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  • E The Gift-Giver

    Celestia invites Twilight to a small mountain hamlet. Hoping to bond with her student and to reintroduce her to the joy of foal hood tales and fantasy.
    29,035 words · 458 views  ·  41  ·  1
  • T Delicate Negotiations

    Celestia and the Saddle Arabian Amira discuss their relationship and something more blossoms.
    9,170 words · 766 views  ·  62  ·  5 · sex
  • E Noblesse Oblige

    Written for the Lunaverse monthly writing event. Trixie has a rather rude awakening on what she expected to be a relaxing day off; it seems being a knight comes with some extra responsibilities she didn't expect.
    6,367 words · 458 views  ·  31  ·  2
  • T From The Depths

    In a bid for the terrible power of the Flashstone Amulet, Corona has released an ancient evil & set it loose upon the capital of Cavallia & Princess Cadence is forced to defend her home alone against a power that toppled ancient empires &
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  • E (Draft) Parasprites in The City

    Lighting Dust and her friends, the Bearers of the Elements of Harmony, have a race against time to save the restaurant district form the hungry all consuming, but adorable, plague of Parasprites.
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  • 47w, 1d
    C!verse Post: Phoenixes and Philomena

    2 comments · 117 views
  • 52w, 4d
    C!verse: Saddle Arabia

    2 comments · 176 views
  • 58w, 4d
    Thinking Post: Sombra

    10 comments · 116 views
  • 59w, 1d
    C!verse post: Canterlot

    13 comments · 140 views
  • 59w, 6d
    C!verse Episode Concept & an Unrelated Story

    Hello there! It's been awhile since anything for the C!verse came out and for that i'm sorry, study, exercise and a few other pet projects have impeded me. This will be an admittedly small post in regards to the C!verse, i'll explain the wall of text later. So a short while ago I finished Cutie Mark Chronicles and asked some people to look over it and recently, some weeks ago now, I know i'm sorry, RDD and I discussed the fic in great detail.

    As it stands it seems beyond needing an editor and for me to change one scene, and perhaps play with one or two others it's a good episode. The problem, it;s not a good introductory episode and in hindsight that's completely right. The problem with that is that an making an introductory episode, that's the first episode is a hard thing to pull off. Still I think I've figured out a way to turn a suggested idea from RDD into an episode, I posted a trailer to it awhile back, but i'm going to be revising it anyway.

    The episode "Parasprites in The City" I've decided to take a point from the first five or so minutes of the S2 opener where each member of the cast was re-introduced to us and introduced to new audiences demonstrating their personalities and skills while solving a problem to show their comradery. I haven't got a full outline yet and suggestions are always welcomed. But it basically starts with someone shipping a crate of parasprites that gets broken open by carelessness, they weren't magical stunned so they went on a feeding frenzy forcing the cast to drop what they are doing, possibly lunch, and resolved the issue with a combination of speed, food, magic and other skills and trapping them in a box. But a few days later a rash of food thefts have started in town and no one knows who the culprit is, after Strawberry Sunshine's family vineyard was struck the cast get right into the thick of it.

    (Spoiler) One Parasprite survived, made mroe and now they are hunting in secret. The cast need to lure them out, catch them or lead them back to Everfree forest. This does introduced the possible problem of smart parapsrites, but I generally assume (as in just thought of it) that they have short life spans and without constant food the knowledge will quickly die out. The fic is still in it's planning stages though so we'll see what happens. I still intended for more C!verse posts, Canterlot, Cadence, ETC, but I can't guarantee when they'll come.

    On some other C!verse news, I have a few things to bring up that can't really be covered in a full blog post, due to not being large enough. Firstly, i'm considering changing the name of Everfree City, or the forest, I realized while writing that having the two constantly next to each other sounds a bit weird. Maybe it's just me, but does canyon think the name needs changing and if so, any ideas? :)

    Also, I don't plan on Discord being in this work, my reasoning is fairly simple, Celestia and Luna are, for lack of better words, significantly more war like in this verse and so aren't inclined to show mercy to a beat enemy. I've never belied that anything, including the Elements, is un-killable. So that's what they did, after sealing him in stone. I'm sorry if that's upsetting or unsatisfactory to anyone. Other villains were sealed away because they couldn't use the Elements or didn't have them.

    Also, given Changelings would be the primary S1 threat, Chrysalis in-particular, does anyone have nay thoughts on that. My current head-canon on Changelings can be seen in the Head-canon thread if anyone's interested, that's, sort of, where i'm thinking of going with it. Some if my initial rambling about Changelings in terms of story can be found in one of my earliest posts. Still, how would a society under siege by shape changers respond, given they have magic and magic leaves imprints would they be as much of a problem? ETC. Suffice to say there's a lot to consider where Changelings are involved. Plus what happens after Chrysalis is defeated? I'm considering Cadence offering them love magic freely, but maybe not. I'm also trying to think of why they didn't go after the Crystal Kingdom, i'm mostly thinking the heart is a perfect shield against them, so getting in undetected is impossible for them, while simply hard for others.

    Anyway, that's all on the C!verse for now, chances are i'll think of something to add as/if I finish posting this XD. So now to explain this other part of the post; I've recently been doing some M!verse writing and actually managed to shockingly, turn out three fics, "why can;t L!verse and C!verse work like that!?!" only one of them is of any significant length and Emeral and BB said they'd look over it, there's another involving Celestia/Amira, I now crack-ship, that get's a tad cloppish, sorry! It's probably not even as far as "In Heat of The Moment", probably less given my usual views on such things. I'm currently trying to secure one/two editors from the proofreaders group, but so far no bites. I had another in the works, but it's fallen through thanks to writers block.

    And finally one I sat down and banged out last night and edited today, it basically involves Celestia and Discord arguing, it's currently labeled with AU and Dark. It was inspired by a scene from Supernatural fairly heavily, I originally intended to just get the end scene out but then it became it's own thing. If you follow that link be warned, it gets dark and deals with child/spousal abuse and the story itself goes into child abuse. I'm sorry if that upsets or offends anyone, that was never my intent. Which is also why I'm mentioning it here, i'm, curious about people's opinions on the story and i'm not so sure about publishing it. So if anyone is interested, i'd be eager to hear their thoughts, it's not very long. I can provide a link or post it here/in a blog post as I originally intended to

    Here's the summary:

    Discord has existed for eon upon eons, though far more than he'd have liked of those eons were actually spent trapped in stone, but now he's free! And he's got a few questions for Celestia; so it seems a visit to Canterlot is in order.

    After-all, it's only natural for a father... to want to speak to his daughter.

    Their conversation goes as well as one might expect.

    Not so sure about that summary, it seems to, glib. Sorry for all this.  

    Also before it could come up, I know some people might be bothered by my take on Discords powers here (and possibly thehistroy for Luna/Celestia, but that's mostly just because it suited the fic) and I am sorry if it comes across as an attack on him, that wasn't my intent. I tried to balance it out as much as I could, Celestia is exhausted and Discords wounds already sealed as he left, but he's never dealt with someone actually causing him pain as opposed to simply sealing him and can't handle it very well.

    I'll likely be in bed soon, so that's why I might not respond.

    Thank you for reading, i'd love to hear your thoughts.

    16 comments · 132 views
  • ...

This fic is set in RDDs Lunaverse and is sort of a prologue prequel fic. it's actually part of a larger fic I hope to make canon one day but until the Gala wraps up, I can't make much progress with the overall story, so I shall instead go with RDDs suggestion to just post this part of the story.

I hope anyone who reads this enjoys Red Magicians Last Adventure!

Comments and critiques would be greatly appreciated.

First Published
3rd Dec 2012
Last Modified
3rd Dec 2012
#2 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·


um sorry is that a good GIF or a bad GIF?  

#3 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1730920 Sorta a mix of both.

#4 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·


IC, well comment and critiques would be greatly appreciated.

#5 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1730929 I'll go for the morning, right now I'm a bit tired.

#7 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

Well I'm glad to see that you haven't given up entirely on this.

#8 · 102w, 6d ago · · ·

There are a lot of spelling errors, minor grammatical errors, and just areas that you should really expand. That said it was an interesting story and it seems like they'll be a pretty interesting story to be told once we get into the main part of it. But it really seems like you could use a good pre-readers think that'd help things out a lot. Still did capture my interest and thanks for sharing.

#9 · 102w, 6d ago · · ·


thanks, this is actually the oldest chapter so out of all the written ones it probably needed " re editing" the most :twilightblush:

thanks for commenting I'm glad you found it interesting. :pinkiehappy:

#10 · 102w, 5d ago · · ·

The ritual had to be stopped, "no matter the cost".

You got the touch! You got the power!

That alone made the story worth it. Aside from the numerous spelling and grammar errors (already mentioned, I know), this story seems to be all about Red Mage stroking his ego. No offense, but this level of arrogance and self-aggrandizing leaves me a little annoyed.

Still! It has potential to be fun, if we get a more humble protagonist. And you get a good proofreader.

#11 · 102w, 5d ago · · ·


Yes! someone got it! :pinkiehappy: you win the internet

My futures stories should be more proof read than this one, in regards to RM well his arrogance is not necessarily meant to make him likeable, but he was described to me as sort of a Trixie like persona, so this is what we got, sorry :scootangel:

I'll try to make a more humble protagonist next time :pinkiehappy:

thank you for reading and reviewing I really appreciate it!  

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