With her horn destroyed and her body lame, Twilight must now start her new life as an acting earth pony. Along the way, she meets a handsome young unicorn stallion who catches her eye. In her heart, however, she knows that no amount of romance can keep her from knowing that, no matter what, she is no longer magic. What will become of Twilight? Will she ever learn to cope with being powerless? Can true love help her find light in her darkest hour?
All the King's Mares (Part 1): http://www.fimfiction.net/story/67892/all-the-kings-mares-book-1-2
Leader of the Pack (Part 3): http://www.fimfiction.net/story/71188/leader-of-the-pack-book-3-3
Chapters (6)
This feels very rushed. The idea's nice though but I personally think it would be best if you try and spread things out a little bit. Give it some TLC and I think you'll have one heck of story
This seems like an interesting idea, but could use a few small alterations to turn it into a really good fic
Would you be interested in getting an indepth review or even just a list of pointers to work on?
(Joke) Alt. Title: The Rize And Fall Of A Previously Magical Actor
1808529 Yeah, I'm gonna be honest with you: I don't have much interest in writing about Twilie being incapacitated, so I did speed through that a little so I could get to the fun and interesting part. If I don't enjoy writing it, I know no one will enjoy reading it. I promise that it will slow down now that she's able to be mobile and independent again. And that's when it gets interesting!
1808586 No thanks. In my defense, this is a sequel to my previous work, All the King's Mares, and so if you're a little "WTH" about it, that's why. It literally begins shortly after the previous book ended. I wasn't sure if the moderators were gonna understand that, so I pretended it was an independent work until it received approval.
1808862 Hey, cool, I'm not the only gamer Brony in existence!
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But, sadly, I'm the only Brony who likes Beatallica.
1810204 Hey, I'm the only Brony who likes Dream Theater. I coincidentally just never cared too much for the Beatles...or Metallica...but we all know I'm extremely unusual in musical taste, so don't feel badly about it.
1810198 Thats fine, it's your choice so I won't ask again. Just one thing. If it is a sequel to another story, you may want to list that in the title page so that readers can find that quickly.
1810349 Yeah, I still need to do that. Again, I just got it approved, so I have yet the chance to update the description. But I will momentarily.
OHHHHHHHH MMMMMMYYY CELESTIA!!!!!!
1838154 Thanks for catching that; it's been fixed.
The saddest part is, I read through every chapter before publishing it to check for crap like that...ever since I found typos in this gazillioned (250)-paged novel I wrote, I've admitted defeat in finding typos. I still check, though. Thanks again. 
Cool
and FIRST COMMENT!!!! LOL 
And at this point, the food came flying out of my mouth...