There have always been Apples living in Sweet Apple Acres. But what happens when it's time for an Apple to pack their bags and leave home? What happens when they must make their way in the world?
The following was born out of a practice of descriptive writing, but kind of ended up as a story in its own right.
Have some AppleDash.
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you
how
what
this was beutiful. I don't even...
When you said AppleDash... I... ugh
Everypony should read this. Heartbreaking, Sad, and ultimatly the most interesting fanfiction I have ever read in my life
Sweet Pony Jesus you are an amazing writer and never stop and If you do stop I'll die.
Don't stop!!
First I was like
"Yay Appledash"
"What's going on?"
"That was weird...but not that bad."
Then I was like
Finally I was like
I had to reread this. Again. Dammit you genius, you horrible, horrible genius
Five stars
Uncle Buck gives his stamp of approval.
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Thanks, glad you liked it. I was hoping to challenge the boundaries of fanfiction writing by just being plane kooky. Seems to have worked.
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Well, sorry to let you down, but hey. There's plenty of AppleDash out there.
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Steady on there.
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Much appreciated.
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Glad to have some family support. Are you that creepy uncle who mother doesn't let into the house?
The way you describe the scenery, the way you give Jasper a soul and a personality is stunning. Your explanation of his dreams, his life and love, are magnificently written and the way the story unfolds, with the classic storytelling-plan: Home (Dreaming and longing for more) -> Out (experiencing the world around him and sees life from a distance) -> Home (Finding peace with himself, and accepting that there will always be someone who cares for him, and coming to terms with his being), is something that I see in WAY to few stories.
5 Stars
In fact the style of writing, as well as the general themes of it, reminds me somewhat of H.C.Andersen (Which I don't think I have to explain is a good thing). I love this and I hope to see more of it
-Glassed
Well, that was different. Very descriptive too; I'd say your experiement was a success.
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Thanks man.
When writing this, I felt like I was being a bit over the top. But hey, good times.
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One of the few legitimate cases where I'm overjoyed to give a 5/5. The concept is unique, the writing is competent and very lavishly detailed, the plot is interesting and the characters all seem to be more or less how they should be as well. Above all though, it's still the concept that really grabs attention, as I'll be perfectly honest, I've expected a quite different story. Great job though, you got me to continue despite breaking my initial expectations, which is always a plus!
On the technical side, there are a few mishaps here and there though. I've spotted a double period somewhere near the middle, there are a few paragraphs which you could really split into at least two parts, because they are really big and blocky and I've found one occassion when you'd mistakenly written "AppleJack". All in all though, these bugs are few and far between though and hardly detract much from the overall enjoyment. I'm still giving this a perfect score and I believe deservedly so. I'd love to see more of your work!
And then he rotted
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Thanks. I'm glad my gambit of throwing out people's expectations worked so well. Also, thanks for pointing out some errors. I'll get round to fixing those as soon as I can.
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Jasper is...an Apple? or an apple?
I'm confused.
This is the coolest fanfic I have ever read. Unbelievably stunning. This is going with Lunacy in my "Holy god, what the hell, this is so crazy sad and good at the same time" category.
Very original perspective, to say the least.
That's really what stands out here, aside from the introductory sequence and the closing dialogue.
The little sub-plots and the romance sprinkled here and there are highly engaging; and with the limited point of view, the claustrophobia that one would normally come to associate with being an apple starts to set in.
Overall, I don't regret taking the time to delve into this eccentric and insightful narrative that you've constructed. I hope to see more from you!
Very interesting story. I'm seeing a lot of these stories nowadays, especially with Airshipping is Magic still on the featured board too. Anyway, look forward to more creations of your magnitude.
Brain does not understand.
It was a good story, astoundingly well written. I understand what happened.
But it is beyond me.
Well played. That's hard to do.
WHOA, TRIPPY.
And depressing...
I'm never going to eat an apple again.
...
Oh... my... Celestia!!! That was strange, but good.
"All he had wanted to do was forever be b-cider."
oh dear, would you look at that, I'm dead. You killed me, you monster.
...
5 stars
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An apple.
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Glad you enjoyed it.
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Wasn't until after I'd written this that I even heard of Airshipping is Magic. Strange how things play out.
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Your puny human mind can never comprehend an apple's plane of thought.
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That's what she said.
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I thoroughly enjoyed writing that paragraph.
This was frankly amazing, im glad that i took the time to read a story that i thought i wouldn't like, to find that it was one of the most beautiful and moving, but also humorous stories I have ever read. Thank you, sir, 5/5
Never expected it. :apple:
You...you disguised a fluttermac story as an appledash story. You're a genius.
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You're welcome.
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Like a ninja.
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That was... Unexpected. And WEIRD. But in a good way. I was completely misled by the synopsis and the picture, as most, I guess.
Also, "AppleDash", hilarious
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I...
I think I just got trolled. AppleDash...an apple and Dash...
You're terrible. You're very, very terrible. I'm disturbed at how well-written and thought-out this is.
Ohhhhh you sly dog, I see what you did there!, that was... good, I'll give you that, but... what, I dont even know...
Oh well, it was a great story, how scarred my brain is after this is another thing you shouldn't be preocupied about
Also, if yesterday I felt like a murderer because of eating an Granny Smith, and imagining in my head that it was a sweet and old lady, now i think it's concious, so I feel even worse
But now I feel like I want to eat an apple
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That's horrible
weird but not all bad. still have to given it a no though sorry
UGH! thank god, i looked through the comments! when i was half way through! it was very well written! i don't even- ugh!