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  • T Sorority Among Thieves

    A young filly named Accident is abandoned in the streets of Canterlot, before being taken under the wing of a burglar who trains her to be a master thief. Adorableness and hilarity ensues.
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  • T Hug's Warming Eve

    Shadow, a young teenage burglar, enacts a yearly Hearth's Warming ritual that she's kept secret from her big sister. This year, however, Sky's going to find out where she goes ever Hearth's Warming Eve.
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  • 8w, 6d
    Okay, let's get back to it, shall we?

    Hey guys, another update, because you just luuuurve these, right?

    So, you might've guessed by my inactivity over the last three or four weeks, but I am officially employed, now! I've got to say, it's a weird feeling, but it's nice to be able to afford stuff again. Course, that means that I've been taking some time out to sort out my schedule, try to fit writing into my itinerary, because I LOVE writing. I really do.

    Speaking of which, I've got a warning. Canterlot Burglar is about to get dark. Like, really dark. I've already resolved not to pull any of my punches in the coming chapters, but that means that releases might be slow for a while. Sorority chapters, however, should come out at a normal rate. After all, no one's ever going to do something horrible to cute li'l Accident, right?

    Also, I'm axing Hitmare. Sorry to anyone who really still wanted to see the twist at the end or find out the truth in that incredible "whodunnit" story, but my writing style's kind of evolved to the point where it'd be jarring if I went back and finished it. I mean, if I have someone hammering at my door all day and all night and you just can't live without seeing the rest of it, I'll consider doing something, but it's been two years.

    That said, I do have an idea for a story featuring canon characters for a change. Haven't written them in a long while! I'll wait until both Sorority and Burglar are finished beforehand, though. After this, I intend to work on one project at a time. To be honest, Sorority was conceptualized to keep me sane through the torture scenes in Canterlot Burglar (see my "dark" comment above) but that won't be necessary in the future, so this is the last time I try to sync up two fanfic releases.

    Okay, guys! Take care and have a lovely night! I'm going to get smashed and pass out! Toodle-oo!

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  • 24w, 2d
    An update on my lack of progress

    Hey guys and gals, I hope you're having a great day today.

    So, you may have noticed that I'm not really releasing stuff as quickly as I had been a month or two ago. Well, there is a reason for that. I haven't gone bananas or stopped caring - hell no, I LOVE writing - but a few things have come up that have stymied my production. Primarily, I'm looking for a job, which as you can imagine is actually a pretty BIG concern, because having income gives me the money I need to continue living in this quaint, cosy little apartment and writing How To Make A Pony Cr...I mean Canterlot Burglar.

    I think that the next chapter I'm going to put out will be for Sorority, and it's got ice cream and stuff in it, so be patient and I'll do my best to make it as cute and cuddly as I possibly can.

    And to anyone who thinks that I've stopped here so that I can tease you about the next chapter of Canterlot Burglar, to you I say...er...so?

    Have a great day, guys.

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  • 36w, 2d
    Good news and bad news

    Howdy folks! I hope you're all feeling wonderful today!

    So I'm here with good news and bad news. The good news is, I know where I'm going to be living! I just got my tenancy approved for a new apartment and I'll be moving in next week!

    The bad news is that it's going to take a little while to get the utilities set up, so my presence here might be a little spotty. I'll try to upload a special Shadow and Fox-centric chapter for Valentine's Day, mind you!

    Anyway, I hope that you lot are having an absolutely capital day!

    Obligatory link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h-LbvFckptY

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  • 36w, 4d
    Just some notifications for your benefit

    Hey guys, what's up? I just thought I'd just drop you all a bit of a heads-up.

    So, first up, due to a series of very unfortunate events, I'm not going to be hanging around my apartment for much longer. In fact, I'm moving out in the next few days. Where I'm moving to I have no idea, but I've applied to a whole load of places around the city and hopefully one of them will accept me. Fingers crossed and all that!

    What does that mean here? Well, between this and my laptop being effectively wrecked from the inside out, I might not be able to update any of my stories for a week or two. Mind you, depending on how good the internet turns out to be wherever I end up, I should think that I'll still be able to throw out one or two chapters.

    Okay, now that we've gotten that out of the way, next order of business.

    So once again I invite you all to comment on what you've read of Canterlot Burglar. I've been offered some help from hell00001 who's been a very good sport about the whole situation and has helped to mitigate some of the bad habits I seem to have whilst writing, so I'd like to think I'm getting better. Still, I'm always happy to hear what you guys think. It's those sorts of comments that encourage me to keep writing.

    Finally...one or two of you might have noticed that that story is tagged as "dark." There's a good reason for that, and I'll get into it another time. The point is, as I keep writing this story I've also begun work on a side project, and I'm interested to see who'd be keen to read that, too. It's the story of how Sky and Shadow first met and became sisters, and it's pretty light hearted and involves super-cuddly fillies and what have you.

    Anyway, I'll leave you with this song that I've been listening to recently that I think you'll quite like, and I give you my very best wishes! I hope you all have a wonderful week/fortnight/however long it takes for me to get my act together! Fly safe!

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For the past few days, Rainbow Dash has been on the receiving end of the most brutal pranking streak ever to hit Ponyville. The identity of the pony behind it all is a mystery, as is the identity of the hitmare prankster.

Coincidentally, this pranking begins shortly after Rainbow has crashed into Twilight's library and sent her books flying everywhere for the fiftieth time this month.

First Published
13th Jan 2013
Last Modified
22nd Apr 2013
#1 · 92w, 5d ago · 1 · 3 · Vantage Point ·

(Joke) Alt. Title: S#!tmare

Evil Mastermind Twilight Sparkle- hard at work avenging ruined books everywhere.

>>2018735 Isn't she just the most adorkable "evil villain" ever?

>>2022256

Yes. Yes she is. She should have an equally adorkable 'Evil Villain' name... The Librarian! Although that's not very evil.

>>2022343 I don't know about that. I've met some pretty psycho librarians in my time. :twilightangry2:

>>2022352

Hmm, true, true... Librarians can be pretty evil. What do you mean by psycho, though?

Her catchphrase could be "Shhhhhh!"

#8 · 89w, 5d ago · · · Home Improvement ·

>>2022534 I like this idea! Hmmm, don't suppose I made the chapter title a bit too obvious, do you? :twilightsheepish:

#9 · 86w, 17h ago · 2 · · Counterintelligence ·

i was actually aiming for spike to be the prankster but maybe not

#10 · 86w, 10h ago · 1 · · Counterintelligence ·

Agent 42.

Equestria's greatest prankster and universal parallel to Agent 47.

#11 · 83w, 2d ago · · · Sleepover at Rarity's ·

Okay friend. I'm gonna give you some editing advice to make the story look better and be easier to read for people. I'll just take a segment of this chapter for example.

"Good evening, Rainbow Dash!" Rarity smiled, flinging the door wide dramatically. "It's quite all right darling, I understand that you couldn't keep yourself away from my wonderful boutique! Now, how can we help you?"

"Somepony wrecked my house." replied Rainbow groggily. "Don't know who it was...they're gone now...can I stay with you for the night?"

Rarity pouted as she looked her friend over critically.

"Well," said she, after a cursory inspection, "I suppose I can spare a bed...I mean, Pinkie and I were going to have a slumber party tonight anyway, and Sweetie Belle's away at the hospital with her little friend, but we simply must do something about your coat and mane!"

"That's the other thing I was going to ask you." Rainbow said as she half walked, half-crawled inside. "Is there any way you can fix this mess?"

"I might have a couple of ways to fix that. Ooh, we can do makeovers! It'll be so much fun!" Rarity clopped her forehooves together in excitement."

Alright, first thing I like to do is space out the conversational text. Like so:

"Good evening, Rainbow Dash!" Rarity smiled, flinging the door wide dramatically. "It's quite all right darling, I understand that you couldn't keep yourself away from my wonderful boutique! Now, how can we help you?"

"Somepony wrecked my house." replied Rainbow groggily. "Don't know who it was...they're gone now...can I stay with you for the night?"

Rarity pouted as she looked her friend over critically. "Well," said she, after a cursory inspection, "I suppose I can spare a bed...I mean, Pinkie and I were going to have a slumber party tonight anyway, and Sweetie Belle's away at the hospital with her little friend, but we simply must do something about your coat and mane!"

"That's the other thing I was going to ask you." Rainbow said as she half walked, half-crawled inside. "Is there any way you can fix this mess?"

"I might have a couple of ways to fix that. Ooh, we can do makeovers! It'll be so much fun!" Rarity clopped her forehooves together in excitement.

See? Much easier to read! And it doesn't take all that much time to do. Second thing, I normally separate out the actions of the characters from the conversation, except for when their actions go before, between or after them talking. You didn't have any of those longer 'action' segments in there, so nothing of that was separated, but I hope you get what I'm talking about.

Another thing is commas, when you have a conversation go like "Talk talk talk here" *said character does action or whatnot here* "More talk talk here" there's a place where you want to put commas or periods. Example:

"That's the other thing I was going to ask you." Rainbow said as she half walked, half-crawled inside. "Is there any way you can fix this mess?"

After the first set of conversation Rainbow says, there's a period. Instead that should be a comma, making it look like this:

"That's the other thing I was going to ask you," Rainbow said as she half walked, half-crawled inside. "Is there any way you can fix this mess?"

In my opinion you don't really have to do this, but that's just how I was taught it was supposed to be done.

I hope this helps! I'm enjoying the story so far, but it would definitely be nice to make it easier to read like I suggested.

#12 · 83w, 2d ago · · · Counterintelligence ·

>>2292839 You give sage advice, Himntor.

I have to admit, I'm aware that there were slight slip-ups with the writing of some of these chapters (especially when you cross-reference submission times with NZ time zones), but that is incredibly helpful advice that I'm going to put to good use. The purpose of this story was to give some laughs and get me back into the habit of writing, and being told what works and what would work better is absolutely invaluable.

Thanks very much, mate!

#13 · 83w, 2d ago · · · Counterintelligence ·

"Commentaries on the Equestrian Xarxes "

Omgosh, Oblivion reference. 10/10.

#14 · 83w, 2d ago · · · Counterintelligence ·

>>2292894 YUSS! Someone has spotted the Oblivion reference! Bravo sir! Bravo!

#15 · 83w, 2d ago · · · Counterintelligence ·

>>2292938

I'd never miss Oblivion references, was a great game. :ajsmug:

#16 · 78w, 4d ago · · · Dragon Hunt ·

:scootangel: It couldn't possibly be little Scootaloo.

:moustache: And of course Spike was fantastic.

#17 · 78w, 4d ago · · · Vantage Point ·

I guess when it comes to clenliness. Rainbow Dash doesn't have the grade.... PAINT. Hoo hoo hoo hoo hoo ha ha ha ha ha

I KNEW IT!!!! Well you know what they say.... NO ONE SUSPECTS THE BOOK WORM!!!

#19 · 78w, 4d ago · · · Dragon Hunt ·

>>2466325 I don't know. Sometimes the culprit is the least suspected.

#20 · 78w, 4d ago · · · Dragon Hunt ·

Fluttershy hasn't been seen this whole time.  Same with Applejack.

One of them is the hitmare, I'd guess. (Fluttershy)

~Skeeter The Lurker

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