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  • E Winter Bells

    Can Nyx find acceptance with her extended family during Hearth's Warming, or will she find the holiday hymns are filled with nothing but hollow promises?
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  • T A Mug of Hard Cider

    Celestia's thirst for good alcohol leads her to a pair of new drinking buddies
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    A thousand years is a long time to go without a good, stiff drink
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    Celestia must brave the depths of her old castle to save Twilight and Luna
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Blog Posts101

  • 2w, 2d
    Life Pulse & Nevermind

    12 comments · 476 views
  • 8w, 4d
    Ice Bucket Challenge & Game Project Plug

    So, I was challenge by BronyWriter last evening, and so I had to squeeze this fun little bit of brain freeze in during my morning routine as I got ready for work.

    To reiterate from my video, I challenge Blankedmind, Gremlin Grenade, JustAnotherTimeLord, The Illustrious Q.

    The challenge to Kkat has been retracted. She isn't in a position where she can perform the challenge due to a lack of equipment & funds as well as her personal preferences about the internet.

    Also, on  side note, a project I contributed to is back on Kickstarter. Scott Easley's 3x3 Wildstyle Basketball, a mobile street basketball game. If you supported it last time, please go do so again. If you haven't, please go check it out.

    28 comments · 718 views
  • 11w, 6d
    Bronycon Day 2 Plan * Identifying Attire

    Day one was awesome. Met too many people to list off in these few minutes I have to write this. Today looks to be more awesome and my busiest con day since I have all three of my panels today. I'm wearing an Applejack shirt today and blue jeans. Hope to see you around. Best time to catch me is after my panels.

    - Do's and Dont's of Fanfiction - Hall of the Sun - 10:00 to 11:00 AM

    - Worlds Beyond: Crossovers in Fanfiction - Hall of Stars - 1:45 to 2:45 PM

    - Quills and Sofas Hangout - 3:00 - 4:00 PM

    - Shattered Kingdom Game - Hall of Stars - 5:30 to 6:30 PM

    2 comments · 325 views
  • 12w, 18h
    Bronycon Day 1 Plan & Identifying Attire

    So, since there are folks wanting to meet up with me today, here is a rough idea of where I'll be and when. Also, such a late start today. I slept in, but I had a reason. Work made me stay up all night Wednesday to put out a last minute fire.

    0) 12:00 Float around the convention, likely checking out vendor hall

    1) 2:00 - Vendor Hall Shadow Box booth. Someone ordered something Past Sins related and they wanted me to sign it.

    2) 3:00 - 4:00 - I'll chill out at the Quill's and Sofa's room for an hour. Probably the easiest time you'll have finding me.

    If your looking for me today, I'm wearing a gray plaid long sleeve shirt and blue jeans.

    Hope everyone has a wonderful time at Bronycon today and I hope to see several of you around.

    4 comments · 352 views
  • 12w, 6d
    Bronycon, Shattered Kingdoms, & A Plug for a New Past Sins Movie Project

    Bronycon looms just next week, and I look forward to the fact I once again get to attend this year. So I hope to see lots of friends and to meet anyone new. One person asked in e-mail if I'd be willing to sign his/her copy of Past Sins while I'm there. I'm totally cool with doing that for anyone that asks, just be sure to have a pen since there is no guarantee I'll remember to have one.

    As to Bronycon itself, I get to be on three panels this year. The last one I'll speak about in greater length, but the first two are writing panels. I'll be returning properly to the panel I kind of snuck onto last year, the Do's and Don't of Fanfiction. I'll also be on the Worlds Beyond: Crossovers in Fanfiction panel, both on Saturday. In fact, all three of my panels are on Saturday this year it would seem. It makes for a very interesting day.

    Now, as for the last panel, it is for a project I've been contributing to as a partial-writer as well as a story adviser. That project is "Shattered Kingdoms" and I'll be on the panel with several other members of the development team. Shattered Kingdoms is a game project that has been going on for several months now. The team lead, Gremlin Grenade, has a blog post from Fiesta Equestria last year that tells a lot more about the project then I can really fit into such a multi-purpose blogpost.

    Now not only is the development team having a panel this year, but there will be a live demo of the game available to play. I believe it will be in the Baltimare Arcade room, since it's the only electronic game room I'm aware of, but I'm sure Gremline Grenade will post up a blog soon with more information on what the demo will contain and verify where it can be played.

    Also, the team is looking for more writers to fill out its ranks and to ensure the story is as polished and properly complex as possible. So if you have any interest, drop Gremlin Grenade or come see us at our panel. The time and place are below, along with the time and place of my other two panels.

    - Do's and Dont's of Fanfiction - Hall of the Sun - 10:00 to 11:00 AM

    - Worlds Beyond: Crossovers in Fanfiction - Hall of Stars - 1:45 to 2:45 PM

    - Shattered Kingdom Game - Hall of Stars - 5:30 to 6:30 PM

    Again, I hope to see a lot of you there, and I'll see if I can't do something to make myself easily identifiable. (Besides the fact I basically wear the same outfits to every convention :P. Saturday I'll be sure to save my Applejack shirt and red, plaid short-sleeve button-down shirt.)

    And to wrap up this blog post, a commenter on Past Sins point out a new animation project that is starting to get underway. Someone new has begun a project to make Past Sins into an animated feature. It takes a lot of effort for someone to get far enough to even have a teaser trailer for something like this, so go give these guys some love and get hyped. (Especially because their design for Night Stone Castle looks pretty amazing!)

    TLDR version:

    - Going to Bronycon

    - I'm on three panels (check the list above for times and locations)

    - I'm a member of the Shattered Kingdom's dev team

    - We're having a panel and live demos at Bronycon

    - We're looking for writers, contact Gremlin Grenade.

    - Watch the video above for a Past Sins Movie Teaser Trailer, and give the creators some love.

    EDIT: To clarify some misconceptions in the comments, I am not doing the movie. Just giving a plug to the guys/gals who are.

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My entry into the "Hearth's Warming Care Package for Kiki" Fan-fiction contest. Didn't make the finals, but I was close.

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After a long day in the fields, Applejack only wants to be able to eat her dinner and go to bed. The only problem, it's already occupied by a very ill Zecora. The Apples are famous for their hospitality, but when does Applejack have to draw the line?

First Published
3rd Dec 2012
Last Modified
3rd Dec 2012
#1 · 98w, 4d ago · 4 · ·

Wow, a downvote in the first two seconds, impressive!

#2 · 98w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

More Pen Stroke is always a good thing.

#3 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Where can I hear more about this contest?

#4 · 98w, 4d ago · 1 · 9 ·

I would be pissed too if I came home after a long day of bucking only to find a sick zegro in my bed

#5 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Thoughts before reading: Pen Stroke put up a new story? Meh, I can read it. :rainbowderp:

Thoughts after reading: Yeah, this was pretty good, even if I don't normally enjoy just slice-of-life stories

I am wondering though, where can I find the rest of the entries to that competition? I am curious about the others, especially since this didn't make the finals and I really like this one :twilightsmile:

#6 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Seconded. If this story was 'close', I'm wondering about the other entries.

#7 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Another Pen Stroke story?

This makes me happy.

#8 · 98w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

You got Peacocks right on.  We lived next to a zoo once.  That first night I thought somebody was getting murdered from the screaming.  Pleasant's first name must be Un.

Hm, I wonder how much work it would be to turn this into a Foals Tale, in iambic pentameter.....

(later)  Not too hard, but the rhymes hurt.  

#9 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Great story. I feel bad for Zecora shes my second favorite pony.

P.s. Maybe you can read my story called my day in ponyville

#10 · 98w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

A nice little slice-of-life that could easily be an episode of the show, especially with the loud-mouth peacock!

I have to say that I'd like to see more of the Applebloom/Zecora friendship; as much as it is an 'odd couple' thing, I think it's significant that Applebloom was never afraid of Zecora and was the first to reach out to her without precondition or suspicion.  It would be interesting to see where that is going a year or more later.

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#11 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Wait, you wrote this one? <.< I need to pay more attention to the results of these things.

This was a good entry, at least, as I recall. And if I'm not mistaken, you rated my entry pretty high in the finals (The Shelter in the Forest), so thank you for that. :)

#12 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Um it was... nice.

#13 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

For those who were asking, you can find the other stories in the competition at the link below

Hearth's Warming Care Package for Kiki

#14 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

I remember reading this during the contest and I thought it was great, only wish mine made it a little farther but oh well, Kiki is going to be getting some fantastic stories.

#15 · 98w, 4d ago · 3 · ·

I'm ashamed to admit i have a very dirty mind :unsuresweetie:

saw notice, "pen strokes has release a new story: a zebra in the bed"...

First thought: "WHAT, pen strokes wrote clop?!"

#16 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1731925

Suggestive title is suggestive. :trollestia: I am ashamed to say I had the same thought for a split second.

#17 · 98w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Well, in the mindset of "honest Abe-pplejack" and Blueshift's fairly recent blog entry I'll try to leave some constructive criticism, despite feeling like an ass anyway, since I'm trying to critcize Pen Stroke.

I feel that the main conflict of Applejack's hospitality vs. her privacy and or personal freedom to do what she likes (or has to do anway) fell a little flat. If I had to divide the story into parts, the setup about covers the first half, the conclusion with the letter to the Pricness the last sixth, which would only leave one third of the story to deal with the actual conflict. I wish there had been a couple of more scenes, delving deeper into the mind of Applejack and what she really felt while having to tend to Zecora. To me, the way it went ultimately felt like AJ's turnabout came relatively quickly and suddenly, undermining the conflict to a point where it didn't really seem to matter that much.

Also (and this is the completely unjust part of my criticism), it felt like, since the story was written with a seven-year-old reader in mind, the story got a little more tell-y than show-y than I'm used to at times, although this is something I just had a general feeling of, nothing I can actually put my finger on.

All that said, I hope I struck the right cord and didn't say anything overly unjust (If so have an appologetic twilight :twilightsheepish:).

#18 · 98w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

>>1732088

Yes, I can agree that the story could probably be served better if it was longer. The contest asked that we keep in mind the story needed to work well as an illustrated book for a seven year old, since the first prize was to have the story illustrated and printed into a children's book. Because of this, I wanted to keep it below 5,000 words at max. Thus, in the end, perhaps what this story suffers from the most is that the concept doesn't fit will into the target length.

Would you agree?

(And your tone was just fine. :twilightsmile:)

#19 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Ended a little abruptly for my taste. I thought we'd read all the way through Zecora's illness.

However, it was a very enjoyable read. I liked it, a good letter for Celestia and it read like an episode. Very true to the source material.

#20 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Hm...

Yeah, it's good.  No quarrels here, aside from MAYBE the occasional comma misplacement or lack thereof.

#21 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Love it! There should be more Zecora stories but the rhyming is so hard to write.

#22 · 98w, 4d ago · · 3 ·

Ah draw the line for hospitality when y'all stuff a stripey lil' ZIGGER in mah bed! The klan don't even meet this week, so what am Ah supposed to do with her?

#23 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Wooo, nice work. :ajsmug:

#24 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1732145

I mosly agree with you. If the story were any longer, it would have gone beyond the desired 5000 word limit, that's just simple math. But if I would look at the story as a whole, beyond what actually made it in the final draft, the question poses which part would hurt the story least if it was cut, and personally I still think there needed to remain more of the interaction between Zecora and Applejack an the latter's discomfort (possibly instead of the set up which seems to make up the largest portion of the story). Of course that is a purely subjective opinion.

Abridgement feels like an especially terrible thing to happen to any story, because it's kind of pointless and unsolvable. I think the same thing happened to this week's episode, with Trixie's sudden redemption out of nowhere, that certainly needed more of a buildup, but the episode simply ran out of time.

#25 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1732145

Oh hey you posted it--cool.  Yeah, the restrictions--aka the audience--definitely affected writing for the contest.  I did things I never would have otherwise.  Not to mention that none of us were really good judges for this contest, in my opinion--myself totally included.  That's why I was so happy that ALL of the fics are going to little Kiki.  

Anyway, awesome job Pen Stroke--I was glad I could be a fellow contender.  

#26 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

I haven't read the story yet, but I have to say that the description reminds me a little of that one Spongebob episode where Squidward started abusingthe fact that Spongebob was taking care of him. :scootangel:

#27 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

You see Big Mac in that cover picture? That's me half the time. I have two younger sisters - one that's relatively mature, one that's very IMmature - and half the time they're together, I have to play peacekeeper. I'm used to it, but half the time, it doesn't work. It gets a little draining.

Note to self: find a good synonym for 'half'

#28 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Thanks again for your involvement and this beautiful entry. I am sad it didn't make the finals, although I am quite pleased with the story you and the other judges selected as the winner.

And since several commenters are asking, once we are done editing entries for our publication we plan on submitting the anthology to FimFic as well for easy reading.

#29 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Adorable as always! I liked the dicsussion in the comments too as I had similar feelings but when taking into account the restrictions it felt really well done.

#30 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

lol :twilightsmile: That abusive Zebra.

#31 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

You give a little love...:ajsmug:

...and it all comes back to you!:twilightsmile:

JAG
#32 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Pretty good. It could definitely have been a bit longer and more fleshed out, but works well enough considering the constraints you were dealing with. It feels a lot like an episode of the show. And Pleasant is now quite possibly Best Pet. My neighbors used to have a few peacocks, and yes, they have a very obnoxious call.

#33 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1732271

I agree to some point, but honestly I think that makes it feel more like an actual episode. Which this really should be, honestly.

Thanks for sharing this one, Pen Stroke!

#34 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1733619 Comma-Kazie

You're probably right. Skipping ahead does have more of a real episode feel to it.

#35 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1732044>>1731925

The rest of us are NOT ashamed that we thought it was clop, but were pleasantly surprised and pleased with a nice story anyway. :trollestia:

#36 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Well, that was nice. I liked how it seemed to be an episode, so I congradulate you on that.

#37 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Sounds like the pilot of a sitcom appleflank and stripes will continue after these messages.

I kid but unless  the concept interest me Ill save it for later. EXPECT ANOTHER COMMENT LATER!

#38 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

Hello, I have been posting this question many times before, and have not gotten an answer.

I am trying to click watch on the author bar and it doesn't work...

#39 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1735729

Have you PM'd Knighty about it?

#40 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1735815 Oh wow, I can't believe I hadn't considered that.... THANKS!

#41 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1731759

I can't believe no one's mentioned it yet... but every instance of "Apples" in relation to the family is written as "Apple's", as if possessive. Unless I am forgetting some nuance of how the written language works, which is likely and if so I apologize, that seems to be improper.

#42 · 98w, 4d ago · · ·

how ironic how this happend to me just yesterday! XD

and the story was sweet hell i can picture this being an ep where someone gets sick X3

i was actually expecting Zecora to be a pain in the ass but she wasent so that was nice X3

#43 · 98w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1736394

I realize that an error, but I tried to do a find and replace for the error and found that it only existed once, in the story description. Tried just searching for the apostrophe "s" too, but it only occurs once in the text as part of the word "bed's".

So, yes, I suppose that every instance is misspelled, but at the same time I can only find one instance. Guess that makes it easy to fix. :derpytongue2:

#44 · 98w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1738053

I might just be off my head, then. Thought I'd seen three or so, but memory is always a muddy thing.

#45 · 98w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

A nice little one-shot with a good, solid message. Very down-to-earth and understandable. We desire moar.

#46 · 98w, 3d ago · · ·

I like the story, but you kept on with one mistake that just grinds my gears: the term "y'all" is plural. Not singular. I understand that AJ uses it as a singular adressor in the show, but that doesn't mean it's right.

Otherwise the story was good. Thumbs up for you!

#47 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

What a nice story. :twilightsmile: My only complaint is that it felt a tad rushed, though that's understandable given the context.

#48 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

Good story, good letter, funny ending

#49 · 97w, 4d ago · · ·

I know it's already been said but it would have been better if it was longer.

Also is "Beating a dead rug" a pony equivelant for saying "beating a dead horse"?

Also found an everybody witch should probably be an everypony:

Apple’s help their friends when they need it, and you’re my friend as much as anybody.

#50 · 97w, 2d ago · · ·

>Pen Stroke

>Didn't win contest

Wat :rainbowderp:

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