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The Mane-Event, a popular stage show in Manehattan, has acquired a rare creature they intend to use as part of a new act. Their typical animal handlers prove inadequate for the new job so they invite Equestria's best to be the caretaker-- Fluttershy. Moving to a new city requires the inconvenience of finding a new place to stay, however. What fortune that Trixie, one of the primary acts of the Mane-Event, just so happens to have free space at her apartment.

And then the Element of Kindness lived with the Element of Egotism.

First Published
13th Jan 2012
Last Modified
23rd Jul 2012
#1 · 152w, 6d ago · 2 · · Nemesis ·

HAH! I love it. Well-written, funny, nicely paced.

Bring me another!

You had me rolling at "Was all of this in Trixie's kitchen?"

Excellent stuff.

#2 · 152w, 6d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Lol, Trixie. You dun goofed. :yay:

#3 · 152w, 6d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Thank Celestia that was a nightmare.... That would have jumped the shark a bit to much :p

#4 · 152w, 6d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Damn, Fluttershy, you're irritating!

#5 · 152w, 6d ago · 1 · · Nemesis ·

Heh, very good work! Really cute and funny to see these two come together (in a non-shipping way for once!) and just muck up each other's carefully structured life.

Trixie thought Twilight Sparkle was her worse nightmare? Oh, how naive you are Trixie. How naive you are...

Also, nice to see that there's no down-on-her-luck Trixie here. She's actually become successful! Honestly, the fandom has enough of that to fill up a dragon's horde. Though, with her new nemesis now living with her, who knows if she'll be able to keep it...

Really looking forward to seeing more of this.

#6 · 152w, 5d ago · · · Nemesis ·

I always thought Trixie and Fluttershy had an interesting dynamic, shipping or otherwise. Can't wait to see where this goes.

#7 · 152w, 5d ago · · · Nemesis ·

this was great! had me loling frequently. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss: yay!:yay:

#8 · 152w, 5d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Uh, you know, the story seems pretty good, but... there are squares, triangles and > symbols all over the place and it's incredibly distracting. Am I the only one having this problem? because you can't imagine how much it takes you out of the story.

#9 · 151w, 5d ago · · · Nemesis ·

"I’ll have to find someone to take of you"

There might be something missing here.

Anyway, this story is awesome. You came up with a scenario in which both characters can play out their ful potential :fluttershyouch::trixieshiftright: . Wasn't sure if I was going to track, but now I am.

#10 · 150w, 5d ago · · · The Devil ·

Thanks mucho, all of you. Glad I could entertain.

>>127949

Haha, I feared people might read that part and think "too far" and abandon ship but I'm glad you all forged through it to discover that I didn't have a serious brain derp :derpyderp1: (or at least no more than usual :derpytongue2:).

>>128798

Hmm, I'm not having those problems on my end. Could that be a browser issue?

>>147550

Thank you for that typo. 'Tis corrected.

#11 · 150w, 5d ago · · · The Devil ·

PINK!!!!

Oh Trixie, you can't resist Fluttershy's charms forever! It's only a matter of time before you consider her a friend.

#12 · 150w, 5d ago · · · The Devil ·

A lot of D'aww here. Lovin' it!

Funny to see Trixie trying to debate Fluttershy but unable to even get that much satisfaction. The horror!

I noticed a few grammatical glitches here and there.

"There was a series of loud squeaks."

[ should be were]

There were a few more but now I can't seem to find them.:twilightangry2:

Keep at it!

#13 · 150w, 5d ago · · · The Devil ·

Great! Found this a while ago and have been looking forward to more. Fantastic continuation of the plot. :yay:Everyone is in character, and there were very few grammar errors. My only gripe is that i want more! New chapters soon? :trixieshiftright:

#14 · 150w, 5d ago · · · The Devil ·

>>165847

I'm pretty sure "was" was correct.

"Were" is plural, but there was only one series of squeaks.

#15 · 150w, 5d ago · · · The Devil ·

Brings new meaning to the phrase "kill em' with kindness". :rainbowlaugh:

#16 · 150w, 3d ago · · · The Devil ·

This is one of these stories where I wish I could rate again and again.

Heh, the shenanigans here are so precious. Seeing Fluttershy trying to be mean is both hilarious and frightening. It had to be pure torture for Trixie only getting one helping!

Man, the show business in Manehatten is cutthroat. The big performers are on edge everyday to keep their jobs. That boss pony sure knows how to keep the drama flowing.

Destroyer of Worlds, huh? From Trixie's perspective, that's probably not going far enough.

Keep it up!

Truely, Fluttershy's reign of terror knows no bounds.

Fluttershy, Crusher of Dreams, Ruiner of Worlds and Hoarder of Helpings. That insufferable bitch! :yay:

You don't know how much I love this. They're pretty much perfect foils for each other. People don't write them together anywhere near often enough, whether you ship them or have them at each other's throats Fluttershy and Trixie go together like PB&J. Which is weird, because they're never even in the same scene together.

Update faster! DO IT FILLY

>>273871

Maralagidyne has it right with the proper grammatical use of "were" and "was" I do believe, but I do appreciate you pointing out what you thought was an error. Corrections are always welcome. Glad you're enjoying the story!

>>171126

You're not the only one...

>>273925

And just think, Angel was living with her for years before this. I don't know how he made it.

>>274350

I know right? Give major props to TheParagon for realizing the brilliance of the two being in the same living quarters. They have a chemistry that pretty much writes itself, or, you know, I wish it wrote itself... Hello keyboard, we meet again.

Thank you all for taking the time to comment on my story. I'm ecstatic to even have any readers but it means something even more when those readers take the effort to put their fingers to the keyboard and write something, whether it be criticism, praise, or just a quick mental note because they have anterograde amnesia and can't remember how they got to this page. You folks are awesome.

I don't know which temptation's stronger: to give Fluttershy a hug or to give Trixie a shiv.

Oh god, she'd use it on... never mind, I answered my own question.

It seems Trixie is doomed to lose for eternity, ahahaha.

#23 · 139w, 1d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Hey! I know you! :raritywink: This is just lovely so far, and I can't wait to read on when I have a moment. Congratulations on your feature. :raritystarry:

Pretty good. I feel so... sorry for Trixie. And it's not Fluttershy's fault, either. So i feel sorry for her, too. Ack!

Poor, poor Trixie...  Her world is collapsing because Fluttershy is, well :yay:.

Keep this up, it makes me smile endlessly.:pinkiehappy:

Really enjoying the odd couple dynamic. Keep up the good. Really looking forward to reading more.

Sigh, another to add to the watch list.

:pinkiehappy: I love it!

I absolutely love the way you've captured Trixie, it feels like her personality seeps through the writing. "Did the pegasus pack a teapot or did she buy one? Both actions seemed ridiculous." :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

You had me worried a bit here and there with Fluttershy, but you pulled her off very well too, and the overall writing qualtiy is great!

Also.. in ch.2 "She wished they had staid fuzzy."

Why does Trixie have a drawing tablet?

#29 · 139w, 1d ago · · · Nemesis ·

This has nothing to do with anything, but my name's Ivy. I feel like I somehow just got to meet Fluttershy for realsies. I'm so honored. :twilightsmile: :yay: :rainbowkiss:


....This story is hilarious btw, good job!

#30 · 139w, 1d ago · 1 · · Nemesis ·

Things I love about this story/chapter:

+ The interactions between Trixie and Fluttershy.  Both feel very in-character!  (Especially Trixie, since she only appeared in one episode).

+ Big Entrance's train-wreck of a metaphor

+ Trixie actually being fairly successful as an entertainer, as opposed to the "poor, homeless Trixie" that's the usual around here.

One question I have, though.  Fluttershy doesn't seem to recognize the box with wires as a television.  While I honestly don't think Fluttershy (or Twilight, or Applejack, or Pinkie Pie) would own a television, I'd think Rarity would have a small one (for watching various drama series while working on her latest order of clothing) and Rainbow Dash would probably have one (nothng like crashing onto your couch and zoning out in front of the TV for an hour or so after a long day of work/training)

#31 · 139w, 1d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Wait, do hooves even have palms?

Also, excuse me while I rant about a pet peeve: aaargh aargh Shake Spear is the one human name you don't have to ponify aargh

#32 · 139w, 1d ago · 1 · · The Devil ·

Oh man, poor Trixie.

Fics like these really put feet to the fire when it comes to "Friendship is Magic" being the end all credo of Equestria. I don't mean that it makes the fic worse for it, rather its nice to take off the kid gloves without skewing Grimdark, and better yet when it manages to stay vanilla to the show. Both Trixie and Flutters seem to have trouble seperating stage persona from their normal dynamic, so it can't be good if Trixie does uncover elements of Flutterrage, and decides to draw that out. :flutterrage:

>>342657

No no, you've got it backwards. Trixie needs a hug and Fluttershy needs a shiv.

#35 · 139w, 23h ago · · · Nemesis ·

I love this. Reading more. This might actually make me like Trixie.

#36 · 139w, 23h ago · · · The Devil ·

Sweet Harmony, I think my heart just twisted into a knot from all the squee. I wish I'd found this sooner. Hue makes me suspicious beyond belief, though. He seems like a nice pony, but I've got this creeping suspicion that he's actually a bucket of sleaze trying to get with our 'Shy.:ajbemused:

How could anyone be mad at Fluttershy?:fluttercry:

Oh my gosh it's true. i'm addicted >< I love it and i can't wait to see how this goes. more please more!

Good lord....Things happen to me as I read this story.

Horrible, awful, unadulterated totally G-rated things! More. I. Must. Have. MOAR!

The main reason (well, one of them anyway) I love this story so much is because you've actually written a talented, successful, altogether-unchanged-from-her-highly-obnoxious-self-centered-canon Trixie, which is something I don't see much of in fanfics. Most other bronies would have her written as a woobie whose career was utterly ruined by the fiasco in Ponyville, but you...you are something else.

Chuckfinley's interpretation of Trixie in his Banishment Decree fic is the only possible equal to yours in my opinion other than her canon self. Honestly, I may like his even more than yours for several reasons that shall not be discussed, but yours is pretty sweet all the same.

:moustache: I'll just leave this here.

I have to admit, this story is the first one to really "sell" me on the whole Trixie thing. I just plain didn't like her before, but this... This was hilarious and fun. Good stuff, keep it up. :eeyup:

Hey, look,  FIMfiction is back up! Also, take a gander at these blocks of text. Multiple posts is a concept my brain doesn't comprehend.

>>342657

I would avoid giving sharp implements to either of them (though hugs are encouraged).

>>364441

No, just most of it.

>>466711

Hey! I know you too!:pinkiegasp: Well thank you for the praise, dear sir. I'll give you a signed notice excusing you from reading the rest of my story immediately, due to the fact that I still have to devour a horde of chapters of thy own story (don't tell my boss).

>>466800

'Tis good to know I managed to create sympathy for both of them. Mission accomplished! Oh, and just blame Big Entrance. I'm sure it's all his fault some way or another.

>>466820

Fluttershy is pretty much Trixie’s glowing green crystal. Glad it proved entertaining!

>>467585

I really do love sticking two characters which have no business being together, well, er, together. My story thanks you for the watch!

>>467809

Many thanks! It gladdens me to hear I pulled Trixie off well. In case it wasn't obvious, I'm rather endeared to her character, so doing her justice was quite important to me. Were there problem areas with my portrayal of Fluttershy? Feel free to point them out. This is a criticism welcome zone.

"Staid"? Egads, how archaic of me. I'll have to fix that. Thank you for pointing it out!

>>467896

Shhh. Don't over-analyze the cover picture. Keep it on the DL and no one will notice. :rainbowderp:

Actually it's because it's the first panel of this comic, which was the inspiration for this story. TheParagon's portrayal of Trixie is different than mine, however, thus the item discrepancy.

>>468159

Suddenly, inadvertent personalization! Quite awesome. I hope my character carried the name well. Thank you for the read!

>>468865

Well thank you! To me, Trixie is a lot more fun to write when she's on a pedestal, or rather, on a pedestal she suddenly has to share with somepony else.

The way I envisioned it, Ponyville doesn't even have its own channels. It's far too backwoods to have broadcasting stations. Of course, this might be an exaggeration of its podunk nature (which I hope doesn't break immersion). Either way, though, Fluttershy doesn't strike me as a pony whose much acquainted with technology.

>>469086

Hmm, I suppose they probably do not have palms. I guess they'd be soles, or, better yet, apex of frog.

Shake Spear? Doesn't that make him sound more like a cavepony?

>>469191

This is an excellent point. I do believe that one can make a FIM story that is deeper/more mature yet still maintain the same flavor as the show. Many stories have done this to great effect and stand out for it.

>>469768

Trixie, apparently. It's not her fault she was born without a soul. You have my gratitude for the read.

>>470727

Keep in mind, if these feelings my story invokes require therapy, I can't be held responsible. But yes, thank you for the praise! Like I've said, high-horse Trixie is best Trixie (and oh my is there an abundance of woobie).

As soon as I can get over my disinterest in Gilda as a character, I really ought to read that at some point. I'm a big fan of Burn Notice and I can imagine it'll be hard to beat Trixie/Sam (or at least, I'm assuming that's who she's standing in for).

>>470265

Aha, and the truth comes out! :twilightsmile: Thank you. I should be finishing the next chapter fairly soon (all eyes on "should").

>>471109

Yes, another Trixie convert! You know you love her obnoxiousness.

>>472903

My complaint really only revolved around how into the fight Fluttershy seemed, but obviously she was not wholeheartedly into it. So, like I said you wrote her quite well! I was only worried for a brief moment.

And I can't get over how much I love the way you've written Trixie :rainbowkiss:.

I don't even like Trixie. I LOVE this story, and can't wait for more. ... Well, I didn't like Trixie :trixieshiftright:

This has been a fun read, Trixie truly is in her own personal hell. An overally sweet and cute one but hell none the less.

The characters are spot on and they're interactions a joy to read. Poor Trixie and her adorable no-longer temporary but now a full on roommate.

:trixieshiftleft::fluttershyouch:

>>472903 yeah, Big Entrance is a total flankhole here. He's playing both sides, but my main sympathy is for Trixie.

#45 · 138w, 4d ago · · · Nemesis ·

Pffftt. Ahahahaa. Wow. . . I really thought that the dream Trixie was having was real until she woke up.

Good job on the first chapter. Really grabbed my interest. And now to see the rest of this show.

#46 · 138w, 4d ago · · · The Devil ·

:rainbowlaugh: This is so beautiful. I'm grinning from ear to ear.

Way to capture Trixie and all her narcissistic self. Not to mention Fluttershy, who seems no different than a Disney princess.

Ooooooh, can't express how happy I am that Trixie gave an outstanding performance.

I can only imagine the next chapter having Fluttershy's overjoyed reaction to it and Trixie's glare.

>>273871  Destroyer of Worlds?!  But... that was what Davros called the Doctor!  D:  FLUTTERSHY IS THE REAL DOCTOR WHOOVES!  The hourglass pony was a red herring all along!  :pinkiegasp:

#49 · 138w, 15h ago · · · Friends ·

The scene with Trixie whispering in Fluttershy's ear was perfect. And that plan was so cruel. I feel no sympathy for Trixie,:rainbowwild:. Well done.

#50 · 138w, 15h ago · · · Friends ·

Trixie, yiu have gone too far!!!!

I hope she makes this all  better next chapter.

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