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Rainbow Dash is famous for her attraction to danger--it's her middle name, after all. But in private, she indulges a secret craving: she also likes to feel loved and protected. And Pinkie Pie, widely known as Ponyville's village clown, secretly likes to be the pony who loves and protects her.
Given how muh species-jargon you put in, this almost felt like it should have been Twilight/Dash. It was interesting, but really interrupted the flow. While its unique and I've not seen anything quite so... bondage, I feel like these two were so ooc they could've been replaced with anypony and it still would've felt the same.
Moar sub RD. Who doesn't like a good sub RD?
Well, a better question is who enjoys a well-written sub RD? I love it when writers can go into the psychology behind certain acts. The fact that you were able to make this both a convincing argument using factual information species-wise and still keep it erotic gives me no other stronger inclination than to tell you so and favorite this story.
your pussy is happy
i probably could have integrated that stuff better
if i tried
me too
go fuck a horse
oh wait...
yeah i always pictured dash as being one of those guys that acts tough to everyone
and then likes to get spanked in the bedroom
like a republican politician
yes
yeah that would be pretty cool
i'll keep that in mind
Wow that was better than I thought it was going to be. It was a very interesting delve into the psyches of these characters. You really should do one on Pinkie because this was was very interesting. As what I am sure was the intention the Rainbows thoughts and her psychology was the actual story and the sex was just a back drop for it.
I'm honestly having trouble putting how I feel about this story into words. I didn't really find it all that erotic, but I don't feel like I wasted my time reading it.
It's like... It was a character study that just happened to involve sex, and in that regard it was very well done!
It just didn't do much for me in the way of wanting to clop to it.
you guys are right
this was meant less as clop and more as an exploration of how i characterize rainbow dash--she's outwardly confident and egoistic, but she acts that way because she's actually very insecure. she's caught between an inability to trust others and a burning desire for intimacy, which is part of why she's so loyal to those she cares about but tries to hide every negative emotion from everyone, afraid of being too open with them
if i do one for pinkie, it would revolve more around responsibility. but you'll find out more if that comes to pass
also i just wanted to write something that showed people/ponies having sex in a way that wasn't just rauchy lolporn.
actually i can only think of four other stories that actually bother exploring psychological interactions in relationships with power imbalances (spike's really, really, really bad day, risk aware consensual pony, rainbow/Dash, and competent villains).
god damn i sound like a fucking egghead
analyzing the fuck out of this shit
who cares
oh and also stealing harmony is really good but that's technically a rape fic so it doesn't count
but rapetrain-express is good at feels and psychology
Surprisingly good, I liked their interactions *I mean their social interaction, though the physical was pretty good too* and my only real complain as you've probably seen more then enough times is the need of a proof-reader. You had some interesting takes on the Pegasus and Earth Pony Societies when it came to how it affected their sexual nature and details like that always make a story more interesting; at least to me.
I don't read clopfics unless they're done horribly or when they're just plain funny, but after being told repeatedly that i need to read this, i sat down and immediately had my face melted.
Seriously, this is one of the most emotional and thought provoking things I've ever read. It's taken something usually used purely for sexual uses and made it completely and utterly emotional. Allowing someone to take everything you are and pulling you apart and trusting them to put you back together is the apex of intimacy and affection.
The greatest thing i can say about this fic is that I can't get it out of my head.
Bravo.
hey thanks i'm glad you enjoyed it
and i'm pleased that it turned out so well
i wasn't really going for a porn story
well i was in the beginning
but clop honestly doesn't do much for me
so i only like clop stories if they're
1) emotionally engaging
or
2) extreme enough to provoke an emotional response
and i leave the second one to guys like rapetrain and anongladje
pretty sure an mlpfim episode wouldn't include graphic bondage porn
but thanks i like the way it turned out
Wow... okay then I think bondage actually makes sense to me now...
This is a fantastic look into loyalty, Pegasus psychology, bondage, and trust. This is how BDSM fics should be done, right here. Every moment was sweet in its trust-building way, and I... should probably go to sleep instead of spending half an hour finding ways to express how happy this story of yours made me. Suffice it to say that it was incredibly obvious throughout how much the two of them love each other, and that's beautiful.
"Do you trust me... with your life?"
Holy fuck that is fucking hot as fuck.
I think I remember reading somewhere that the most erotic words anyone can say are: "I trust you".
I happen to agree.
Anyway, this was amazing. I love clop that isn't just mindless fucking but has some kind of relationship and meaning backing it. This had that in spades. Wonderful depiction of Dash's psychology; it's very believable. I'm always impressed when a story can temporarily convince me of a ship that I don't support (PinkieDash in this case), and this one certainly did. I really felt the love between these two ponies. Great job.
There were a few odd typos (missing words mostly) but I couldn't even keep track of them because I was too engrossed in the plot. I might re-read this later.
Wow, Just wow. Never have I read a more emotionally engaging, extremely powerful story on this website. Hay, you were even able to make the clop emotional! Your expertise in psychology really supported the Dash's transformation into such an emotional state.
A few typos, misspellings, forgotten words here and there, but I honestly don't think you would need a proofreader; the point gets across just fine, and if you read though the text one more time looking for mistakes, you would be able to find them all.
It's rare to find an S&M clopfic (or any story, for that matter) that focuses so heavily on the feelings of the characters, but you raised the bar tenfold.
Keep it up; I'll be watching.
--Warlord 
i just have to say that you did an amazing job here.
i love how you focused more on the interaction and feelings between PP and RD instead of the sex, and in my opinion, it would have been better without the graphical parts.
keep doing more things like this.
you have earned this 
PS: make a sequel. please please please please please?
I am so glad I kept this in my iThing's reading list back when we had a relapse of 502fiction. I would not want to have missed this. Trust and submissiveness done as superbly as in rainbow/Dash is not easily stumbled upon and I honestly couldn't say which one I enjoyed more. Faved, watched, and hoping for that sequel.
>>2116386 Well, Darling, if you insist... 
I love that Pinkie is clearly making sure that Dash is alright with everything. So many people on this site seem to think that BDSM is just about pain and dominance, and I'm so glad that you took it to trust and love and safety, like it should be. I love how you write Dash as a sub, how she's eager to please and caught up in the duality of loving and hating the power Pinkie has over her. I loved the slow buildup to the steaminess, the gradual change from a playful bath to bondage sexytimes instead of a look here's some ponies suddenly sex approach that sometimes happens. I love how the story is introspective and intelligent enough that it's not just about ponies having sex, but at the same time, the sex is well- written with just enough detail to be goddamn hot.
This is a sexy-awesome story, thanks for writing.
This was tl;dr for me for the moment, because Im an idiot and start reading fics when I have little time, but I read enough to know two things:
A) It is very well written
B) You actually have a deep and complex understanding of D/s, and for that you have all of my respect. If I may ask, what side of the fence do you fall on?
originally this was just a regular clopfic
but then it transformed
into this
and i was like wow
how the hell did this happen
although i think the buildup could have been better
i wanted to show them having dinner together or something
but i'm so lazzzzyyyyy
yeah well your mom is 
anyway i think could have integrated many of those facts better
so you're right
do it faggot
there needs to be more unshitty clop
i've been thinking about doing one that continues dash's thought about how she would let pinkie hurt her
i think that's worth exploring
but i would like to do it from pinkie's point of view
because domination is more than just "lol i am yuor mast0r plzmi bich"
pinkie is now completely responsible for dash's well being
and more importantly she's now also responsible for measuring how much of that well being she can safely take away without seriously hurting dash emotionally
i mean it wouldn't be like whips and chains and weird shit like that
but there are less extreme ways to cause pain that aren't as horrifying
but whatever we'll see
are you the guy who posted it on reddit
in agreement with you i am
i think the emotion makes it more erotic
hey i know that comic
1. thanks
2. generally the outside, but sometimes i sneak in to trade with the jews in the barracks
I'm a cuntlicker, not a faggot. ;P Not like you could've known.
I'm still getting a feel for the setting, really. I might try eventually, tho. I'm including some clop eventually in a much longer story, but I doubt anybody'd be reading it for clop.
FWIW, I'd read the fuck out of a sequel to this that just saw them on a date. (I'd hope for clop at the end, but hey, who wouldn't? Your clop is spectacular.)
I read this because a friend who is a Psych Major suggested it to me. I don't normally read Clop ( except that one time but I didn't know what it was until I was two thirds of the way through but I digress.) But this one is ok, even if bondage isn't my thing( incidentally BDSM refers to bondage, and dominance play, and pain, there's no pain here so this is just D&S). I would like to see more of this relationship, like how they got together or how much these alternate personas bleed through into the real Pinkie and Dashie; particularly when the two are alone together but not rutting. of course my preference would be for a lower rated story, but I'll take what I can get.
Also, dose this take place during or after season three?
edit: confusion of terms
A very well written story, kudos on that.
So why still a downvote? Because this takes Dash's character and obliterates it.
Seeing Dash going through terror like that mixed with arousal, and the very real portrayal of what happens after is well done. And completely terrifying.
When you give up your individuality to that extent, you're never going back to being your old self.
Especially how Dash acts afterwards. If something, anything were to happen to Pinkie, Dash would kill herself. Because that's what this sort of thing does.
Excuse me while I go take a hot shower and try to forget I ever read this.
> Because this takes Dash's character and obliterates it.
I would disagree -- this takes Dash's character and adds something that is unexpected as far as canon goes. But! Psychology being what it is, this is perfectly reasonable, and frequently the case. Dominant personality types (like Dash) do have a certain tendency towards seeking release through submission. (The opposite is also true to some extent.)
One of the most brilliant things about this piece is how plausible a piece of sexuality this is for Dash, while at the same time being wrapped in delicious delicious clop bacon.
> When you give up your individuality to that extent, you're never going back to being your old self.
Letting someone have temporary control over life and death with you -- and knowing you love them enough that you'd do anything for them -- doesn't automatically imply giving up individuality overall. (And we are talking about Dash here, not just anypony.)
As someone involved in the BDSM community, this isn't true at all. Yes, trusting someone completely and giving them full power over you does give the feeling portrayed here, and Rainbow Dash's reaction "afterwards" is something traditionally called "subdrop". A dominant's responsibility is to do aftercare, and, honestly, just because both have climaxed does not mean the session is done. Emotions are extremely high at this point, and it takes a while for the sub to calm back down.
That being said, although it is devastating to lose your Dom, subs don't kill themselves over it anymore than the average couple.
Honestly, it's kind of offensive to imply that. It's not getting rid of your individuality. Rainbow Dash isn't giving up who she is, she's trusting Pinkie to take care of her, physically and emotionally, which, by the way, is an incredibly brave thing to do, and really requires a lot of strength.
As someone involved in the BDSM community, this isn't true at all. Yes, trusting someone completely and giving them full power over you does give the feeling portrayed here, and Rainbow Dash's reaction "afterwards" is something traditionally called "subdrop". A dominant's responsibility is to do aftercare, and, honestly, just because both have climaxed does not mean the session is done. Emotions are extremely high at this point, and it takes a while for the sub to calm back down.
i find that in these types of fics, it's often the aftercare i enjoy reading about the most, for some reason. when it's well-written, it can be seriously emotional and all that.
That being said, although it is devastating to lose your Dom, subs don't kill themselves over it anymore than the average couple.
yeah i think the only way dash would kill herself under the influence of this story's activities is if somebody came in and shot pinkie in the head right after they were done having sex or something.
Honestly, it's kind of offensive to imply that. It's not getting rid of your individuality. Rainbow Dash isn't giving up who she is, she's trusting Pinkie to take care of her, physically and emotionally, which, by the way, is an incredibly brave thing to do, and really requires a lot of strength.
right
she's not giving up anything except control
but she's afraid that she's giving up everything
because she's used to being able to control everything
and that's pretty scary
A very well written story, kudos on that.
thanks
So why still a downvote? Because this takes Dash's character and obliterates it.
really? i disagree. dash seems just like those big beefy guys who flex their muscles at the gym, then go hire prostitutes to spank them in hotel rooms. people often tend to be the opposite in bed of how they are irl
When you give up your individuality to that extent, you're never going back to being your old self.
dash didn't give up any of her individuality. she was afraid that she would, and ended up deciding it didn't matter because she loved pinkie more than being who she was. all she really did was let pinkie tie her up and have sex with her for a short time--something lots of normal couples do all the time. being helpless just brought out a side of dash that she was repressing because it conflicted with the other extreme of her personality.
my point: saying you wouldn't go back to normal after that is like saying you wouldn't go back to normal after you cried from reading my little dashie (you did, you wimp)
Especially how Dash acts afterwards. If something, anything were to happen to Pinkie, Dash would kill herself. Because that's what this sort of thing does.
i suppose you're one of those people who thinks masochists enjoy having dental work done, too
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and pinkie pie 
I can't wait for 100 comments cause I would love to see more of this Pinkie!
I mean, them -- do have a dental fetish, but it's very rare.
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