When Twilight finds a horribly distraught Gilda in the library, begging for help with Rainbow Dash, what is she to do? Twilight, the number one expert on friendship, has been asked to help with a friendship issue, so why not? It should make an interesting letter to the Princess if nothing else.
A/N: here is the GilTwi I promised. It took me forever to get all the ideas and what not and special thanks
to For The Plot for all their help on this. Honestly, without that guy I probably would've just skipped this and done a raripie or som- no probably not that but still...
I have no clue where I'm gonna go with this thing, and am actually open to suggestions in the comments.
enjoy!
Knowing full well that I haven't finished it yet, I am setting this in the same Cannon as New Perspective, though it can stand on it's own.
Cover art by EthePony on DA. check him out.
This is... an actually unique ship.
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1709319 I think this might be a repost too...
but yes it is VERY unique
edit: yep, it seems the writer was sick and while sick deleted it
1709340 Sick.
In.
The.
Head.
And stomach and spine and joints and soul and everything else. But yes this is a repost.
Gilda is best pony.
1709351 I hope you are feeling better now
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here is a picture of Twilight in a hug position for you
What the hell, dood...
Didn't I favorite this already? Why you gotta be like that....making me favorite this again and like this again before I read the changes...shit, dood.
Definatly read this before... What ev. Still gets a thumbs up
Yes, I reuploaded it and here's why
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I finally got around to reading this and it was worth it
I'll add to read later, since Gilda x Twilight is a very unique ship, and it sounds like a good read.
Expect to hear from me again soon
i was wandering why this was familiar and it actually was a repost but i feel like you edited some parts. did you?
1709817 uhm... no. I don't know why people keep saying that. I made grammatical and spelling checks. That's it.
1709974 that must be it then it just feels like theres some extra parts in the first 2 chapters like the conversation with spike cause i dot remember that
>*ahem*
>*cough*
Yeah, that's enough of that.
And you have a tendency to explain the characters' thought processes and motivation rather than showing it, and that just makes my skin crawl.
It's a shame, really - this is a pairing I'd never seen, and was rather intrigued by.
please tell me there's going to be more
Damn this is amazing, unique, and above all, beautiful...yes, guys can say beautiful. :P
Oh good! You got it back.
I haven't seen a ship this cracky since that Bloomberg/Tom one I read a while back.
I am so glad this story came back. I still think it is a little rushed, but I still like it a lot please keep it up.
"Gilda picked at her eggs gingerly"
Hmm... do griffons lay eggs or live birth? Cause if they lay eggs, that's kind of disturbing...
Although in the Running of the Leaves episode Pinkie talks about eating hot dogs, so apparently she eats meat...
And at Twi's sleepover they have marshmallows, which is made from animal byproducts, including equines...
...
I think I may have just stumbled upon some disturbing credibility for Cupcakes
Finally, a good gilda story.
1712784 That all depends on the marshmallow recipe. The original marshmallow was made from the roots of a plant with the same name, boiled in sugar syrup and dried.
Egg albumin can also be used instead of gelatin, but isn't used in commercial production for the obvious reasons of frequent bacterial contamination of egg products and drastically reduced shelf life.
There is also other substitutes: (from wikipedia) Alternatives to gelatin include non-animal gel sources such as agar-agar (a seaweed), carrageenan, pectin, konjak, and guar gum.
I would think the ponies would have developed a similar product.
Cute and short! Good work.
Fave this ship immediately. Giltwi ship is awesome ship. here have a few images.cdn.derpiboo.ru/media/BAhbBlsHOgZmSSJSMjAxMi8wOC8wMi8xNF8wMV8zOV82MTdfNjUxNDdfX3NhZmVfdHdpbGlnaHRfc3BhcmtsZV9naWxkYV9odWdfYXJ0aXN0X3JpYm5vc2UGOgZFVA/65147__safe_twilight-sparkle_gilda_griffon_hug_artist-ribnose.png cdn.derpiboo.ru/media/BAhbBlsHOgZmSSJrMjAxMi8wNi8yOS8wMF8wMF8xMl82OTVfMjQ0NzBfX3NhZmVfdHdpbGlnaHRfc3BhcmtsZV9zaGlwcGluZ19ibHVzaGluZ19naWxkYV9udXp6bGluZ19hcnRpc3RfYWRhbXNjYWdlBjoGRVQ/24470__safe_twilight-sparkle_shipping_lesbian_blushing_gilda_griffon_nuzzling_artist-adamscage.png
a griffon's lower half is lion, right? I'm just going to assume reproduction takes more after mammals.
And not think about it more than that.
Lordy, this is really fast-paced. Like, there's no buildup to anything and no real backstory, from what I've seen here.
Also, work on your phrasing. Things like
rather than "under the impression that" (not to mention the "it's" over "its") and
rather than "accept" is just bad...
And you definitely need to work on your dialogue punctuation. Going from dialogue to a tag, as in
requires a comma, rather than a full stop. And if the first word of the dialogue tag isn't a name (like, if it were "she"), it shouldn't be capitalized.
I have a screen cap but it won't work but this is on the top of the page
There was barely an ounce of "show" in all of what you have here. Just a constant stream of dialogue and narration pertaining to why the characters are doing what they're doing and the like, as though rationalization was all that goes into romance.
And it was incredibly formulaic. Former villain and main character meet -> Former villain repents and tries to make up for what she's done -> Conflict springs from the characters acting irrational -> The pair gets together, and much blushing is had. If you write more of this story, I can't see a reason for me to continue reading it, as either there'll be no conflict (and thus, it'll be boring), or there'll be conflict, but it'll be pointless (either stemming from their irrational behavior again, or stemming from some left-field plot device).
I think that unless this bit
was meant to be a foreshadowing-y metaphor for their relationship, I didn't find a bit of this to be all that creative/engaging, despite how original the ship itself may have been.
Also, it's "sight", not "site". A site is just a kind of place.
1709319 Oh my god! SERIOUSLY! Come on this not even looking at the comments but I accidently spot yours at the top.
1714008 You should just end the pain and block me if it's really that bad.
1714013 NEVER! You haven't done anything worth me blocking you
Didnt say you were bad its just been weird coincidence
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1714033 Fine, you know what. i'm following you. I feel this will be dragged out otherwise.
1714033 By the way, nice bananna
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1714040 Refresh the page, it's back to my old avatar.
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Well birds hunt other birds all the time, that and since the eggs are (most likely) unfertilized it isn't like eating a thinking creature. So I really don't see what is so disturbing. Now it would of been interesting if she asked for bacon and to see Twilight's reaction but personally I think Twilight's more scholastic nature would take it in stride seeing that gryphons are carnivores, it is something that would need to be spoken about between the two though if Twilight wants to keep Gilda around and healthy so she may enjoy her company!.
Nice, it may be a touch hard to tell that
Are thoughts, may help to italicize thoughts in the future (many internet authors do this).
Very nicely done!
I also no cannot get the thought that Gilda is fluffy-soft out of my head no
This is not a ship I expected, but you make them so sweet together. :)
Damn, that's one heck of a way to impress your girlfriend.
It's also nice that Gilda and Rainbow have at least worked out some of their differences. I suspect there are still others waiting to jump in, but for now they seem to be becoming friends again.
1709351 If it's any consolation, I know that feeling. Don't let it get to you.
1709319 This is probably the second rarest ship I've thought of with Gilda. The first (which I haven't gotten around to writing yet, and may be willing to hand off to someone if they think they can handle it) is "GildaMac," or as I like to think of it, "Gilded Apple."
Yeah so it's corny. So?
Anyway, this is going in my readlaters. I'd hit it now, but my stupid UCL is almost over 80 again. This is unexceptable.
Good idea for a ship but i have a few concerns...
The start is abit abrupt. It's like you've compleatly skipped the intoduction. (A prologue would be helpful).
It seems abit rushed. The first chapter is important if you want people to stick to the story. (Gilda is MUCH too sappy and twilight is much too accepting of the situation).
Your characters seem to change attatudes and opinions far too quickly. (Again you rush through the key scenes much too quickly).
Poor spike
Wow cool story
This chapter is better than the first and I really like your Pinkie Pie.
Although... You could draw it out longer. (Still seems abit rushed.)
Sorry if I seem a little insulting...
Very well done! This will stay in my favorites once I clear-out the ones I "tracked"
Also
This always works in real life against me
1709319 noooo... a unique ship would be my favorite one
gilda x adolescent spike
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1714414 OPINIONS!
you have no clue how hard i am laughing.
but gilda x spike is actually a good pair
Well... That happened...
Nice backstory for Gilda by the way.