Nightmare Moon has tea with Derpy, then a number of other ponies show up expecting something important. What could the Nightmare be planning.
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Get an editor to fix your formatting. Right now all I see is a wall of text.
Good luck in the future.
Never have a comma before dialogue and always spell out numbers. You have context issues and a lot of format issues and generally like to speak similar to your characters' dialogue in narrative.
This needs quite a bit of work.
"What could the Nightmare be planning." What indeed.
COMPLIMENT: You, uh... You have a very eclectic cast.