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That was an entertaining explanation of why The Great And Powerful Trixie does not trust wheels.
Poor Trixie. It's not her fault that hick farmer didn't put enough warning signs on his land!
do nothing but jingle mockingly in her face flaunting her incompetence in her face.
I think you used that phrase once too many for a single sentence.
It should probably be:
do nothing but jingle mockingly, flaunting her incompetence in her face.
OR
do nothing but jingle mockingly in her face, flaunting her incompetence.
Other than that, thought it was a funny short story about the insidious nature of cylindrical objects of transportation.
ROFL. Great work, sir, great work.
Reminds me of a particular chant of Millwall FC....(sung to Rod Stewart's Sailing)
"No one likes us, no one likes us, no one likes us, we don't care"
Well that didn't take long. Nice how you tied it into her working on the rock farm. The writing is a tad un-sprucey, but I felt compelled to upvote for enjoyable Trixie-related shenanigans.
That wheel got off far too easy, Trixie should have had it pulped, bleached, and made into toilet paper. ![]()
That was really well-written. I particularly liked the description of Clyde Pie. Such a badass... Makes me want to write a badass fic starring Clyde.
Wheels! ![]()
The name of the story means Opal..... What does Rarity's cat have to do with this? ![]()
Ummm... I'm... missing something here?
I didn't laugh once while reading this. I was waiting for a joke that never came. Everything that happened I could predict at least three sentences beforehand at all times, and none of it made me feel anything above "Yeah, OK, I can see that happening". ![]()
Maybe I'm not on the right wavelength or something, but this story did absolutely nothing for me. It's not bad, it's just pointless.
(That is just my subjective opinion, and not intended as a personal insult to the author.)
her incompitence in her face
It's "incompetence".
The pickaxe on his flank told Trixie that he must have been the owner of some nearby rock farm.
Wouldn't a pickax be more associated with mining? Kinda odd to see a mining tool and immediately think of a rock farm. Although then again, he did describe the Opal. Guess the confusing part was the use of the word "some".
Otherwise, this earned a few chuckles out of me.
Yeah, glancing over your fics,, I figured it would be like this- you're in. You're def in the studios if you're still interested. I just need a skype name to put you in the necessary stuffs.
XD Trixie and those wheels
silly little unicorn.







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