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Omg Reaper... lol.
1786099 Lol hey buddy.
1786105 Nice pic lol... at least it is my favorite pony.
1786108 Ikr? sexy.
1786112 I'll give a thumb just for that.
1785886 Yes, let's. I'll meet you behind the shed in an few minutes.
1786150 Hey there Regi, sorry you didn't get here first.
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I was here first...
i like pie
1786398 Sounds fun.
well i was here last
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and cookies
1786463 Mmmmm cookiesssss...
not to mention muffins
and your stories they are all awsome
1786487 Aw shucks. I appreciate that.
cool, i like this faved tracked and enjoyed!
1786524 Thank you kindly.
Well that was certainly interesting! I like it.
1786531Thanks!
Liked for coverpic and concept, added to read later.
Should be good :3
1786561 Ooo~ the ever popular Clopplejack. Thank you for giving it a shot.
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1786576 Haha! Hurray for first picture referring to ones thoughts!
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>Calls me popular
>Has 1/9th my views
>Has only 5 less watchers
I'd say you're doing it right, and probably much better than I
Fuckit, reading now, finding out :P
1786603 Haha, well you still are regardless. :3 And thank you!
Nice story! Would more chapters be asking too much? ^^;
1786710 As for more chapters, no sadly. However, equals...maybe!
Nice story, great execution, shame about the grammatical problems with it, among which were:
-Spelling errors
-Missing punctuation
-Improper usage of contractions (I'll will - really?)
-Tense changes (between past/present)
This story, as it is right now, is good. But it could be a lot better.
1786736 Thanks for the critiques! Sorry it wasn't the greatest thing ever.
Damn.......IT'S BUCKING TWO A.M. IN THE MORING, WHY THE BUCK AM I STILL UP?! Shit...I'm going to be honest and say I tried to read the best I could, very, very, very detailed brother, I seriously loved it though I really dislike HIW I don't mind one bit if the animals are a bit human in apperance long as they have fur, feather, scales etc, and tails, you know? Shit, thannks for the really good story brother but I'm going to sleep
Yeah, that was awesome. Have a follow.
Spotted a couple typos for you ^^"
" Mine as well get some food then." ---> 'Might'?
" You make your way to your dresser and chang" ---> 'change'
"However, even though that is the case it seems like there would be any way I could even hope to make her happy. After all, I am a different species altogether.” --> Are you trying to say 'wouldn't'?
"You heard\ her let out a soft " --> You got a / in there buddy ;D
" but all you knew was that you wants her" ---> 'want'
"attempt to clear your head with a walk into town ,carrying a book that Macintosh" --> Comma needs to be moved next to town instead of carrying
Constructive criticism:
I love how much setup you have, how it goes from sexy to not sexy, with the portions of sexy steadily increasing. Your clopscenes are fantastic, but the other parts could use, perhaps, a little editing as they aren't quite as stimulating (ha ha)
Also, the narrator is annoyingly indecisive. I don't know why he's so uncertain, if he loves Aj, she's being this obvious, and he already wanted to be in Equestria. I'm pretty sure anypony would have taken that sweet mare far earlier. It doesn't matter that much though, as it works well to drive the story to such a good length.
^
That was written before I got to his explanation of wanting to resist because she was in heat. Makes perfect sense now, heh.
Write a sequel bud, here's my suggestion:
Some more sexy shmexy clop at the beginning and then reverting to good ol' romance up to right before the kid is born. Would probably be shorter, but it would be nice.
Oh yeah, that tail thing? I'm totally gonna use it. The tail manipulation was amazing, and I can't believe I didn't ever think of that before. *idea snatched*
DAT PICTURE!
Well....
That was hot
Can... can I help you edit this sexy story please?
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can i watch ?
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So, little abomination was born!
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score!
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>A wild editor emerges!
>Clopplejack uses proof-read!
>It's super effective!
1787357 Well honestly I was aiming for this duck-human(or something) hybrid from South Park but... well. Camel is goog too :P
Whoa! when did AppleJack get magical rope summoning powers?
maybe she ate the rope-rope fruit from one piece
It requires some serious proofing. Especially missing comas and incorrectly ended sentences followed by action description, but apart from that, pretty awesome. I rate it as 4.5/5 AJs.
That has to be the best damn Aj clop i have ever read. I mean there was acual story to it, 3 different scenes, Aj trolling and an arm-wrestle with big mac.
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Wow, you finished and it's up! Thumbed and Fav'd! And didn't I tell you after I read it that it might get the "Feature Box"?! Grats my friend! I told you, you have potential and I meant it! I'll have to read this again! I'm not big on anthro ponies, but this one...worth it!
Boo-yah.
I don't know about the whole rope bit, AJ shouldn't have magic. Nonetheless, that was surprisingly tasteful as far as clopfics go.
...FUCK MARRIAGE I'M OUT
1787473 if ya know what I meen