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    What should be a simple overnight ride turns into a three day trip from hell.
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    Some ponies never change. Prince Blueblood is one of them.
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  • Today
    Musings in a Post-Suffering Era

    Boy, let me tell you guys, it's beginning to look a lot like Christmas here... and I'm not sure I like it. I know it's a cliche to say "Golly, the holidays just seem to come earlier every year!" but holy hell, it really seems like the holidays came super early this year. Around November 10th, the Salvation Army guys were out with the buckets and bells, the local supermarket started selling Christmas trees, Starbucks was selling their holiday drinks, the town put up their snowflake-shaped lights along Main Street, and a couple of the houses in the neighborhood put up Christmas lights. Now, the first three I could just chalk up as capitalists looking to jump-start the holiday shopping season, but the last two don't have a monetary incentive behind them, so the consumerist explanation doesn't quite explain what I'm seeing here. I could swear that just last year I didn't see this kind of upstart celebrationism until Thanksgiving. The holiday season is my favorite time of the year, but I don't think I'm ready for two months of it.

    Oh yeah, and then last week, right as all this holiday stuff was going up, we got hit by a snowstorm and it's been so cold since that the minuscule two inches or so of snow we got still hasn't melted. Winter was really in a hurry to arrive, I guess.


    In writing news, I'm starting up a little non-pony writing endeavor that I'm excited to invite you guys to read: it's a blog called Your Future Sucks. The first post explains the idea behind the title, but basically the concept is that I'm going to talk about various visions of the future, from things like world's fairs and Tomorrowland to more contemporary notions like driverless cars or to apocalyptic visions of environmental doom, to ponder what these visions say about us as individuals and as a society. On the way, I'll poke fun at what I find to be absurd ideas about the future (the real meaning behind "your future sucks") as well as praise a few that genuinely excite me.

    Right now, there's only a couple of posts up: the first introducing the premise of the blog, the second a writing piece I did in the style of a news article about a future in which Miami is rebuilding after a devastating hurricane. For upcoming posts, I'm planning to discuss various things such as the fate of Walt Disney's Tomorrowland, Silicon Valley's branding of the future, how we talk (or don't) about the future nowadays, and maybe an invention or two while I'm at it.

    Anyway, please go check it out and comment if you like what you see. I'm much more likely to actively pursue a writing endeavor if I think there are people who will appreciate it.


    And lastly, it's late November, and if you're in college and your college experience is anything like mine was, this means you're entering panic mode as the end of the semester and the finals it brings is now looming large in your mind. Or perhaps you're feeling gloomy from the sudden onset of winter weather, or sick from the cold/flu season that comes with said weather. Or maybe work sucks. And the holiday season isn't here yet (despite the signs claiming otherwise), so the joy of presents and cookies is still too distant to be appreciated just yet.

    But take heart, for the end of the year lies on the not-so-distant horizon. So, as a public service, allow me to share the greatest pick-me-up ever created. Listen, then repeat as necessary until you are filled with the steely confidence needed to face the world.

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  • 1w, 4d
    John Perry Suffers the Feature Box: I Did It for Me

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  • 2w, 20h
    I Have Met the Enemy, and He is Me (or, an important Suffering announcement)

    Guys, I gotta be honest: Suffering the Feature Box just hasn’t been much fun lately.

    Mostly, it’s just me. The novelty has long since worn off, I’m in a bit of a creative funk at the moment, so the enthusiasm just isn’t there for me. I’m getting to that point where I’m doing these posts more out of a sense of obligation than because I actually want to do it, and that is not a place you should be when it comes to fan fiction.

    However, the box really hasn’t been helping me out lately. Long-time readers might have noticed that there’s been a general uptick in the quality of stories in the box lately. Or at the very least, there are fewer real stinkers in there, and the notably bad stories were the basis of most of my humor. And I never really intended for this to become a serious review series, so this is a problem for me.

    You might have also noticed that the recent change to the box mechanics, which allows stories to stay on the box much longer than before, has screwed with my routine a bit. But I feel like it has also made my reading selection somewhat… stale, giving me less variety to play around with. Case in point: earlier this week, the top clopfic in the box was Gleaming Shield’s Teats (which is still in the box, by the way). Now the top clopfic in the box is… its sequel. Oh thanks, box.

    But honestly, that’s all incidental. The long and short of it is that I think I need to take a break, so that’s what I’m going to do. Sometime next week (contingent on when the stories currently in the box finally fall off) I’ll do a “final” review post, and then stop the series for an indefinite length of time. Maybe at some point I’ll be able to come back to it when I’m feeling fresh, or maybe I’ll start some other endeavor. Who knows? (Certainly not me!)

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  • 2w, 5d
    John Perry Doesn't Suffer the Feature Box: Button -ash Edition

    You thought it was over? You can’t hide from this thing.

    I happened to know about this Button -ash onslaught ahead of time, seeing as I was invited to be a part of it. However, my idea didn’t really pan out, so I dropped out pretty quickly. I very briefly considered writing “Button Cash,” in which literally every line of dialogue uttered by Button Mash would be a line from a Johnny Cash song, which meant coming up with a series of situations which would justify him saying things like “I fell into a burning ring of fire” or “Tell the rambler, the gambler, and the back-biter.” It was one of those ideas that seemed funny when I thought of it, but once I actually started writing it I immediately realized wasn’t funny at all.

    That, plus it turns out that listening to Johnny Cash songs is a terrible way to put you in the mood for writing silly comedy. (I know, whoda thunk?)

    But even if I couldn’t write something in time for this, I can still attach my ego to this thing somehow. That’s right, it’s review time! Let’s take it from the top, in alphabetical order:


    Button Ash by RazgrizS57

    What I see: One day, a young colt found a briefcase. This colt’s name was Button Mash, the briefcase contained a big red button, and the world and all who inhabited it were cursed to damnation.

    Thoughts coming out: Raz really doesn’t like Button Mash. Let’s just leave it at that.

    Who would like this: People who don’t like Button Mash.


    Button Bash by RainbowBob

    What I see: Button the Masher, the most fearsome warrior on the battlefields, defends his championship as king of the bloody hill from all contenders. But today there is a new combatant in the fight, one who could prove to usurp Button's title and honor from him.

    Not if Button's axe has anything to say about that!

    Thoughts coming out: Pretty straightforward, this one. Button Mash takes his king of the hill game too seriously, hurts another pony, then proceeds to get increasingly grounded for it.

    I’m not sure where the “bash” comes in.

    Who would like this: People who like seeing Button get grounded.


    Button Cash by CouchCrusader

    What I see: Bereft of arcade money, Button Mash journeys out into Ponyville with the burden of finding things to do with his Saturday. Things begin to look up when he finds a penny on the ground.

    Bereft of allowance money, Diamond Tiara finds Button Mash and his penny.

    This should end well.

    Thoughts coming out: This one actually has a lot of really clever (and cleverly subtle) jokes sprinkled throughout, and Diamond Tiara (who shows up trying to claim Button’s penny for herself) is downright charming in her deviousness.

    Who would like this: People who like seeing Diamond Tiara be devious.


    Button Clash by chono

    What I see: A tale of fashion in the workplace.

    Thoughts coming out: The grammar is this one is pretty dang rusty, though I do appreciate the misdirect in the title. Well… actually, it’s not really a misdirect at all, but it’s just probably not what you were expecting.

    Who would like this: People who don’t know who Button Mash is.


    Button Dash by plumander

    What I see: Button Mash has a plan to win over his one true love.

    Unfortunately, that plan involves doing something athletic.

    Thoughts coming out: Button dashes in order to get with Dash, before his hopes are promptly dashed.

    There’s almost no comedy to speak of. But there is some cutesy, inoffensive and very mild shipping at the end.

    Who would like this: People who like shipping Button Mash.


    Button Flash by FloydienSlip

    What I see: It's just a normal day in Ponyville when Button Mash gets a bizarre curse.

    Thoughts coming out: Well, that was… completely nonsensical.

    Also, I’m disappointed that Flash Sentry never made an appearance.

    Who would like this: People who like random nonsense.


    Button Gash by Regidar

    What I see: Button Mash and Rumble, the best of butt-buddies, find their relationship challenged one day after Button is unable to keep his mouth off of things that aren't his.

    Through the two young colts' shared experience, they find that their relationship only grows stronger.

    Thoughts coming out:

    Let’s just move on.

    Who would like this: People who like… um… Button Mash abuse?


    Button Gnash by Aquaman

    What I see: In which Button Mash shouts incoherently at the most advanced hoofball simulation ever developed, Sweetie Belle observes and provides internal commentary, and something just left of shipping ensues.

    Thoughts coming out: This one is actually pretty sweet and adorable for what it is. Even though it stops shy of being a shipfic, there’s genuine emotion to the relationship presented here. For all its silliness and FIFA video game references, there’s a wonderful sincerity to this fic.

    Who would like this: People who like good writing. And soccer references.


    Button Goulash by PresentPerfect

    What I see: Button Mash, Rumble and Truffle Shuffle have been invited along on a Nightmare Night Eve camping trip by the Cutie Mark Crusaders. Their mission: help them earn their merit badges! But when a ghost story turns night into fright, can they save the Cutie Mark Crusaders from the creepy crawlies lurking in the Whitetail Woods?

    Thoughts coming out: This one’s a pretty straightforward tale with a very slice-of-life feel to it; the CMC invite three colts to camp in the woods, which leads to a series of events involving goulash and a ghoul in ash. It’s mostly cutesy and involves foals acting like foals. In fact, Button isn’t even the focus of this one for much of it.

    My one real critique is that loquacious dialogue isn’t a very interesting character trait.

    Who would like this: People who like reading about kids doing kid stuff.


    Button Hash by shortskirtsandexplosions

    What I see: It's been two days since Apple Bloom and her three schoolfilly friends went missing.  After searching and searching, an exhausted and hopeless Applejack comes home to catch some much needed sleep so she can rejoin the town's quest in the morning.  All of the sudden, she wakes up in the middle of the night to strange noises, bloodstained doorframes, and a lone button lying on her kitchen room floor.

    Applejack is about to learn true despair.

    Thoughts coming out: What, no marijuana references? What about hash browns? No? Well, screw this.

    Actually, this one is pretty amazing, if just for what skirts pulled off in the span of about a week. It’s very riveting and unfolds in absolutely terrifying fashion, it quite fitting for the season. But fair warning: this one is not for the faint of heart. Maybe I just need to watch more horror movies, but I was actually feeling a little nauseous at the end there.

    Who would like this: People who like horror and gore. And gorey horror.


    Ⓑⓤⓣⓣⓞⓝ Ⓜⓐⓢⓗ by Obselescence

    What I see: This is Ⓑⓤⓣⓣⓞⓝ Ⓜⓐⓢⓗ: Ⓣⓗⓔ Ⓖⓐⓜⓔ. The world's first-ever RPG/FPS/MMO/MOBA/RTS/TBS, now on Joy Boys near you.

    You are Button Mash. You have just woken up. You are also playing a video game, because when are you not playing a video game? Hopefully you can make it downstairs. Breakfast is starting.

    Thoughts coming out: This one is a whole lot of fun; besides being full of great jokes and just generally a delight to read, it’s also a great send-up of choose your own adventure stories, utilizing the premise and poking fun at it with equal gusto. It also plays well with the Button Mash mythos (by which I mean the fanon character created by Jan), so there’s that too.

    Who would like this: People who like Button Mash.


    Button Nash by Hap

    What I see: Button Nash didn't used to be a pony. At least, not before he died.

    Thoughts coming out: I think I love this story just for this line alone:

    With a scowl, he shoved the impotent joystick to the side as he clambered off of the stool and listened to it flop back to its neutral position.

    Stop it with the sexual imagery!

    Actually, this one is kinda fun. I guess the premise of this one is that Button Nash is the reincarnation of someone from Nashville, who dearly misses the wholesome soul food he loves so dearly. For something this short, it’s not exactly straightforward nor is there much of a conclusion, but then I think that’s part of its charm. It rambles and moves at its own pace, but it still has a soulful tale to tell.

    Who would like this: People who like soul food.


    Button Splash by Pres– I mean, uh, “ShiveredTimbers”

    What I see: Button Mash has a terrible secret. Unfortunately for him, it's about to come to light as he and Sweetie Belle have their first time together...

    Thoughts coming out: Others may say “wat” to this story, but I say:

    “…Huh.”

    Actually, this one is pretty dang funny. There are some really solid lines, the twist is completely random and hilarious, and altogether this one is just really fun to roll with, for those who can dig the random and mildly risqué.

    Who would like this: People who are totally into wet stuff.


    Button Squash (Or, Maud Doesn’t Write About Rocks) by Rinnaul

    What I see: I like to write poems. They are about rocks. My sister says I should try writing about things other than rocks. I don't see the appeal, but Pinkie is very insightful.

    Pinkie said buttons are a popular topic lately, and they should be paired with something ending in "ash".

    Button squash end in "ash". They are not rocks, but I like them.

    This is about button squash.

    Thoughts coming out: This one is pretty adorable, with the sisterly relationship between Maud and Pinkie Pie being the focus of this fic. There are also a couple of good jokes about poetry that I appreciated, and a bit of meta humor that I didn’t mind, mostly because I think I agreed with it.

    Who would like this: People who like Maud Pie. (So… everyone, really.)


    Button’s Stash by ABagOfVicodin

    What I see: There is a legend that Button's Stash is so Button Brash that you'll Button Crash in a Button Flash. Unfortunately, the legend got a little Button Rehashed about the Button Cache. Whoops.

    Thoughts coming out: The powers of punnery are strong in this one.

    Who would like this: People who want to live, to long and to love, to lose and to laugh.

    …And people who like puns. Them too.


    Button Thrash by Jake The Army Guy

    What I see: Left home alone after being grounded for mouthing off to Miss Cheerilee, Button Mash goes snooping through his Dad's closet. He finds a box of relics from his Dad's past, including a few vinyl records from some odd-sounding bands that turn out to be just the thing to incite a bit of preteen rebellion.

    Thoughts coming out: Yeah, this one was pretty good. Lots of solid heavy metal references in here. Actually, I was a little surprised; I’m not anything even approaching a metalhead and I still got most of the jokes (my favorite being someone hearing “I wanna rock!” and expecting to see a twisted sister burst through the door… or something along those lines).

    Who would like this: People who were raised in the 1980s, me thinks.


    Button Vash by AppleTank

    What I see: A life in a day of a not really a pony Button Mash, and other weird things.

    Thoughts coming out: And to wrap this up, we’ve got this… uh… well, I’m not sure what to call this thing. It’s random as hell, clearly went through no editing, and left my mind a scattered mess. The chapter title probably sums it up just as well as anything can, to be honest.

    Also, I didn’t pick up on any Trigun references, for those who were wondering.

    Who would like this: People who… um… *scratches head* …I got nothing.


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In the wake of the changeling attack on Canterlot, two ponies have been called upon to track a group of changelings into the desert. But soon, they uncover a dark and dreadful secret...

First Published
30th Nov 2012
Last Modified
30th Nov 2012
#1 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Changelings and Daring Do?

Interesting....

#2 · 103w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Who knows.

#3 · 103w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

Interesting. I'll read this later because Philip K. Dick.

#4 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

I'd love to read this, but it'll have to wait for a while...

Sounds very interesting though.

#5 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

This is a wonderful story. Long, but wonderful. :heart:

#6 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Interest: Acquired.

Tracking: Enabled.

:pinkiehappy:

#7 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1712406

I'll buy 50 of everything! :pinkiecrazy: Srsly, how the hell is there not a filter for these idiots?

Will read when I get back. But here's an upvote to counter the troll. :twilightsmile:

#8 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Yessssss! Excellent!

Got a chill when I read through this and it's through re-reading it that I caught the significance of the buffalo story at the beginning. Among a few other things. Very moody and atmospheric, the best way to tell a story about shape-shifters.

Love the image by the way! I was looking forward to seeing that ever since you described it to me.

Wonderful work!

#9 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Well, you've gone and done it. I usually avoid fictions unless they're recommended to me by a friend, but your concept has drawn me in like pink on a pinkie pie :pinkiecrazy:. I'll be reading and leaving feedback soon. :twilightsmile:

#10 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

funny i just read do androids dream of electric sheep.

might as well read this.:rainbowkiss:

#11 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Chapter should be titled, "probably not." XD

Like'd this story.

#12 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

This still read just as creepy the second time through. Great job!

#13 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Nicely done.

#14 · 103w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

(Readers beware, for there be spoilers ahoof!)


Whoa. Impressive, and dark. I'd say it's quite a bit darker than the Quest if you really think about it :fluttershysad:. In the circumstances, however, it probaby has the most upbeat and positive resolution possible. :pinkiesmile:

Also, those things like the 'sitting bull' tale and the actual changelings choosing sheep as their disguise. Small, yet meaningful and imparting a sort of moral significance with a degree of subtlety. I love seeing things like these.:twilightsmile:

An interesting take on the changelings and their ability to act like individuals. Also, time travel! Say, by any chance, did the use of a time spell to remove the changeling threat that happened in my own story influence this idea in any way? 'Cause it'd be quite flattering if it did. :twilightblush:

Anyway, I have to agree with what you said in one of your earlier blog posts, John: the changelings do present a whole lot of story-building opportunity. I'm glad they were introduced into the FiM universe. Without them, cool stuff like this story here wouldn't have happened, or at least not nearly as well as it can now.

#15 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

And the award for deviously clever title goes to...

#16 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1713485 I always love your comments, because you make them nice and long and put a lot of thought into them! :twilightsmile:

Much as I want to say that your story inspired the use of a time-travel spell, to be honest I'm pretty sure that was the Crystal Empire episode, for introducing that in-canon mechanism for flinging a town into the future while causing its inhabitants to lose their memory.

However, I'm willing to bet that the name I came up with for the unicorn, "Nebula Gleam," was pretty heavily influenced by your story. Dawn Gleam would have been too obvious and hopeful sounding, but Nebula Gleam sounds like the last light of a dead star. Not many ponies have depressing sounding names like that.

#17 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

So, I guess the movie will be called Blade Trotter? :raritywink:

A most enjoyable read with a delightfully creepy twist. Thank you for writing it.

#18 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

Weird… in a good sort of way.  Makes me wish there was a ‘mystery’ tag.  Much enjoyed and appreciated.  

#19 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

First saw and read disc. My thoughts: MUST READ NAOH!!! (which I am doing)

#20 · 103w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1713664 Thanks! :twilightsmile:

And yay, I actually did inspire something! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: While the Crystal Timethrow is, of course, more logical and all, the name inspiration is good enough for me. This sort of influence is actually around the top of what I strive to achieve. My own work affecting the thoughts and the work of others, even if in a small way. So, thank you, m'good sir, for giving me artistic fulfillment. :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

#21 · 103w, 16h ago · · ·

No, they do not. Next question!:trollestia:

#22 · 102w, 6d ago · · ·

I need to say, damn good story.

I though it will be some ripoff of some old scifi story but how wrong i was.

Did you think about posting it on EQD?

#23 · 102w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1726230  If the pre-readers ever get around to reading my submission, then we'll see if it makes it to EQD. :derpytongue2:

#24 · 102w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

Past Dodge Junction, in Equestria's badlands, lies a town called Mountain Meadow. You won't find this town on any map, however. A long time ago, there was a very curious occurrence here. Today, a pegasus and her royal guard escort are about to learn that sometimes, what you're looking for can't be found on any regular map, but perhaps on a map of... The Twilight Zone.

Seriously, I got that vibe all the way through. Fuckin' kudos, dude.

#25 · 100w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

I enjoyed the interaction between 'Sir Knight' and Daring, plus the use of her abilities as a tracker. I wasn't sure what to expect when going into this, so I just let you take me along for the ride.

I agree with Twilight's statement about bringing out the possibility of individual thought when it comes to the Changelings. You wouldn't exactly know what would happen if they're hive mind were to be broken and them being left on their own devices. Here they found a life more enjoyable, loving, and free from the rest.

But then, what do they feed off of if not love? :applejackunsure:

I do have a slight gripe. Equites seemed to have an uncharacteristic change. He was stoic and all about the rules and gave in only when it threatened the mission. For him to decide at the end to not divulge their secret seemed out of place for him. Yes, it was a proper and poetic end to the story, but it seemed like there would be more hints to the change.

Course another story of him dealing with his decision and how the things he saw changed his perspective would also be interesting.

Anyway, thanks for writing this. I enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

#26 · 100w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>1815846 Now this comment is getting a definite thumbs up from me, for being so thoughtful and detailed. :pinkiehappy:

Ah, Equites - I meant to imply that there was a change in his character as the story went on, though my hints may have been too subtle, so that would be my fault for not making that change clearer. He is indeed very stoic and solely focused on the mission at the start, but that begins to break apart with the discovery of the old nest, and his horrified reaction to that (if you notice, the end of that scene is the first time Daring addresses him as 'Equites' instead of 'knight', symbolizing the change in their relationship). When Daring asks him if he reported on the things happening in the village, he hesitates - he's still focused on the mission, but where their earlier conversation had him giving Daring a flat 'no, end of story' answer to talking about anything that doesn't have to do with the mission, here he has to justify it a little. His conversation with Bandwagon is the final straw, when he finally loses focus on the mission in light of the murder of the changelings and the discovery of what the villagers really are.

So I did mean to illustrate a change in his character, although I probably could have made it a lot more apparent. :twilightsheepish:

#27 · 100w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1816147 Don't worry about it. I think it was well enough considering the length of the story. Sorry I didn't catch on.

#28 · 100w, 19h ago · · ·

Is this a Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep crossover/inspired fic?

Ezn
#29 · 100w, 18h ago · · ·

That was a pretty cool read. I liked the reuse of the Crystal Empire's curse, Daring Do's characterisation and, well, most of it, really. A thumbs-up from me.

However, I didn't really like the bit where Equites somehow remained convinced that they weren't dealing with changelings. And, in fact, the earlier scene where Daring has the conversation about the painting with Peachy. I just think that given they were specifically looking for changelings, stuff like that and the wings and the fangs should have set off alarm bells.

I'd've bought Daring and Equites dismissing the notion of Peachy being a changeling through some reasoning, but that it never seems to have occurred to them in the first place is odd.

Apart from that, my only other complaint is the occasional patches of obtuse wording. There's nothing really anything too serious or flow-murdering, but there are spots where mixtures of pronouns and "the pegasus"/"the earth pony" get momentarily confusing, and I'd probably streamline a number of sentences if I were to edit this.

Good job overall, and thanks for writing.

#30 · 100w, 18h ago · · ·

>>1838043 That'd be a big no. :derpytongue2: Only the title is a reference to Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep?

#31 · 100w, 18h ago · · ·

>>1838065

I'd've bought Daring and Equites dismissing the notion of Peachy being a changeling through some reasoning, but that it never seems to have occurred to them in the first place is odd.

:twilightsheepish: You mean like this?

“I’m not sure I have an answer for that,” Equites replied before he suddenly started.  “Wait, maybe they’re the changelings in disguise!”

The pegasus sighed.  “Look, I don’t want to give changelings too much credit, but I think they know what a train is.  Besides, the whole point of wearing a disguise is to blend in and not draw any suspicion.  Peachy and Pluck were totally sincere.  They had absolutely no idea what I was talking about.”

Ezn
#32 · 100w, 17h ago · · ·

>>1838252

Hmm... yeah, that's okay. It does happen before any of the most compelling evidence that Peachy's a changeling, but I suppose I can believe that Daring and Equites had that possibility very firmly ruled out after that exchange. I think it makes them seem a bit foolish, but then I have an outsider's perspective on the whole situation, and Equestria is full of weird magical stuff.

#33 · 100w, 14h ago · · ·

I want to read this. So much.

I don't know why, but the title reminds me of Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep The book that Blade Runner was based off of. For that alone I must read it.

Also, changelings.

#34 · 100w, 8h ago · · ·

I would put this as MLP Episode quality.  Except we would never see it, because of no Mane 6 or Ponyville.   Well done, though, very good plot, realistic characterizations, and wonderful conclusion.  5/5 Mustaches  :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#35 · 100w, 6h ago · · ·

Even though it is clear from the start that some of the villagers are changelings, I was not expecting that twist to happen. First I thought that Peachy Keen was a changeling, and then the other first two that were "changing". But when most of the town began to change, I stopped and thought "something's wrong".

A very worthy read indeed, dear author.

#36 · 99w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

Finally got around to reading this and, I must say, I am impressed. The twist is very well crafted, with enough hints that I doesn't come from nowhere, but still presented in such a way that when it comes, it still feels like a surprise.

I also like how you never really describe how the revelation impacts the villagers, with the characters leaving the village before any real consequences start. Sure, they go back to their old selves, but how long, and how the village will proceed is left in the open enough for me to keep wondering how things will proceed from here.

The questions and themes raised are also very interesting, with "nature vs. nurture", what constitutes one's identity, subjection to fate/authority and so forth. It is a lot to tackle in a short story, but it meshes perfectly with the overall narrative arc. Besides, it is presented in such a well thought, yet still subtle way, that it makes this story truly special. All in all, thank you for the excellent read!

By the way, why did you use Daring Do here? Don't get me wrong, I liked her characterization, specially her interaction with Equites, but at the same time the whole thing doesn't feel like a Daring Do story.

#37 · 99w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

>>1853462  I'm thrilled you liked the story!  To answer your question, Daring Do actually wasn't my original protagonist for this fic, and the decision to use her came about mostly because of the role.  Originally, this story was going to be a side-story to one of my other stories, You Only Live Twice, which has Octavia and Vinyl Scratch as secret agents fighting changelings (so basically, this story was going to be a pony version of The X-Files: two agents go out in the field and encounter supernatural stuff). Ultimately, though, it seemed like a better idea to make this story stand on its own, which meant dropping Octavia and Vinyl and finding two other ponies to be the protagonists. So for one of them, I figured a royal guard would be suitable (since they'd be the most interested in finding the changelings), and for the other I needed someone who would be believable as an animal tracker/explorer type, and that's when I got the idea to use Daring Do.

#38 · 99w, 2d ago · · ·

(In case anyone reads this before the story, minor spoilers enclosed)

I thoroughly enjoyed this. All the while, I was expecting that the townsfolk would be changelings - but not in the capacity that they turned out to be - and that Equites would actually be a changeling too, and that it would end with Daring being quietly subdued and replaced. I was kind of hoping that the villagers would be redeemed and accepted into Equestrian society, though.

Also, was that spell that the Nebula unicorn used a reference to the Crystal Empire?

#39 · 99w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1858362

Also, was that spell that the Nebula unicorn used a reference to the Crystal Empire?

Eeyup. :eeyup:

#40 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

Cool stuff - I love Daring Do!

#41 · 88w, 6d ago · · ·

I looked through Equestria Daily's Fanfic archive and found this. It's written well and it's a good read. That was an interesting ending to the whole fic. :rainbowdetermined2:

#42 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

Finally got around to reading this. Truly it is a masterpiece and makes me wish there was a mystery tag.

Accept my thumbs up, star, and follow.

#43 · 61w, 17h ago · · ·

Very solidly written for what this story is. The atmosphere of the story was solid and consistent throughout. The characters were well characterized

The only gripe I can come up with is that the protagonists didn't do a whole lot this story. They came to the town, did a little investigating, but then the mystery pretty much solves and then resolves mostly itself independent of Daring Doo and Equites.

Otherwise this is a well written short story.

#44 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·

A very good story

#45 · 6w, 4d ago · · ·

Very nice story.

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