its alive?

ITS ALIVE ITS ALIIIIIIIIVEEEEEEEe

, WAKE THE WENCHES, BECAUSE ITS TIME TO CELEBRATE.

>>17208631720863 Thank you for comments gentlereader, It was never a question of if I would write the second book but only a matter of when. With 2012's NANO it was the perfect opportunity to feed your need for more Slave King. Hopefully you like the direction I take the story. Until next time gentlereader!

Woot, a sequel!

>>17208881720888 Thank you for your comments gentlereader. A sequel indeed, the second of four planned stories in fact. Enjoy this latest offering with my thanks. Until next time gentlereader!

I bow to your every powerful writing and compelling story.

>>17209741720974 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, anything in particular you found especially compelling?

>>17209841720984

Its your writing style, I always can imagine the characters and locales in my head while I read. You provide enough information to help the image form, but leave the rest to the reader. Really top quality writing, always leaves me coming back for more.

>>17210081721008 Thanks gentlereader, hopefully I've improved since my last entry. But I was more interested in knowing what you thought about the plot characters etc so far

It's here, it's finally here. Rejoice people and thank the mighty author.

excellent, excellent  *claps* I have been waiting to read this a brilliant job.

>>17210551721055 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, it was my pleasure to share this story with you.

>>17210851721085 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, was it everything you were hoping it would be?

I just can't wait till I get my first questions regarding the plot etc, those are always so much fun to answer.

>>17210951721095 Indeed it was well worth the wait I am already anticipating the next chapter.

>>17211021721102 It's already written and waiting to be published next week.

Ah the sequel is finally here. Excellent!

As I didn't get around to commenting on your previous story, I'd like like to say how much I enjoyed it. Characters were well-developed and rounded, and the premise was interesting, while also managing to avoid the large trap of turning the protagonist into a Gary Stu character. His motives were something that resonated with me, and neatly showed the tragedy that one can become if they allow themselves to be consumed by rage and sorrow.

There's not enough to go in yet in this story for me to give any significant feedback, but it's a promising start and I look forward to reading more.

>>17211641721164 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, I do enjoy seeing if what I've written resonates. Hopefully you enjoy the new characters I'm introducing. What did you think of the addendum, I thought it might be a useful refresher for people in case they had forgotten who some of the deities were plus including a few of the others.

>>17211771721177

I did find it a useful refresher myself and very helpful in quickly getting back up to speed from where you left off previously. There are certainly times where I find myself wishing more authors would either do what you've done, or alternatively, put up a character sheet on their blog or profile.

Time for a romance story and we open up with a city being sacked. Sounds about right.

So who keeps popping random humans into this land?

>>17212691721269 Thanks for your comments gentlereader, I decided to have the random humans popping into Equestria as a tip of the hat to humans in Equestria stories. You know how they normally go, brony comes to Equestria and tries to get with his favorite pony. Because of this humans have a rather poor reputation now. Additionally the Slave King's behavior doesn't help things. The reason for humans entering into Equestria won't be fully explored until book three I'm afraid.

The reason for starting off the story with city being sacked, was to hopefully grab the reader's attention and also give you a healthy dose of Slave King antics. Plus conflict ensures that his neighbors will be paying him a little visit. Hopefully the romance won't be a botch, I'm trying my best to make sure it flows naturally. If I mess it up I'll be upset having wasted something I set up back in the beginning of the first book.

>>17213191721319

Well romance stories do tend to start off with a bang.

Wait, bronys actually exist in your universe? That's weird. Anyway, was it a massive tree that connected all worlds in Norse mythology; is it like that?

>>17213471721347 Well not brony's per say, but more along the line of the run of the mill HIE fic. Yes the Yggdrasil, it used to exist in Equestria until Lord Ouroboros burned it down. Now only its echo connects the realms. All under the watchful eye of Jormungandr.

yes yes yes the next book

All these demigods watching Equestria. Who watches Earth, and what of other worlds?

>>17215361721536 Well regarding Earth, probably one of the Earth's greatly worshiped deities. Equestria is a realm much apart from Earth, so whether any religious icons are taking an active on Earth I couldn't say. Technically the Equestrian are all full fledged deities not demigods. A demigod in the Greek would be someone like Achilles, Hector, Jason, Theseus, and then you have demigods who became a god like Heracles and Dionysus. But barring technology and brief moments where the worlds touch any mixing of Equestria and Earth is extremely limited.

>>17215321721532 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, I'm so pleased I could make your day. Mind telling me what you found particularly enjoyable about the story?

>>17215671721567

Hmm, I wonder if the Earth deity is concerned with his/her children being kidnapped into another world. Probably doesn't matter.

>>17216781721678 well when you got 7 billion humans, a few are bound to slip through the cracks. Plus with so many wars going on, a handful of humans going to another universe probably isn't considered that big a deal. Though I probably won't touch much on Earth, book three will feature a human invasion of Equestria as part of the main storyline.

wow just wow now i cant wait for the next chapter

>>17217701721770 What hooked you out of curiosity? What did you enjoy the most about the story?

>>17217091721709

Ooh, let it be Russia that invades. They make great invaders, if a bit cliched. Giant manly men riding ursla majors into battle.

>>17218061721806 I haven't really considered their nationality, but might make it a unified Earth deal. Humanity is looking for new resources and discovering a way into Equestria is the answer to all their problems. They just have to figure out how to deal with the pantheon first, and will the Slave King fall back to his previous allegiance or stand with his fellow deities. Find out sometime next year after book two is completed.

>>17217871721787there is alot i liked about it but my favorite part would be how you portrey the characters of the story and how the  characters  all have a difforent  personality no 2 are exacticaly alke

sorry i dont have good spelling

>>17218211721821 Oh that's fine, I just like to find out what my readers enjoy so I make sure to add more of that to future chapters.

>>17218331721833thank you for asking

Today was looking to be just another average boring day, until I saw this story in my notifications!  I was afraid you had given up on writing the other installments.

>>17219191721919 Thank you gentlereader for your comment. Me give up? Outrageous! is what Sir Stouthorn would say. I attempted to go back to my other work The reluctant Cyborg but found I was having trouble. the side story I wrote using the same character wasn't well received and so it became a chore to write. But the Slave King I could never get bored of. It's a very personal story to me. It will only be finished after all four books have been written. I take it by your excitement you enjoyed the story thus far? If so what did you like the most?

>>17218181721818

You know with all the alien invasion stories that we have, you would think we would know better.

>>17219751721975 Well with superior technology, few morals, and a lust for violence what could possibly stand in our way? Plus since everyone loves ponies, getting your very own as a spoil of war might make them want to invade even more.

At long last chapter 2 in the slave king saga has begun!!

I eagerly await what lies in store.

I got stoned, and then read this... then I came up with the idea that a bunch of hippies helped the Slave King hold off the legions of dark forces led by the Destroyer, using the power of love, music, and excessive cannabis use to shield the allied forces until the rest of the reinforcements arrive to help force the errant souls back to Tartarus........  I think I need another joint after that one.....

>>17224101722410 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, Technically it's book two rather then chapter two. As a sneak peak there's currently five more chapters of action ready to go just waiting to be released. How do you think things might pan out?

>>17225881722588 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, the Slave king hates hippies and would probably cast them all into the Pit. Currently the hungry dead are restricted to the deep places in the Earth, tunnels, abandoned mines that sort of thing. But on occasion they come out seeking sweet pony flesh to much on. When they occurs either the order of the Lawgiver of the Shadow will take care of them with extreme prejudice. Usually through the power of excessive violence, and sharp pointy things. Currently the unmentionable one has little in Equestria beyond the power of suggestion.

Well this was certantly an exciting read! I really enjoyed the story, keep it up!

>>17227481722748 Thank you for comments gentlereader, what part did you think was the most exciting?

>>17227651722765

Luna's chess game with the deer. That was a good bit of characterization right there.

I did notice a few places where commas could go, though.

>>17228001722800 yeah I always got issues with commas. Doesn't matter how many times I read it, I always miss some punctuation.

>>17228121722812

It's fine, it happens. tell you what, i can find the places where it needs them tomorrow. sound good?

I would offer to do it now, but i am rather pressed for time.

>>17229311722931 Sure thing, thanks for the offer.

>>17229401722940

No problem, i will get it done tomorrow afternoon.

Well this is most interesting.  I have rapidly read much of the first story and it seems quite interesting.  The gods are often quite naive, but it is balanced by the fact that even the Slave King is being used by others who lurk in the shadows, guiding him to their ends while he remains unaware of their existence.  

And Tiroc... one of the Evil Ones.  Even the Vorpal Sword which could slay Discord and his Jabberwocky children cannot kill him.  He is in the ranks of Sutekh, the Destroyer, God of Lies, the Great Traitor, Lord of All Wickedness, the true name of the Devil.

My Mistress, great Sekhmet long battled against him before one of his tricks led her to go mad with bloodlust.  She has only just returned from 13,000 years of self-imposed exile, fragmented into a thousand pieces of her soul, inhabiting mortals in millions of lives over the space of her banishment, in penance for the innocents she slew along with the wicked in her rage when she utterly destroyed Atlantis for its blasphemy and inhuman experiments during the attempts of its nobles to become gods.

It had been Sutekh's goal all along, for he gave the Atlanteans the seeds of the knowledge, and it was also he who told the gods of the humans acts, though in secret through one of his agents so none would suspect him of involvement.  

My Lady of Slaughter discovered the truth through one of the mortal forms a fragment of her soul took hold of a mortal in another realm who served unwillingly one of the Dark Servants closest to Sutekh.  She knows not all his plans, but enough that she fears for the multiverse itself should they come to fruition.

(I'm mentioning all this because of how similar your story seems to be unfolding similarly to an idea for a massive story I've been poking around with linking an old concept of mine with Pony, except in mine Discord was the son of Sutekh and was the Dark Servant who let slip the truth to the mortal pony carrying a piece of Sekhmet's soul.  Anyway, it has this sort of setup, with every god being played against each other ever since Sutekh had been driven far into a Void and sealed.  Sekhmet, who has been slowly reconstituted through marriage of the bearers of her soul fragments, the offspring of such unions bearing the sum of the parents' fragments, at last becomes aware and in touch with enough of her power to begin opening doors between worlds, merging then the larger segments.  Hastily, she accelerates the mergers, as she fears little time remains.  It leads to something akin to these stories, where Sutekh has all the pieces in place and begins to enact his plan to overthrow the other gods, just as Sekhmet opens the door to Equestria and those two beings to bear one half each of her renewed soul meet.)

>>17230071723007 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, It appears you have the genesis of a novel there. Any plans to expand upon the idea? Regarding my Equestria pantheon, they aren't quite naive, it's just that they are the masters of their own domain but that mastery comes at a price. The plotters and schemers are quite clever but lack the power, while the more powerful of their number might be more susceptible to intrigue. The Slave King's prior alliance with Jormungandr, Strix, Lugh, and Loki was more an alliance of convenience. Now a days the Slave king likes to think himself above the other deities plotting and scheming, whether he is or isn't is up to you decide. If you haven't already, I suggest reading The Great Slave King it offers much insight into the inner workings of the pantheon and their dealings with the mortals. Once again thanks for commenting, until next time!

hmmm...what are you planning this time Slave King?

It is nice to see this again, one thing I am confused about is the time period? It might be cause it is 2 in the morning when I am reading this but is it just following the first book or present (cannon) time?

King Daddy... King Daddy... Where the hell have I heard that before? Now this is going to be bugging me for hours. Or was it from you actually in the first book and I've simply forgot about it?

Celestia the Radiant, Luna the beautiful? Who came up with these titles, I gag just at the thought of them.  Alas I've yet to decide whether its good or bad, but I will say how everyone's god complex and superiority complex manages to tick the right spots and make me want to be on the Slave King's side, 'the lesser of all evils' . Divinity, acting all high and mighty until you leave them in a pool of their own blood.

Theres gona be a lot of court intrigue.

>>17238631723863 It's about a thousand years before the show and five hundred years after The Great Slave King.

>>17244601724460 Thanks for your comments gentlereader, the whole king daddy deal I threw in as flavor for Melody the Yellow's character. She likes to tease the Slave King by calling him that.

>>17256711725671 Thank you for you comments gentlereader, the titles were something I came up with in the first book. You'll notice that the Slave King is the only one who constantly uses honorifics. For example Lord Triton's honorific is the Lawgiver, Lord Ouroboros's honorific is the Fire Tyrant. I explain in a future chapter exactly why the Slave King always addresses everyone by their honorific title.

>>17257641725764 Thank you for your comment gentlereader, yes due to the nature of this piece there's going to be a whole hell of a lot of court intrigue.

...everything changed when the earth kingdom attacked.

Looking forward to more chapters.

>>17258901725890 Give me an hour, once I'm done editing chapter two, it's going up as a reward for being featured.

>>17258901725890 Well, that was something to LOL to.

I love this so much.

>>17271071727107 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, what did you like the most?

Ok, here is what I was able to find.

most of which were quadrupeds she might even be considered a giant.

There should be a comma between quadrapeds and she.

yellow plumage of her sister, Melody the Yellow, as

And I just included them in this example.

I hope that helps

>>17272971727297 Thanks for the assistance I'll keep a look out for them

>>17272991727299

No problem!

>>17271261727126 The fact this is a sequel to the slave king!

Slave King has odd policies regarding children. Must not want to pay child support.

Yes

"Eventually, she began becoming bitter and jealous"

I think "became" is the proper grammatical version here.

>>17278521727852 Yes the prologue was a complete rewrite from the epilogue of the Great Slave King. I did it as a way of showing continuity between the books. I left out the futuristic bits, but will address them in the epilogue of this story. So you'll see more of Elrey, Silver Tongue, and Boomy in there, as they bridge the past to the third book.

Thanks for posting this; it'll be a lot easier to keep everyone straight with this handy reference guide!

>>17281421728142 My pleasure gentlereader, I figured with such a large cast of characters it might come in handy. Additionally there's the readers who haven't read the first story yet. I figured it might prove useful if they didn't want to read the first book.

Another immortal battle. Yes!

and i didnt notice any comma errors this time, good job.

>>17282131728213 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, I think my editing has been getting better but stuff still slips through from time to time. What do you think of the plot so far?

>>17282281728228

I like it, Lady Zephyr is so mad at him right now, not to mention all the others... I can't wait to see how all that plays out!

Love it love it love it, Gentle Author.

>>17282931728293 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, what did you enjoy the most?

>>17283011728301 One thing that I enjoyed was the fact that the Slave King has yet to acknowledge most (if not all ) of his daughters, which I believe would be very in character of him. I also enjoyed the flashback Aria had had, and the relationship she and Scourge shared. It's interesting to see more of Scourge, as the last story we didn't get to see as much of him, I feel.

When the Slave King addresses the other Pantheon members, their titles are in italics. Is this meant simply to highlight that they are epithets, or is the Slave King being sarcastic?

>>17285621728562 Yes I felt that the Slave King would have problems accepting his offspring as his children, for reasons that will be revealed in later chapters.  even though at the end of the great Slave King he managed to redeem his soul, he still has yet to recover his heart. Even after all this time he still desperately seeks to bring Little Bleu back. Because of his obsession he's found it impossible to accept them as his kin. The most he can offer them  is a place of refuge, the Beastmen's Enclave. Yes Scourge will play a greater role in this book. In the last book he was an antagonist, now he's a protagonist. Aria and Scourge share a bond due to their master/pupil relationship.

>>17286101728610 I decided to place all the titles and honorifics for all characters. For example Aria is know as Aria the Red, so her honorific is italicized. Whereas if the Slave king addressed Lord Triton as the Lawgiver, since its not an honorific but slang it won't be italicized. Mainly it's just me having fun with formatting.

I'm so glad to see this! The first one was great and I can't wait to see where this goes; it's off to a promising start so far.

Also, I did find a small mistake. When Harmony greets Lord Triton on the beach you call her Melody the first time.

>>17299351729935 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, Ah how careless of me, I will correct forthwith and post haste.

I'm trying to figure out if the Slave King's children have longer lives then other mortals since they came from deities?  Since it was 500 years ago since the last book ended and Zephyr and Suzaku already had their eyes set on him then, it seems like these kids are either pretty recent or live a long time.

>>17301621730162 Thank you fro your comments gentlereader. regarding their lifespan yes they are longer lived, but not immortal. A majority of the first generation of the beastfolk clans are all under 25 years old though. Something happened  relatively recently to the Slave King to make him able to procreate. It also the reason for the schism that lies between the Slave King, Lady Zephyr, and Lady Suzaku. In case your curious, I've envisioned that the first age was when all the various races in Equestria were first created, as a result of the various deities engaging in certain activities with each other. Eventually as their progeny reproduced, they became what we see on the show now. As each generation grows further and further away from the the first generation, their longevity and other divine connections fade. Kind of how in the bible, Adam lived 900+ years and as each generation that followed him lived a shorter period of time.

At first i was thinking how the hell can a female deer have antlers, but a quick wiki search revealed reindeer females DO indeed have antlers...

I guess you can now call your fic educational as well as awesome.

Also in my mind i will now always call TalonMach5 "NimbleFingers The Sleepless" for the quick update

(in the middle of the goddamn night).

Time for the Slave King to work his polictical magic.

>>17305601730560 Thanks for your comment gentlereader. Yes reindeer are one of the only cervid species where both sexes have antlers. Regarding the release of the chapter, it's because I was in the featured box for nearly 18 hours. So I wanted to reward all my readers. If I wanted to, I could drop four more chapters as of right now, but I'm holding them back so I can release something each week and have enough time to write more chapters. Hopefully I'll get lots of comments from my readers telling me what they did and didn't like so I can add more as I write.

>>17305871730587 Thanks for your comment gentlereader, what type of political situation are you hoping for? Perhaps this

I expect to see numerous Xanatos Gambits showing up within this new installment. Loving the new story so far.

>>17286531728653

Cool. I just wasn't sure if that was a title only thing or if it was meant to denote tone. (Like the difference between how the Great and Powerful Trixie says her name, how Rainbow Dash says it, or how Snips and Snails say it. )

Anyway, thanks for explaining that to me!

This may be a bit off topic but in book 4 after they revive the slave king or whatever you have planed methinks the slave kings going to kick some empire butt......... realistically speaking

>>17341781734178 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, regarding the Slave King in the Book of Air: Crown of the Slave King, all that's known is that the Slave King fell in the ruins of the Diamond Vale stopping Lord Ouroboros and Tiroc the Destroyer from stealing the power of the Earth. Ultimately the Slave King's sacrifice allowed Princess Luna and her allies to escape to the moon before they were able to be destroyed by Lord Ouroboros and Tiroc. The ultimate fate of the Slave King, and by extension the whereabouts of the only weapon Lord Ouroboros fears, the Vendetta is unknown. Whether Scourge aka Dawson, Elrey, Little Bleu, Boomy, and Silver Tongue, manage to find the Slave King's true heir, the crown itself, or even the Slave King himself, you'll just have to wait for book four to find out. For now gentlereader, be content with the intrigue presented within the Marriage of the Slave King. I promise you there will be plenty of action, suspense, adventure, and even a bit of romance.

Once again thanks for reading, until next time!

>>17341781734178 Slave king

and even a bit of romance.

>>17345771734577 Well the book is titled the Marriage of the Slave king for a reason.

FINALLY! Your work of art that is the Slave King series has returned to grace the eyes of those who will behold it. By the way great chapter, i expect what you have to offer, perfection

>>17366471736647 Thank you for your comments gentlereader, anything that you read particularly strike your fancy?