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    Coconutswallow's Stories (3)

    • Hostile Takeover
      Fluttershy heads to Manehattan and ends up living with Trixie.

      44,898 words · 8,333 views · 637 likes · 6 dislikes
    • Fight the Power
      The Alicorn Amulet has corrupted Twilight and compelled her to take over Ponyville, leaving Trixie and Fluttershy as the only ones able to stop her.
      5,857 words · 1,016 views · 103 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Asphalt and Trouble
      Applejack has to prevent the last motorcycle manufacturer in the country from being ruined by its ruthless vice president and stop a plot to ruin the reputation of the biker gangs in the Sinks.
      4,632 words · 121 views · 14 likes · 0 dislikes

    The Mane-Event, a popular stage show in Manehattan, has acquired a rare creature they intend to use as part of a new act. Their typical animal handlers prove inadequate for the new job so they invite Equestria's best to be the caretaker-- Fluttershy. Moving to a new city requires the inconvenience of finding a new place to stay, however. What fortune that Trixie, one of the primary acts of the Mane-Event, just so happens to have free space at her apartment.

    And then the Element of Kindness lived with the Element of Egotism.

    First Published
    13th Jan 2012
    Last Modified
    23rd Jul 2012

    Comments ( 210 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    HAH! I love it. Well-written, funny, nicely paced.

    Bring me another!

    You had me rolling at "Was all of this in Trixie's kitchen?"

    Excellent stuff.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Lol, Trixie. You dun goofed. :yay:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Thank Celestia that was a nightmare.... That would have jumped the shark a bit to much :p

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Damn, Fluttershy, you're irritating!

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Heh, very good work! Really cute and funny to see these two come together (in a non-shipping way for once!) and just muck up each other's carefully structured life.

    Trixie thought Twilight Sparkle was her worse nightmare? Oh, how naive you are Trixie. How naive you are...

    Also, nice to see that there's no down-on-her-luck Trixie here. She's actually become successful! Honestly, the fandom has enough of that to fill up a dragon's horde. Though, with her new nemesis now living with her, who knows if she'll be able to keep it...

    Really looking forward to seeing more of this.

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I always thought Trixie and Fluttershy had an interesting dynamic, shipping or otherwise. Can't wait to see where this goes.

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 4d ago · · ·
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    this was great! had me loling frequently. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss: yay!:yay:

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Uh, you know, the story seems pretty good, but... there are squares, triangles and > symbols all over the place and it's incredibly distracting. Am I the only one having this problem? because you can't imagine how much it takes you out of the story.

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    "I’ll have to find someone to take of you"

    There might be something missing here.

    Anyway, this story is awesome. You came up with a scenario in which both characters can play out their ful potential :fluttershyouch::trixieshiftright: . Wasn't sure if I was going to track, but now I am.

    #10 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Thanks mucho, all of you. Glad I could entertain.

    >>127949

    Haha, I feared people might read that part and think "too far" and abandon ship but I'm glad you all forged through it to discover that I didn't have a serious brain derp :derpyderp1: (or at least no more than usual :derpytongue2:).

    >>128798

    Hmm, I'm not having those problems on my end. Could that be a browser issue?

    >>147550

    Thank you for that typo. 'Tis corrected.

    #11 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 4d ago · · ·
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    PINK!!!!

    Oh Trixie, you can't resist Fluttershy's charms forever! It's only a matter of time before you consider her a friend.

    #12 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 4d ago · · ·
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    A lot of D'aww here. Lovin' it!

    Funny to see Trixie trying to debate Fluttershy but unable to even get that much satisfaction. The horror!

    I noticed a few grammatical glitches here and there.

    "There was a series of loud squeaks."

    [ should be were]

    There were a few more but now I can't seem to find them.:twilightangry2:

    Keep at it!

    #13 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Great! Found this a while ago and have been looking forward to more. Fantastic continuation of the plot. :yay:Everyone is in character, and there were very few grammar errors. My only gripe is that i want more! New chapters soon? :trixieshiftright:

    #14 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>165847

    I'm pretty sure "was" was correct.

    "Were" is plural, but there was only one series of squeaks.

    #15 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Brings new meaning to the phrase "kill em' with kindness". :rainbowlaugh:

    #16 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This is one of these stories where I wish I could rate again and again.

    #17 · Chapter 3 · 64w, 4h ago · · ·
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    Heh, the shenanigans here are so precious. Seeing Fluttershy trying to be mean is both hilarious and frightening. It had to be pure torture for Trixie only getting one helping!

    Man, the show business in Manehatten is cutthroat. The big performers are on edge everyday to keep their jobs. That boss pony sure knows how to keep the drama flowing.

    Destroyer of Worlds, huh? From Trixie's perspective, that's probably not going far enough.

    Keep it up!

    #18 · Chapter 3 · 64w, 3h ago · · ·
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    Truely, Fluttershy's reign of terror knows no bounds.

    #19 · Chapter 3 · 63w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Fluttershy, Crusher of Dreams, Ruiner of Worlds and Hoarder of Helpings. That insufferable bitch! :yay:

    You don't know how much I love this. They're pretty much perfect foils for each other. People don't write them together anywhere near often enough, whether you ship them or have them at each other's throats Fluttershy and Trixie go together like PB&J. Which is weird, because they're never even in the same scene together.

    Update faster! DO IT FILLY

    #20 · Chapter 3 · 63w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>273871

    Maralagidyne has it right with the proper grammatical use of "were" and "was" I do believe, but I do appreciate you pointing out what you thought was an error. Corrections are always welcome. Glad you're enjoying the story!

    >>171126

    You're not the only one...

    >>273925

    And just think, Angel was living with her for years before this. I don't know how he made it.

    >>274350

    I know right? Give major props to TheParagon for realizing the brilliance of the two being in the same living quarters. They have a chemistry that pretty much writes itself, or, you know, I wish it wrote itself... Hello keyboard, we meet again.

    Thank you all for taking the time to comment on my story. I'm ecstatic to even have any readers but it means something even more when those readers take the effort to put their fingers to the keyboard and write something, whether it be criticism, praise, or just a quick mental note because they have anterograde amnesia and can't remember how they got to this page. You folks are awesome.

    #21 · Chapter 3 · 61w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    I don't know which temptation's stronger: to give Fluttershy a hug or to give Trixie a shiv.

    Oh god, she'd use it on... never mind, I answered my own question.

    #22 · Chapter 3 · 60w, 3d ago · · ·
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    It seems Trixie is doomed to lose for eternity, ahahaha.

    #23 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 17h ago · · ·
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    Hey! I know you! :raritywink: This is just lovely so far, and I can't wait to read on when I have a moment. Congratulations on your feature. :raritystarry:

    #24 · Chapter 3 · 57w, 16h ago · · ·
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    Pretty good. I feel so... sorry for Trixie. And it's not Fluttershy's fault, either. So i feel sorry for her, too. Ack!

    #25 · Chapter 3 · 57w, 16h ago · · ·
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    Poor, poor Trixie...  Her world is collapsing because Fluttershy is, well :yay:.

    Keep this up, it makes me smile endlessly.:pinkiehappy:

    #26 · Chapter 3 · 57w, 13h ago · · ·
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    Really enjoying the odd couple dynamic. Keep up the good. Really looking forward to reading more.

    Sigh, another to add to the watch list.

    #27 · Chapter 3 · 57w, 12h ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy: I love it!

    I absolutely love the way you've captured Trixie, it feels like her personality seeps through the writing. "Did the pegasus pack a teapot or did she buy one? Both actions seemed ridiculous." :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

    You had me worried a bit here and there with Fluttershy, but you pulled her off very well too, and the overall writing qualtiy is great!

    Also.. in ch.2 "She wished they had staid fuzzy."

    #28 · Chapter 3 · 57w, 12h ago · · ·
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    Why does Trixie have a drawing tablet?

    #29 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 10h ago · · ·
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    This has nothing to do with anything, but my name's Ivy. I feel like I somehow just got to meet Fluttershy for realsies. I'm so honored. :twilightsmile: :yay: :rainbowkiss:


    ....This story is hilarious btw, good job!

    #30 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 1h ago · · ·
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    Things I love about this story/chapter:

    + The interactions between Trixie and Fluttershy.  Both feel very in-character!  (Especially Trixie, since she only appeared in one episode).

    + Big Entrance's train-wreck of a metaphor

    + Trixie actually being fairly successful as an entertainer, as opposed to the "poor, homeless Trixie" that's the usual around here.

    One question I have, though.  Fluttershy doesn't seem to recognize the box with wires as a television.  While I honestly don't think Fluttershy (or Twilight, or Applejack, or Pinkie Pie) would own a television, I'd think Rarity would have a small one (for watching various drama series while working on her latest order of clothing) and Rainbow Dash would probably have one (nothng like crashing onto your couch and zoning out in front of the TV for an hour or so after a long day of work/training)

    #31 · Chapter 1 · 57w, 21m ago · · ·
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    Wait, do hooves even have palms?

    Also, excuse me while I rant about a pet peeve: aaargh aargh Shake Spear is the one human name you don't have to ponify aargh

    #32 · Chapter 2 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh man, poor Trixie.

    #33 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Fics like these really put feet to the fire when it comes to "Friendship is Magic" being the end all credo of Equestria. I don't mean that it makes the fic worse for it, rather its nice to take off the kid gloves without skewing Grimdark, and better yet when it manages to stay vanilla to the show. Both Trixie and Flutters seem to have trouble seperating stage persona from their normal dynamic, so it can't be good if Trixie does uncover elements of Flutterrage, and decides to draw that out. :flutterrage:

    #34 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>342657

    No no, you've got it backwards. Trixie needs a hug and Fluttershy needs a shiv.

    #35 · Chapter 1 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I love this. Reading more. This might actually make me like Trixie.

    #36 · Chapter 2 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Sweet Harmony, I think my heart just twisted into a knot from all the squee. I wish I'd found this sooner. Hue makes me suspicious beyond belief, though. He seems like a nice pony, but I've got this creeping suspicion that he's actually a bucket of sleaze trying to get with our 'Shy.:ajbemused:

    #37 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    How could anyone be mad at Fluttershy?:fluttercry:

    #38 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh my gosh it's true. i'm addicted >< I love it and i can't wait to see how this goes. more please more!

    #39 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Good lord....Things happen to me as I read this story.

    Horrible, awful, unadulterated totally G-rated things! More. I. Must. Have. MOAR!

    The main reason (well, one of them anyway) I love this story so much is because you've actually written a talented, successful, altogether-unchanged-from-her-highly-obnoxious-self-centered-canon Trixie, which is something I don't see much of in fanfics. Most other bronies would have her written as a woobie whose career was utterly ruined by the fiasco in Ponyville, but you...you are something else.

    Chuckfinley's interpretation of Trixie in his Banishment Decree fic is the only possible equal to yours in my opinion other than her canon self. Honestly, I may like his even more than yours for several reasons that shall not be discussed, but yours is pretty sweet all the same.

    :moustache: I'll just leave this here.

    #40 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I have to admit, this story is the first one to really "sell" me on the whole Trixie thing. I just plain didn't like her before, but this... This was hilarious and fun. Good stuff, keep it up. :eeyup:

    #41 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Hey, look,  FIMfiction is back up! Also, take a gander at these blocks of text. Multiple posts is a concept my brain doesn't comprehend.

    >>342657

    I would avoid giving sharp implements to either of them (though hugs are encouraged).

    >>364441

    No, just most of it.

    >>466711

    Hey! I know you too!:pinkiegasp: Well thank you for the praise, dear sir. I'll give you a signed notice excusing you from reading the rest of my story immediately, due to the fact that I still have to devour a horde of chapters of thy own story (don't tell my boss).

    >>466800

    'Tis good to know I managed to create sympathy for both of them. Mission accomplished! Oh, and just blame Big Entrance. I'm sure it's all his fault some way or another.

    >>466820

    Fluttershy is pretty much Trixie’s glowing green crystal. Glad it proved entertaining!

    >>467585

    I really do love sticking two characters which have no business being together, well, er, together. My story thanks you for the watch!

    >>467809

    Many thanks! It gladdens me to hear I pulled Trixie off well. In case it wasn't obvious, I'm rather endeared to her character, so doing her justice was quite important to me. Were there problem areas with my portrayal of Fluttershy? Feel free to point them out. This is a criticism welcome zone.

    "Staid"? Egads, how archaic of me. I'll have to fix that. Thank you for pointing it out!

    >>467896

    Shhh. Don't over-analyze the cover picture. Keep it on the DL and no one will notice. :rainbowderp:

    Actually it's because it's the first panel of this comic, which was the inspiration for this story. TheParagon's portrayal of Trixie is different than mine, however, thus the item discrepancy.

    >>468159

    Suddenly, inadvertent personalization! Quite awesome. I hope my character carried the name well. Thank you for the read!

    >>468865

    Well thank you! To me, Trixie is a lot more fun to write when she's on a pedestal, or rather, on a pedestal she suddenly has to share with somepony else.

    The way I envisioned it, Ponyville doesn't even have its own channels. It's far too backwoods to have broadcasting stations. Of course, this might be an exaggeration of its podunk nature (which I hope doesn't break immersion). Either way, though, Fluttershy doesn't strike me as a pony whose much acquainted with technology.

    >>469086

    Hmm, I suppose they probably do not have palms. I guess they'd be soles, or, better yet, apex of frog.

    Shake Spear? Doesn't that make him sound more like a cavepony?

    >>469191

    This is an excellent point. I do believe that one can make a FIM story that is deeper/more mature yet still maintain the same flavor as the show. Many stories have done this to great effect and stand out for it.

    >>469768

    Trixie, apparently. It's not her fault she was born without a soul. You have my gratitude for the read.

    >>470727

    Keep in mind, if these feelings my story invokes require therapy, I can't be held responsible. But yes, thank you for the praise! Like I've said, high-horse Trixie is best Trixie (and oh my is there an abundance of woobie).

    As soon as I can get over my disinterest in Gilda as a character, I really ought to read that at some point. I'm a big fan of Burn Notice and I can imagine it'll be hard to beat Trixie/Sam (or at least, I'm assuming that's who she's standing in for).

    >>470265

    Aha, and the truth comes out! :twilightsmile: Thank you. I should be finishing the next chapter fairly soon (all eyes on "should").

    >>471109

    Yes, another Trixie convert! You know you love her obnoxiousness.

    #42 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>472903

    My complaint really only revolved around how into the fight Fluttershy seemed, but obviously she was not wholeheartedly into it. So, like I said you wrote her quite well! I was only worried for a brief moment.

    And I can't get over how much I love the way you've written Trixie :rainbowkiss:.

    I don't even like Trixie. I LOVE this story, and can't wait for more. ... Well, I didn't like Trixie :trixieshiftright:

    #43 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This has been a fun read, Trixie truly is in her own personal hell. An overally sweet and cute one but hell none the less.

    The characters are spot on and they're interactions a joy to read. Poor Trixie and her adorable no-longer temporary but now a full on roommate.

    :trixieshiftleft::fluttershyouch:

    #44 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>472903 yeah, Big Entrance is a total flankhole here. He's playing both sides, but my main sympathy is for Trixie.

    #45 · Chapter 1 · 56w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Pffftt. Ahahahaa. Wow. . . I really thought that the dream Trixie was having was real until she woke up.

    Good job on the first chapter. Really grabbed my interest. And now to see the rest of this show.

    #46 · Chapter 2 · 56w, 3d ago · · ·
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    :rainbowlaugh: This is so beautiful. I'm grinning from ear to ear.

    Way to capture Trixie and all her narcissistic self. Not to mention Fluttershy, who seems no different than a Disney princess.

    #47 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Ooooooh, can't express how happy I am that Trixie gave an outstanding performance.

    I can only imagine the next chapter having Fluttershy's overjoyed reaction to it and Trixie's glare.

    #48 · Chapter 3 · 56w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>273871  Destroyer of Worlds?!  But... that was what Davros called the Doctor!  D:  FLUTTERSHY IS THE REAL DOCTOR WHOOVES!  The hourglass pony was a red herring all along!  :pinkiegasp:

    #49 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    The scene with Trixie whispering in Fluttershy's ear was perfect. And that plan was so cruel. I feel no sympathy for Trixie,:rainbowwild:. Well done.

    #50 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Trixie, yiu have gone too far!!!!

    I hope she makes this all  better next chapter.

    #51 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Dis gon b gud

    #52 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Saw the title of this chapter and my mind collapsed in upon itself.

    Actually read the chapter, and it exploded in a fiery mass of "WHAT THE BUCK?"

    I'm not even going to say why in case some people read the comments first. Good work, and I look forward to the next chapter.

    #53 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I look forward to the upcoming plotting and chaos... It's nice that Trixie got a conscience, too. Took her long enough.

    Great chapter!

    #54 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    What, Trixie, feeling remorse? SCANDAL.

    Also, I feel sorry for whatever this new fellow is about to go through. Marginally. It's outweighed by expectant hilarity.

    #55 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh no, Trixie has fallen prey to Fluttershy's crazy mind-control powers!

    #56 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    When Flutters started crying, I was thinking, "YOU MAKE MY FLUTTERSHY CRY, YOU DIE." :twilightangry2:

    Chapter was :rainbowkiss: anyway!

    #57 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Wah-ha-ha-ha!  Not even Trixie is immune to the almighty pity-producing powers of Fluttershy's tears! :fluttercry:

    #58 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>501505

    Thank you! I'm not satisfied until Trixie is a character you love to hate/love/hate/love.

    >>475891

    The praise for my character writing is much appreciated. The story would fall apart without it, so it's good to know I'm at least doing something right there.

    I'm beginning to think Trixie might prefer fire and brimstone at this point.

    >>475902

    Does that sympathy still apply? I might have let her antagonism back out of the box.

    >>481912

    Oooh, a comment per chapter? Thank you much, reader. I'm glad the first chapter did its job as a hook.

    And of course she put on a good performance! There's volumes of raw talent buried underneath that hating, arrogant exterior.

    >>485306

    "What is that thing in Trixie's living room?" Trixie's jaw hung open as she eyed the blue box before her couch.

    "It's, um, it's the TARDIS," said Fluttershy.

    "Why is it here? In Trixie's living room."

    "Well, I need it to travel to another dimension. Trixie, I really want to explain but, um, well, I'm needed somewhere else. If you hear anything saying "exterminate" run away, okay?"

    "But, what, how--"

    Fluttershy patted Trixie on the head and entered the police box. It quickly warped out existence in Equestria, leaving Trixie to raid her liquor cabinet.

    >>501513

    Er, um, well, define "better?"

    >>501569

    Ah, glad the chapter did its job! Many thanks!

    >>501577

    It got left in a box by a dark alley. In the rain. But, it eventually grew up, made something of itself, and found its way back to Trixie. It would be touching if Trixie didn't keep it locked in her basement.

    Thank you for your readership and praise!

    >>501587

    Don't believe the tabloids! She's still a souless machine of pride! Honest!

    Oh, Flair, you're in for some fun backstory and amusing problems.

    >>501628

    Don't tell her about the mothership.

    >>501658

    That was the reaction I was going for. Glad it was evoked. Hopefully readers won't hate her guts too, too much. She hasn't killed anypony yet (yet...)

    >>501686

    There is no antidote. There is no cure. Once they've gotten a hold of you, it's hugs and apologies, and there's nothing you can do about it.

    #59 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>501778

    Thanks! :twilightsmile: I think I'll comment on this chap. . ter. . too. . .

    NO FLUTERSHY! NOOOOOOOO!!!

    #60 · Chapter 1 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    0 down thumbs. It has earned it

    #61 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    when i read the first part of the story i thought that i went insane!:pinkiecrazy: but i knew that this bliss no resoning and every thing being ok was to good to be true.:trixieshiftright:

    #62 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>501778 For Trixie, always.

    #63 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>501778

    better means to make amends for the horrible thing Trixie has done

    #64 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    "Yes. Trixie is now to devote one hundred percent of her time to making the best animal handler in Equestria even better."

    The sentence that set my treachery senses ablaze.

    With that, the pent-up depression gushed forth and the pegasus collapsed to the floor and cried. Not just a sob, no, that wouldn’t have been satisfying enough. The mare before her was blubbering. The Great and Powerful Trixie doubted she had ever been more gleeful at the suffering of another pony in all her life. She felt a malicious laugh coming on. It was bubbling to the surface…

    “Trixie is so sorry.”

    Her hoof slapped across her mouth. What did she just say? She had to be hearing things.  She wanted a laugh. It was supposed to be an evil, gloating laugh.

    The excerpt that doused the blazing inferno of treachery and replaced it with a smugness the likes of which I've never experienced before.

    None can stand emotionless before the furious onslaught of Fluttershy's sadness! Not even Trixie!

    Strangely enough I didn't hate Trixie at all for the betrayal. I just can't bring myself to even slightly dislike her. For me, hating Trixie is like hating Fluttershy: Absolutely, unimaginably, undeniably impossible.

    Please, continue to write such wonderful stories.

    #65 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Dear >>501778,

    64 is my most recurring number. But now it will be 65. For once i looked upon how many comments you had, my number was there so now i will jump with joy at this tremendous occasion. I thank thee for having 64 comments.

    Sincerely,

    thestripedtotodilepony

    #66 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Argh, I was like "MUST. RESIST. URGE. TO. SNAP. TRIXIE'S. NECK."  

    And then I was like "What.  Trixie actually feels remorse.  That's actually pretty great."  

    And then I was like "Is Trixie seriously so messed up in the head that a simple thing like compassion makes her consider herself weak and a failure?"

    And then I was like "Damn, is ANYTHING Big Entrance says NOT a lie? Seriously."

    Anyway, loving the story so far!

    #67 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Awww, turns out Trixie isn't a soulless harlot after all! :twilightsmile:

    Poor Fluttershy. Poor Trixie, even. Also, this:

    "Whatever cruel thing was in charge of the universe had to be cackling with glee."

    You were cackling with glee, I presume, when you wrote this? Lord knows I would be. ;) We authors are real a-holes to the characters in our stories, aren't we? :scootangel:

    #68 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Not even Trixie is immune to Fluttertears.

    Congratulations, Trixie! You've acquired huma- Err, Equinity.

    #69 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Really enjoyed the way Trixie manipulated events to get what she wants. I haven't seen mean Trixie in a while. I kinda miss her.

    For once, the evil intentions of the villain's master plan worked!

    ...and then died to Fluttercry.

    Rest in peace, Machiavellian Trixie. Rest in peace.

    I wait to see what Trixie's new plans will be for her new rival!

    #70 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>502606 You dear gentlecolt...win all my internets. That summed my attitude up beautifully. To the author: more please more!

    #71 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Trixie is best worst best pony. Calling it now.

    #72 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>503661

    :moustache:

    I don't always adore egotistical, self-serving ponies. But when I do, I choose Trixie Lulamoon.

    Stay bronified, my friend.

    #73 · Chapter 2 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Pink. Pink Everywhere.

    #74 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I knew it! Never belived a second of it! Trixie is just like Dan.

    #75 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>504146 :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft: *brohoof*

    #76 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>501928

    I apologize for any emotional damage caused by the tears of Fluttershy. Direct all demands for recompense to my attorney.

    >>502206

    I don't know. I thought I hadn't truly made it big until I had one or two dislikes (oh I am just asking for it). Thank you for your praise, dear reader!

    Edit: Yes, a dislike! I've hit the big time, folks! Champagne all around!

    >>502240

    Oh dear, my attorney is going to be swamped. Though I am happy my chapter caused the requisite amount of brain mess.

    >>502266

    With Trixie to the end! The badge of loyalty goes to you.

    >>502556

    Is it amends if it's done for selfish reasons? Hmm...

    >>502606

    So much love for Trixie, even after this chapter! I approve of this so much. Thank you for your wondrous readership! Each of your comments makes me smile.

    >>502656

    Why thank you, though I must say, my number is 356345649, so there's really no need to celebrate till we get there.

    >>502874

    All the reactions I was aiming for, right on the money! Thank you, thank you, and thank you.

    (I think Big Entrance said he liked money once. Pretty sure that wasn't a lie.)

    >>503001

    Well... she has a semblance of a soul, at least.

    Oh yes. Our job isn't done until our characters are cursing the Fates at every turn.

    >>503198

    Something That Looks Somewhat Like a Conscious achievement unlocked!

    >>503639

    Trixie the Chessmaster failed to account for the most powerful thing of all.

    Writing her in this chapter was untold amounts of fun. I don't know what it says about me that writing a mastermind, jerk character is so enjoyable. Unfortunately, Equestria isn't ready for a Trixie that gets everything that she wants.

    >>503661

    More Trix and Shy coming to an internet near you!

    >>503815

    Or perhaps worst best worst pony? Regardless, I called it first! Back of the line!

    >>505165

    >>505330

    Well yes, there is a comparison to be made with him, isn't there. You replace Dan with Trixie and Chris with Fluttershy and I think you'd have a show that works just as well.

    #77 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 4d ago · · ·
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    But in all seriousness, I can understand Trixie's hatred for Twilight and even Fluttershy. Trixie has worked hard her entire life to get where she is, while Twilight and Fluttershy are seemingly born with talent and just about everything they could ever want, especially friends that love and respect them. I'd feel a little cheated too, and I guess her way of coping with that is to tear down others to make herself look better. How fucking dare they have it easy.

    She's still an abhorrent bitch though. but I still love her

    #78 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>508390

    Meh, there's no problem doing the right thing for the wrong reasons.

    #79 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>508390

    *Bows*

    Was there ever any doubt? The Great and Powerful Trixie is Great and Powerful at swaying my emotions. I'm not ashamed to say that I'd wait on her hand and foot (to a certain degree) were she a physical being, and even if she repaid my efforts with nothing but disdain and contempt, I'd endure it just to have a chance to try and make her feel something at least close to compassion for someone (or somepony, as it were) other than herself. And I'd hope beyond hope that that someone would be me.

    #80 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>507467

    *returns brohoof enthusiastically*

    #81 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>508390 good luck to get there kind sir or ma'am. I am honored to hear a comment from the administrator. 81 81 81.. tut tut. Well I must depart for something has come up.

    ta ta,

    >>502656

    #82 · Chapter 1 · 55w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Hilarious start, will be reading more.

    #83 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 3d ago · · ·
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    OK, that was beautiful.

    #84 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 2d ago · · ·
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    *gets ahold of another drug... one that drives mares into an uncontrollable lust... and slips it into Trixie's drink the next time she's in the karaoke bar... and then...*  Sayyyy, Rainslick.  That blue unicorn looks like she has the hots for ya!  :trixieshiftright:  

    *cackles*  Revenge for poor Fluttershy!  

    #85 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>519897 Rainslick is too good for her... get Flair involved, THAT would be evil on a Trixie scale

    #86 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>520265  Rainslick and Flair for a menage-a-trois.  >:3

    #87 · Chapter 4 · 55w, 2d ago · · ·
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    OK, that's it.  You're a genius.  No use fighting it.  This is beautiful, everything about it.  Just... amazing.  Bravo.  BRA-BUCKING-VO.

    #88 · Chapter 4 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is amazing XD :heart:

    Can't wait for more.

    #89 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 4d ago · · ·
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    SOOOOO LONG SOOOOO MUUUCCHHH WWWWOOOOOOOOORRRRDSSSSSSSSSSS:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::flutterrage::fluttershbad::fluttershbad::fluttershbad::fluttershbad:

    #90 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This was a HILARIOUS chapter. Drunk Fluttershy stares are the best. You seemed to be confusing conscience  with conscious consistently throughout the chapter, so you might want to fix that. But the whole chapter was great. I loved all the ways that their plans failed. Couldn't stop laughing.

    #91 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 4d ago · · ·
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    God, this chapter was like a roller coaster of awesome. So much awkward hijinks.

    I LOVE IT.

    #92 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Time for late and new replies!

    >>508451

    Quite true. There are very valid reasons for her behavior. Fluttershy waltzes into the theater like a Mary Sue and she gets respect and love just like that. I too would be rather peeved. Though, what makes it much worse, is that Fluttershy doesn't even WANT all that popularity and love. She appreciates it but ultimately she's just there to take care of an animal that needs her. That's what makes Trixie burn with anger from the very depths of her egomaniacal core.

    >>508642

    Oh my, now we're getting into moral debate!

    >>509464

    I too must admit that Trixie garners my sympathy against all reason. Despite all her obnoxious arrogance, I still want to be the one to say "It's cool, Trixie, I'll be on your team."

    Of course, she'd sit me on the bench.

    >>517233

    Why, thank you!

    >>520265

    >>520301

    Though the "Psychics-pretty-darn-close" award goes to you two.

    >>520758

    Yes, yes, it's all true. My genius is deserving of every last ounce of your praise...

    But I jest. Thank you for the lovely compliments!

    >>679473

    You ask, I deliver! (And for you, it's actually on time!)

    >>684826

    I know, there's a lot them there, strewn across the page. It's a mess.

    >>684847

    It caused the "lols!" Mission success!

    Thank you for that correction! It's been fixed post-haste. Silly words that seem so alike...

    >>684873

    "Rollercoaster" was the feel I was going for. Craziness cranked all the way up to eleven. Glad it worked!

    #93 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 4d ago · · ·
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    :trixieshiftright:

    this story has all my yes

    #94 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    You monster, you made Trixie and Fluttershy friends with each other! :trixieshiftright::heart::yay:

    #95 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    so this is the end? or there is a epilogue planed?

    either way this was a awesome chapter, long time without getting news from this fic, i must said that i almost forgot about it xD

    #96 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    So going to read it later :trixieshiftleft:

    #97 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Oh Celestia that was hilarious! ::trixieshiftright::yay:

    #98 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I FORGOT ABOUT THIS STORY :pinkiegasp:

    Seeing it suddenly show up in my updates made the whole day AT LEAST 400 times better. :pinkiehappy:

    #99 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    well that was..... odd

    #100 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I'm not gonna lie, this sounds awesome. I'll give it a read later on.

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