Wow, this is really good, Mr. Crowley.

(Unintentional Ozzy Osbourne pun)

PS: Dinky is best pony!

Loving your writing style. Here, have my stars :D

Anyway, one question though:

I'm not sure if I misread, but is Sharpquill's full name Sharpquill Mare? Doesn't mare refer to females only? He must've had a pretty awkward childhood being called Sharpquill Lady :/

>>125719125719 It's like real life, it's hilarious to have as a name, but possible. I once knew a guy who's FIRST name was lady. good times, good times.

>>125724125724 Mr. Lady.

Is the other guy from another one of your stories? which one?

The fluttershy one?

Oh Ditzy

She's strongest pony there is.

Well that just cheered up my whole day! (And it was very well written, too)

like it so far...and love the pictures

That's awesome continuity right there, Crowley.

Oh and also you're the season vet when it comes to this type of story sir.

you're unique, i love your fics! MOAR

>>125719125719

Yes, he's related to Mayor Mare, hence why he feels a sense of entitlement.

>>125761125761

Yes, that very fic!

Why is it that you're the only author I've seen who constantly includes pictures in their stories?

But anyway, this is looking good so far!

HAY! So you decided to put this in Fimfic? XD Awesome! I remember this story! It's a good one!

Listening to The Travelling Man by Chameleon Circuit during the bit where they kiss made me d'awww. I felt all warm inside.

I love it. One of the best, if shortest, fics I've ever read.

>>126126126126

Short and sweet, that's how I make 'em!

It's true. I do.

writers should take example on you and put illustrationsin their fics.

Mk. Not gonna lie. I screamed and flailed my arms on that second chapter like a total maniac. Hehe.

That said, while this fic was slightly predictable, my gushing heart would like to protest otherwise. Just when I thought I'd read it all this guy goes and starts using character portraits in the middle of their fic!  It's awfully simple yet ingenious if you ask me. Anyways, I love this fic to death, and hope you continue to write more! More Derpy to be specific!

*clap clap clap clap clap clap clap* AMAZING CROWLEY!

Haha, I always enjoy your stories, and it was nice to finally find out why that roommate had a black eye

-Glassed

I love this.

This is the best shipping fic ive ever read and the only one that has to do with ACTUAL SHIPPING

The... Cuteness...! It's too much...! My adorability processors are going haywire...!! NGAAAAH!

Image: http://kdmedianow.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/06/explosion2.jpg

friendship is magic, and muffins are valued trade goods

it needs to be longer, the ending wasnt satisfying enough

A minute or two quietly passes as you eat and talk together < i always talk quietly shhh don't tell anypony

also... i know love and tolerance is our battle cry of sorts... but sometimes (as in this chapter) i think the following applies:

"All that is necessary for the triumph of evil is that good ponies do nothing." ~Edmund Burke

Nice!

I'm really curious if you're going to do Applejack, and when...

>>126516126516

Hi again, Neko!

Yeah, this is a fic I did a good while back, I just wanted to update it and put in on here. The one I'm working on right now is the Spa Twins fic, and after that the Applejack one. Then I'm thinking Zecora, but I'll hold a vote to see what everyone else thinks.

nicely done once again

looking forward to the next one

oh, and to quote "you"

.... “Don’t ask.” love it

>>125719125719

He's related to Mayor Mare. Get it? Last name is Mare?

... DAMN YOU CROWLEY! You've caused me to have so many fetishes... HOW DO YOU DO IT?

You're right about my wall-eyed thing now...

... But you also gave me a Rainbow Dash fetish...

... So now I need a wall-eyed Rainbow Dash and my life is COMPLETE!

Mr. Crowley! What have they done to your mind?

Also, cool

BWAHAHAHA. Well done sir. You win the internets.

Image: http://th00.deviantart.net/fs70/150/f/2011/326/1/0/uh____yay_for_filler__by_xxsuperduperxx-d4h0qv9.jpg

I lost it at "Cutie Mark Crusaders Independent Traders !" Now my coworkers know I'm not really working right now...

This is just as great as your Rainbow Dash fiction. I really appreciate the time you put into this and look forward to more short, precise 2nd person fics like this.

Congrats on getting another fic on the Featured Bar!

I believe that puts us at 2-1. Looks like I need to get back to work on my fic.

The amounts cuteness. I can feel it amassing on us.

>>127106127106

Actually, 3-1 I'm afraid; My Fluttershy fic was on there too for like half an hour when it first went up, although it was quickly replaced. I've been keeping my eye on the Popular Stories bar more - it's been REALLY close to My Little Dashie on some occasions!

>>127118127118

Sneaky bastard...

You certainly deserve all the readers, though. It's a wonderful fic and quite possibly the best characterization of Ditzy Doo in the entire fandom.

>>126482126482 I gets the joke. That's a knee-slapper!

>>127130127130

Words cannot describe how much that means to me, pal. I really hope everyone else enjoys it as much as you and the SFG crew!

Hmm, telling the story not in the first person or third person, but second person point of view? As if I'm relating the story to the pony that experienced it. A unique writing style for sure, doesn't quite make sense to me but you pulled it off well.

I will remember this fic for quite a while.

Wow that was something.

Oh the suspense!

<3

Rating: 4.5 stars

Reasoning:

I was unsure of whether to check this out, despite it being featured. However, I'm excited to say I read this and can now say, "this is one of those few really well done 2nd person fanfictions that make your heart flutter while giving you a hearty laugh." It has the simple-to-understand beginning and then the clean cut conclusion that makes these narratives enjoyable. Sometimes, a reader doesn't need a tremendous backstory and you did JUST that exceedingly well. And then you took us for one heck of a ride. In the words of the almighty internet, "All of my money, take it."

It always fascinates me on how many different ways people (ponies?) portray our favorite mailmare, but this one in particular shall be stuck in my mind for the foreseeable future. For that, you have my thanks. The only reason I didn't give this a 5 star is because I'm a horrible person (pony?) who dislikes pictures (unless absolutely necessary) being integrated. It's a nitpicky thing In fact, if I could, I would give this a 4.9 instead of deducting a whole .4 more stars. Alas, I cannot. All in all, amazing work. You've earned yourself a follower.

Cheers

~Cosmic

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