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    Three tribes seperated by their distrust and hate of one another. A sudden chain of events forces a roudy pegasus into the caring hooves of an overly friendly earth pony. Will things ever be the same?

    First Published
    18th Jan 2012
    Last Modified
    10th May 2012

    Comments ( 208 )

    #1 · Chapter 2 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    :yay: This is on FiMFiction now!

    I really love this story.

    #2 · Chapter 2 · 70w, 1d ago · · 1 ·
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    I demand MOAR!!!

    #3 · Chapter 2 · 70w, 1d ago · · 1 ·
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    Yes, more!

    #4 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Manly tears my good sir. They were shed this day.

    UFB
    #5 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    There are not enough stars on the bar to allow me to rate this high enough, this is incredibly well written, many internets to you

    #6 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>140146 Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoy it :pinkiehappy:>>140147 MOAR SHALL CUMZ GOOD SIR!>>140429 :heart:>>140614 I'm really glad you are enjoying the story :yay:

    #7 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Me encanta como se va desarrollando la historia, un poco triste ante las realidades de cada una de ellas, Siga asi, esperare con ansia la continuacion XD

    #8 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>140642 I LOVE YOU!

    #9 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    SO EFFING AMAZING.

    MOAR PLEASE.

    + 5 stars for the original concept!:pinkiehappy: Rainbow Dash's and Pinkie Pie's reactions are spot-on.

    #10 · Chapter 3 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>140785:heart:

    >>141175 :twilightblush:I'm so glad you enjoy the story! MOAR SHALL CUMZ DO NOT WORREH!  

    #11 · Chapter 4 · 70w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh. Oh.

    #12 · Chapter 4 · 70w, 22h ago · · ·
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    Espero que salga pronto la continuacion XD:pinkiesad2:

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 20h ago · · ·
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    Brb, reading what looks like a good story.

    UFB
    #14 · Chapter 4 · 70w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Shit just got real.

    #15 · Chapter 5 · 70w, 13h ago · · ·
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    >>142456 I hope you still think it's a good story :twilightsmile:

    >>142669 I know that feel bro:derpyderp2:

    >>141293 is that a good oh?

    >>140845:pinkiegasp: nah you luvz teh story. I :heart: you too!

    #16 · Chapter 5 · 70w, 10h ago · · ·
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    THE TERMITE KING DEMANDS MOAR, JUSTIN!!

    #17 · Chapter 5 · 70w, 9h ago · 1 · ·
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    You know, in the movies, whenever a main character in the military gets laid, one of the two partners usually dies the next day.

    #18 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 6h ago · · ·
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    I simply like lol.

    #19 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 6h ago · · ·
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    >>142935 MOAR WILL ALWAYS CUMZ!

    >>143007yea...that's a little overused

    >>143293 hehe are you loling at Rainbow's story?

    #20 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 5h ago · · ·
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    I am loving this Story.

    Oh is Derpy faking the stupidity? Is she a Spy that Hurricane uses because everyone thinks she is r*****ed?

    #21 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 3h ago · · ·
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    >>143321 Lol, It was fun if nothing else.

    #22 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 2h ago · · ·
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    More :rainbowkiss: i absolutley love where this is goin, its only a matter or time before Hurricane finds out...






    #23 · Chapter 5 · 70w, 1h ago · · ·
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    XD me encanta como se va desarrollando esta trama, hermoso, a la vez triste :fluttercry:

    UFB
    #24 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 1h ago · · ·
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    A bit confusing at the end, pretty sure the pegasus group was just Dash, fluttershy and derpy, who is the mysterious 4th?

    #25 · Chapter 6 · 70w, 40m ago · · ·
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    >>143433 derpy is being derpy...se is smart yet hides it well with her silliness

    >>143768 well I'm glad it amused you :twilightblush:

    >>144059 do not worry good sir or madam! More shall come!

    >>144163 gracias :twilightblush:

    >>144221 the fourth pony was Pinkie following the three pegasi out before they took off

    #26 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 6d ago · · ·
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    OUCH!! poor fluttershy and Pansy, i'm surprise they don;t suffer heart attack. uh-oh hurricane knows not good!!

    #27 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Lol, I'm checking this every few hours for updates, I'm truly enjoying this, thanks. :twilightsmile:

    #28 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I'm looking forward to seeing Barbarian!Dash make origami of Hurricane (I know she probably won't, but I can dream).

    #29 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 6d ago · · ·
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    XD esto se pone cada vez mejor, haber que represarias toma contra la Pobre de Pinkie

    #30 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>144521 It is a great wonder how they haven't had a heart attack yet...I'll just chalk it up to magic and leave it at that.

    >>144563 I'm really glad you are enjoying the story :yay:

    >>145149 hehe who knows what will happen next? :pinkiecrazy:

    >>145282 es una montaña rusa de diversión, ¿no?

    #31 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Derpy, you screwed Dash over for muffins :pinkiegasp:






    #32 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I am still loving this.

    I can not wait for the next chapter.

    /Edge of Seat.

    #33 · Chapter 7 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Tracking this :pinkiehappy:

    #34 · Chapter 8 · 69w, 22h ago · · ·
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    Genial su historia XD

    #35 · Chapter 8 · 69w, 16h ago · · ·
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    I'm loving this story and wait with happy anticipation after each chapter. :twilightsheepish:

    Looks like things are going south, can't wait to see what happens next.

    #36 · Chapter 8 · 68w, 4d ago · · ·
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    RUN DASHIE RUUUUUN!!!! :fluttershbad:

    #37 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·
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    All I could think was OH SHIT!

    #38 · Chapter 1 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Shouldn't think be considered an 'Alternate Universe' fic?

    #39 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    And the defecation has hit the rotary oscillator!

    #40 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>188870

    Stole the words right out of my mouth, lol.

    #41 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Operation 'Dashie Rocks You Like A Hurricane' is go! :pinkiehappy:

    #42 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·
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    That cliffhanger....DUN DUN DUUN!! :pinkiegasp:

    #43 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>188870

    Umm... I think the phrase is that... well... actually... I like this saying better :pinkiecrazy:

    #44 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I have to say, Hurricane seems like more of a traitor to me than Rainbow Dash; sure Rainbow has been having a love affair with an earth pony, but she hasn't actually done anything against the pegasi, whereas Hurricane has beat up Fluttershy and had Rainbow endure the same.

    #45 · Chapter 9 · 67w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I just spent the last hour or two reading this story. I should have been in bed. I should have been doing so many other things....but a;lsdkfjpoasdjkf,j!!!!!

    Pinkie and Dash are outrageously sweet and amazing, Fluttershy is a bamf, AJ is a sweetie, Derpy is a muffin! And Hurricane, curse you and your sudden but inevitable betrayal! Kick flank, take names! This story is awesome! 5/5 and tracking.:heart:

    #46 · Chapter 10 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp: WHAT IS DASHIE DOING!?!?

    #47 · Chapter 10 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Hypothermia Of The Heart, everything is covered in snow... Hoth everything is covered in snow but with Jedi...

    #48 · Chapter 10 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>204838

    If I were to take a shot in the dark, I would say she's rolling herself over, so that she takes the hit of the fall. But like I said, shot in the dark.

    #49 · Chapter 10 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I must look like Scootaloo nodding my head in excitement whispering, "sonic rainboom!!"

    You had some good solid fight scenes in there, not always the easiest thing to write, and you avoided the pacing issue by having a few cuts to non action moments or thoughts. Very nice! Also, Pinkie Pie is the only pony that would come to a sword fight with snowballs.:pinkiehappy:

    #50 · Chapter 10 · 66w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>204965 Almost certainly. :pinkiesad2:

    #51 · Chapter 11 · 65w, 11h ago · · ·
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    As always I love this, lol.

    #52 · Chapter 11 · 64w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Awwww, Rainbow's heart has finally thawed. How lovely. :pinkiehappy:

    #53 · Chapter 11 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>254156>>250458>>205687>>204965>>204851>>193800>>190049>>188870>>188852>>147959>>145282

    Thank you all for the reviews! I'm sorry I haven't kept up with replying to them. I'm really happy you all seem to be enjoying the story! :heart:

    #54 · Chapter 11 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>265050 You could always just use the excuse that you're too busy writing the story to pay attention to the comments. Hell, I haven't responded to either of the 2 comments I've gotten, but of course, they really weren't reviews but more of a demand and a random unintelligent comment. (Mine weren't really reviews anyways, either of them.)

    #55 · Chapter 11 · 64w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>265141 Hehe yea I suppose so. I still appreciate the comments regardless of the fact that they are reviews or not. It lets me know that others actually enjoy reading my story. :pinkiesmile:

    #56 · Chapter 11 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>265177 Oh really? So would you appreciate it if i just came back here a few times each day and spammed the comments?

    #57 · Chapter 11 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>265225 As long as the comments relate to the story then I don't really have a problem with it :twilightsmile:

    #58 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Ah, FINALLY Hurricane gets it! :pinkiehappy:

    #59 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #60 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Frigging brilliant :) :) :) :twilightsmile:

    #61 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    A very enjoyable chapter!

    #62 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Yay for scoots standing up for RD! Also, it was really nice to see Hurricane and Pansy interact in this chapter. :D

    #63 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Scoots got the spotlight she deserved:scootangel:

    #64 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>266961 Hehe yea. Hurricane just has to take some anger management classes and things like this wouldn't happen.

    >>267007 Yay! :pinkiehappy: I'm glad you like it!

    >>267049 thank you very much :twilightblush:

    >>267109 I'm really glad you enjoyed it :yay:

    >>267170 Hehe yea. I imagine Scootaloo would go bonkers if her hero disappeared or was supposedly killed. Pansy and Hurricane interactions amused me a lot. I ended up smiling in amusement during those parts of the chapter.

    >>267220 Yep! Scoot needs some love too! What better way to have her get recognition than her yelling at hurricane?:twilightsmile:

    #65 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    So when are the pegasi and earth ponies going to team up and go all ape shit on the unicorns?

    #66 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>267375 hehe who knows?

    #67 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Is it wrong that I was hoping for some Hurricane and Pansy action during the splash fight? :pinkiecrazy:

    #68 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>267969 Hoping? or just expecting?

    #69 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Que buen capitulo, al parecer tendra un final feliz XD:pinkiesmile:

    #70 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>268231

    Mostly the first, but kinda the second. Been a while since a pair got some bedroom action :rainbowlaugh:

    PS: "Hurricane Pansy" is now the best sounding ship ever.

    #71 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>267969 Hehe yea. You can pretend that they did. Who knows what will happen in the future.

    >>268239 gracias :pinkiehappy:

    #72 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>268275 Yeah, if he wasn't thinking about doing it before >>268326 is now.

    #73 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>268326 >>268463

    ... If I am the cause of this, I will be able to die happy...

    #75 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>268463 Hehe I was already thinking that. Btw I'm not a he. :rainbowlaugh:

    >>268512 You may not be the cause but you did help it move forward a lot:twilightsheepish:

    #77 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>269271 hehe yea I'm a female

    #78 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Love every update to pieces, but particularly this one. The development you're giving the Commander is excellent, and I can't wait to see where her relationship with Posey goes. Hell, I think I'm almost more interested in them at this point.

    I'm kidding, of course.

    #79 · Chapter 12 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>269560 Hehe I'm glad you enjoy Hurricane's development. Her relationship with Pansy has even gotten me intrigued. It could become almost anything at this point.

    Hehe of course. :pinkiehappy:

    #80 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy:Yay for some reconciliation! Although being a worry wart myself I keep thinking, "Stop tickling in mid air, long drop girls, long drop!"

    #81 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hey ugugg93, you called it.

    #82 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>271399 Hehe nah they are well trained flyers. No pony will fall unless they really wanted them to. :twilightsmile: Glad you enjoyed it!

    >>271412 Hehe yea

    #83 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I started reading this over on dA and I must say, I like it! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

    Faved and Tracked!

    #84 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Nicely done, Pansy.

    #85 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>271562 :pinkiehappy: Really glad you enjoy it so much!

    >>271601 Hehe yea

    #86 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>271412>>271502

    I would like to thank all my fellow bronies for this wonderful moment that we just had. May we have many more, and much... stickier, moments between "Hurricane Pansy".

    That said, I can't wait to see what happens when Pinkie Pie and Applejack land right in the MIDDLE OF PEGASUS CENTRAL. I suspect a horde of pegasi charging at the same time...

    Oh, and my only complaint about this chapter is that you didn't include any quotations, italics, or any difference of text between normal exposition, and direct 1st person thoughts. It got... annoying at times.

    #87 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>271644 Hehe who knows if there will be any sticky moments between Hurricane and Pansy.

    It will be an interesting sight to see, especially since two of the pegasi are banished members.

    Ah, my bad. I'll try to be more careful of that next time.

    #88 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Its almost over:fluttershbad: my body isnt ready for an ending

    #89 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Greahhhhhh, I'm loving this! It's a pity an ending is on its way.

    #90 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>271720

    That sounds dirty on so many different levels...

    >>271666

    And here I thought FlutterDash or RarityJack was a case of opposites...

    #91 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Pobre huracan, realmente sufrio en esa etapa de duelo de culpa y remordimiento... esperemos haber que sigue XD:pinkiehappy:

    #92 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>271720 I know! It makes me sad too:raritycry: This was so much fun to write

    >>271921 I'm really glad you enjoyed it so much:pinkiehappy:

    >>271993 It's all part of the fun. :twilightsmile: I ended up making myself become a fan of HurricanexPansy and that was never my intention while writing this

    >>272598 Si, Porbre Hurricane :ajsmug:

    #93 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>274449 You should add the OC tag.

    #94 · Chapter 13 · 64w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>274462 OC? But Hurricane and Pansy are canon characters to the show

    #95 · Chapter 14 · 63w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Le first.

    #96 · Chapter 14 · 63w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #97 · Chapter 14 · 63w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hurricane, you are in so far over your head it's a miracle that you can even see the light.:derpytongue2:

    #98 · Chapter 14 · 63w, 23h ago · · ·
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    >>300461 I know right? :rainbowlaugh:

    #99 · Chapter 14 · 63w, 18h ago · · ·
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    *Fist pump*

    YEEEESSSS!!!! HURRICANE PANSY HAS MADE LANDFALL!!!

    Best part? I double checked to make sure, but Pansy never closed the door... which means everything happened WITH THE DOOR WIDE OPEN! :moustache:

    >>300461   Understatement of the century right here!

    #100 · Chapter 14 · 63w, 13h ago · · ·
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    >>301677 Excitement and despiration maked them a little forgetful...Besides I don't think Pansy would have cared if they did it in front of the whole military hehe. It doesn't matter too much anyway. Almost no pegasi are near Hurricane's office so it was still rather private.

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