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CogsTheBrony


I write fanfics. Mostly gay ones, actually. So far it's focused on Big Macintosh and Caramel, though I'm going to be branching out in the near future to focus on other ponies.

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Caramel likes Big Macintosh.

Big Macintosh doesn't know.

Rainbow Dash and Applejack are romantically involved.

And just how much does Caramel admitting his crush change all their lives?

Rampant coltcuddling and fillyfooling, in the romantic sense.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 84 )

Yes, I'm sure I've read this before. I think it was on Equestria Daily but I'm not completely sure.
What I do remember is that it never got finished, to my great dismay. Now, I'm not sure if it's
because I'm simply that blind or if you actually never finished it.

Anyway, I really like this story. I'm glad to see it posted here.
Keep 'em coming! :pinkiesmile:

Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!
already read this on your blog, i'm so happy that you decided to post it here :twilightsmile:
i hope to see the other chapters in here as well
i'm tracking and puting this on my favorites right now Thank you :pinkiehappy:

About time! I've been reading these since the third chapter on your blog and always thought they were wonderful stories! Thank you for putting them on here!

Pretty good..... I have trouble reading the Apple Family written accent. I, unlike a lot of people, including you, think of fanfics like a play script. Someone has an accent, but its not written in the play, however its implied. People know that Big Macintosh speaks the way you wrote it, but you actually writing it like that makes it harder to read. Thats just my opinion. 4 stars, and I hope to see a 2nd chapter.

I like the suspense you build with Caramel's confession. Great job! :eeyup:

It's awesome! I can't wait for the next chapter~! :pinkiehappy:

You're on FimFiction, YAY! :yay:

I've been following this story on your blog, but it's nice to see it posted here. Makes it all the easier to keep up with new chapters. At least it will be, as soon as you post all existing ones, that is... Heh. Watch & track nonetheless.

i bet even if they don't say it, 90% of readers are going to be like this: "coltcuddling? eeewwww.... fillyfooling? MEH GUSTAH!"

oh the hypocrisy :ajsmug:

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It's not finished since, well, I'm still writing it! Each chapter has its own name, because I'm strange like that.

The Gearbox blog is where I'm going to be primarily posting them, and after a bit of a delay, they'll be put up here.

Sad caramel is worst caramel. :fluttercry:

This is just my favorite Caramack romance story, and it is just a delight to read it. I am glad you brought it here, to FimFiction. Finally I may get to read the whole of it, and in order.

Gosh I love this couple.

NOOO! poor Braeburn, stallion can't catch a break :rainbowlaugh:

I just adore this story. Thank you for writing it.

Love the interaction between Caramel and Applejack. Nice to see them getting along. Awesome job, my friend!:twilightsmile:

How did I not see this? I loved reading it on your blog, but this will be much easier to track.

This was my first step into the sub-universe of pony fiction and this was interesting.

Through and through, this was a very cute story. I felt that, with the exclusion of the first break-up (which the reason for that still confuses me), this relationship that Mac and Caramel have is very believable. I found just about every interaction between the two adorable.

I also really like how you have been handling the subject of sex between Big Mac and Caramel. That in and of itself really shows the love they have for each other. And seeing how patient Big Mac is shows even more how important Caramel is to him. Though I do wonder who would top whom...

Thinking of the plot, I find it a bit hard that AJ, a LGBT pony, would have an issue with Big Mac dating a colt. I am just rather hard pressed to see it.

There were some character things and plot situations I am kinda on the fence about or actually dislike, but it is your story. My thoughts on the subjects are rather invalid.

The one place I can comment are is the writing itself. While I didn't notice many -- if any -- grammar hick-ups, I felt your pacing was odd. In Appleloosa, two sections were only about three paragraphs, and I felt they probably could have been one. And overall, most of these paragraphs could be one to three total. You would just need to add one more sentience and it would flow better together.

Please, don't get me wrong, this has been a fun read. I am really curious to see where this story goes from here. I look forward to reading more in the future.

(And if you can point me to any more M/M work, that would be awesome.

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There's a reason for the break-up; Mac has had... problems before. I'll leave it at that for now, but there's an inkling of it in later stories.

The pair haven't actually had sex yet, either. Mac is very patient with poor Caramel, and I'm glad you like the slow build-up over "they met, and in a day had done everything possible to do together".

AJ has her own reasons for disliking her brother seeing anypony - it's not Caramel in particular she has an antipathy towards (besides his terrible luck), it's the worry that Mac might leave the farm and family.

You mentioned there were a few things you were on the fence with or disliked; would you mind telling me what they were? I'd quite like to know.

As for the pacing, well... I write in a way that feels natural to me. That's not supposed to sound defensive (even if it probably is), it's just, well, my style, I suppose.

There ought to be more chapters along shortly - I didn't realize how far behind the entry here was, compared to the blog I post on. Three chapters doesn't seem like a lot, but it does add up!

As for other M/M fics, I'm reading "Social Standards" off and on, here on FiMFiction - it's a Soarin'/Braeburn pairing. Other than that, I'm afraid I'm rather in the dark as well!

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Lovely chapter. I was a bit lost, since it has been ages since the last update and I totally forgot why Braeburn got beaten up, but I'll look it up later.

As uncharacteristic as it is for Braeburn to be such a buckin' sack of manure, being in constant pain and not safe in "APPLEOOOOOOOOOOOOOOSA" might do that to a pony. Who knows.

I love that Granny is oblivious, as usual :trollestia:
All in all, excellent chapter. Just update more often please! :pinkiesmile:

Enjoyed this chapter :twilightsmile:
And as sad as it makes me to see Braeburn being such a sad sack, I still feel it's in character for somepony like him. I mean, from the brief time we saw him in Over A Barrel, he did give the impression of being prouder than anything of being able to work hard around Appleloosa. Having that taken away from him is bound to make him a mite sore. Looking forward to see what happens next.

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Regarding the breakup, while that may be true, that wasn't hinted at all in the story, so that kinda went past me.

There were two things I didn't really like. The first was how Braeburn he seemed like a pony that would screw anything that moves. I never really read that into his character and it was... kinda bothersome.

The other thing was AJ's sexuality. To tell the truth, I can't see any of the mane six as sexual creatures. I can see Big Mac as pansexual with his lack of major feelings towards just about everything. And with Caramel as a background pony, I have no issue with him being gay. But AJ... I just don't see it. I feel shipping the mane six is reading way to into little details. It is just weird to me.

And can I get a link to your blog? I know I'd like to be current. =3
As I said, both points were things that were yours to make. I can't really say whether they were "right" or "wrong." Just my thoughts.

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Well, the reason the breakup wasn't clear was because it didn't become apparent until this latest chapter.

My "Brae is an anything-that-moves" views came from how he was quite fine with ignoring personal space in the episode he appeared in. Other than that, yeah, I exaggerated.

As for AJ's sexuality... well, that's a personal preference, and I can't really tell you you're wrong for it, can I? (No, you're not wrong.)

Lastly, here's the link for the Gearbox blog: http://cogsthebrony.blogspot.com/

ZOMG SO CUTE :heart:
wait, did Caramel top Big Mac?
:rainbowhuh:

That's totally not what I expected.
Bravo on the quick update, by the way!
Is the story over? :pinkiesad2:

“Well, it’s ‘bout time!”

Indeed.

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No, it's not over. Not by a long shot.

"Was m’ brother walkin’ funny? … Must be my imagination" :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:
I echo Chatoyance in that it's about buckin time lol

Yay! More chapters!

I was glad to finally see Caramel again. I was starting to really miss him.

I do think that Cheerilee as an ex was an interesting choice, especially after this weeks episode. Just luck, huh?

I still kinda feel... rough about the initial break-up. I don't think this really cleared up much for me but nothing can be done about that.

I was happy to see Caramel say no to Mac the first time. Made it seem a lot more real. But it did sounds more like it was leading to another break-up attempt, which could have made sense then. I wasn't expecting Mac to try that.

And the morning after... I still think it would have been too soon for it to be as meaningful (since the attempt last night), but it was a good time.

Is there... uh... any chance you will... writetheshowerscene? -\\\-

*Look forward to next chapter*

I congratulate you on a job well done good sir! This story is so adorable!
It has certainly got a place in my top 10. I'll be waiting for the next update! :rainbowkiss:

OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH! :rainbowkiss:
I love you for this. This story is so adorable yet so hilarious!
It deserves so much more views than it has.

“Oh, buck me...”
Despite himself, the Apple chuckled. “Ah just did. Want ‘nother round?”

I congratulate you for your courage good sir. :rainbowlaugh:

Oh, gosh, I liked that. That was very sweet, and also very touching.

Im glad I found this on here! Tracking this and i hope to read the next instalments - where may I ask is powdered blue wings, as that ones on ED but not here. :3

Anyway, lovin CaraMac and the bit of AppleDash in here. Keep it up and Im lookin forward to more. :D

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Powder Blue Wings is on the Gearbox blog; it's where I post the chapters first, and submit them to EqD. There's a short delay before they're posted to here, ranging from a week to more, depending on how much I've managed to get done.

This keeps getting sweeter.

The advertising banner is the best thing. Just after the chapter, "Free shipping all day long!"

I just came home, saw this, and I about squeeled, this is by far the cutest chapter yet, plus we may possibly have a new shipping, plus a little added drama from applejack wanting to addopt scootaloo, cant wait to see more.:pinkiehappy:

I don't like the way Braeburn is in this fic, but if you pair him with Soarin like it seems here it may all be worth it. :raritystarry::rainbowkiss:

When is this going to be updated? :applecry:

Oh...:derpyderp1:...my:pinkiegasp:...shit:pinkiehappy:...you updated!:raritystarry:

Dammit, I wanna read this, but it's 4 in the morning....WHY?!:raritydespair:

Sleep or Apple Brances?
Sleep or Apple Brances?

Buck Sleep. Read. Now.

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATEEEEEEEE
[ SPOILS INCOMING ]

That felt a little bit rushed, but I suppose if the main point of the chapter was to get Brae to kiss Soarin', then you wanted to get through it as soon as possible to move onto other, more meaty chapters. :pinkiesmile: Still a nice story, and that was very nice of Rainbow Dash! Did not expect her to be that thoughtful. :twilightsmile:

When are they gonna let Scoots know they wanna adopt her???

Gosh a long wait, but I am so happy you updated! It was hard to remember the story, it's been so long!

Good job... can't wait for more chapters,
Big Mack will always be a big cuddly bear in my mind now :eeyup:
(making mental note to search for MLP/Tom of Finland crossovers, if anything can break rule 34....)

I find this story lovely and cute, with a good touch of realism.:twilightsmile: That being said I love that this is well written and long, story that features CaraMac, and also helps that you had a bit of SoarBurn!:pinkiehappy: Still a lovely story, can't wait for the next update! :pinkiesmile:

oh no, another awesome story with too much time between updates. sigh

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