...woah... I like it.

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Sweet Jesus, this is huge for a first chapter.

EDIT:

Sweet Jesus, I want more.

Usually don't go for HIE but this is really intriguing. Tracking.

Yeah.... how do ponies have base 10 math? Shouldn't it be base 4?

Sweet mother of Bermuda!

This is wonderful. Although you may want tone down AJ's accent a bit.

Make more of this.

More please!

Excellent so far. Are the long chapters temporary or will this length be standard?

Holy fuck this is amazing.

I feel like part of my mind is still flying somewhere in the americas.

Impressive, really impressive. I hope you plan to keep on writing because this is perfect.

I think I broke the thumbs up button, this is definitely going to have my attention for the foreseeable future.

This story made me go back and watch fantasia. Thanks for the trip down memory lane.

14.5k words on chapter one alone? and marked incomplete? seems interesting already so I'm going to track

*Claps hands* Pretty dam good can't wait for the next chapter

holy moley. A realistic approach to an alien world.

Love it so far, please, more.

>>18324351832435 Oh, god, I hope the chapter length will be standard! This is an awesome story, and I can't wait to see where it goes!

Beautiful!

This is good stuff! - Please, keep it coming!

This is really, really well done.

Please keep it up

Hmm.

I'll follow this.

this is so awesome

Dayum...I can't wait for more.

Very good. But what exactly did he play for Twilight? Just some classical music? I would have thought it would take something more like this music video to break a pony's mind.

I hope you write more!

I hesitate to trust in the potential hope I have for this fiction.  Seems like a mere cultural and lingual barrier, but ye gods I hope not.

>>18329191832919

You've never watched fantasia?  Firebird suite depicts how Scotland was created.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X9_n8jakvWU

"All those books, and I can't read them."

I laughed :D

>>18327441832744 Indeed. I love stories with long chapters.

I can't help but to say that this is starting out to be a really cute story. Not only that but what I'm seeing is that just like the show it's going to have a big lesson and moral. The 'foal sitting' part was just really heart warming. Please keep it up^^ you have caught my attention.

SWEET JESUS' RIPPLING PECTORALS, THAT WAS AWESOME!

This was a little hard to follow.

MOAR!!!

I'm really digging this more realistic style of HiE. That language barrier is gonna be a serious bitch though.

Yeah, I'm hooked.

Only trouble is that we will have to wait for quite a long while for an update, if this is standard chapter length.

>>18320351832035 - Yeah.... how do ponies have base 10 math? Shouldn't it be base 4?

The humans who gave us minutes and seconds had base-60, so there is historical precident.

Yes, 20+ pages is what I am aiming at for each chapter.  Unfortunately that will slow down how often the chapters come out.

>>18325091832509 - This story made me go back and watch fantasia. Thanks for the trip down memory lane.

You're welcome.  It seemed an appropriate way to communicate.

>>18329191832919 - But what exactly did he play for Twilight?

A Night on Bald Mountain/Ave Maria

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YrM643eYPc0

Fantasia 2000 - Beethoven's symphony (N. 5)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sqd_dfR9WSM

Fantasia 2000 - Firebird

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2XGRmaiCpPU

Now imagine you've never heard of cartoons, and these cartoons look more like Twilight's actual world that the monster's home.  In all three, there would be a huge horror factor, and although the forces of light and rebirth prevail, there's nothing comical or hammy about any of the villians.  And in the Firebird, the destructive force appears to have won, utterly destroying the nymph's forest and the nymph herself.

There's also the message to Twilight that while she assumed she could just collect all the books and everything would be fine.  The above are her first encounter with the monster's 'library'. She has no idea if these are historical records, abstract images, some of each, or what.  But these

beautiful, terrifying messages take her to different a plane of thought for a few brief moments.

And this is what the monster just happens to have lying around.

'Nemo me impune lacessit' indeed.  (No one provokes me with impunity).

>>18329191832919 - I hesitate to trust in the potential hope I have for this fiction.  Seems like a mere

cultural and lingual barrier, but ye gods I hope not.

I'm not quite sure what you mean, but the barriers you mention are only two of several that will have to be overcome.  Remember, this is no brony, 'the monster' has no more idea how the Equestrian world works than a rock does.  Luna has intentionally limited what he's seen, and unconsciously, so has Twilight.

>>18332061833206 - I can't help but to say that this is starting out to be a really cute story. Not only that but what I'm seeing is that just like the show it's going to have a big lesson and moral. The 'foal sitting' part was just really heart warming. Please keep it up^^ you have caught my attention.

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.  And yes, I'm through beating up Twilight.  She learned her lesson.  With a little help from Spike, she'll turn things around.

>>18332511833251 - That language barrier is gonna be a serious bitch though.

But that's half the fun!

>>18333741833374

Well, what I'm hoping for a little from a story (any story really) is a society where the common values of a normal human would be at least partially incompatible in a significant way with the values of the entirely new species (ponies), like What Separates.  Most stories have just assume that the ponies are more or less pony-shaped-humans that can eat hay which isn't bad persay, but it gets obnoxious that the fandom seems convinced that that's the only possible way to portray a species totally separate from our own.

Oh wow this was really good, I really like the comparison of humans in the firebird to the volcano (im guessing that was twilight was referring to humanity as.) Definitely a much more detailed and well thought at way of introducing human concepts to what would still be an alien world. Also big plus on language barrier so few authors try it, yet your doing great job on the slow learning process of language. Definitely going to my favorites list.

>>18333741833374 >>18330151833015 Woah yeah, I see what you mean now. I've never seen that movie and when I saw the song titles mentioned in the story I did a quick search and the first thing I found was this so I dismissed the rest as just 'random classical songs.'

I guess I'll download and watch Fantasia now.

This is great, loved the idea of using fantasia to break cultural barriers.

Very interesting, and a nice big chapter to get things really started. We know the premise, the military caution, and the general set of rules that we are playing by. I really like this a lot! I'mma follow it.

That story was unexpectedly good. (the synopsis/small intro is so small, doesnt do the story justice)

You have my full attention.

Im a bit surprised at how wary ponies are, especially considering how the human shows time and time again that he's only a limited (yet able) threat. Plus, the whole bit about not killing Pinky after she bit him after she invaded, and taking care of a kid twice just because he could, generally being pretty obviously nice and going out of his way to be tolerant.

I like how the whole story is smart. I like smart. Especially smart coming from the princesses, they got a LOT of life/politic/ect experience and it gotta show.

However, the guards (shining and luna) actions are reactions confuse me (i guess i misunderstand some of their conversations), its like they want him dead, make weird plans, weird speech about hate. Are they joking or not? I think i'll need to re-read it to understand properly.

Ponies have crew-served weapons? What kind of weapons? Catapults? Balistas? Primitive (non-party) cannons? That one bit.. why would they have these? they got  effective flying troops (that can take on dragons) and lots and lots of magic. I don't think they would be that advanced in basic military tech, the threat of godesses blowing you up, backed by legions of mages and flyers is one heck of a deterrent.

Fav'd and upvote. Keep it up!

this is the only..and i have read hundreds of fics  the only one that i really want to have more of i love the hunman in this story and you did not go out of your want to write twilight like everybody else does BEST THING EVER  i do hope this is not a one time only thing..if it is im goin to be mad ....

All I can say to Pinky Pie is; If at first you don't succeed.......get a bigger party cannon!

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interesting... most interesting.

I shall be watching this... of course im wondering a bit about this guys background if he's got live weapons and didn't seem to flinch when he killed something. over all though I'd say it's a pretty good tale and one that im going to keep following

Not understanding the Equestrian dialogue? OMG a new type of HiE. This is amazing! Please keep going, I can't wait for another chapter.

I like <3

Okay, what is with the skuller nonsense... I googled the crap out of it and came up with nothing making any sense so throw me a bone and tell me!

Also, this is the first Fanfic I have seen involving a language barrier because they talk like horses. Oh, and good job.

you now have my rapt attention

one point of comment is you seem to repeat some, I'll say ideas, it made me wonder if I was rereading the same paragraph again.

other than that ponies being silly cute, and human being awesome so all's good.

This... is.... AWESOME!!!

And urgently asks for more.

You know, I would love to see what will happen if the Ponies get to see the BBC's Hiroshima documentary translated.

It had re-enacted historical parts, and the sight of a man being burned away to shadow, a city burning away, a child crying as he is buried in the rubble, a doctor being thrown like a toy while he is a great distance away, surviving because you work in a bank...The Black Rain...hmm...he seems to have a large media library...even the History Channel's mini series and other things. A episode of Shootout from the earlier 2000s.

Plus given his large book library, he might have electronic library stuff too. Is the internet still hooked up?

I need to think more...for now, I am going to go see Lincoln or the Hobbit. Be back with a more detailed review.

Absolutely fantastic.

I would just like to say I loved every moment of it and was so happy that it just kept going. When it did end I thought it ended at a great spot, leaving us to expect more but not making it a cliff hanger. I look forward to seeing what comes of this and will wait patiently for it to come. In short ~woohoo you rock

A HiE story with language barrier? About time.

"How did you know to come to this entrance?" Twilight interrupted, "How did you even know it was here?"

"The mailbox is right there," Derpy said as she pointed to the column of bricks.  "Everyone knows the mailbox is always near the front door."  She took off and headed towards the main camp.

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I love it when the house gets dragged along with them!

Oh man, 10/10.

This is a wonderful HiE fic waaaaay better than most

it's immediately on my top 10 and i bet this is gonna be featured

Well you have certainly impressed me.

And I feel so sorry for twilight, all she wants is to learnnnnnnnnn. XD

This is a great chapter, and  I enjoy the use of the language barrier as well as the chapter length. Bravo!

However you move REAAAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLLLLY FAST. I think it'd be wise to set up a bit more background, tell us about the guy and what not. Thats just my opinion though.

What i'd really like is a size comparision, just how large are these ponies to our Human?

Looking forward to more!

P.S. Plus a hudred smart points to you my friend, i had to google at least 4 things in this chapter.

Holy crap this was fantastic! I just wish you had youtube videos or pictures embedded for some stuff so we can better understand why Twilight is so freaked out, that part seemed a bit rough in terms of writing. But the rest is amazing! MOAR

MORE

>>18320351832035

What's very interesting:

If you interpret the 1000 year banishment of luna as (1000 base 4) years, it was only a 64-year banishment.

The implications!

Granny Smith witnessed the rise of Nightmare Moon!

If Celestia has a relativly normal lifespan, and is about 80 years old, Twilight could be older than Luna!

Ponyville was founded about (100 base 4) = 16 years ago!

>>18346701834670 I'm pretty sure that's not how it works. Actually I know that ain't right.

>>18346701834670

Base 4 only changes the notation not the duration

If my sleep addled brain is right the column heads would be 256, 64, 16, 4, 1 in Base 4 instead of the 10000, 1000, 100, 10, 1 we use with Base ten.

So 1000 in Base 10 is 33221 in Base 4 (again assuming I'm thinking straightish just now)

Do you want a plausible explanation for ponies using base-10? Here is one: The numeric notation was actually invented by unicorns, and the base 10 is a feature of the horn that is allways the same, no matter the length of the horn (For example, ridges or full spirals). As unicorns feel around the world using the magic from their horns, it would be easier for them using those features than using hoofs.

Romance & Everyone tag...

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This... is.... AWESOME

Excuse me a second, i need to pick my jaw up from the floor

btw, MORE

>>18348271834827

Or even adopting it from another culture. We know they have dragons and griffons and whatnot. No reason that one of them developed the base 10 system and ponies adopted it as it became a world standard. Like the metric system, unless your American :p

Wow. You have reduced my normally snarky and cynical self into a veritable geyser of curiosity. Well done. I am eagerly anticipating the next chapter.

Now. Issues.

You've made a Gary Stu.

Come on man, the guy and his house are launched into another dimension, and what's the first thing he does? Pull a load of guns out his ass, get a perfect headshot and foil a surprise tactic with a fucking bayonet.

He then proceeds to prove he is trained in first aid, capable of building traps and he doesn't even freak out by the fact he is being surrounded, scrutinized and his fate will be judged by a load of freakin' technicolour horses.

He later catches Pinkie in her own streamers, proves he is an awesome teacher, he has his own goddamn orchard in his back garden, conveniently has a CAD/CAM suite in his house (because we all have the urge to go randomly design and manufacture some new prototypes on the weekend) and then he grabs another random piece of advanced technology from nowhere so he can awe the little girl with his microscope. I supppose later on he'll bring out his defibrillator from his back pocket or a dialysis machine from his attic. And then he breaks Twilight's mind. With some Disney music videos. What.

He doesn't even show a blink of surprise when the little filly he rescued levitates a goddamn book from his massive bookshelf. Why would he possibly be the tiniest bit disorientated by the fact he's suddenly ended up in a random universe ruled by flying horses and unicorns with working gas, water and electricity despite not having any feasible reason for it? No, he's already fortifying his house for the next Diamond Dog invasion. What does he get sad about? Oh, it's that he won't get to unload the junk in his attic, not that he'll never see his family and friends ever again.

What the hell, man? How does the random guy from LA suddenly become the perfect paradigm for the human species? We don't even know his goddamn name, let alone what he does or did, how he has all this random crap and apparently lives in a bloody mansion! Not to mention he's a complete Zen master, the epitome of calm while his life rests on the decision of a load of horses with no understanding of him. He has tackled every challenge that's been thrown at him incredibly easily, whilst simultaneously showing absolutely no personality. The OC is terrible.

Also. Season 3, episode four, One Bad Apple. There's a cinema. Motion pictures are canon. I'm afraid ponies aren't going to be so amazed at the animation.

And tone down Applejack's accent, for God's sake!

well i came, i saw, i loved = i want more

>>18348271834827

Actually my best guess at the base system ponies use is 16.  The main reason for this comes from "It's about time" when Twilight says "carry the 15."  To carry 15 you need a base 16 or higher system and 2^4 seems logical to me for unicorns.  As an aside -- the reason for the 24 hour day is that the Egyptians used a base 12 numbering system (because 2 3 and 4 divide 12).

I like your style a lot. The perspective switching, characterization and the implication of gradual cultural osmosis are very intriguing. Keep it up.

>>18347301834730

What you wrote is completely right. If you have the value 1000(base 10) and express that value in base 4, it is 33220(base 4).

But I meant something different:

If ponies use the base 4-system, you have to interpret the numbers they say as base 4-numbers.

The sequence of digits 1(in base 4) means also 1(in base 10). Also 2(base 4) = 2(base 10) and 3(base 4) = 3 (base 10). Here we're still at the same value, and spoken out loud it sounds the same.

But if we get to the value four, the associated sequence of digits in base 10 is [four](base 10) and in base 4 it's [one][zero] = 10(base 4).

But,how do ponies speak that value out loud?

We know, that ponies say words like ten, hundred or thousand.

It would be pretty nonsensical for ponies to say numbers like 1000(base 10) as "one thousand", because in their base 4-system that value has the sequence of digits [three][three][two][two][zero](base 4) and would be spoken as "thirty-three thousand two-hundred and twenty".

So our best assumption is, that for example the sequence of digits [one][zero](base 4) is in pony-words "ten" (in human words "four"),  [one][zero][zero](base 4) is "one hundred" (human: "sixteen") and [one][zero][zero][zero](base 4) is "one thousand" (for humans: "sixty-four".

Ergo, if a pony says "a one thousand year banishment", the "one thousand" means the sequence of digit[one][zero][zero][zero] in base 4, and that is *calculating some seconds* 64 in base 10.

So we see that "a one thousand year banishment" in pony words translates to "a sixty-four year banishment" in human words.

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That got out of hoof... Sorry for the debate here.

All I have still to say: Awesome Story. One of the best newcomers of the year!

Pardon this simple fool, but can you explain to me what happened with Twilight and the Fantasia pieces? I looked both over for reference but I still don't understand what disheartened her like that. All she wanted to do was learn and understand this new being, how this is bad I'm not sure.

Also, are you a math major? You paint the image that you're quite gifted with arithmetic here.

Show the ponies Schindler's List"! Show them Schindler's List!

... What the hell did he do to Twilight?

This is impressive, wonderful, realistic and (insert positive compliment because its worth it)

The simple and subtile diffirences between both worlds is something a lot of people forget and you've done it superb.

My respects.

I want more. I don't want to sound rude (Like AJ, actually she was just mean. Your animal friends aren't smart Fluttershy) but do you plan on updating often?

Also, those movies/music he showed Twilight are confusing me. Is No.5 bad? And whats the other one like?

>>18350171835017

Well, it's simply a matter of how far a reader is willing to suspend his/her disbelief to read the story. After reading the comments on here, I think a lot of people are willing to do that. I'm not saying it's realistic, but I still think it's a good read. But seriously, we like "a load of freakin' technicolour horses". Since when did realism apply to us?

>>18353841835384 Considering the way the ponies reacted to his prescence, the way it is narrated and the nature of the events occuring, it seems to me the author wanted it to be taken seriously.

In most HiE's, the human shows up, and there is no government reaction. Hell, they even pull the excuse "Ponyville is crazy" to make nobody local care about it half the time. As far as HiEs go, this is one of the most realistic. In this, the government were immediately involved, there was military lockdown, there has been intense surveillance and scrutiny of the human individual which has not been named, has no backstory or noticable personality. THAT was what I've been getting at.

The guy in question has nothing about him. He's just there, he is ridiculously successful at everything he does, and that's it. No character. No explanation. He has about as much personality as a tropical skin disease.

And liking a load of freakin' technicolour horses and suddenly finding yourself in their world, and completely at their mercy when you have no idea who they are is a different matter entirely. Nobody in their right mind could not notice, or completely shrug it off like the unnamed man who stars in the story yet we know absolutely nothing about. I am willing to participate in suspension of disbelief, it's just this is a terrible OC.

So far, anyway. I am sharing my views in the hopes the problems might be rectified.

MOAR!  FOR THE LOVE OF GOD MOAR!

Wish I had the picture to go with that.  Moar please

>>18354391835439

Would there necessarily be a government intervention? That particular accusation of realism seems a bit misaligned.  Automatically assuming ponies should react exactly the same way as humans would in these times has a kind of sticky logic to it, seeing as Ponyville regularly has ursa minors and the like trampling through the town but nobody ever bothers hiring town guards or do anything proactive.  Seems to me one could easily justify not having an entire platoon of royal guards swarm the town every time something weird happens since that's never happened before in the show.  That's something that would happen in our societies, not necessarily in a completely different, alien one whose managerial staff consists of living goddesses who toss around the moon and sun, and scarf down cake and donuts so fast it's like they're trying to get diabetes.

I agree about the faceless, personality-less super-successful human protagonist though.  Having the ponies more or less praise him for just about everything he does is more than a little irksome and just spanks of all sorts of mirror-kissing narcissism, especially if he himself doesn't seem particularly impressed by magic or ponies with their own complex society.  But it is the first chapter, so I'm willing to give him time to actually show that he's a human being and not fucking Thor.

>>18354901835490 While I entirely agree to the points you made there, I have a simple rebuttal.

Did the Ursa have guns?

>>18355091835509

Pretty sure normal guns don't have anything on bears taller than skyscrapers and wider than Celestia's flank.  Not to mention they'd need to actually know what a gun was to be properly be terrified of it.

*Edit

A bigger problem I have with many of the HiE fictions is that though we almost always have loads of technology to give them, the ponies never have anything original to give back or be impressed with; which is odd given that the ponies are a completely different species with a different outlook on reality, yet their technology only seemed to progress linearly and along the exact same technological paths as our own.  So it has a net result of only making the ponies look like humans from the 18th century instead of, y'know, an entirely alien civilization with different epistemic roots containing access to an entire aspect of reality that has been heretofore never been seen by humans.

It's like if E.T came down to earth, and we found out that his technology was exactly the same as humanity's fifty years ago, and his language of choice is broken english.

>>18355151835515

Nothing has ever died in the show. Well, except King Sombra, but he was just some smoke and doesn't count.

Judging by the way the CMC were able to walk into a funeral and insult the vicar for being old, I'm pretty sure that death isn't really comprehended in such an innocent society. Given that the guy walked out of his house which appeared out of nowhere and killed a Diamond Dog, there was some cause for concern, to be a poet of understatement.

And if the wielder of the ambiguous term of normal gun was as skilled as the gentleman in this work of fiction, the Ursa might have something to think about. Maybe not a Major, though.

But I agree, the government in Equestria seems woefully lackadaisical to all these threats. Celestia really is a troll.

>>18355551835555

I think it may just be how their species perceives and reacts to threats on a fundamental level rather than Celestia being a troll.  The everyday pony seem capable enough of sweeping up their own messes and dealing with ursas,  timberwolves, and cockatrices.  It's like if you live in Australia, you wouldn't much run to your gov'nur and call for the federal police every time you encountered poisonous, murderous, psychotic wildlife; it's just a run of the mill thing.

...blown away.

This story has substance.  And I'm so jealous.  Also, happy and a tad sad.

I could never, never write anything like this...  anytime soon.  Why?  Because I specialize in literary style  I am halfway-decent at preparing fluid words meant to enrapture the sense and spark sudden splashes of delight.  But... this story focuses on actual, blunt details.  Details I've never bothered to learn.  I could never explain mathematics, technology, or gardening.

But you.  You are able to bring meaningful, substantial, meaty, and REAL explanations... and (for this story) it works like an absolute gem.  There are noticeable weaknesses (e.g. half-baked descriptions, awkward dialog, strange pacing, etc) but it's bearable.  Thank you for writing, and I hope you update.  Reading rare stories like these, will help me improve as a writer.  

ps- Ah like wat'cha did with Twilight ther'

PS- The House coming along... and working!?!?!

Genius.  

this is one of the longest chapters i've ever read and yet it was still not long enough. it was a really great first chapter with a low number of spelling and grammar errors. it flowed smoothly without taking too long or too briefly with anything.

personally, i felt the main character was a little harsh with twilight but at least it all fits in a way. as amusing as her insatiable curiosity can be and as much as we lover her for it, Luna has a point about being careful. she most likely got what was coming to her.  Overall this story is perfect and i hope this is a story you follow all the way through from start to finish please. too many good stories around here that died half way through and will never be completed. thank you very much for a new awesome story. i look forward to the next chapter!!!  

>>18356011835601 This is the completely unrealistic nature of the show. Peaceful, happy with constant strife.

There is no knowing what would happen in a realistic situation, because it isn't realistic. This is a kid's TV show. And we are both severely overthinking it.

Excuse me while I go do something slightly more productive than speculate how cute cartoon ponies react to guns and death. It doesn't seem like an important issue.

*hmms at the opening scene*  Oh dear, a clear case of interdimensional fracturing.  Now, it may be a benign, temporary incurion of an impacting edge from a 'perpendicular dimension' (such as a certain Twilight Zone episode and a farce of that episode in a Simpson's Treehouse of Terror in which Homer wandered into THE THIRD DIMENSION).

OR, it could be a dangerous impact in which one dimension will 'infect' and override the other dimension, destroying everything in the process while transforming the quantum fabric of that universe into its own.

What worries me into believing that it's the latter case is the fact that he still has water pressure and electricity, meaning his house is partially in one world and partially in the other.  It's not a clean break, no smooth doorway, rather the two realities are melding... and that is rarely a good thing.

(NEEEERRRRRRDDD!!)  

>>18356361835636

If we assume their reality to be vastly different than our own, then it's only a matter of paradigms.  Their reality works the way theirs does, and ours our own.  Assuming that a species can't operate unless they're exactly type-identical to a human society and the human psychological mindset is pretty ridiculous seeing as we have loads of social animals on our own planet that doesn't operate anywhere close to how a human's does.

*Edit

"Happy with constant strife". Theodore Roosevelt, Andrew Jackson, Jack Churchill and many, many other people would like to have words with you. And possibly some murder.

MOER!

>>>  I was able to survive their food, >>>

That's an aspect many HiE authors miss.  Even a simple explanation of one line's length, like this, is needed for realism's sake.  Edibility of food would be a major concern even if one merely went to another habitable planet in our universe.  

Imagine if their proteins used D-amino acids instead of L-amino acids.  Same chemical formula, but with a mirror-image structure around their chiral carbon.  Our enzymes would be unable to process them because they'd no longer fit into the 'active site' of the enzymes.  In biochemistry, molecular orientation is just as important as basic chemistry.

(NEEEEEEEEERRRRRD!!!)  

I must say, I am so far VERY pleased with this.  It's a genuine accidental 'first-contact' scenario, with both sides being very cautious about the other, but also being intelligent enough to realize that neither wishes ill intent and so both are doing all they can to understand one another.

The societal aspects are also well thought out.  You have the professionals, trained to deal with the unusual and unexpected, and the civilians; some of whom are accepting, some suspicious, some merely curious.

There is also the forethought by Luna to keep the event quiet for the time being.  I am so glad to see one of the Princesses acting in a manner that reflects the depth of wisdom and experience they would gain from having lived so long and faced threats both mortal and god-like.  I wonder how Celestia will respond... I suspect not with too much difference.  She has a tremendous amount of self-control, not to mention a full millinium of non-stop experience leading a nation and diplomacy with all the non-pony races.

Easily the best Human In Equestria story that I have ever read.  Period.  You handle things with consummate skill, I am very very impressed.  It was a very simple idea, but it made all the difference.  Have both sides rationally treat the situation like it's first contact.  Absolutely amazing.  I am in awe.  Eagerly awaiting more of this.

>>18353241835324

Won't understand the language.

They'll just get the wrong message.

Now I'm reading a little more critically to give some useful criticism. As fluff it's a lot of fun and an enjoyable read however from the way you've tackled it it could be taken seriously as well with some tweaks.

First our unknown protagonist: That he's nameless actually like, though some hints about his background could be easily added by having him straighten some photo's that imply his skill sets. Picture of himself and the boys at a rifle range? Graduation from police academy or boot camp? Civil War re-enactment group photos? Just something to imply his skill level would be good, especially with an exotic skill like bayonet drill. If he doesn't have those skills he could survive and pull of what he did by luck though again some idea of why he was lucky would do wonders. Has he killed before to be so unaffected by the act or does it relate to why he doesn't have a problem with being in fantasy land?

Also why does the Diamond Dog parry a high attack down the way? A creature with any combat experience or even just common sense is going to parry to the side or up and to the side or dodge to the side and try and get you as you go past. I get that he's trying to scare them off and not kill another one but charging something that looks like a dog merged with a gorilla is not smart even if he is smaller than you.

Also why didn't the Diamond Dogs just dig into his home given their insane digging speed? If you still want them caught you could have them nabbed when they come up to get their bearings, though likely most would get away to cause problems later.

Other's have already said about him taking things too well which is the other major problem with your human as a character. Being naturally laid back only goes so far. Does he think he's dreaming? In a coma? Popped his clogs and this is his afterlife? Again some indication would go a long way to helping out.

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The 'Magic Burst' felt by the Princess's in Canterlot and it was crippling to Twilight in Ponyville, how did the other unicorns in town cope. Are they badly hurt lacking Twilight's power and magical endurance for example?

While Twilight shows signs of having one of her 'episodes' there's no real reason for it, she just starts disturbing the town for little reason after being sidelined. You could play up the fact that she feels she needs to prove herself so that Luna will let her help forgetting that she is despite everything a civilian but why pull Ponyville on the act? For story reasons it's obvious but there needs to be a more solid reason underneath as Twilight is logical even when she's going nuts.

I could see Fluttershy acting like she does especially post Iron Will but she's likely to be much more careful given that while she deals with dangerous animals. Fluttershy is not the sort of pony to forget that they are dangerous even if they are cute. (I ignore the Parasprites here as they were basically a nuisance)

Pinkie I can see doing what she did as she's not a pony to respect boundaries but I am curious how he caught her.

Other than that a better sense of scale might be in order do the ponies come to his needs? His waist?

Oh and what did you decide the ponies were using for maths system/algorithm?

Still looking forward to what happens next!

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On the other hoof if everything they say is translated so would any facts and figures (For example the Success Failure Song)

This is awesmazing. In other news, this really made me laugh.

        "I think we've learned two things," Armor said quietly.  "First, it knows it's being watched, big surprise.  And second, it thinks it's a comedian."

        "Captain.  You have my permission to go down and kill it," Luna said.