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Equus Pallidus

Joined June 2012
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Stories (2)

  • Six Brides for Two Sisters
    After spending Nightmare Night in Ponyville, Luna decides on how to reward the six mares who defeated Nightmare Moon and saved her from herself: Marriage.

    52,727 words · 15,522 views · 1,953 likes · 49 dislikes
  • The Mystic and The Mundane
    An ancient ritual in a dead language meant to empower the Elements of Harmony? What could go wrong?
    79,782 words · 2,365 views · 226 likes · 14 dislikes
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Since her return and rescue, Princess Luna has been looking for some way to properly honor the six mares who saved her from herself, but nothing she has been able to think of has seemed meaningful enough to repay her saviors.  

Nothing, at least, until she spends Nightmare Night in Ponyville, and gets to actually know the six ponies to whom she owes such a great debt.  She realizes she enjoys their company, and wishes for them to spend more time with her, that she might grow closer to them.

So, in accordance with many fine and ancient traditions, and after thinking it over for a good...couple of hours, easy, she proclaims that she shall marry all six of them.  Oh, and that Twilight will be marrying Celestia, too.

Now would be the appropriate time for everypony to panic.

--Cover Art Courtesy of Zemious--

--Editing Graciously Provided By BronyWriter--

NB - The sex tag is in place for sexual situations and suggestions; the story is, and shall remain, free of explicit sex.

First Published
16th Dec 2012
Last Modified
1st Oct 2013

Comments ( 1,045 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 22 · ·

Best reaction ever!:rainbowlaugh: four mustaches out of 5.:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#2 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

im dieing from laughter, how long before twi goes crazy?

#3 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

Ok.. one second have to get my breath... you are the first person to ever yes EVER have me actually rolling laughing. sure I am laying on my bed but I dropped my laptop and litterally spent the last 10 minutes laughing so hard i think I gave myself a hernia. It hurts so good. anyway more please.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL

#5 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

Tracking for the concept alone! Do not disappoint me, author.

#6 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

Ouch. The concept broke my think meat. :applejackconfused: Tracking.

#7 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

Dear Goddess:rainbowlaugh: this is going to be good!!!

#8 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

#9 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

Between your first story that thoroughly has my attention, you shift from a Sadfic to a Comedy/Romance fic.  Favorited so I can thoroughly read this later.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 7 · ·

I'm tracking this. I admit, I did a double take when Celestia said she'd marry Twilight, and i was very confused until I figured out what she really meant.. I can't wait to see how the 6 react to this.

#11 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

LOL :rainbowlaugh: This oughta be good.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

:rainbowderp:  Bahahahahahaha that is a perfect set up.:rainbowlaugh:  Can't wait to see this play out.  

#13 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · 2 ·

I demand more!!!!!!!!!

#14 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · 2 ·

:rainbowderp:rolf:rainbowlaugh:

#15 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

:rainbowlaugh: First time a story on this site has genuinely had me on the floor laughing.

Can't wait to see where this goes.

#16 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

Ooooohhhh, This gonna be good. I am definitly keeping track of this thing.

#17 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

...'statues and mirrors you commissioned'?

Well, Luna is definitely the most Thankful Pony and, hey, where's a Luna emoticon when you need one?!

So...Twilight, shocked.

Fluttershy is never leaving her house again, is she?  Especially since this is the ONLY thing which might actually revive her career as a model.

Applejack...it honestly depends on whether or not Granny Smith thinks any 'improprieties' have already occurred and, therefore, whether a shotgun will be involved.

Rarity might be overjoyed by this actually, depending on which team she bats for (or what is 'socially acceptable' in this world).

Rainbow...again, depends on what's normal for this world and how much she's been accused of being a filly fooler.

Pinkie will throw a (or EIGHT) truly EPIC engagement party(ies), then Bachlorette party(ies), then reception party(ies).

And when Shining Armor finally gets around to asking Cadence to marry him, Twilight will be her own aunt/niece.  Get the banjos!:heart:

#18 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 5 · 1 ·

'nuff said.

#19 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I have never wanted to be any one of those ponies more in all my life!!! :twilightblush:

I TOTALLY wanna be married to a princess pony or two! :twilightsmile:

#20 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

This is very amusing. Going to keep my eye on this one.

#21 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

An interresting concept and funny. You have my attention

#22 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>1808603

Yesss, I wanna be Twilight.

#23 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

...

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...This, my good friend, is the greatest thing ever.

I need at least another two chapters before the end of the world. Pretty please? :fluttershysad:

No, seriously, I'm laughing my ass off right now :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

#24 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

awesome, just pure awesome!:pinkiehappy:

#25 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · 1 ·

... :rainbowkiss:

#26 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 4 · ·

I wonder how long it will take Celestia to understand that the younger Twilight was not asking Celestia to marry her but was asking Celestia to Marry Her!

:rainbowlaugh:

:twilightblush: :trollestia:

#27 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

This is really hilarious...:twilightsmile: go on!

#30 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

There are few stories that truly draw me in nowadays, this is one of those, keep up the hilarious story :rainbowlaugh:

#31 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

Run, Twilight, run for your life and never look back, take only what you can carry, and your friends! :twilightoops:

#32 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · 3 ·

>>1809634 <--- This.

#34 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:THIS is the FUNNIEST thing i ever read in my life.....     please continue!:fluttercry:

yay!:yay:

#35 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: five moustaches for you my good sir, for making my evening.

I would like to read more.

#36 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

Utterly fantastic. Continue!  :trollestia:

#37 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Awkward wording in some places.. also, do you have some sort of feud on using pronouns? For example here: "Celestia’s eyes shot open as the Princess of the Day suddenly found herself awake" should be "Celestia's eyes shot open as she suddenly found herself awake" just to get rid of that clunkiness. What you are doing here is also known as LUS too (Lavender Unicorn Syndrome) so watch over that.

Other than the awkward phrasing, this is quite good. A bit rushed, I thought, since you jump straight into Luna saying that she's going to marry all of the mane six. I got the idea from the synopsis that this was going to happen later on in the story.

Nevertheless, keep going and just keep in mind to use pronouns and the pony's actual names this time.

#38 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · 7 ·

I am reader number 666.

!drocsiD liah llA

#39 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · · 7 ·

I am reader number 666.

!drocsiD liah llA

#40 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Oh god this is epic.

And epic Twilight freakout in 3...2...1

#41 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 22h ago · · ·

this...this is God Tier comedy right here...

possibly the funniest fic iv read i expect great things from you ...great things!

#42 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 21h ago · · ·

I don't know how you did it but this ONE CHAPTER just put this story automatically in my top 15 favorite stories at least. and i have read many MANY good stories. that said, i will keep a close eye on this one.

#43 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 20h ago · · ·

Whatever you do, if you accomplish nothing else in your life, FINISH THIS FIC.

I swear, by Celestia's beard this is comedy platinum.

#44 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 11h ago · 9 · ·

Celestia's attempts to get the media off her back:

:trollestia: : "Well, it's quite simple you see; my sister is a troll.  It's the day after nightmare night - a holiday where ponies enjoy pranking each other - and she's the patron of the holiday.  Did you expect anything else?"

Media ponies leave in disgust to write up article on Luna's prank of doom, and Celestia heads back inside the castle.  She goes to her sister's room, opens the door, and starts yelling.

"Please tell me that this was a bad joke, Luna.  Please?"

Luna, half asleep now, looks up.  "No, I wish to marry six different mares all simultaneously without asking for their opinions firsts.  Further more, I want to have a single mortal pony able to claim that both of us are her wives, and that thus she has a Royal Harem.  Maybe next time you get a sister back after a thousand years, you'll tell her that the royal we and royal Canterlot voice are no longer used before sending her out in public for a night she's been looking forward to since finding out about it.  Now go handle the fallout while I sleep."

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Seriously, Wonderful.  :twilightsmile:  I will read more of this.  

#45 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 10h ago · · ·

Absolutely brilliant! Wonderfully written and characterized (so far). Hope it continues as we see the other friends.

#46 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 9h ago · · ·

As soon as I read the description, I mashed on the fave and upvote buttons with extreme prejudice.

#47 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 8h ago · · ·

wait you mean that she :applejackconfused:... and they ...  :rainbowderp:and and Luna :duck:

#48 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 14m ago · · ·

Oh, this is gonna be good. :pinkiehappy:

So much funny and such a great premise too.

I can't wait for the next chapter...:fluttercry: but I have to...:pinkiecrazy: WHAT AM I GONNA DO!!!! :raritydespair:

So yeah, great job, looking forward with a like and fav. :scootangel:

#49 · Chapter 1 · 83w, 6d ago · · ·

This is the best thing ever. You really need to continue soon.  I bet Rarity won't mind at all........... lol! :raritywink:

#50 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 6d ago · 17 · ·

Wow...honestly, wasn't expecting this big of a response from this.  And from more than a few big names on the site.  Fantastic.  So, here's chapter two...apologies if it seems a bit rushed, but that was largely by design; panicking Twilight and all.  Also, regarding the length...it got away from me, a bit.  I really need to work on that, I suppose, but at the same time, seems like its not the worst problem in the world to have.

Anyway, next chapter, things slow down a bit (in a good way, not a boring way), and expect more involvement from the Princesses.  This was basically the "Need to get everypony together"/initial reaction chapter.  Hope you all continue to enjoy.

Oh...and I'm sorry.  I really am.  But...I just couldn't help myself with two of the jokes.  If it makes anyone feel better, I feel great shame, but I just had to include them.

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