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Mindblower


"We are all born mad. Some remain so." -Estragon, Waiting for Godot

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So, she stopped going to town.

any more. She didn’t live sheltered. She didn’t live inside.

Uuuhh, missing section?

I can't. My feels. I'm seriously crying right now. That... The Louder part. It just hit me like a truck.
Short, sweet, silent and deadly. Like a sniper.
Can't even find the words.

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This was decent. You're definitely improving as a writer. Keep it up. :twilightsmile:

1832379 Sorry about that. It's something of a problem with the "Import from Google Documents" function. Paragraphs getting sucked into an endless void and all that. Usually I check for blank spots, but as you pointed out, it just skipped nearly a page and ended the skip in the middle of a paragraph. Fixed, and thanks!:twilightsmile:

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yw for the check, and First Post, I guess, because it seems I got that this time. I think this makes my third time getting first post on a story...

I totally forgot to read this.
I blame you, since you told me you were going to put it on gdocs then never gave me a link or shared it with me.

1832894 No, I blame you, because you said you wouldn't read it. :moustache:

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BUT YOU STILL DIDNT SHARE
HRRRRRR

Well that was odd, and I think the romance thing kind of came out of nowhere, but it was still interesting.
Also, you need to fix the beginning - several paragraphs are repeated.

This was a wonderful piece, and I really enjoyed it. There were parts where Fluttershy felt a little ooc, and a couple of points where you could have used a comma or something of the sort, but that didn't detract from the wonderful story that you told here. Nice Job.

Holy shit. That was sad. A really good story, but oh my god, sad.

Normally I don't comment on Mindblower's stories. Feels a little egotistical to praise something I had a hand in in a public arena. Not to say I don't praise the man for his writing, I do that every chance I get, I just feel that after release the loudest voices should be those it was meant for. If that makes any sense.

This time I'll make an exception. I didn't even know this was coming. Which is kind of the point of a gift I suppose. Also it's dedicated to me. Which is really cool.

I'll never know why or how I warant the faith put in me, but I'm grateful. Thank you.

To me, this story is perfect for what it is. I'll refrain from anything further because perfection implies, well, just that.

So thanks, it's been a pleasure working with you, and it'll be a pleasure to continue working with you. I'm proud to call you my friend.

;~; So... sad.

Is that a reference to Roxas/Axel I spy there?
This was a really nice story. Fluttershy seemed strange I guess, but it was a nice story.

This...
was just perfect...

That hit me in the feels and then beat them in to submission. It was a beautiful story and as far as I can tell, pretty well written. Fluttershy was a little strange, but she was older, and more bitter. I think it all came together, and made sense. At the very least, it really got to me, and in the end I think that matters most.:raritydespair:

I'm not crying! Just have something in my eye is all...
This was well done. The fact that you're broadening the genres of your fics and still writing well is a testament to your skill.

WOW. Have ALL of my feels! :fluttercry:
Mindblower, all I can say is...DAMN. The dialogue in this story was simply magnificent. Your writing style is fantastic.
I rate this story 5/5 moustaches! :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:
Keep up the great work!

Note: All comments prior to this one are before Version 1.1 was published and therefore irrelevant.

*clap*
Wonderful.
~Wywint
210/270

Carnivorism was taboo in Equestria, only practiced in the darkest of the nightlife. It was about as bad as murder.

Well then... I would be dead in equestria

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