And on the heels of the last one, we go to something completely different.

Seems interesting, tracking

Hoping for more.

Original concept. Let's see where this goes.

Oh, and the "Remember what we did last night?" made me and then ...

Hmm. You might want to reconsider that picture you used as cover art - it's the same one used for "Unintentionally Yours", which is a bit confusing at first.

En tu sueños, oh wait... Never mind.

Short, won't review until more comes out.

this looks like another story called 'unintentionally yours'......intersting

>>132229132229 lol

Thank you to all the people who are tracking, and a special one to those who took the time to reply.

>>MagaSpark

That scene (and a few of the lines right after it) made me consider bumping it up to a T rating.  Eventually, I didn't, since nothing is really said, and everyone who reads can make their own interpretation.

>>Ospero

There are very few pictures with just AJ and spike that isn't the almost kiss from the show.

>>Dragon Master Spike

It was meant to be like the teaser before the theme song, but yeah, it is kind of short.

>>Alanthewhite

I hope to live up to your expectations

>>lederp

But without the pairing from that story.  I know I used the same picture, but it's for a different reason

You put Spike into a harem anime? huh? regardless this looks awesome. I just picture Spike raising one eyebrow and saying "Ladies..."

great

Looks like Spike may be a little more open to the idea, but finds that Twilight is a bit upset at him.  What will happen, and will it affect Spike telling Twilight about his possible crush?

>>153532153532 will he fall for applejack aswell i do like spikejack shipping :)

>>154082154082

This is not the fanfic you're looking for, then.  Spike and Applejack will not be getting together here.

Liking the premise of this, keep up the awesome work!

Always a fan of Spike and Twilight. Following.

My when will update I been wait for a LONG time dude.

>>183742183742

Calm down.  It'll be updated soon, I promise.  But I do have a life outside the computer, and sometimes I may take a break and work on another project.  It will be updated when I feel the chapter is done, and not a minute sooner.

Oh Spike, getting into girl stuff

Ohoohooo getting interesting! Just a few grammatical errors I wanted to point out below, unless you meant for them to be like that...

"what anything special for lunch?" what should be want

"After bringing put a sandwich to Twilight" should be something like After bringing a sandwich for Twilight

"He hasn’t totally given up on her, despite these setbacks, and still hoped she’d come around." hasn't and hoped aren't in the same tense

"he and the others come to save her" come should be came

"I horn-write it" should be wrote or had horn-written.

So yeah, I hope that^^^ helped. Good luck with this story, I always love some good Twilight Spikle or whatever the kewl kidz call it.

I wait in anticipation for the next chapter.

>>277323277323 "I had horn-written it." or "I wrote it with my magic." The latter is far better than the former.

>>278528278528 I was just trying to keep the horn part in there. I like it for some reason.

I went and made the fixes you mentioned.  I'm also surorised I made those errors, since I gave the story a once over before publishing it.

And the "horn-wrote" thing was meant to be the unicorn equivalent to "handwriting", so I left it in.

fantastic

Man I've only started reading this, and I already love it. Keep it up mate!

My home computer died on me.  But thanks to Google Docs and a smartphone, I finally was able to get the last chapter to you.

>>489183489183

Is that why this feels rushed?

Aw, sad ending.

Ending felt rather rushed and pretty bad.

Like the idea overall, but I feel there was more potential for that ending if you hadn't rushed it

Interesting so far, gotta read more now!  However, I did notice one error that caused me to re-read the sentence a few times.  In the end of the story when spike wakes up, you say 'Downstairs, she could see Twilight' but I think it would make a bit more sense if it said 'Downstairs, he could see Twilight'.

Hmmm. Yeah, needs more of an ending... Though it ends how I'd expect such a thing to end. -nods thoughtfully-

However, no matter what, it's deserving of a thumb from me. Nice work.

I'll be honest (which I always am) I truly love Spikelight, and always will, 100% my favorite pairing....even though that has nothing to do with your own story...ahem ,now onto the story itself....

Although it felt rushed for me and Rarity did not appear for him to wonder about his feeling for her more (evn though I hate Spike/Rarity with a complete and total passion) I felt as this was heart warming for Spike to learn of his feelings for his best friend and going to the element of honesty of such advice, it was really well done, short but with a mix that made sure it got the point across...I'm proud to have such such good work, you do have some grammer and spelling errors but everyone makes mistakes, don't stop writing none the less....I'll be tracking this even though it's already done....oh well, at any point in time this was very well made.

Also, Pinkie pie has a seriously bad habit of randomness...make her STOP!!!!

So what was the letter that Twilight send to the princess a Plot device?

Rushed ending. Bad ending. The story was fine but nothing special. Maybe next time.

HEY!

WHY DID Spike get friendzoned!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????

SO UNFAIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!