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Feurisson


I've been reading stories here since December 2011, but I only now decided to register. I just couldn't keep track of all the great stories here anymore.

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In an alternate universe where everyone is human, what happens when some bizarre magic transforms someone into a cute cuddle-worthy critter?

Inspired by a comment on derpibooru.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 13 )

There are a few missing words here and there, but I love the idea. Keep it up!

1848293 Could you please point them out, so I can correct them?

1848294
In all honesty, not really. Kinda late where I am. I might come back later. I do recommend finding a prereader for this kind of thing though.

MOAR!!!:flutterrage:


Merry Christmas

1848365 Thanks, merry Christmas to you too. I'm working on the second chapter at the moment, but it'll take some time, as I'm a pretty slow writer.

Dat be fine:eeyup:

Take yo time:moustache:

Not bad! Rumble is really sweet. :) I have one suggestion: Try putting Rumble's internal thoughts in italics, it makes it easier to distinguish them from the narrative.

MOAR!!!!!!!!!

Aww... That was surprisingly cute. Any chance that this could be a roving change? In other words each morning, someone who had contact with the pony the previous day becomes a pony and the last person changes back? It would introduce a fun dynamic of 'what do we do with this?', especially after his sister spends the day that way.:pinkiesmile:

4955710 Thanks... Glad you liked it. I'm surprised someone even still found this story. Still haven't given up on it, but it's been a really long time since I worked on it. Hopefully I can continue at some point.

4959152
pls:fluttercry:
j-just update already

As he half an hour later he still laid awake in his bed,

Ugh, what a disgusting thought.

“No, everything's okay, big brother. (——”

“It's … nothing, really. I'm hiding here because... because I'm a spy, and don't want someone to blow my cover!”

Smiling, Thunderlane answered: “Okay then, young spy. Come down when your mission is finished. Don't take too long, or your breakfast is going to get cold.”

:rainbowlaugh:

as no one had bothered to take the time and feed and clean up after her,

Hearing no one coming, he decided to get going

Just when he was sure no one really wouldn't come after him,

*End of chapter*

1848371
7 years and no update!! :flutterrage:

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