• Member Since 14th Aug, 2012
  • offline last seen Nov 3rd, 2019

TaylorDash


A Twi Dash fan...

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It's been a year now for the Pegasus, a year since the incident that caused her life to fall apart and sink to the very bottom. Life is just all a game and we are here to play, but surely and slowly the flame has burnt out. Rainbow Dash has decided her fate.





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Credit to http://publiclibraryx.deviantart.com for the awesome picture.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 78 )

Interesting story. I have a pretty good idea what RD's sick "preference" is, although if it is the obvious choice, all the other characters seem wildly out of character in their reactions.

Hopefully a second chapter will clear things up!

1832115

Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy:

And yea, you most likely have it. Next chapter will be up tomorrow!

Oh no a cliffhanger seriously? please continue this i must know more about this preference of Dash's:applecry:

1832566

You will, new chapter will be released tomorrow! :pinkiegasp:

Two problems:
1.I think AJ was a bit to harsh.
2. HOW THE HAY DID EVERYPONY FIND OUT!?

What right does she have to read some one else's diary? That shit's private!

1833480

Thank you and everyone else for all the positive feedback! You have made my day. :raritystarry:

I see a lot of potential with this one... It definately needs a 2nd chapter though.

1833502 Cool beans!
On a side note, how does this sound for an idea?

PONIES RACING JDM TUNER CARS!!!!

Yes, I am very random right now, and I am als watching Initial D at the moment.

A friend of mine requested that I should read this on youtube, god damn it was the hardest story I had to read, I had to keep holding back tears whilst reading it, and what makes it a beautiful story is that, this kinda stuff effects people in real life :') Keep up the great work ^^

1834549

Oh my...I'm speechless. Thank you so much, I didn;t know it would have such an impact. :pinkiesad2:

Your friend is amazing.

1834549

I seriously don't know how to feel. Someone took my story and did a read through. I am just so happy. I don't know what to feel. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

>> TaylorDash

I should be thanking you dude for writing this not you thanking me, you wrote a lovely story, and the whole world should hear about it :) :pinkiehappy:

1834578

I am literally shaking from how much happiness this has brought me! I don;t know how I could ever thank you! Thank you for everything and thank you for enjoying the story! I plan to release the next chapter sometime tomorrow night if I get the chance. :pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile:

1834587

Now I am even more interested :D can't wait to read this one ^^

hmm no dashie :applecry: i doubt anyone will save her, waits for the next chapter. :pinkiesad2:

Thank you for the people who have liked my stories and encourage me to do more. Thank you for reading this and I really hope you enjoyed! :pinkiehappy:

1850107

Maybe......who knows. I might do a little something extra in the future :pinkiesad2:

Ugh... that... ughh... :fluttercry: Why... WHY PLAY WITH MY FEELS LIKE THAT?! :fluttershyouch:

D'aww.
Despite the feels hanging around I noticed a few errors, which detracted from it slightly. (Though that might just be me being a grammar Nazi.)

“I need you to give me the ability to walk on clouds and I need you to teleport me to the center of cloudsdale” Applejack asked nervously.

Cloudsdale needs a capital letter as it's a city, and there should be a full stop here. Also, does Applejack really talk like that?

shuffling through folders until she found Rainbows.

Rainbow's, you need a possessive apostrophe.

But there it was, Rainbows home.

Here too.

“NO!” applejack quickly rushed over

Applejack needs a capital letter.

“Rainbow...a-are you in their?”

There.

Whilst I'm being critical, Applejack's decision to go see Rainbow is really sudden. I'm assuming that Applejack rejected Rainbow in the first place, which makes it seem even more odd. What happens to Rainbow seems over the top, as well.

Acuite verba vestra.

1852448

Thank you for the corrections, I fixed them.

The story is split up in 2 parts. Rainbow, being mentally abused and treated like hell for so long hated herself and everything around her, leading to her decision.

Applejack's part was, Applejack had secretly liked her back but knew what would happen if she knew about it. Applejack's decision was made after not being able to handle what she did for so long. The dream she had was almost like a sign, like a déjà vu. A lot of it I made open for the reader to imagine certain bits and how the reader wanted it to play out. But I guess different people interpret it in different ways.

Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoyed despite the errors.

1852573
Yeah, I understand what you're trying to do. It's just I get the impression that the response to Rainbow was overly harsh, very much so.

1852794

I know were you are getting at :twilightoops:

I tried to make it harsh but I don't think I executed it as well as I could have. :ajsleepy:

1852834
Ah, don't worry. I'm a particularly critical soul. :twilightsmile:

1852869

I am as well and I feel as if I didn't do so hot on it.

1852872
No work is perfect - you shouldn't worry too much about it. The potential problem I pointed out is only potential, and because of the way you've done it the problem could easily be seen as a misinterpretation.
If you don't think you did so well, look at your 14-0 voting score and be encouraged. If that's not enough, get a proofreader.

1852886

Heh, I guess so. Thanks man you've helped me out a lot. :pinkiesmile:

Aaaaaaw, but I wanted a happy ending.:fluttercry:

1880659
You should consider an alternate ending, even if you'd share it only with me through PM :pinkiehappy:

Am I a bad person for think AJ got what she deserved? Anyway, that was really good, I enjoyed it very much even though it was sad.

2009713

Thank you for the kind words! You are the people who make me write. :pinkiehappy:

No you aren't a bad person.

2016655 After reading this for the fifth time, I STILL cannot stop. You made me feel something out of this, not many times does this happen I can tell you.
Once again, Very. Well. Done. I'd insert some sort of an image with some guy clapping, but I have no idea how.

2017082

thank you so much! You have no idea what it means to hear that! I hope you're a fan :pinkiehappy:

2017168 No you suck! Just kidding my friend :raritywink:, I most certainly am a fan of your work haha :pinkiehappy:

2017186:heart:

It truly means a lot! I have a new story for this weekend! I hope you will enjoy it, it's going to be good I hope.

2017193 Certainly will check it out! :pinkiehappy:

2017193 Your story also made me look back on how I've treated all the people I've known, really opened my eyes.

2017224

Ahh yes, this story is actually something I related to. I went through a lot of struggle and people brought me down all the time.

2017245 I've been on both sides of that, not proud of being the one who dealt it out.

2017275

It's all good for me though, I learned that if I ignored it I would be fine. Which I did and I am more of an independent guy who likes to write and play League of Legends.

She hung herself! Sad:raritycry:

2060569

Dat spoiler. Yea, I tried to relate this story to my own thoughts. But anyway, did you like it? And thank you for reading. :pinkiesad2:

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