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Kiroberos 24521

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    Kiroberos's Stories (2)

    • Memory Pending
      An outsider finds himself flung into Equestria, and forced into a new form. Will he fit in?

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    • Forgiveness Pending
      Moon Mender's adventure continues right where left off. He jumps at the chance for a new life, but will his old one truly leave him in peace? Some things are better off forgotten.
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    One important rule that comes in handy and holds true in most places, except for when it doesn't, of course, was the first law of motion.  It was simplicity in its truest form, really.  To summarize: an object will maintain a stable velocity unless acted upon by an outside source.  Very simple, right?  Pity I totally forgot to warn Rainbow Dash that her usual 'outside sources' of gravity and air friction were almost non-existent here.

    We smashed into another chunk of rock, barely managing to avoid the massive beam of charged, superheated particles as it put a rather impressive hole through the rock next to us.  My barrier staved off the heat but I could still feel the tingling sensation, as if too much static electricity had built up.  Not possible in a vacuum, if I recalled correctly, but it was better than imagining the beam microwaving the outer layer of skin cells off me.  Trying to look on the bright side, I assured myself that it was a good thing this wasn’t a military ship.

    Rainbow learned very quickly, bless her heart.  She booked it rapidly across the surface, turning much faster once she realized she had to counter thrust against her own velocity to slow down.  She took to an amazingly graceful swerving pattern to avoid the big shots.  I kept my eyes closed, of course.  One, to not wet myself by seeing how close we came to becoming a pile of ionized ash, and two, to keep my focus on deflecting the small arms fire of the mechanical soldiers that were following us.  Thankfully their aim was traditionally crappy.

    The Grosh didn't colonize well, so their soldiers consisted largely of mechanical infantry.  The problem was in what they breathed.  They called it Icheon Gas in Universal Common.  It was a combination of dense hydrogen, a few neurological stimulants, and a fascinatingly large concentration of tiny parasites that infested the Groshs' lungs.  They processed the hydrogen for each individual Grosh, somehow turning it into a concentrated oxygen mixture, and were native to their original biosphere.  It was a creative process, as the Grosh's bodies in turn processed only the heightened oxygen levels.  We didn’t fully understand the process, but then again, we weren’t exactly given much time to research them.  Regardless, the drawback was that the parasites had a shelf life of almost nil and nitrogen was poisonous to them.  Oops.  It slowed down the whole terraforming thing when you had to convert the entire atmosphere to a different gas, introduce several biologically-dependant plant species en masse, and then saturate the planet with a parasite before you could live on it.  That also meant their ships had to haul around a full eco-deck just to sustain their life support systems.  It made personal space suits a bit complicated, I'd assumed.  Yeah, robots were just easier.

    Rainbow Dash followed the purple line coming from her chest as fast as she possibly could.  The closer we got to the glowing barrier ahead of us, the more of my old energy pool I could tap into.  My eyes opened again, once we got within thirty meters or so.  They widened to full as I took in the sight.  Across our dirty, charred expanse of rock was a partially collapsed but perfectly functioning Aegis Barrier.  More specifically, my Aegis Barrier.  Our strongest barrier magic, the Aegis formed an absolute field that blocked everything and enclosed in on itself.  The downsides were that it kinda stopped air too and wouldn't let attacks out of it from the inside.  Its use was really situational at best.  Of course, a charged particle blast fired from an orbital battleship was a pretty nasty threat.

    The weak atmosphere danced with deflected ion bolt energy as Rainbow broke into a no holds barred line for the bubble.  My focus shifted from the now missing shots to keying us into the resonation of the barrier.  Her speed almost caused us to pancake into the side of it before I managed to sync us!  We passed through the field and she immediately spun, boosting hard in the other direction.  We still smashed into the inside of the barrier across from our entry point, but at least she braked.  A few lacerations and bruises were better than a caved in skull I suppose.

    We collapsed into a panting, breathless pile at the bottom of the barrier wall, and I reflexively checked our oxygen supply again.  We had about twenty-five minutes of air left, I estimated.  Plenty, I hoped.

    Rainbow shakily stood again after a few moments and looked around.  I stared apprehensively at the walls until I saw one of the large, charged particle shots skip off.  Whew, it was indeed perfectly functioning.  The massive, impossibly large moving wall of metal stopped firing after a few deflected shots razed some of their now useless robotic infantry.  They couldn't do much to us in here and I decided the new plan was to simply chill until Twilight finished charging her teleportation magic.  Heroic, I know.

    Rainbow was momentarily fascinated by the gently flowing field of lights and symbols surrounding us and smiled softly as she took it in.  I had to give her credit.  She was taking having been shot at with an anti-cruiser weapon amazingly well.  She seemed to draw in the sights with amazement, like it was a massive amusement park or something.  The energy that danced behind her amethyst eyes made me smile.

    "That was actually kinda fun, but we should probably stay in here," Rainbow suggested, smirking back at me finally.

    "Ug, should I ask, or will knowing cause me to die of worry and guilt?" Twilight asked, speaking for the first time since the barrage of apologies after we started screaming in panic.  Getting shot at brings out the best in me, I had to admit.

    Rainbow snickered and shook her head to nopony in particular.  She remembered with a start a few seconds later, and added hastily, "Ah, n-no.  You probably shouldn't ask."

    I watched the massive ship slowly start to turn, lining up one of the main cargo bays with our trajectory.  "Uh, how much time's left on those three teleports, Twilight?" I asked nervously.

    "This isn't a little jaunt across town, you know.  I'm almost done with Rainbow's charge, and then I'll do yours and your twin’s.  Uh, twelve, twelve and a half minutes?" she estimated.

    Rainbow suddenly went rigid under me and inhaled sharply.  Had she noticed the ship?  Turning my head back, I realized she was looking into the center of our barrier instead.  The whole thing was barely ten meters across and a small figure rested in the center that I had previously overlooked.  It was extremely tiny now, and cratered partially into the rocks.  My mind started to ache and I involuntarily winced as a sharp stab went through it.  The figure was me.

    "Oh, oh, that's not...  I think I'm gonna be sick," Rainbow muttered, looking away from my other self rapidly.  It was easy enough to see the source of her discomfort.

    My old body was actually smaller than my new one, I realized.  For one, I was a runt, really.  Two, our race was actually on the small size, barely reaching four foot, if I recalled.  Lastly, my other form was severely emaciated, almost a skeleton.  The light blue, patchy fur that was covering parts of its skin was falling out and I saw that the tips of the foot long ears were withered and drying badly.  Oh, and it was in three pieces.  That was important too, I think.  Not that it really mattered at that point as the prior starvation and dehydration would have made my survival iffy at best.  I could see the organs and blood, frozen in time a week back, still somehow alive as the rainbow energy threads wove through it all.  But there was no helping it anymore.

    "Scratch that third teleport, Twilight," I whispered quietly, my voice surprising me by catching on her name.  I took a moment to close my eyes and compose myself, feeling Rainbow turn around and away from the slowly dying alien body.

    There was a light, squeaking whimper, followed by a sigh in a different voice.  "You found your other self?" Twilight asked in a weak, but understanding voice.

    "Oh dear," Rarity muttered quietly, followed by a low growl from Applejack.

    "Are ya really gonna just give up?  We should try ta heal him up, anyway," she argued.

    Rainbow let out gentle breaths, shivering under me now.  I surprised myself by frowning and gently nuzzling my muzzle along her neck.  A hug kinda didn't work with broken forelegs.  She started momentarily, before sighing and bending her neck against my head, resting there.  "It's kinda a little late for healing.  I don't think even magic could repair that," she muttered, after recovering for a few moments.  I found myself oddly numb, however.  I realized that if I searched my memories, I'd seen worse.  It was different when it was myself though.

    "Rainbow...  Are ya alright?" Applejack asked a few moments later, irritation gone from her voice and much quieter.  I distracted myself by peeking around the barrier.

    Up close, I saw it was a lot more deteriorated than I thought.  Thankfully it was strong magic.  I watched the four-armed mechanical monsters gather around the edges of the barrier.  Then I thought about it more.  How had I lived without air this long?

    "Yeah.  I mean, no sweat, right?  He's just a bit worse off than I had anticipated," she excused, waving her hoof to nopony again.  She wasn't used to this whole 'long distance communication' thing, it seemed.

    I found the tube shortly thereafter.  It was pumping a healthy supply of oxygen in through a deteriorated part of the barrier.  They were intentionally keeping me alive, then.  That entire side of the barrier was lined with scanning equipment as well, now that I looked closer.  They knew how the Aegis functioned so they definitely weren't scanning that.  That meant…

    There was a weak, whimpering noise.  "I'm worried about Mender's legs.  He n-needs medical attention," Fluttershy reminded.  They had gone mostly numb, at this point.  It was a blessing, really.

    "He'll get it right away, upon the teleport.  Don't worry, Fluttershy," Rarity assured.

    I stared up at the massive ship above us.  It had given up firing upon us.  Now I knew why.  They didn't want to blow up their research.  The transmitters on the scanning system attached to the Aegis were easy enough to see, as well.  A sinking chill crept into me as I realized it wasn't going to be as easy as this.

    "Uh, Rainbow?  Are you up for one more flight?" I asked quietly, losing my strength of voice.  They had the data on the ship already.  I needed to buy some time.

    She glanced back at me questioningly, and then followed my gaze up towards the massive research ship.  On the top of it, towards the front, there was a large array of angular, pyramid-like transmitters and receivers.  "They're learning about the link, aren't they?" Twilight asked, sounding uneasy.

    "The scanner's still running, so they're not done yet.  They'd keep the data on the ship until they have it all.  But I don't know how much they have," I reasoned.  Did they have enough to be a threat?  There was literally no way of knowing from here.

    Several micro-drones, about half a meter in diameter, landed on the outside of the barrier a second later.  Rainbow Dash jumped at the loud impact noises and looked back and forth between them.  I counted about five, as they started trying to pull at the weakened segments of shield.  My eyes softened as I realized it didn't matter.  They had data on Equestria, in all likelihood.

    The uneasy silence was broken by my sigh, as I explained, "We need to take out their transmitters, Dash.  They're those angular things sticking out of the front up on top."  That would buy us time to figure out how much data they had, anyway.  I hoped.  The radiation they vented during FTL transmission meant they had to be outside of the ship.  That definitely worked to our advantage.  Dash surprised me by smiling, however.

    "Hit and run?" she asked, widening her stance and lowering herself, coiling her leg muscles in what looked like anticipation.  The soldier in me that I denied for so long grunted his approval and I smirked.  She was made of a lot sterner stuff than I had given her credit for.

    "One pass is all we need.  Then back to here," I added.  Simple and efficient.

    Dash nodded briskly, eyes narrowing as she locked them onto the array.  "Yer kiddin', right?  Ya need medical attention, an' you two're gonna go off on some crazy flight?" Applejack questioned incredulously.

    Part of me realized she was right.  Rainbow gave an angry snort, however.  "There's no way I'm letting these jerks anywhere near Equestria.  They won't even see us coming!" she boasted and I almost felt her coat bristling up under me.  If they'd seen her now, I don't think my old soldier buddies would have found a single bad thing to say, I realized.  Rainbow mane included, of course.

    I considered the goal, however.  There were several reinforced carbon struts that connected the array to the ship.  I was unfortunately, a support caster, or I could have just blown the crap out of it from where we stood.  They probably realized I wasn't an attack class already.  But there was one technique I could do that was offensive.  Just one.

    Rainbow's eyes got wider in direct proportion to the length of the blade of energy extending off the left side of my mouth.  Shields were basically just a plane of force.  Smash one to a few nanometers thick and ionize the end, and it becomes a pretty nice blade as well.  It was my last line of defense, all else failing.  I don't remember ever using it apart from training, but that didn’t surprise me much.  For one, blades were a little outclassed in that war.  For two, I didn't remember a huge amount still.  I didn't have access to my other self's memories, which was a little depressing.  I had been secretly hoping I'd recover them when I came here, I supposed.

    "Thish'll cut thru it like bhutter," I mouthed through the block of energy between my teeth.

    Rainbow started to giggle, but nodded.  "Ya got it, Partner.  One hit and run, coming right up!" she affirmed, grinning again and turning her head back towards the giant research ship.

    "Be-Be careful, you two," Twilight asked, giving in.  She knew this had to be done.  What I didn't mention was that we somehow had to get rid of the ship too, after we knocked out their communication.  My mind started racing through diagrams as I tried to desperately remember my training.  There had to be something on the ship.  Some weakness we could exploit.  It wasn't a military class vessel.

    "Piece of cake.  Relax, Twilight," Rainbow assured.  Heh, it wouldn't be, but I think she already knew that.

    I nodded against Dash, leaning down tightly to her.  Letting the blade drift from my mouth, I advised, "They have a minimum firing range."

    Rainbow Dash grinned openly now.  "So fly down their throat.  Got it.  Give my wings a boost," she requested.

    "Be careful, Rainbow.  Ya need ta get yer pretty little rainbow flank back in one piece, yeh hear?" Applejack warned.  Dash blushed lightly and I tried not to smirk at what I knew she heard that as.

    "Yeah, you don't want to miss this amazing party, Dashie!" Pinkie Pie tacked on.

    Okay, I snickered at that.  "Then let's knock 'em down a peg, Dashie," I spoke up directly into her ear.  Her nickname was adorable, I had to admit.

    She shot a glare back at me but I just smiled innocently at her, earning an eye roll.  "Don't try dumping on the cute with me.  I'm not Twilight or Fluttershy," she muttered sarcastically, but smirking now contrary to her tough act.

    "W-What?!" Fluttershy stuttered out.  We never got a chance to reply, though.

    The charge had finished, and I dumped it into Rainbow's wing thrusters.  They expanded almost three times, planes of light extending off her wings, over doubling their normal size.  She got a look of exhilaration, and turned back to the ship again.

    "Hit 'em hard and fast, Rainbow," I affirmed, catching the blade in my mouth again, holding it out firmly before dumping the remainder of my charge into it.  The blade exploded in light, expanding almost three meters in length, putting the tip through one of the weak spots in the shield.  I secretly was delighted as I saw one of the mechanical micro-drones fall in half as the point of the blade extended through it.

    Rainbow Dash dropped low and sprung like a rubber band straight up, an explosion of thrusters lighting up the area around us as we phased through the top of the shield.

    * * * * *

    If Rainbow Dash didn't have my respect before, she sure as hell did now.  We banked hard as she counter-thrust through a laser field, barely slipping through between two shots.  They had opened up with everything the second we cleared the gravity field.  Dash kept her flight pattern tight and varied, spinning in a tight roll as she blasted out of the thrust, dodging the entire attack field with ease.  Her wings of light scorched the darkness of space as she danced towards our target.  Best flier in Equestria?  Yeah right.  She was a goddess of flight!

    We came out of our tight spin as she corrected our velocity and burst under their firing pattern.  A few smaller, anti-fighter rays grazed us, but were deflected harmlessly by my angled shields.  It had to be done.  I released the limits on my magic pool once more, this time with all of my other self’s energy, causing Rainbow's wings to explode into light again as she shot past the range minimum in an instant.  She let out a roaring battle scream as we swung in along the hull of the ship, hugging its shield line.

    Three flaps were all it took.  A hundred meters she covered as if it was nothing, lining up the support struts with measured precision.  I gritted my teeth hard into the blade grip, letting out a growl around it.  The blade flared up and we made contact just as they tried to raise their shields up around the array.  Rainbow ducked and I swung.

    I barely felt the wedge that was my deflective shield smash through the severed line I made through theirs.  We passed the array an instant later.  Rainbow flicked her back legs around, pulling a hard U-turn along the shield of the ship.  Exhausted, I let the blade dissipate as I felt the dull ache along the back of my head from overexertion.  The rest of my body soon joined the skull ache as Rainbow slammed the thrusters against her own velocity, momentarily almost doubling the g-forces on us.  Admittedly, her body was probably used to it.

    I gritted my teeth as pain exploded through my forelegs.  A sharp mineral taste entered my mouth shortly afterwards.  Either I bit my tongue, had massive internal bleeding, or it was a nerve overload sensation.  Most likely it was option three.  Rainbow didn't notice however, as she was now too busy grinning.

    The field around the array collapsed as fast as it had popped up.  I saw the white hot line going through the struts and gave a sigh of relief.  Dash burst forwards and kicked the side of the array a second later, dislodging the entire thing and sending it drifting off into space.  We were too close to their hull to target now, and she took the time to do a victory pose.  At least research ships didn't have mobile attack drones.

    "Ha!  We totally took 'em down!  That was awesome," she declared, sounding beyond proud of herself.

    Weakly, I glanced back at our bubble and swallowed as I saw one of the micro-drones almost inside.  I didn't know if it could go back through the portal the other direction or not, but finding out wasn't on my to-do list.  Crap.  Now I was starting to think like Twilight.

    "Rainbow, the portal.  A drone," I managed to mutter through the demolition sequence going off in my skull.

    "Aww horse apples!  I'm gonna kick the hay out of those stupid metal beach balls," she growled, giving a hard flap of her wings and bursting off the hull shield surface.  Much to my dismay, her path was taking a straight line.

    I winced and smashed my jaw shut at the acceleration but managed to shout, "The beams, Dash!"

    She gasped, remembering an instant later.  We dove into evasive action instantly just as a full array of five beams scorched through the spot we were half a second ago.  My scream was drowned out in the high-pitched wail of the laser energy as it burned through our air bubble hard enough to generate sound.  By instinct, I ejected the outer layer of our deflection shield as it was heated to the point of combusting.  Rainbow dove into a rough spiral, gritting her teeth as the perspiration turned to steam off of her forehead before dispersing into space.  My mind reeled as I felt her make several more dodges and another wave of the large lasers shot past us, missing entirely this time.  I felt the anti-fighter shots power up in my detection range, and struggled to anchor my mind enough to move the deflector shields into interception position.

    "Rainbow!  Mender!" I heard Twilight shout, feeling like the echo bounced around inside my head a few times.

    "No yeh don't, ya little monsters!" I heard Applejack suddenly shout out as well.

    It was hard to see with my vision swimming, but I swore I saw red objects suddenly exiting the portal at high velocity.  The first drone that got through the barrier caught the thing right in the sensor panel.  To my amazement, it cracked through the casing and sent the drone hurtling backwards into the side of the barrier!  The second drone seemed to panic, managing to block the second red orb with a utility arm, but the velocity tore the arm off and spun the drone around.  The third projectile scored a direct hit on the power pack in the back.  The coupling must have snapped, and the entire drone lit up like a light bulb momentarily, before giving off weak wisps of smoke and drifting motionlessly.

    All other attention was cut short as the anti-fighter turrets fired.  Rainbow went into a dodging pattern, slowing noticeably as her wings started to lose power.  No!  I tried to direct power into both her wings and the shields at the same time, my mind falling into the proverbial acid pit to manage it.  One parry.  Rainbow spun, dodging two more of the shots.  Another parry.  She felt her wings flare up again and made a mad dash for the shield, taking advantage of the larger weapon’s firing delay.  The third parry.  Deflection barrier one of three collapsed.  They lead us as we shifted to a straight line and I threw the healthiest barrier into the path of Rainbow's head.  Parry four and five skipped off it, narrowly avoiding removing her head as she flew.  Four meters from the shield.  The lead fire fell behind and Rainbow tucked into a roll to brace for impact.  I shifted the healthy shield in-between the barrier and us, using its energy to slow our velocity.  We rotated, coming in hard and fast.  A glancing blow, barely deflected, skipped off the weakened third shield, reducing it to critical.  Two meters.  Things slowed as I felt my heart smashing against my ribs.  Our velocity dropped, but so did our angle, bringing us back into line with the three prior missing shots.  I barely managed to move shield three into position, shifting the now lined up laser fire away from us using redirection.  The shield flickered and I saw a burn line lance across Rainbow's right shoulder, an inch from my face.

    Startled, I missed the final deflection.  The angle was bad.  I saw my mistake instantly, but it was too late.  The shield took the full force of the shot, having to absorb it rather than deflect.  Naturally, the shield shattered, letting ribbons of energy through.  The impact knocked the air out of me as I felt a split second lance of burning pain and then nothing at all, as bits of feeling disappeared from the lower left side of my back.  We went through the barrier, and cratered into the rock next to the portal.

    * * * * *

    There was a momentary lapse in awareness.  It felt like I took a long blink, and then lost a bit of time during it.  Ah, I lost consciousness.  Rainbow let out a low groan as she shakily stood up.  I contented myself to silence, as I rested limply on her back.  There was almost no magic left in either of my bodies now.  I did a passive scan of my systems, running on power saving mode as best I could.

    Torn muscles in both forelegs.  They were effectively useless.  Abrasions covered my skin as well, but that was expected.  The real damage was done to my back.  I had three reasonably deep burned gashes in my back, above my left hip by a few inches.  The air barrier I made sealed it but the top one was bleeding badly.  With nowhere to go, the blood just pooled and spread out under the barrier, along my coat.  I felt light headed, but decided it was probably due to over-exertion of magic and my headache.  I tried exercising as much pressure against it as I could using the barrier that was left from before, but my throbbing head made that hard.

    We were back inside the barrier, with bits of mechanical parts lying about.  There was just enough gravity to keep them anchored and allow Rainbow to stand.  Chunks of apple drifted slowly along the surface of the rock, too, I noticed.  The barrier looked ragged, but had self-repaired to some extent.  The mechanical soldiers stood outside it still, apparently having given up infiltration for now.  I caught a glimpse of the giant ship rotating slowly above us, aligning us with the massive, rear-facing cargo bay.  That explained why they weren't trying to get inside.  They were simply going to swallow the rock whole.

    "Ouch.  That stung a bit.  Mission successful, though!" Rainbow Dash announced, rubbing her singed shoulder absently.

    "Oh, thank Celestia you're all right!  You took out the communication device, then?" Twilight asked, exhaling in relief.  I decided to keep my mouth shut, and put more pressure on the wound, feeling the barrier get a little slick.  It was hard to think through the cloud in my mind.

    Rainbow nodded pointlessly, and added, "Yup!  Kicked it off into space.  They nicked my shoulder, but other than that, we were untouchable!"

    "S-So you saved Equestria?  That's awesome, Rainbow!  How's M-Mender?" Fluttershy asked quietly, which sounded odd in an enthusiastic tone.

    Rainbow smirked.  "Well, I am kinda awesome like that!  And he seems fine.  His barriers were amazing out there," she added.  I was vaguely surprised she gave up some of the credit.

    "Then why ain’t he talkin'?" Applejack asked, sounding a little irritated for some reason.

    I wasn't sure how to respond to that.  "I, mmm, just tired.  Cool apple attack," I managed to mutter, watching one of the red, tasty looking snacks roll and twist across the rock near us.  Wait, no, it wasn't moving.  I think my eyes were instead.

    Rainbow frowned and twisted around to look back at me.  

    "Well ah thank ya kindly.  Ah simply agree with Dash.  No metal monsters'll set hoof in Equestria, so long as ah have any say 'bout it," the farm mare declared, followed by the unique sound of a hoof impact, probably against her chest.

    "And I helped load the apples!" Pinkie followed up in delight.

    Rainbow got a look of mild concern, however.  Uh oh...  "Why is your nose bleeding, Mender?" she inquired a moment later.  Whew.  She couldn't see my back.

    "Oh, he over-exerted his magic.  I got a little nosebleed that night after the Ursa Minor incident, too," Twilight answered for me.  The constellation?  I momentarily entertained an image of her fighting off the stars themselves, and getting a 'little nosebleed' from the ordeal.  Damn.  She could have done all of this without batting an eyelash, I bet.  My ego momentarily felt worse than my body.

    "Regardless, Rainbow's teleport is ready and Mender's is about halfway charged.  I'll wait and pull both of you out at once," Twilight went on to inform.

    Rainbow was watching the giant ship now as well, as we started to pull closer to it in a massive beam of murky green light.  "Uh, what's it doing?" she asked hesitantly.

    "Pulling us in.  Trying to trap us," I managed, getting tired suddenly.  It was getting harder to keep my breath.

    Twilight snorted.  "I'll just teleport you out in a few minutes and we can be done with this nightmare."

    "Rainbow can go now..." I whispered, wishing she'd use the escape route available to her.

    "Uh, no way.  I'm sticking with you until the end, Partner," Rainbow refused, smirking back at me again.

    I groaned and shook my head.  Stubborn mare.  "You don't need to," I protested tiredly.

    "Yer with the element o' loyalty, remember?" Applejack spoke up, chuckling after.

    Rainbow Dash started to nod in agreement, when we were jolted forwards slightly, to the sound of a loud crash.  "Whoa!" she protested, bracing against the rocking motion.  I looked forward again and saw them backing up our floating rock, and raising us up a little more using the spatial manipulation field.  Idiots.  The bottom of our floating island must have smashed into the bottom of the docking bay.  They never were too accurate with those.

    The artificial gravity took over inside of the ship and I winced as I was pushed down onto Rainbow.  My forelegs were on fire with pain and I was starting to sadly recover feeling in my back now.  The wound, or more accurately, the nerves around the damaged areas, began to scream out under the newly discovered pressure.  I hadn't been expecting this reaction and fought back a wave of nausea and lightheaded vertigo.  I felt the warm liquid running down my flanks now and swallowed.  Not good.

    "...some kind of big room.  Ya could hurry that teleport a bit, Twilight," Rainbow continued speaking.  My hearing fully recovered after a few more seconds, and I shivered, feeling myself get colder.  Not good at all.  At this rate, I'd die from blood loss.  Trying something new, I let most of the only remaining barrier mostly dissipate until it was the size of a walnut or so.  I then gritted my teeth and carefully plugged it into the only hole that wasn't cauterized.  My mind exploded into agony and I almost bit my tongue trying to keep from screaming as I rode out the now spinning room.  Son of a bitch!  I was not cut out for this kind of thing.  I winced at the concept of getting a tattoo, for crying out loud.

    "I'm trying, Dash.  Just keep yourself and Mender safe.  Five minutes tops," Twilight assured, sounding a bit frantic.

    Rainbow sighed and paced slightly, trying desperately to look at anything other than my other self in the center of the rock.  It wasn't that hard, as the hanger gave us ample amounts of curiosities to look at.  It was massive, for one.  I knew it was almost a kilometer long and half that or so in width.  In theory, it was a dry dock for experimental ships.  In reality, they used it to store essentially anything they found interesting enough to study.  Us, in this case.  Lights shone down from high above, illuminating the docks in a murky green light.  It wasn't enough to light the place to satisfaction, really.  Dark labs were in rows to the sides of the docks, and sinister robots followed us with their sensors through the glass windows.  Other ships were also landed; the cool blue pulse of their hover disks simply added to the ambiance.

    "This place is kinda cool," my cyan partner noted, looking about with curiosity now.

    "Greetings, Last Known Member of Species 5387!  Welcome to my ship!" suddenly boomed from unseen speakers high above.

    Rainbow let out a yelp, diving to the rock for protection while looking around.  A massive panel opened up in the wall next to us as we slowed to a stop.  The holographic projector hummed as it powered up, the face of my nightmares coming onto the screen.  His hideous visage was twisted and warped and the sickly white fur turned up around the corners of his mouth, a sinister grin bestowed on his features.  Two sharper looking teeth dropped down menacingly and half of his scarred face was replaced by gleaming metal.  The two longer ears were stretched out far behind its head like some mockery of hair.  I shuddered and tried not to convulse.  Rainbow stared blankly at the face and I was shocked at her stoic behavior.  To show such calm in front of one of them!  A Grosh.

    The deadpan expression soon gave away into a massive fit of laughter.  I was shocked, jaw dropped as I watched her roar with glee until tears came from her eyes.  The Grosh looked utterly shocked, then annoyed, and finally downright irritated.

    "The big bad oogly wooglies are fluffy bunnies with cheese graters stuck to their faces?  Really?!" she managed to gasp out between chortles.  She started stomping rapidly on the rock in ecstatic laughter.

    "Enough of this!  I could destroy you both whenever I want, so silence!" The Grosh screamed.  I blinked at Dash, who was still giggling, and then looked back to the view screen.  Yeah, it did look like a bunny from their world.  Well damn.  That totally ruined it for me.  Now I couldn't not see it.

    Dash finally recovered enough to snort.  "Wow.  Somepony's grumpy.  Remind me to feed Angel a nice big carrot when we get home, Fluttershy.  Bunnies apparently get really cranky," she requested.

    There was no response.  She blinked after a few more seconds and looked around.  "Er, Fluttershy?  Twilight?" she called out hesitantly.

    Nothing.  I sighed as I realized the magic had given away.  "Her spell wore off, Dash.  It must have been... strained going through the portal.  Less duration," I muttered, trying to head off the panic.

    "Aww, the spell wore off?  Pity.  Looks like you won't be getting a rescue," the Grosh taunted, looking amused.

    I shook my head.  "The teleport's still, mm, charging," I assured her, still able to see the energy buildup.

    She nodded and grinned.  "You don't scare us!  We're gonna get out of here, no sweat," she bragged.

    "Go ahead.  We're still hooked into him.  Really, show us how the transfer works by taking him back.  Then enjoy your last days," the Grosh offered gleefully.  Oh crap.

    Rainbow narrowed her eyes, but I shook my head.  "They still have the data on the ship.  Only... slowed 'em down," I muttered, shivering again.

    "W-What?  We didn't save..." she started to question, looking worried.

    The Grosh started laughing.  "Of course not!  You just inconvenienced us.  It'll take a couple hours to fix the transmitter array."

    "Rainbow...  Go back.  Please," I requested, feeling dizzy again.

    "No way!  I'm not leaving you here alone," she refused.

    More laughter from above.  "Aww, it's touching.  You know, I could save you, right?  All you have to do is help us get the research done.  You can live, and become a Grosh commander.  Think about it!  This deal wasn’t even offered to your traitor allies," the screen offered.

    Rainbow snorted and backed away from the screen with me.  "He can live without your help!" she shouted, looking irate now.

    "I wouldn't... accept anyway," I managed to whisper, getting more tired by the minute.  Yeah, definitely blood loss.

    Rainbow didn't answer, getting a sudden questioning look in her eyes.  I wondered what was wrong until she looked back at her left flank.  "You'd better not have peed on..." she started to warn, before freezing in place.  I followed her line of sight to the blood now running down her flank.  "Oh, no, no, please, no," she muttered, yanking the cord on her chest.  Oops.  I felt the harness release and I slid gently down her back.  She waited until I was completely off her before turning around again, ignoring the blood coating her thighs and running down her back legs.

    I winced at the pain of the bump against our rock, but then tried my hardest to smile up at her.  It felt weak, and she just shook her head.  There was a light chuckle from above, which she ignored.  "No, please, Mender.  Why didn't you say something?" she whined out, shifting behind me and trying to put pressure on the wound.

    "W-What would you have done?" I asked skeptically, resting my head against the rocks.  I felt so tired.  A little nap sounded so good about now.

    Rainbow tied the harness strap over the wound, tightening it as hard as she could.  "You stupid, stupid stallion!  Why?  I would have brought you to Twi!  She has healing magic," she shouted, sounding more and more angry.

    "My offer still stands," the Grosh reminded, snickering merrily.

    No.  This wouldn't do at all.  A nap would be easy.  Is that how I wanted to be remembered?  I pushed my head into the floor and shifted my legs under me, wincing at the burning agony crawling up my spine.  It didn't matter though, as I slowly shifted to my haunches, looking up at the Grosh.

    "M-Mender, please, stay down," Rainbow asked, trying to nudge me over.  The anger was gone from her voice again and I saw her eyes starting to get watery.

    Turning my head to look at her, I managed a warm smile.  "I'm sorry for being, mmm, stupid, Rainbow," I apologized.  A tear slipped out of her left eye and she shook her head rapidly.

    "We can still get you to Twilight.  Don't you dare give up," she warned, trying to smile.

    "I flooded the entire hold with Icheon gas.  If you exit your bubble, you die anyway, so don't try anything, worms," the Grosh warned.

    Wait, gas?  Oh yeah, it was toxic and absurdly deadly to us.  Probably to ponies, too.  What was it again?  There was something important.

    Everything snapped into place and I suddenly smiled.  It made sense now.  It was all karma.  I threw away my life before, in a pointless attempt to save a few.  I didn't want to die.  And I had failed.  Our species was lost and I was all that was left.  I should have gone with them, but I didn't.  I was given another chance.  Why?

    To get my wish.  My real, true wish.  It was the reason I joined the guard in the first place.  To make a difference.  To fix what was wrong and lacking justice.  I had lost sight of that alongside my memories but it was part of who I am, still.  To mend.  Both physical, emotional, and justice itself.  My memories might never fully return, but I found myself at peace.  I didn't need them.  I had another chance.

    "Can you tell everyone that I'm sorry?" I asked Rainbow quietly, slumping against her left shoulder.  Everything in me quieted as she went rigid against me.

    "M-Mender, you need to tell them yourself.  This isn't...  I'm not going to," she started to protest.

    Oddly, I felt a sense of calm, finally.  "This ship still holds Equestria's secrets.  And the others need you..." I muttered, fighting to stay awake.

    "Wh-What can you do against this huge ship?  I'm staying with you until Twi teleports us," she insisted once more.

    I sighed, and the Grosh started laughing behind me.  "How cute.  But you can't do anything.  We have your bio.  You focus on support and barrier magic.  Your only attack is that silly blade and you're in the middle of a hanger flooded with lethal gas.  Really, entertain me with your pathetic plan," he taunted.  I ignored him entirely.

    "Then... I apologize to you as well.  If nothing else, Applejack needs you," I spoke quietly, a lump forming in my throat.  It was taking all of my energy just to talk, and I felt my eyes get wet.

    "No, Mender," Rainbow muttered.

    I shook my head before she could say more.  "Please, confess to her.  For me, all right?  Be happy," I requested from the bottom of my heart.  It wasn't fair that I had come so close to the happiness she could still have, only for this to happen.  I wanted to hear them one last time, if nothing else.

    Rainbow backed her head back, shaking it rapidly.  I didn't care if she saw me crying.  She was as well.  "S-Stop it.  You need to," she almost pleaded.

    "I'm sorry, Dashie.  You're a goddess of flight, if that means anything," I complimented, smiling weakly at her.  She swallowed and opened her mouth to say something, but I shook my head.  "Goodbye, Partner," I spoke, before gently pushing the polarities of Twilight's teleport spell together with my magic.

    Rainbow's eyes went wide as she felt the spell activate on her back.  "Mend," she started to shout out, before vanishing in a flash of light.  Mend.  Indeed.  That's what I'd do.

    With nothing left to support me, I fell through where she was, collapsing into a heap on the rocks.  The spot where she had been sitting was warm.  I couldn't hold back anymore, and just let the tears come.  They slid down my cheeks and mixed with the slowly expanding smear of blood under me.  Fluttershy.  Twilight.  I wished I could talk to them again.  All of those wonderful ponies.  It wasn't fair.

    "Well that was noble.  Bravo, good sir," the Grosh complimented snidely, sounding amused.

    I said nothing and just lay there, wishing he'd die.  Well, he would die in a few minutes.  Of that I could promise.  "But now that she's gone, you can make the choice guilt free.  Help us recreate the portal, and finish the research, and I will make you the head of our R&D department.  You can even hunt down those cowards you allied yourself with.  You will live forever and get anything you so desire," he offered.

    I rotated my head enough to glare skeptically at him.  Was he truly trying to offer me that?  I didn't give him the satisfaction of a response as I sponged up the last few dribbles of magic inside of me.  He hesitated, and then sighed.  "All right, I'll add to it.  We have DNA from your species.  Your record stated that you didn't get on the breeding lists, so wouldn't having all the subservient females you want now be nice?  I'll clone dozens, just for you," he tacked on.

    Amusingly enough, I discovered a new level of hatred for the Grosh.  It surprised me, because I didn't realize that I could want somepony dead so badly that I thought just killing them might not be satisfying enough.  With still no answer, he twitched significantly.  "Fine!  When we invade, I'll round up all your little friends and give them to you as well.  How's that sound?" he asked eagerly.

    My eyes widened a little.  Fluttershy and Twilight.  I could see them again.  But, they would hate me.  It would destroy everything they loved for my own desires.  My eyes softened as the tears came again.  I wasn't willing to become a monster, was I?  This offer was what every individual would normally strive for though, wasn't it?  Such power and control, and everyone I cared about protected.  All achieved in an instant with little to no effort.  But it would sacrifice everypony else in Equestria to achieve it.  That wasn't acceptable.

    "Oh ho!  I see you're interested, now," the Grosh muttered, followed by, "You're sweet on one of them, aren't you?"

    Two, actually.  Not that he needed to know that.  It was a cold, sinking sensation that matched well with my failing body.  What I truly wished for way back then.  I rotated my head enough to see my old self slumbering, dreaming of the end of the world.  Well, it was the end for him.  He died with his species, didn't he?  He failed and wasn't able to protect anyone.  And he paid for the failure with death.  He failed so badly that he almost doomed another universe to the same fate with his selfish desire to not die.

    But I had another chance, didn't I?  To protect.  To fix what I almost destroyed.  To mend.  I was able to finally make a difference.  Then it occurred to me.  His offer was massive.  Which could only mean one thing.

    "You really have almost nothing, don't you?" I asked quietly, smirking.

    He froze, and then slowly shifted to a scowl.  "We...  No.  We have about thirty-percent of the information scanned.  But it looks like the final results will require your species' magic, aggravating as it is," he finally admitted.

    If this ship disappeared, all of the data would go with it, I realized.  This wasn't a Grosh project.  This was this Grosh's project.  He hadn't reported it due to greed and having next to nothing, then.  I smiled openly and couldn't help but chuckle.

    He glared irritably at me, but I interrupted with, "You were wrong earlier, by the way."

    "Oh?  Pray tell," he requested, sounding angry now.

    "I have one more spell.  It's rather simple and only has a few purposes, so it wouldn't be on my bio," I informed, smiling pleasantly up at him from my laying position.  My mind tested the stone I resided on, but it was too hard to manipulate with what little I had left in me.  Hmm.  Oh, I know.

    He scoffed and rolled his eyes.  "And I assume you believe this spell to be powerful enough to bring down this entire ship?  Please.  Be reasonable, now.  I doubt you want to die," he reasoned.

    I couldn't help but laugh.  "Destroy this ship?  Of course it can’t.  I'm not crazy," I added in a rasp, after my laughter degraded into a dry coughing fit.  I continued, regardless of his now amused expression, "And of course I don't want to die.  But if it's asked of me to protect those I care about, even if they'll never know, then I don't have a choice do I?  Besides, I admit to a certain satisfaction to taking you with me."

    He outright laughed.  "You are so entertaining!  Now, I await this display of magic eagerly," he added, smirking at me.  I saw medical drones lining up outside of my shield.  He probably presumed to collect me after I passed out.  Pity to disappoint.

    "You won't be impressed, as this was only ever used to heat soup and light pilot lights," I warned, deciding upon the closest soft object.  My left front hoof shook slightly as the creation symbol was carved into it instead of the rock.  I felt nothing, thankfully.  Channeling all the energy I had left, I ignited a small flame in my hoof.

    The Grosh watched skeptically.  "A lighter?  Really?" he questioned.

    "Mender...  I'm coming..." was suddenly whispered into my head, in Twilight's voice.  My heart fluttered and I smiled softly.  A small miracle for my last wish?  I sent silent thanks to whom, or whatever, granted it.  Her image appeared in my mind, horn screwing with perspective as it seemed to stretch out towards me.  The charge on my back sped up significantly.  But it was too slow.  Too late.  The entrance was a kilometer wide square.  Two and a half kilometers back at least meant…

    "You Grosh are kinda slow.  Did you know that you've surrounded me with roughly two hundred and fifty thousand cubic meters of Icheon gas?  The stimulants in it are flammable.  The oxygen in the parasites, mixed with the hydrogen in the base, is even more so.  I calculated that to be roughly six times the yield I'd need to reduce this ship and surrounding space to a very fine dust," I spelled out, smiling as I killed the power to the Aegis Barrier and watched it slowly start to fade.

    The Grosh panicked.  "Vent the hold!" he screamed, hitting buttons rapidly.

    Way, way too late for that.  Now I knew why they didn't let their research ships on the front lines.  Our primitive, heat based culture with our solid fuels would have gotten endless joy out of popping them like balloons.  I turned my head back to the image of Twilight as the barrier started to flicker.

    "I'm sorry, Twilight.  I wish I could have stayed in Equestria forever," I apologized, trying to nuzzle her image as her eyes widened.  She could hear me?

    "No, please, no Mender!  Hold on, I'm almost," she started to shout.

    I looked up at the shield as it flared up once more and then faded.  The docking bay doors hadn't even cleared their unlocking segment, as predicted.  It was too late.  The gas rushed in to mingle with my oxygen and I watched the flame on my hoof start to flare up as embers drifted into the air.  The parasites had gotten to the fire first, and were now regretting their decision it seemed.  No stopping it now.

    The spread was fast.  The flames seemed to coil like a snake.  Twilight screamed, her eyes becoming white orbs of energy as her horn flared up.  I felt her spell fire off without full charge, just as the flames flared and exploded.  There was no flash of memories, or even a pleasant tunnel.  Just a momentary pressure, then nothing...

    Comments ( 122 )

    #1 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Second.

    #2 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Well then, the Grosh really aren't the smartest of Aliens are they?

    I believe Twilight teleported him back just time time, or something like that. Even if she didn't it was quite a way to go. How long until we get the Epilogue do you think? I'm really looking forward to reading it. You've done a great job on this story here Kiroberos, an incredible job.

    #3 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    O my

    #4 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Well damn.

    That was certainly... something.

    I really want to see how this plays out.

    #5 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Need next chapter =c  Great job so far btw =) loving this

    #6 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    YESH OH MY GAWD

    Now that I got this out of the way, let me voice my opinion in a calmer manner.

    This was fucking awesome. I swear I could feel his amusement as he was explaining why the Grosh has doomed himself and his ship.

    And the prospect of Grosh ships being popped like balloons.

    And, as always, I already can't wait for the next chapter. Time, please, make it fast.

    #7 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    That reminds of how Jorge died in Reach poor Twi:fluttercry:

    #8 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    One more, then?

    ΔΓ

    #9 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yay update!

    Boo middle of a game D:

    #10 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Ima rage if this story ends like this.

    :fluttercry:

    #11 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    perfect, I literally cannot think of any way that this part can be any better, also cannot wait for the first epilouge.

    And now someone needs to make fanart based around the fighting scene. Because that would be awesome.

    I just read the first chapter again...and when he met a bunny he said this: Oh thank goodness, I don't think it was one of them! You sir...have reached an epicness of level 42.

    #12 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    It's not been changed to 'Complete' so...!?

    You're gonna probably be assaulted if the story ends like this, by the way.

    :fluttercry: *goes off to cry*

    #13 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>279303

    Same here

    #14 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>279112 Oh wow. Update. You have no idea how happy this makes me. I have had the most aggravating day. I just spent the last 5 hours driving around and sitting on my arse doing nothing (was taxing somebody around). My car has no functioning multimedia player, so I had nothing to make the constant dealing with idiots on the road bearable. I just spent the last 10 minutes stuck in a parking lot on a freeway, so you can just imagine my mood before I checked for a story update. Couple that with me being absurdly pissed off about the whole 'Derpy incident' going on with the show.

    You have no idea how happy I now am. Put what you think how happy I am to a graph, guess a number, and you'll still be wrong. Thank you oh guru of fan fiction. :twilightsmile:

    Also, I know he meant the spore galaxy, but I just couldn't help being a smartass :rainbowwild:

    #15 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    The Grosh remind me of the Grox.

    Azu
    #16 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    that was intense! and so awesome! :rainbowkiss: tho really sad how he stayed behind :fluttercry:

    Silly Grosh, turning the hold into a giant gas bomb just waiting to blow. all from a little lighter rune. funny how a small practical thing can be the end of such a massive ship. :raritywink:

    guess now we wait for the epilogues and see what happens next! :twilightsmile:

    #17 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Holy mother of equestria! That was, for lack of a better term, epic as fuck. Can't wait for the finale/epilogue!

    #18 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Bloody brilliant my good Sir!

    Very much looking foward to the rest. :rainbowkiss:

    #19 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    dang you cliffhangers, your writing is puting me on egde here pony dude

    #20 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Bravo. Now THAT is a way to go out with a bang. But now the question is if he made it or not, eh? Next chapter will either be a tearjerker or very happy I feel.

    #21 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I'm gonna has a sad at the end of the epilogues, I just know it.

    Please be ok, Mender?:fluttershysad:

    #22 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Oh my god D:

    #23 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    What a way to go

    You did good mender, rest in peace :ajsleepy: .

    Please do a epilogue

    #24 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    oh, so everything is going to end in a ball of fire? nice.

    #25 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I want to know what menders species look like.

    #26 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I'm having flashbacks of Dom's sacrifice in Gears 3 :raritydespair: Never thought it'd end like this, huh? Huh Twilight?

    #27 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp: Nuuuu Mender Nuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!! :fluttercry:

    This chapter was so vivid and intense it played itself out like a movie, HUZZAH!

    I also did not expect the merciless terror that is the Grosh to resemble cute bunnyrabbits :rainbowkiss:

    Ha! And in their overconfidence they overlooked filling their entire vessel with explosive gas. What a pitiful way to go... :rainbowlaugh:

    Oh and btw this is how I picture the research vessel :pinkiehappy:

    :flutterrage:< moar...Moar......MOAR for the love of god MOAR!!!

    #28 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEENNDEEERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    That is all.

    ALLONS-Y!!!

    #29 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    MOAR, PLEASE, KIND, SIR.

    #30 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    OH MY FREAKING GOD ALLMIGHY!

    #31 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I....NEED...MORE

    #32 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I predict...uhh...hmm. How am I supposed to make any more wild speculations now? We're down to just the bare essential questions at this point. Will Twilight teleport him in time to save him, or will all his injury practice pay off as he goes boom one last time in spectacular fashion? If she saves him, will the spell being not fully charged cause it to conveniently fail to recognize his injuries, and materialize him in his default healthy form? Or will Twilight accidentally grab only his head and leave the rest of his body behind? Or maybe he'll show up still tenderized, plus extra crispy from the premature teleport, conveniently cauterizing any still bleeding wounds? Will Twilight accidentally grab a bunch of the parasite microbes, allowing them to rapidly multiply and overrun Equestria's atmosphere? Why didn't Mender carve his rune into a chunk of apple or a piece of that harness, light that on fire, then toss it through his barrier? If he survives, will his cutie mark be an exploding bunny cyborg? Why is Mender so surprised by the bunny comparison when he already peed himself from seeing an Equestrian rabbit back in chapter one? Why did I fail to state a prediction that the Grosh would look bunnyesque when I was totally expecting it from that Angel introduction and the whole Grosh/Grox thing? Is this story technically a Spore crossover now? Furthermore, is Angel Bunny secretly that Grosh's long-lost lover, and that's why he wanted through the portal so badly? And the most critical question of all! Was that the apple grenade scene I accidentally inspired with a comment way back at like chapter five?!

    And last but not least, do any of these questions actually deserve serious answers?!

    #33 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    So much EPIC! :rainbowdetermined2:

    #34 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This is the best "alien race" in Equestria Story ever...  So much epic, and so awesome.

    #35 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Massive cliffhanger and potential main character death. Check

    Possible end to conflict and main story arc.  Check

    Reveal of two other races, both strange. And one bunny-like. Check.

    Romance left un-romanced. Check.

    Story still marked incomplete. THANK CELESTIA!!! Or by her other name Kiroberos.

    Yes, I just compared you to a Diety.

    #36 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Why do you do this to me? Cliffhangers are EVIL!

    #37 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    WAT A FINALE! Now epilogue be quick. We must know whether or not our favorite OC is now our favorite martyr.

    #38 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You know, thinking about it, I'm honestly torn. If he comes back, while beautifully written I'm sure, the impact will be lost. If he dies, it'll be heart wrenching and beautiful, but it'll lack a sense of closure, of what could have beens and whatnot. Gah, why must I care so much :fluttercry:

    #39 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>279632 Dang, that was deep. :fluttershysad:

    #40 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    For the loves of Luna's sunless sky, this is awesome :raritydespair:

    #41 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #42 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    FUCKING EPIC!!!

    I'd love to see some art of Rainbow Dash and Mender with  his blade in his mouth and her wings encased in the light of Mender's magic.

    Oh man, I don't know what to say....so much epicness and win that it's overloading. I'm excitingly awaiting the next chapter! I have to wait 3 days for it it seems T_T!!! MAN SO EPIC!

    Have a good one.

    #43 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    SHIT MAN. HOLY SHIT :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

    Sorry for that. This chapter was just spectacular.

    #44 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>279116

    How Applejack isn't on the moon, I'll never know, :ajbemused: maybe Twilight wrote her a Friendship Letter on how being a good friend sometimes means you have to stop your friend from shooting herself in the foot.  :twilightsheepish:

    #45 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    No.

    I'm sitting here lying to myself saying I'm not crying.

    I'm a horrible liar. That was the best sacrifice I've ever seen. Ever.

    I would ask for a happy ending, but you seem to know how to do your shit, so you do what you do best. Be fucking awesome and double ship with best ponies until the day you die you magnificent bastard.

    #46 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This story gets more amazing every time. I absolutely adore your writing.

    #47 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>279116

    Delightful.

    Oh, and uhm... I think that special somepony should be used over girl/boy/colt/mare/filly friend, though fillyfooler and coltcuddler should still be used (Unless in a context where other words, such as.. ehem, sorry, but dickmuncher, knob (Knot?) jockey, or carpetmuncher. You don't write stories like that from what I can tell, though, so I digress I suppose :rainbowwild: )

    Oh, and I found the perfect song to represent all the shipping up until now.. (Not read latest chapter, yet, however. You have evil timing, Kir :fluttershysad: )

    #48 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Unbelievably amazing. The best chapter i've read from any fanfic in a long time. :heart:

    #49 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Maybe it's my memories of high school, but I keep hearing "grosh" as a plural noun.  It's only a typo away, after all.

    There's no way our Mender won't survive this.  Because this is fanfiction.  And it is Ponies.  And I feel like, if our Moon Mender doesn't make it, I will merely be Tolerant. :pinkiesad2:

    But seriously, you're a great writer, and I can't wait to see how he makes it out.  So I'll have to tune in for the next exciting episode of... PONIES! IN! SPAAAAAAAAAAACE!!! :trollestia:

    #50 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHsplat.

    *Starts reading*

    Moar now.

    #51 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    My God that was amazing.:pinkiesad2:

    Mender x Twilight ftw:twilightsmile:

    #52 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Soooo.....Heroic sacrafice that is probebly going to go horribly wrong thanks to :twilightsmile: meddling. either this is going to end awesome with smiles all around or it ganna end with a big Bawling fest.

    I await it with vigor!

    #53 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    GAK

    GURK

    WAT

    WAT DA FUCK

    OH MY GOOOOKETHDIKNDRGMVZSDVMSDVKVZDNDVFNZFLBNDZFZZhcndwjcehgfcasejf. . . *dies*

    Goddamnit! POST THE BUCKING EPILOGUES 'KIR, YER KILLIN' ME! Also, out of interest, will you be going to the next BroNYCon?

    >>280790

    That song. . . is actually pretty good. :twilightsmile:

    #54 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Another amazing chapter.

    So it's confirmed. This isn't a human in Equestria fic.

    #55 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281026

    Pretty good?

    PRETTY GOOD?

    That song was bucking awesome.

    Come at me, bro.

    #56 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Wow this was unexpected! Not the chapter, but the fact that I actually threw up my hands and made the girliest squee ever! :pinkiegasp:

    This was how awesome this was! 2 epilogues left? I can live with that!

    May I add how excited I am for the sequel?... Or can't I tell people that there's one? :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

    -Glassed

    #57 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I've run out of seat edge to sit on and am now currently on the floor.

    So worth it.

    #58 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281079

    O RLY???

    Come at ME, sis.

    >>281143

    LOL, is it comfortable?

    #59 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281172

    We have to stick together bro. Why are we yelling at each other? :pinkiegasp:

    Makes about as much sense as..well, Pinkie.

    #60 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    So we have the ending coming up with an alt ending to follow, me thinks it'll be of him being saved and maybe one of him dying. Also possability of it being a twilight ending and a fluttershy ending. That's my guess anyway.

    Great chapter, great story over all. Sad to see it coming to a close, but all goodthings must come to an end.

    #61 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281188

    I know, right? I'm not afraid to end this argument. NO MORE YELLI- whoops :twilightblush:

    >>281318

    Didn't you know there's gonna be a sequel? Stay tuned, buddy!

    #62 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>145001 Wow, I'm shocked that somepony had notced it. :pinkiehappy: As for the chapter :My mind - blown. I could think of some pictures here, but none of them would describe the epicness of this. To tell the truth, when I read the first three chapters, i never suspected THIS will happen. Good job. Please say there is a sequel.:fluttercry:

    #63 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281345

    Playing that song while playing several songs in the background.

    Trippy. :fluttershysad:

    Was interesting anyway! :scootangel:

    I promise I don't do drugs :heart:

    #64 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281373

    I don't doubt you :twilightsmile:

    #65 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281376 Akela

    I appreciate your loyalty, and reward you thusly

    #66 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281378

    Oh. My. GOD.

    That was the best video ever. I LOVE YOU SO MUCH. Crap, I have Geometry now. I'll respond to any PMs or comments in 50 minutes.

    #67 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Sorry, need to get this out of my system.

    KIROBEROS, Y U UPDATE ON FAMILY GAME NIGHT! I had to wait till the next day to read this! Totally owned at Scrabble though. 30 points for "pacify"!

    That being said, this was definitely worth the wait. Words cannot describe my appreciation for people that write this well. You are a shining star among aspiring authors. You may have even inspired me to start writing. Maybe.

    If the story ends here, I would honestly be fine with that. You set it up well. Still, can't wait for those prologues!

    I may be a day late, but HAPPY DERPY DAY!!!!!

        

    #68 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281396

    HAPPY DERPY DAY TO YOU TOO!

    God, I suck at Scrabble. My seven year old little brother kills me whenever we play.

    #70 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Well that was wrapped up rather nicely, not a bad way to die either (if he died that is, which I doubt Cus there are 2 epilogues and a WIP sequel).

    Oh and going off topic a 'Lil, do you guys wanna play sins some time? Ive only played a match or two with each race, so I'd be pretty bad, but meh :3

    Many congrats to you Kiro, for an amazing work of fiction.

       -Shriked.

    JZG
    #71 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I'm really quite pleased to see how attached everyone has become of Moon Mender. :raritystarry: I demand everyone start making fanart!

    Azu
    #72 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281396

    Kiroberos has been a great inspiration for me. now I'm starting to piece together a story. :yay: oh and a very derpy day to you too! :derpytongue2:

    hmm, I'm thinking since twilight went into her mega magic mode its very possible that even with the teleport charge not full that she made it in time. she has scary amounts of magical possibility when she does that. :pinkiegasp:

    assuming she did make it and got mender out, whats going to happen to mender now that his other body is actually dead? :twilightoops:

    and if she didn't make it, what happened to twilight? is she ok? that's a lot of strain to use that kind of magic I'm sure. :fluttershysad:

    ahh!!! so many questions! can't wait for the epilogues now! :trollestia:

    edit* wow that was a weird bug. i just got a notification that i commented on my own story Memory Pending? :trixieshiftright:

    "Azu commented on your story Memory Pending 11:43 am" :facehoof:

    #73 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281473

    I'm squeeing so hard right now. I'm gonna be one of the two beta readers! SQUEE~ :pinkiehappy:

    >>281704

    I'm shit at drawing :raritydespair: I would make fanart if I could though. I'M SO SORRY JULIA :raritycry:

    #74 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Man. I made a fimfiction account just so that I could comment on this story. This is absolutely one of the best MLP FIM fiction stories I've ever read.

    You rock man, you totally rock, I am feeling sad right now that this might be the end for Mender :fluttercry: but if it's not and it turns out that he survives in the next chapter, I'll be the happiest pony alive :pinkiehappy:

    I just don't know what to say, I've been checking your story for new chapters every day since I first stumbled upon it, it has been interesting, intriguing, fun, sad, hilarious, awesome, mind-boggling and much more.

    Just, thank you. Thank you for this story :heart:

    #75 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You see, this, this right here is how you write a death scene. This makes the one in my fic look like a four-year-old slapping at the keyboard

    #76 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>281840 (Cheezer) It's not the end for Mender. There are two epilogues. One epilogue for a complete ending to this story and one setting the story up for the sequel. It would be hard to write a sequel when the main character is dead, wouldn't it? :derpytongue2:

    If anybody on here wants to play sins, dawn of war, or basically anything else you may wanna play that I may happen to own, feel free to tell me. Although, I do spend most of my time playing against the comp, so I may not be all that good against fellow humans/ponies. I mostly play mods as well, so I can either point you guys to some awesome mods, or we can play the normal game itself. :twilightblush:

    Edit: OMG! I JUST COMMENTED ON MY OWN COMMENT APPARENTLY!

    Snake: You've created a time paradox!

    Me: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    #77 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>279279 I'd rather not see this as similar to how Jorge died, because if you think about it, he died thinking that he had just saved Reach, but in the end, the planet was still overrun...

    #78 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Waitwaitwait. Mender's species ISN'T future humans with magic? It's like, space gremlins? NOT expecting that. And we finally get a description of the Grosh.  And the resolution of everything. All in one chapter. This is great, I love it.

    #79 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    MOAR!

    I've...pretty much run out of verbal shenanigans to match to this I'm afraid. You'll have to make do with a 'jolly good!' :twilightsheepish:

    #80 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    [Before Reading:]  Aww, man. This morning I woke up, and saw the E-mail that this story had updated (on my phone) but I didn't have time to read it, so I had to go the whole day waiting to get home so I could (that was torture.) Then, when I finally did get home, one of my friends distracted me with something, and I forgot about the story. Now, 6 hours later I just remembered  Oh God! Memory Pending!

    And now, to the story...

    [After Reading:]   Well, damn.

    That's all I can think to say.

    JZG
    #81 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>281817 (Akela)

    That's okay. I forgive you. For every one decent drawing I do, there's at least three or four crappy drawings. Doesn't help that I'm waaaaaay out of practice. At least ponies don't have hands!!! :raritystarry:

    #82 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>281395

    :pinkiehappy:

    Not really a video, but a pretty nice radio station I discovered a while back  

    It's a stream, though, so it isn't always super fast. Depends on your connection.  

    :pinkiesmile:

    Azu
    #83 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>282287

    amen to that, i never could draw hands for the life of me. :raritydespair:

    i still can't really draw, but i am particularly bad at drawing hands! :twilightoops:

    #84 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This was an amazing pleasure to read.  If you do decide to do a sequel, I be you'll first reader.:twilightsmile:

    #85 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This was an amazing pleasure to read.  If you do decide to do a sequel, I be you'll first reader.:twilightsmile:

    #86 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>280635

    You made me laugh that silent laugh when you are practically choking from mirth.

    Secondly, I love huge explosions, would you be willing to give me the atmosphere's pressure in the hold so I could calculate the energy released (assuming a 2 hydrogen to 1 oxygen reaction).  :twilightsmile:

    FIRE!!  :pinkiehappy:

    Also my mental image of Mender's original body would be akin to a blue Lombax, anypony see something different?

    #87 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Brilliant job on this story! Loved the amount time and labour you put into this!!:pinkiehappy:

    #88 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Grosh=moon people from Dark cloud?

    #89 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>282287

    Oh god, the hands. I WARNED YOU ABOUT HANDS BRO!!!!

    I TOLD YOU DOG!

    >>282661

    Alright, the stream is starti- MARRY ME.

    #90 · 63w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Best. Chapter. Ever.

    Nothing more to say...

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    >>279354

    You're a taxi driver? :pinkiegasp:

    . . . we might have met IRL before.

    #93 · 63w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Longest comment reply EVER!  Well for me, anyway.  Three hours to type, ten pages of text… :rainbowderp:

    >>279165 - Spiili

    Two epilogues.  The first is on Monday. :twilightsmile:  And as they're short, I won't wait as long until posting the second.  I'm glad you enjoyed the long run, though.

    >>279158 - KitsuneNoYomeiri

    First, actually. :derpytongue2:  But I put you second in the comments if it makes you feel better.

    >>279180 - Meta Knight

    Is that good or bad? :fluttershysad:

    >>279207 - Alphaetus_Prime

    Monday, and then probably Wednesday, and the fic shall be done. :twilightsmile:  Sequel and a few shorts in the works as well, if you're interested.

    >>279249 - Cactuarz

    No more chapters.  Just two more epilogues. :twilightsmile:  To wrap the story up nicely.

    >>279277 - Yanari

    I'm glad you liked! :pinkiehappy:  Sadly, there are no more chapters.  Simply two epilogues left.  Monday and Wednesday, probably.  I haven't decided on the latter yet.

    >>279279 - Swordking684

    Reach? :rainbowhuh:

    >>279294 - Delta Gamma

    Two more.  Both epilogues are short and you can stop reading after the first if you so choose.  The second is more of a prologue into the sequel, in all actuality. :pinkiesmile:  If you'd rather not read anymore about Mender, you can stop with the first and the story will be concluded well enough.

    >>279296 - Cid619

    Oooh, game? :pinkiegasp:

    >>279303 - Ragenule

    It's got two epilogues, don't worry.  Monday and probably Wednesday are the posting dates. :twilightsmile:

    >>279335 - Muffinking

    Fanart would be indeed epic and I'd be honored. :twilightsmile:  That's a lot of effort though.  I'm glad you liked the ending of the story, and hope you enjoy the two epilogues as well.  Or will you be stopping after the first one? :pinkiesmile:

    >>279338 - KitsuneNoYomeiri

    Of course it's not complete. :rainbowwild:  I've said repeatedly in my comment replies that there are two epilogues.  One concludes the story, and the second sets up for the sequel, if I ever manage to finish it.  It's almost done with chapter four right now.

    >>279341 - BFANproject

    Epilogues are coming.  Monday and probably Wednesday. :twilightsheepish:

    >>279354 - Lordlandraider

    I'm glad you enjoyed my story.  I'm hardly a guru, though. :twilightsheepish:  I know what having a crappy day can be like, that's for sure.  Bleh.  I'm glad I could do something to make yours a little better, though.  And don't worry, I'm upset about the whole Derpy thing too.  It's saddening.

    And I kinda figured you were just being snarky. :rainbowwild:

    >>279384 - Sonicbrony66

    :facehoof:  You must be a new commenter.  Or at least not peek at them.  Yes, Spore was the original crossover to the fiction, but I abandoned it after changing too much stuff.  The Grosh are modeled in personality and function after the Grox.

    >>279390 - Azu

    Indeed.  Sometimes it's the small things that matter the most.  Causality and all.  Mender got his wish to do something important for the greater good, so I think he was happy.  Now I just suppose we wait and see if Twilight was fast enough.  Epilogue 1 is coming on Monday and 2 on Wednesday, more than likely. :twilightsmile:

    >>279404 - Bridgebrain

    I'm glad you liked.  :pinkiehappy:  It's sad that it's coming to an end, but I had a lot of fun writing it so far.  Two more postings to go.

    (1/7)

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    >>279439 - Dk0987654321

    Hee, I wouldn't say brilliant, but thank you. :twilightsmile:  Two more to go.

    >>279449 - cyber5555

    Isn't that the point? :raritywink:  As a writer, I don't have to always try to inspire happy and comfy emotions.  I wonder.  Should this story end happy or sad?

    >>279469 - SilverFlame

    There are two chapters left.  You can pick to stop after the next, though. :twilightsmile:

    >>279490 - Parolo41

    Oooh, does that mean you're going to read both? :pinkiesmile:

    >>279523 - GarlicParsnip

    Oooh, you enjoyed? :pinkiehappy:

    >>279591 - Mard93

    Whoa!  Writing him off already, huh? :rainbowwild:  And no need to ask.  There are already TWO epilogues written.  Monday and Wednesday.

    >>279603 - tigerphoenix

    Oooh, I take it that means you liked. :twilightsmile:  You shouldn't starve yourself, though.  That would be very, very bad.  I don't want to lose a fellow brony and reader. :fluttershysad:  And Epilogues are on their way.  Next week.  As many times as I've said that in these replies, hopefully everypony will hear the news this time around. :twilightoops:  Oh, and because it's never revealed in-story, to be fair, I'll just tell you here.  She used the lock on she already had on him through the charging teleport spell to try to communicate.  The distance screwed with it a bit but yeah.

    >>279605 - Ryexander

    Well the Grosh certainly did, along with 98% of the ship. :rainbowderp:  And you're surprisingly accurate.  An explosion such as that in space would kind of look like a ball, momentarily.  Before rapidly dissipating into a superheated cloud and sending a few thousand tons of space shrapnel in every direction.  The fireball itself probably wouldn't last very long unless the Grosh use some really interesting fuel sources, which is entirely possible.  But then it would be more akin to plasma instead of fire.

    >>279622 - Griffomo13

    Hahaha!  I suck at drawing, unfortunately, so the only thing I can do is describe it.  Or make it in Spore, I suppose.

    >>279632 - Xerae

    Are you blaming her for it? :pinkiegasp:  Harsh, although she'd likely agree.  Guess we'll have to wait until the epilogues to see. :twilightsmile:

    >>279641 - Enmar

    I'm glad you were drawn in so well.  My job was successful as a writer, then. :pinkiehappy:  And yup, they're cyborg bunnies.  And now you know why he was so afraid of the bunny all the way back at the beginning.  He's known about the Grosh all along, and is very deeply afraid of them.  They also generally don't consider their breathing gasses to be flammable.  They've used a different type of propulsion than fuel-based, which doesn't ignite anything.  They only really realized the true lethality of their own 'air' in the war with Mender's allies.  That's why they build their military ships without large pockets of the stuff.

    And ooh!  I like the picture.  Where is it from?

    >>279643 - MyLittleTimeLord

    Heee!  I should really watch Doctor Who. :twilightsmile:  I know Julia likes it.  Maybe she has copies...

    >>279683 - tytyvm

    Monday, then Wednesday. :pinkiesmile:  You're very polite.

    >>279685 - jmlop0

    :pinkiegasp:  Good or bad?  Oooh, I like your avi.

    >>279732 - damandan28

    Monday and Wednesday. :pinkiehappy:  *feels like a broken record*

    (2/7)

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    >>279747 - Periphery

    Whoa! :rainbowderp:  Uuuuhhh... I'll just go down the list!  There's plenty to speculate about still.  Like if that finally got rid of the link, or what the 'allies' were, etc. :twilightsmile:  And Twilight saving him is a very good question, but will have to wait for the epilogues. :pinkiegasp:  Although you're right.  He's gotten a lot of injury practice.  Complications with her spell are also possible, of course.  Although ripping his head off and only teleporting it would be exceedingly traumatizing to everypony there. :twilightoops:  The parasites wouldn't be that big of a deal though, as they don't live very long and nitrogen kills them off even faster.  If Equestria's atmosphere is like ours, it would contain nitrogen in it already.  The harness was still attached to him and undoing it or tearing a chunk off was frankly more than he could manage while bleeding out rapidly like that.  The apple would have worked if he'd had time to sync it to the shield.  It doesn't let anything else out of it either, remember.

    I literally broke into chortles at his cutie mark mentioning, though.  You're very good, Sir. :rainbowlaugh:  The bunny thing is complicated, though.  He largely freaked out from turning and coming face to face with Angel way back.  The comparisons were close enough to where, for that brief moment, he panicked.  He probably since forgot about it, and Rainbow's massive context breaking laughter threw him off.  Why YOU didn't notice is beyond me, though. :raritywink:  And no, it's not a Spore crossover.  I abandoned that in Chapter 3.  And... ah... uh... er... what?  Um...  My brain hurts.  Uh, in high probability, no. :pinkiecrazy:  And no, that wasn't the apple grenade thing.  That's for the sequel.

    And I really should have read your last question first.  Well, have serious answers anyway! :pinkiehappy:  And congratulations on finally achieving 45% usage of my emoticon quota!  You're getting closer and closer to your own reply post...

    >>279907 - Derpmind

    Thank you! :twilightsmile:

    >>280083 - Zaehlas

    I think it might be the only one, so isn't that kind of cheating? :rainbowderp:  Well, unless I write a sequel, anyway.  But thank you for the high regards! :twilightsmile:

    >>280104 - Agarwaen

    Heee.  A checklist!  Twilight would be proud.  And I'm honestly surprised nobody figured out they'd look like bunnies.  The closest any commenter came was that they WEAPONIZED bunnies, which is just cruel. :fluttershysad:  I'm not sure if even the Grosh are that mean.  And you're right, the main body of this story contains no romance apart from ship tease. :twilightsmile:  It's insinuated however, so I needed the tag.  But there's still two epilogues!  That might change.  And hey!  A sequel!  And whoa.  I'm definitely nowhere near a god. :rainbowderp:

    >>280119 - Corvus

    They ARE evil. :pinkiesmile:

    >>280144 - Connorbeast

    Heh, are you gonna stop at Epilogue 1, or are you going to read the second as well?

    >>280172 - Bridgebrain

    Heh, true enough.  I think it's alright to be torn, though.  The two options don't compare very well, as they both give you something different. :twilightsmile:  Are you going to read both epilogues?

    >>280173 - trigrbrony777

    It feels like not having played the game, I'm missing out on some great references here. :fluttercry:

    >>280248 - Shefira

    Depressing reference, but yay! :yay:  I'm doing my job right, then.  The fact that so many ponies like this story is still surprising to me.

    (3/7)

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    >>280253 - Shamus_Aran

    Nope.  Mender's definitely not human. :twilightsmile:  Never was, never will be.  Well, unless ponies out there draw really weird fanart.

    >>280330 - NightCore

    Fanart would be amazing. :twilightsmile:  I'll probably put up what I have so far, art-wise, on DeviantArt later today.  One of my betas did some amazing sketches, a really nice finalized drawing, and sent me a custom pony in the mail of Mender. :pinkiesmile:  I have her permission now to upload the pics.

    >>280635 - Layne

    Aww.  That is a DEPRESSING picture. :fluttercry:  I... I can't even think of anything to say.  It's simply too sad.  I'm glad you liked the chapter, though.

    >>280749 - Fourpony

    A very good point.  I hope Twilight stopped her from writing that one, at least. :twilightoops:  Open mouth, insert entire leg, hoof and all.

    >>280775 - MuzzledElk

    Wow.  I...  I'm shocked.  This is one of the best reviews I've ever received.  Thank you. :pinkiesad2:  You are very kind.  I usually don't think my work is really all that good, but I'm truly glad that as many ponies have liked it as has shown.  I'm glad I decided to post it after all.  This has been a very, very wonderful experience.  So thank you.  For both reading, and letting me know that my work is appreciated.  I can honestly say I hope you return for the sequel, but if you stop after the first Epilogue, that will be enough. :twilightsmile:  I'm glad you enjoyed.

    >>280785 - Thorbinator

    I'm glad you like. :pinkiesmile:  Entertaining you ponies is the reason I write so I'm glad that it's turning out so well.

    >>280790 - Flushy

    Oooh, like the first mix.  Heh, I typically avoid hard edged terms like those.  They'd get more ponies offended than not.  And I probably will use "special somepony".  It's just using the same term over and over again can get a little tiring or grating.  All else fails, I can just shift into every single term they used in hearts and hooves and make my entire reading audience hurl. :rainbowderp:  "He's my smoochie-woochie-wuvie bear!"

    Oooh, and I know this song.  I have to agree with your choice so far.  If I had to describe Mender in one word, 'Lost' would be a good one.  And I'm sorry for my timing. :fluttershysad:

    >>280792 - AWSOMEPOSSUM16

    I'm glad you like. :pinkiesmile:  You guys are awesome.

    >>280802 - Blik

    I... am totally unsure of what you mean? :rainbowderp:  I've never heard anything similar to Grosh except for Grox.  Maybe it's just cultural.  I'm glad you like my story, though. :twilightsmile:  Are you reading both epilogues or stopping after the first?  And is that like "Gangsta's in Space?" :pinkiegasp:

    >>280890 - SirVoid

    Monday. :twilightsmile:

    >>280939 - zomglul

    Thank you! :pinkiehappy:  And vote taken.  Although that's the last one I'm accepting for now.

    >>281009 - Baboosh

    Oooh, are you reading both epilogues? :twilightsmile:  And LotR ftw!  I'm glad you're enjoying so much.  *can't remember that point in the movie, and has trouble identifying Gimli without his helmet*  That's either him or his father.  Hum.

    >>281026 - Akela

    Whoa!  Looks like somepony wasn't expecting that. :raritywink:  And they're coming next week.  One on Monday and the other will probably be Wednesday.  And I wish. :fluttershysad:  Traveling requires bits.  I ish poor college student.

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    >>281066 - DoubleRainbow

    Yuppers!  Confirmed.  Mender was never human. :twilightsmile:  I'm glad you're enjoying though!  He's an alien species that begins with K.  They're also my personal race in Spore, but nobody's probably going to get that. :twilightsheepish:  And no, it's got nothing to do with my user name except the first letter.  Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying!  Are you going to stop with this story, or read Epilogue 2 and continue to the next?

    >>281079 - Flushy

    If it means anything, I thought it was amazing too. :twilightsmile:

    >>281123 - Glassed

    Heee!  I'm glad you liked, Glassed. :twilightsmile:  You've been here from the start so that means a lot.  And girly squees are permitted on occasion. :pinkiehappy:  I do them sometimes as well.  And of course you can talk about the Sequel.  It's not a sure thing yet, but it's definitely looking a lot more promising now that I flattened my writer's block. :trixieshiftright:

    >>281143 - Mystfit

    That sounds uncomfortable. :rainbowderp:  You should get a cushion or something.  I'm glad you think it's exciting, though. :twilightsmile:

    >>281172 - Akela

    Oooh, another epic song to add to my collection. :pinkiesmile:

    >>281188 - Flushy

    Excellent message in that one, Flushy. :twilightsmile:  I'd say I'd add it to my collection, but it's kinda already there.

    >>281318 - Stormcaller

    Heee.  Would it screw with your mind too much to say that BOTH endings are technically canon, and that they're chronologically ordered? :pinkiesmile:  Although you're right.  ALL things eventually come to an end, both good and bad.

    >>281345 - Akela

    You'd know, being one of the soon to be betas of it. :raritywink:

    >>281364 - MorningDart

    Well of course I'd notice.  You've only been commenting for how long? :derpytongue2:  And there IS a sequel.  I'm working on it right now, but I'm not going to post any chapters of it until it's finished.  I'm almost done with chapter 4.

    >>281373 - Flushy

    >>281376 - Akela

    >>281378 - Flushy

    >>281395 - Akela

    You two are awesome. :twilightsmile:

    >>281396 - Master Specter

    Oooh, totally congrats on the Scrabble success. :raritywink:  And you make me blush. :twilightblush:  I'm glad you think so highly of my writing.  If you did decide to try your hand at it, you know I'd read. :twilightsmile:  And no, the story won't be ending here.  You get two epilogues next week to wrap things up a little.  And wooo!  Derpy ish awesome. :derpyderp2:

    >>281455 - Akela

    This is why I don't play it myself. :twilightoops:

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    >>281473 - Stormcaller

    Hee!  You remind me of why I love Pinkie so much. :pinkiesmile:

    >>281475 - Shriked

    Heh, it could be a PREQUEL. :raritywink:  But then again, it wouldn't have much to do with ponies then, and I'd have to post it somewhere else.  Plus it would get really over my rating really fast.  That's a lot of gore. :rainbowderp:  And maybe. :twilightsmile:  It's been over a year since I played it, so I probably suck royally.  I'd need to get back into practice.  I'm glad you like the story, though!

    >>281704 - Julia

    *snickers*  You aren't attached to him? :raritywink:  I know, I know.  Stoic and cold.  Heh.  Fanart WOULD be cool.

    >>281777 - Azu

    Ooooh.  A very good story, I might add! :twilightsmile:  I highly, highly recommend it once Azu gets it posted.  Everypony should go read it then.

    And there are a lot of questions.  Are you going to read both epilogues, then? :pinkiehappy:  *excited*  I'd be worried about more than just Twilight, though.  I mean, if she managed to teleport him either way, he's going to look a mess and a half.  Traumatized ponies all around, especially Flutters!  And what of Dashie?  Sure, she only got clipped in the shoulder, but she just got forced to abandon a friend to potentially die.  There's lots that could happen. :pinkiesmile:

    And that IS a really weird glitch. :rainbowhuh:  Maybe you temporarily saw reality through my eyes!

    >>281817 - Akela

    Yuppers! :twilightsmile:  I'll probably send out the first chapter to you and Flushy on Thursday of next week.  I can usually manage about a chapter a week or so.  It took me a little under two months to write the original.  You two still have to comment on it when I post, though! :raritywink:

    >>281840 - Cheezer

    *GASP!* :pinkiegasp:  Another amazing review!  Thank you so much.  You guys really are the best.  I wonder how many other ponies are reading that I don't even know about. :twilightsmile:  Does this mean  you're going to read both epilogues, then?  The second epilogue is more of a prologue for the sequel, really.  I'm honored however that you've gotten such entertainment from my story.  This IS the reason I write, so that I can bring entertainment and excitement to everypony. :pinkiehappy:  I never expected it to become so popular in the least!  I'm... happy.

    >>281881 - Jspang

    Um, thank you. :rainbowderp:  You're really, really hard on yourself though.  Now I'm just going to have to read your story and see for myself.

    >>281888 - Lordlandraider (LLR)

    Heh, not neededly.  It might be about his afterlife or similar.  It could be a prequel as well.  But that would be difficult because it wouldn't be pony, then.  Are you going to read both epilogues? :twilightsmile:

    And uh oh.  You've stumbled upon a... sort of code of conduct for me.  I'm a massive believer in Love and Tolerate.  So much so that I outwardly REFUSE to fight against anypony.  I don't do FPS or PvP because of this.  So if we were going to play Sins, it would HAVE to be a CompStomp.  Oh, and I largely play modded as well, but mostly my own mods. :rainbowderp:

    And that glitch again?  I think I heard something about them renovating the comment coding though, so it might be a temporary thing.

    >>281919 - Unwitting Brony

    Honestly, I'm surprised nopony's added that to the question list that needed answers.  Did that stop the Grosh?  *chuckles*

    >>281930 - Curious

    Well it WAS the last chapter. :rainbowwild:  All that's left are two epilogues to wrap things up.  And nope, his race isn't human at all.  I'm glad you're enjoying, though. :twilightsmile:

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    >>282111 - TonyPony

    Oooh, if you're gonna read the second epilogue/sequel, you might need to come up with a whole new set of them! :pinkiegasp:  I'll settle for a "Jolly Good" though! :pinkiehappy:  Glad you're liking!

    >>282281 - Egthoridon

    That happens to me like, ALL THE TIME! :facehoof:  Especially with PMs.  I'll read them, think up replies, then something will distract me and I'll forget to mark the PM as unread again, and then I think I already responded to it and forget for potentially days at a time. :fluttercry:  And is that good or bad?

    >>282287 - Julia

    You mean fingers, right?  I think that's the part you actually hate. :raritywink:  And your drawings rock, Julia.  You're too hard on yourself. :trixieshiftright:

    >>282885 - Azu

    I suck at fingers. :facehoof:  Whenever forced to draw humanoids, I usually try to find creative ways to get around drawing them.

    >>283231 - Jayfeather

    Oooh, you'll wanna stick around for Epilogue 2 then.  It's a direct tie in to the sequel I'm currently working on. :pinkiesmile:  The only real reason I wouldn't finish the sequel is if something bad happens.  You know, like I get hit by a bus or something and die instantly.  I'm glad you pulled so much entertainment out of it, though, my friend. :twilightsmile:  There since pretty much the beginning.  Thank you for reading.

    >>283529 - Fourpony

    It wins hooves down for most depressing picture posted so far. :twilightoops:

    And oooh, a physics pony?  Either that or just an explosion lover. :twilightblush:  Lemme see.  It would be based off their home planet, so slightly denser than that of Earth's average atmosphere.  Probably between 15 and 15.5 psi.  Potentially as high as 17, but I doubt it.  Is that what you're looking for?

    And that would be epic. :pinkiesmile:  Lombax is pretty close if you lop off the tail and make the ears a little thinner.

    >>284028 - Jacko

    Thank you! :twilightsmile:  I'm always happy to hear that my effort is paying off.  It ate up a good two months of my life, but I think it was worth it.  It seems I've entertained quite a few ponies, which was my ultimate goal. :pinkiehappy:

    >>284595 - katarjin

    Uh...  *looks up a picture*  Hmm.  Well in stature, they're pretty close.  The Grosh are really, really short.  Shorter than the Ka... er..... *coughs*  Shorter than Mender used to be before he went all pony.  The proportions seem correct, but probably not so much on the attitude and cybernetics.  So to summarize, possibly if they decided to take a cheese grater to their face, replace parts of themselves with mechanical ones, and universally vote that everything that wasn't exactly like them needed to die horribly.

    >>284755 - Akela

    Er, who do you want to marry NOW? :rainbowderp:  First it was Dash, then it was Scoots, and you also have your pretty girlfriend on the side, and I still think you're in denial about Flushy... :derpytongue2:

    >>284842 - MrBettney

    Thank you!  Nothing else is needed. :twilightsmile:  I'm glad you're enjoying.

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    Lol, you aren't getting rid of me that easily. I'm going to keep reading, you do amazing work.

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