheless, a momentary purge of intellectual emotion shows that it's induced a small, lopsided grin on my face.

Have a like. :pinkiehappy:

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I love all of your words. @_@ Confuse me, baby.

I'll bite on the criticism of the first line, though. It was conceived by itself, and I thought this would be a good spot to use it. Sadly, I was mistaken, and I recognized that a while back.

This deserves the Fluttershy Rap.

This is by far the best thing ever to have been written by a human.:rainbowlaugh:

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HOW CLEVER OF YOU SIR OR MADAM TO RECOGNIZE MY GENIUS :V GO WITH CELESTIA, YOUNG MORTAL, YOU HAVE BEEN BLESSED

3498588 Sir. I shared your genius and it was appreciated by many others.

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Is that why I've gotten so many favs on this tonight? :D Thank you very much, I appreciate it!

3499110 I hope I helped, I shared it because it deserved it!:pinkiesmile:

FLUTTERSHY AND ASLAN UNITE!!!! :pinkiesmile:X3 But seriously great story I loved it.

That was a fucking good story, bro.

Hell yeah!

This was just too silly stupid funny to not love with all my heart XD
You even threw in a reference to Elf Bowling lol

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The internet was a strange place in 1999.

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True, and now budding writers can gain notoriety by writing stories about candy color horses doing the craziest crap imaginable. XD

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4148418 They made a movie out of the elf bowling video game. I don't even know Elf Bowling the Movie: The Great North Pole Elf Strike

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"People who liked this also liked: Nude Bowling Party"

So my first (non-writeoff, non-Mashening) story of yours, I found through WTF Pony Fanfiction. Huh.

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i know, right? :D

ahaha oh my god how did i forget to view the cover art in full readable resolution before

nice

This was fun. The narrator was great, and the cracked Aslan was a hit for me.

Reviewed here.

Fluttershy Goes to Fucking Narnia

I've already lost it.

So she walked her ass up the damn staircase

I don't know why, but this line destroyed me.

"I'm in fucking Narnia!"

SHE SAID IT!

tree-fiddy

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That dude was such a fucking lion.

I'm glad we got this clarification

Fluttershy made her eyes biggerer and waterierer

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"If that's okay with you, that is."

Laugh track

Just what...? :rainbowhuh:

Was reading WTF, Pony Fanfiction for the first time since 2012 and saw an excerpt from this. Thought that sounded like something you'd write

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This makes me feel good. :3 Though I'm sad that site doesn't get updated anymore. :(

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I know, it was so good! :raritydespair:

Oh, that reminds me — have you ever read Cyndilovespiccolo's work? She's got some delightfully awful Transformers smut. There're excerpts on her ED page

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>Transformers smut

Not even once.

Brendaniel is hilarious. This was hilarious. Thanks for the fun story!

I can't .... I don't ... wut

There are 7 narnia books

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