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  • T Drawn With the Night

    A human finds himself in Equestria under unpleasant circumstances, his reaction, get out of Dodge and start a new life elsewhere. But events which brought him and his treatment in Canterlot are not so easily forgotten by those who did it.
    10,132 words · 7,224 views  ·  869  ·  35
  • T Drawn With the Night Into the Day

    Fancy travels to Canterlot to fulfill a commission. She decided to toss a few stones in the placid waters to see what turns up.
    30,395 words · 2,317 views  ·  316  ·  16
  • E The Conversion Bureau - Kenny

    Twilight Sparkle tries to convince a strangely reticent human to undergo conversion. He has a secret that makes it impossible.
    3,100 words · 4,088 views  ·  241  ·  13
  • T Out of Place

    A human had seen Discord's defeat, how would he act in Equestria? Join the Mane 6 or bide his time? Also, Celestia must face Luna and the NLR, alone.
    105,553 words · 1,871 views  ·  136  ·  10
  • E Hot Zone - Equestria

    Never addressed problems with 'going to Equestria', ones that could kill you or them.
    4,663 words · 1,621 views  ·  91  ·  6
  • E The Conversion Bureau - The Return of the King

    A take on Humans Acting Villainously: Celestia has won, humanity and all they were has been consumed. But uneasy rests the tyrant's crown. The Newfoals remember things that go bump in the night, and now even Celestia must fear them.
    42,184 words · 2,630 views  ·  278  ·  28
  • T The Conversion Bureau - Earth's New Masters

    The Conversion Bureau has won, and the barrier is closing in. A few last souls are preparing to hand over Earth to its new masters.
    3,081 words · 3,846 views  ·  165  ·  19
  • T Sig Alert

    New arrival to Equestria, who isn't afraid to shake things up a bit.
    6,505 words · 1,609 views  ·  47  ·  5

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  • Thursday
    Story idea for anyone who wants it.

    For those of you who wonder why I don't  drink (and my characters weird out Discord in every story), I came up with this stone cold sober.  I'm not going to write it, but it's already metastasizing into a Harry Potter/Dresden Chronicle crossover with MLP/SM, so I'll leave it here.

    The reason the local Twilight Sparkle wasn't encountered by the 'Equestria Girl'ed Twilight was she was off saving the world.  As Sailor Moon.  Her cat advisor is Luna, yes that Luna, who isn't happy about being a cat.  Venus is teamed up with a white cat (Celestia), who is really unhappy about being a boy cat.  Spike and Owlicious are Sailor Mars' ravens.  The rest of the Mane 6 and several background ponies are the rest of the Senshi, except they play the senshi attitudes to cover their real identities.  Rainbow Dash is Saturn, Fluttershy is Tuxedo Mask, Rarity is Mercury, Derpy is Pluto, etc.

    When they find out about Equestria and their counterparts, they travel there to get their teammates 'cured' of being animals, and have adventures there against Dresdenverse and Potterverse invaders.  Voldemort, meet the Elements of Harmony and the Moon Crystal.

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  • 12w, 4d
    Drawn With the Night Contest (ends Sept 14, 2014)

    There's been a lot of speculation about the ponies' side of events in Drawn With the Night and some calls to write it.

    Frankly, I'd rather not.  It would add nothing to the story.  Besides, I'd rather hear all the speculation.

    So, I'm throwing open a request to anyone who wants to try, I'll be putting together an 'after the auction cocktail party' scene and will have the various nobles and elites speculate about what happened.  And I'm inviting others to participate.  Submit your scene or vignette by PM on or before Sept 14, 2014 and I'll weave the submissions into a coherent narrative, then use Titanpad to allow those who submitted something to collaborate.

    Remember, these are idle speculations, you need know no more than what occurred in the story and what was discussed in the comments section.  Civil discourse or wild speculation are equally appropriate (think of some of the 'wonderful' ideas you've had while intoxicated). Keep it clean.  Euphemisms are your friend.  They did the thing at the place and I'll never look at peach preserves the same again.

    Dan's Comments

    P.S. Now closed.

    3 comments · 684 views
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TVTropes page yay!A human arrives with a house in Ponyville.  The Mane Six, and Princess Luna must deal with this new arrival.  But not everyone agrees how it should be handled, not everyone agrees on what danger it represents, or the benefit it can be to Equestria.

The inhabitant must also deal with the new rules and conventions of this new world it knows nothing about, as well as the mystery of its appearance, and the incongruities of its arrival.

TVTropes page yay!

First Published
20th Dec 2012
Last Modified
16th Nov 2014
#1 · 101w, 5h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

...woah... I like it.

#2 · 101w, 5h ago · 7 · · 1) Arrival ·

Commenting before going in

Sweet Jesus, this is huge for a first chapter.


Sweet Jesus, I want more.

#3 · 101w, 5h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Usually don't go for HIE but this is really intriguing. Tracking.

Yeah.... how do ponies have base 10 math? Shouldn't it be base 4?

#4 · 101w, 4h ago · 7 · · 1) Arrival ·

Sweet mother of Bermuda!

This is wonderful. Although you may want tone down AJ's accent a bit.

Make more of this.

#5 · 101w, 4h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

More please!

#6 · 101w, 4h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Excellent so far. Are the long chapters temporary or will this length be standard?

#7 · 101w, 4h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Holy fuck this is amazing.

I feel like part of my mind is still flying somewhere in the americas.:pinkiehappy:

#8 · 101w, 4h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Impressive, really impressive:ajsmug:. I hope you plan to keep on writing because this is perfect.

#9 · 101w, 3h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

I think I broke the thumbs up button, this is definitely going to have my attention for the foreseeable future.

This story made me go back and watch fantasia. Thanks for the trip down memory lane.

#10 · 101w, 3h ago · 1 · · 1) Arrival ·

14.5k words on chapter one alone? and marked incomplete? seems interesting already so I'm going to track

#11 · 101w, 3h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

*Claps hands* Pretty dam good can't wait for the next chapter

#12 · 101w, 3h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

holy moley. A realistic approach to an alien world.

Love it so far, please, more.

#13 · 101w, 3h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

>>1832435 Oh, god, I hope the chapter length will be standard! This is an awesome story, and I can't wait to see where it goes!

#14 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·


#15 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

This is good stuff! - Please, keep it coming! :pinkiehappy:

#16 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

This is really, really well done.

Please keep it up

#17 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·


I'll follow this. :moustache:

#18 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

this is so awesome

#19 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Dayum...I can't wait for more.

#20 · 101w, 2h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Very good. But what exactly did he play for Twilight? Just some classical music? I would have thought it would take something more like this music video to break a pony's mind.

I hope you write more!

#21 · 101w, 2h ago · 1 · · 1) Arrival ·

I hesitate to trust in the potential hope I have for this fiction.  Seems like a mere cultural and lingual barrier, but ye gods I hope not.


You've never watched fantasia?  Firebird suite depicts how Scotland was created.

#23 · 101w, 1h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

"All those books, and I can't read them."

I laughed :D

#24 · 101w, 1h ago · 1 · · 1) Arrival ·

>>1832744 Indeed. I love stories with long chapters.

#25 · 101w, 1h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

I can't help but to say that this is starting out to be a really cute story. Not only that but what I'm seeing is that just like the show it's going to have a big lesson and moral. The 'foal sitting' part was just really heart warming. Please keep it up^^ you have caught my attention. :twilightsmile:

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#27 · 101w, 1h ago · 3 · · 1) Arrival ·

This was a little hard to follow.

#28 · 101w, 1h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

:flutterrage: MOAR!!!

#29 · 101w, 1h ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

I'm really digging this more realistic style of HiE. That language barrier is gonna be a serious bitch though.

Yeah, I'm hooked.

Only trouble is that we will have to wait for quite a long while for an update, if this is standard chapter length.

#31 · 101w, 48m ago · 7 · 2 · 1) Arrival ·

>>1832035 - Yeah.... how do ponies have base 10 math? Shouldn't it be base 4?

The humans who gave us minutes and seconds had base-60, so there is historical precident.

Yes, 20+ pages is what I am aiming at for each chapter.  Unfortunately that will slow down how often the chapters come out.

>>1832509 - This story made me go back and watch fantasia. Thanks for the trip down memory lane.

You're welcome.  It seemed an appropriate way to communicate.

>>1832919 - But what exactly did he play for Twilight?

A Night on Bald Mountain/Ave Maria

Fantasia 2000 - Beethoven's symphony (N. 5)

Fantasia 2000 - Firebird

Now imagine you've never heard of cartoons, and these cartoons look more like Twilight's actual world that the monster's home.  In all three, there would be a huge horror factor, and although the forces of light and rebirth prevail, there's nothing comical or hammy about any of the villians.  And in the Firebird, the destructive force appears to have won, utterly destroying the nymph's forest and the nymph herself.

There's also the message to Twilight that while she assumed she could just collect all the books and everything would be fine.  The above are her first encounter with the monster's 'library'. :twilightoops: She has no idea if these are historical records, abstract images, some of each, or what.  But these

beautiful, terrifying messages take her to different a plane of thought for a few brief moments.

And this is what the monster just happens to have lying around. :facehoof:

'Nemo me impune lacessit' indeed.  (No one provokes me with impunity).

>>1832919 - I hesitate to trust in the potential hope I have for this fiction.  Seems like a mere

cultural and lingual barrier, but ye gods I hope not.

I'm not quite sure what you mean, but the barriers you mention are only two of several that will have to be overcome.  Remember, this is no brony, 'the monster' has no more idea how the Equestrian world works than a rock does.  Luna has intentionally limited what he's seen, and unconsciously, so has Twilight.

>>1833206 - I can't help but to say that this is starting out to be a really cute story. Not only that but what I'm seeing is that just like the show it's going to have a big lesson and moral. The 'foal sitting' part was just really heart warming. Please keep it up^^ you have caught my attention. :derpyderp1:

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.  And yes, I'm through beating up Twilight.  She learned her lesson.  With a little help from Spike, she'll turn things around.

>>1833251 - That language barrier is gonna be a serious bitch though.

But that's half the fun! :raritydespair:


Well, what I'm hoping for a little from a story (any story really) is a society where the common values of a normal human would be at least partially incompatible in a significant way with the values of the entirely new species (ponies), like What Separates.  Most stories have just assume that the ponies are more or less pony-shaped-humans that can eat hay which isn't bad persay, but it gets obnoxious that the fandom seems convinced that that's the only possible way to portray a species totally separate from our own.

Oh wow this was really good, I really like the comparison of humans in the firebird to the volcano (im guessing that was twilight was referring to humanity as.) Definitely a much more detailed and well thought at way of introducing human concepts to what would still be an alien world. Also big plus on language barrier so few authors try it, yet your doing great job on the slow learning process of language. Definitely going to my favorites list.

#34 · 101w, 9m ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

>>1833374 >>1833015 :rainbowderp: Woah yeah, I see what you mean now. I've never seen that movie and when I saw the song titles mentioned in the story I did a quick search and the first thing I found was this so I dismissed the rest as just 'random classical songs.'

I guess I'll download and watch Fantasia now. :twilightsheepish:

#35 · 101w, 1m ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

This is great, loved the idea of using fantasia to break cultural barriers.

#36 · 100w, 6d ago · 2 · · 1) Arrival ·

Very interesting, and a nice big chapter to get things really started. We know the premise, the military caution, and the general set of rules that we are playing by. I really like this a lot! I'mma follow it. :pinkiehappy:

#38 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

That story was unexpectedly good. (the synopsis/small intro is so small, doesnt do the story justice)

You have my full attention.

Im a bit surprised at how wary ponies are, especially considering how the human shows time and time again that he's only a limited (yet able) threat. Plus, the whole bit about not killing Pinky after she bit him after she invaded, and taking care of a kid twice just because he could, generally being pretty obviously nice and going out of his way to be tolerant.

I like how the whole story is smart. I like smart. Especially smart coming from the princesses, they got a LOT of life/politic/ect experience and it gotta show.

However, the guards (shining and luna) actions are reactions confuse me (i guess i misunderstand some of their conversations), its like they want him dead, make weird plans, weird speech about hate. Are they joking or not? I think i'll need to re-read it to understand properly.

Ponies have crew-served weapons? What kind of weapons? Catapults? Balistas? Primitive (non-party) cannons? That one bit.. why would they have these? they got  effective flying troops (that can take on dragons) and lots and lots of magic. I don't think they would be that advanced in basic military tech, the threat of godesses blowing you up, backed by legions of mages and flyers is one heck of a deterrent.

Fav'd and upvote. Keep it up!

#39 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

this is the only..and i have read hundreds of fics  the only one that i really want to have more of i love the hunman in this story and you did not go out of your want to write twilight like everybody else does BEST THING EVER  i do hope this is not a one time only thing..if it is im goin to be mad ....

#40 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

All I can say to Pinky Pie is; If at first you don't succeed.......get a bigger party cannon! :pinkiehappy:

#41 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

interesting... most interesting.

I shall be watching this... of course im wondering a bit about this guys background if he's got live weapons and didn't seem to flinch when he killed something. over all though I'd say it's a pretty good tale and one that im going to keep following

#42 · 100w, 6d ago · 1 · · 1) Arrival ·

Not understanding the Equestrian dialogue? OMG a new type of HiE. This is amazing! Please keep going, I can't wait for another chapter.:pinkiesmile:

#43 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

I like <3

#44 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Okay, what is with the skuller nonsense... I googled the crap out of it and came up with nothing making any sense so throw me a bone and tell me!

Also, this is the first Fanfic I have seen involving a language barrier because they talk like horses. Oh, and good job.

#45 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

you now have my rapt attention

one point of comment is you seem to repeat some, I'll say ideas, it made me wonder if I was rereading the same paragraph again.

other than that ponies being silly cute, and human being awesome so all's good.

#46 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

This... is.... AWESOME!!! :pinkiehappy:

And urgently asks for more. :flutterrage:

#47 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

You know, I would love to see what will happen if the Ponies get to see the BBC's Hiroshima documentary translated.

It had re-enacted historical parts, and the sight of a man being burned away to shadow, a city burning away, a child crying as he is buried in the rubble, a doctor being thrown like a toy while he is a great distance away, surviving because you work in a bank...The Black Rain...hmm...he seems to have a large media library...even the History Channel's mini series and other things. A episode of Shootout from the earlier 2000s.

Plus given his large book library, he might have electronic library stuff too. Is the internet still hooked up?

I need to think more...for now, I am going to go see Lincoln or the Hobbit. Be back with a more detailed review.

#48 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

Absolutely fantastic.

#49 · 100w, 6d ago · · · 1) Arrival ·

I would just like to say I loved every moment of it and was so happy that it just kept going. When it did end I thought it ended at a great spot, leaving us to expect more but not making it a cliff hanger. I look forward to seeing what comes of this and will wait patiently for it to come. In short ~woohoo you rock

#50 · 100w, 6d ago · 1 · · 1) Arrival ·

A HiE story with language barrier? About time.

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