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    Chapter One: Behemoth

    ::> Entry #25

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            A blue portal opened amidst the empty space, bending and swallowing all light around it. As the space warped, the portal began to expand, and a massive starship started to push through. It was official: the USS Vector had reached its destination.  

       

            The ship had spent three days in hyperspace, heading for “Zeta-Twenty”, a mining station orbiting a small rocky planet. It had gone silent roughly six days before, and the Vector had been dispatched to investigate. The station itself was large and ring-shaped, with several antennae protruding from almost every section—some of which were bent, or simply not there at all. Docked right at its center was a large cargo vessel, and a myriad of lights could still be seen flickering in every section of the station, signaling that it was at least still powered.

       

            Deep inside the Vector was its command bridge, a large chamber outfitted with consoles that had both men and women sitting in front of them. When they were not typing on or managing their stations, the technicians were either voicing commands through their commlinks or, more rarely, sipping on a cup of coffee.

       

            Aside from the consoles, the entirety of the walls were composed of virtual windows, including the ceiling. This allowed for a panoramic view, even from the inside of the ship, while still keeping the bridge safe from any immediate damage that could be caused from the outside.

       

            Standing in front of the main window was a single man clad in a suit of white armor, its shoulder pads a golden yellow. The right one was adorned with the logo of the Colonial Guard, while the left one had a vertical blue stripe on it with a star in the middle. It was the typical armor of an Admiral.

       

            His name was Adam Becker, a veteran of the CG who was entering his early three hundreds. He was a respected man amongst the USC, known for his heroic actions and loyalty to the USC.

       

            He folded his arms and gazed out through the window, attempting to get a better view of the station as the ship continued to move towards it. He was brought out of his thoughts, though, by the quaking sound caused by someone walking up to him. He turned around and found himself face-to-belly with a titanic man clad in heavy armor, also known as "Atlas". The Admiral glanced up at him, then went back to his previous task of looking out the window.

       

            "So... that's Zeta-Twenty, right?" Atlas inquired, then folded his arms.

       

            "Yes, it is,” the Admiral replied. “Normally there should be some other ships around here, carrying supplies back and forth, but I don't see any. Besides, it’s been on blackout status for what? Six Terran days now?”

       

            “Guess so,” Atlas mumbled.

       

            The Admiral nudged Atlas with his elbow and gestured back at the window; the ship was getting considerably closer to the station, where it began to pass through a cloud of debris, composed mostly by the twisted remains of small civilian ships, cargo crates, and even the occasional body.

       

            "This ain't looking good..." Atlas said. He then glanced at the Admiral, who was completely impassive. The tension grew as the ship slowly closed the gap between itself and the station. Everyone on the bridge was silent as the Vector slowly slipped across the field of debris, the space-station growing bigger as the two got closer. More details could be seen as the distance diminished, the Admiral noticing that ‘Zeta-Twenty’ was somewhat damaged. Some gaps could be seen, most likely made by explosions, and most of the antennae that were still standing were either bent or missing parts.

       

            “Anything on the sensors?" demanded the Admiral to no one in particular, unfolding his arms and facing the general direction of the bridge's crew.

       

            The crew over at a cluster of particularly large consoles began working rapidly, shuffling through a multitude of information. They sat there for a while, immersed in their work, until one of them stood up and said, "There’s nothing on the scan, sir... just scattered energy sources from inside the station, probably emergency cells. No life signs..."

       

            The crewman's statement made Atlas flinch on the inside. He turned to face the Admiral, who was looking out the window once again.

       

            Atlas watched as the Admiral’s face slowly twisted into a scowl. "Set course, move behind the planet," he ordered, and almost immediately the ship began moving faster, circling around the planet.

       

            Only a few seconds afterwards an alarm began to sound off, accompanied by several several emergency lights. A crewman stood up, yelling,  "Sir! Multiple contacts! Three Ubor frigates!" He then sat back down, continuing to manage the console. Soon after, three small ships dashed from behind the planet, heading towards the Supercarrier.

       

            These ships were small, almost minuscule compared to the Vector, but what they lacked in size they made up for with superior speed and maneuverability. Their design was much different from the average Human ship; Ubor engineering being somewhat crude in that area, as they often went for frames with sharp edges and cuts complemented with ridged ends and spikes. Whereas Humans prefered their ships smooth, sturdy and well made. True, it took longer to build a ship by the standards the Humans had, but it paid off in the end. Another difference was that most of what the Ubor built were coated red, while the Humans favoured blue, though they had no real preference.

       

            The automated voice from the ship then spoke up, “Attention all crew members, multiple Ubor ships detected nearby. Assume battlestations, and prepare for possible boarding attempt. Code: SET, REPEL, CAUTERIZE.”

            

            Becker turned around to face Atlas. "That means you as well, son."

       

            The giant nodded, and started running towards the tram station along with several other men, the chorus of their footsteps resonating throughout the ship.

       

            “SS Batteries: ON.”

       

            Becker sighed, looking through the window again, his arms behind his back. Outside, the Ubor frigates were flying loops around the Vector, evading the rain of fire the carrier’s turrets unleashed on them. The Admiral knew that they would not last long, but he also knew that they were not meant to. The Ubor often left some cheap scouts wherever they attacked, used as expendable forces to keep the enemy in one place, only to come back in more numbers, many more. His expression remained unchanged as he watched one of the frigates explode due to turret fire.

       

       

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            The Vector’s tram system was thought to be a lifesaver by many, seeing as the ship was several kilometers long. It ran through the entire vessel, capable of getting everyone to wherever they needed to be and fast. The only problem was that, sometimes, the trams could get a little cramped.

       

            Atlas stepped onto the tram station, pushing through several other men. He did not have to wait for too long; a tram soon stopped at the station, its doors automatically sliding open and allowing several troopers to step inside, Atlas being one of them. It then closed its doors and began to speed through the interior of the ship.

       

            The tram reached its stop, and everyone eagerly walked out. Atlas moved through the ship’s hallways, heading towards the ‘Drop Center’, his designated battlestation. Some simply called the launch tubes ‘Man-cannons’ as the troopers inside were literally launched out of the ship at supersonic speeds, either in individual drop pods or in pods capable of holding entire squads.

       

            One of the tactics involving the Drop Center during ship-to-ship combat was to launch a swarm of drop pods at the enemy ship. They would either punch right through the hull of the vessel in order for the troopers inside to rapidly board the ship, or should they be unable to pierce the hull, the pod would be capable of latching onto the ship, allowing the trooper inside to get out of the pod and walk along the hull, looking for a hatch or another spot they could use to board the vessel. Heavies often chose the latter, seeing as they did not have individual drop pods, instead using only their exo-suits.

       

            As Atlas ran through the long hallways leading to the Drop Center, he was soon joined by a group of Heavy Troopers. They passed by the motor pool, watching for a brief moment as pilots climbed into their combat walkers, and all other kinds of vehicles. After running past the motor pool, he looked through one of the virtual windows lining the hall to catch a glimpse of one of the frigates exploding into a cloud of twisted metal and fire.

       

            They made their way to the Drop Center, into the 'Heavy Infantry' section. Atlas and two of the troopers that were with him walked into a chamber that had three large tubes, where another soldier greeted them. He and the two troopers got inside of a tube, and a transparent hatch closed behind them, sealing them shut and locking them in place. Heavy troopers did not need pods, as they could easily be launched out of the ship, making use of their suits as their own drop pods.

       

       

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            Admiral Becker was still standing in front of the window, observing as the last frigate was turned into a smoldering chunk of metal. Some of the crew around the command bridge began to cheer, while the Admiral slowly shook his head. He carefully examined the surroundings of the Vector. “There...” He saw five bright flashes in the distance, followed by the appearance of five more Ubor ships. The whole crew stopped cheering, and fell silent.

       

            One man broke the silence, "Sir... five ships just came out of hyperspace: three Ubor Super-Dreadnoughts, one carrier and another frigate."

       

            The Admiral sighed, and slowly turned towards the crew, "We won't hold against that many ships; prepare for a jump."

       

            One of the men stood up, "But sir! We don't have enough time to-!"

       

            "Make it a blind jump, we don't have another choice! I am not letting them take this ship!"

       

            “Sir yes sir!”

       

            Once again, the deep, metallic voice of the ship spoke up, "Attention, all crew members begin preparations for imminent hyperspace jump. Code: LOCK, CHARGE, EVADE. Attention, all crew members..."

            

            

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            Atlas was still inside the launch tube when the ship’s automated voice boomed across the hallways. The soldier standing in the chamber next to the three tubes grabbed onto a railing as the Vector’s hyperdrive began charging up. Atlas remained still and held his breath. The Vector rapidly accelerated, the force pushing Atlas against the launch tube.

       

            In a span of milliseconds, the Vector was propelled into a flash of blue light. Atlas felt the pressure on him subside, followed by a massive headache. The last thing he saw was the soldier in the chamber collapse onto the floor.

       

       

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            “No! There will be no more negotiations!” the half lion, half eagle barked, “This has to end now! You have expanded more zan enough, and have even begun to twist and deform the face of Gryphos! Just a few weeks ago, your ‘Ponies’ desecrated an ancient Gryphon temple and turned it into their camp! The old tales were true! Ponykind has always been a plague!” The Gryphon Ambassador, Ivan Razorwing, stood up and pointed his claw accusingly at Celestia, who remained in her chair, her solemn expression unchanged. Razorwing began pacing around angrily, constantly shooting furious glares at Celestia. He wore a red robe embroidered with gold, which had the shield of the Gryphonic Kingdom sewn into it with the finest of threads.

       

            “You have disrupted the natural order of ze world! Not only do you control ze sun and ze moon, for the benefit of your country ONLY! But the increasing population of pegasus ponies in Gryphos is beginning to cause the weather to stall! Soon, ve vill have to pay THEM to make OUR weather function!”

       

            “What Razorwing says is true; ponykind can live in harmony, but only among ponies and ponies alone. Or else they bring trouble to our own.” said Docaro, the Zebra Ambassador. He wore a dark green cloak, and underneath it several golden rings and other types of jewelry jingled every time he moved.

       

            Celestia opened her eyes and looked at Razorwing, who shot another angry glare her way.

       

            “I’ve already told you, Princess. Either you give us part of your land, or ve vill throw those vile pests back to Equestria.”

       

            Celestia took a deep breath, considering her options. If she refused, there was no way of knowing what the Gryphons would do. It was always a gamble with them, even centuries ago.

       

            She opened her mouth to speak, but almost as if on on cue, a deep, low growl shook the palace. As Celestia and the two Ambassadors stood up, a bright blue light flashed from the night’s sky into the meeting room. She frowned before taking flight and racing through the long hallways, followed by the two Ambassadors.

       

            They ran past many of the confused and scared palace servants before they reached the castle’s courtyard. Another deep, but loud growl surprised them. They looked ahead, and their minds refused to believe what their eyes were showing them.

       

            The moon was not visible anymore, and neither was the rest of the sky. Something was eclipsing it, something massive that was slowly inching its way over the city. Parts of it glowed blue, and hundreds of tiny specks of light adorned its entire form. It was bigger than Canterlot, probably by several hundreds of times. It was no dragon and neither was it a mountain. It obscured the sky and replaced the stars with its own blinking lights, while floating effortlessly far above the castle.

       

            Celestia’s eyes widened. She could not believe such a thing was heading towards Canterlot. The monster slowly lost its momentum, and came to a complete stop. It then released a final growl, this one being far louder than any of the ones before it. The ground began quaking, and the windows across the city began shattering as the growl swept through it.

       

            Razorwing stood still as the windows around him shattered. He too could not comprehend the situation, but slowly the gears in his head started moving again. He scowled and looked at the Princess.

       

            “Y-You! This is your plan, is it not!?” he snarled. “You summoned this... thing! I have had enough of this! You and your kind have taken things too far!” Following his statement, Razorwing took flight, and headed back towards his room to fetch his guards and begin the trip back to Gryphos.

               

            The Alicorn Princess was bewildered. She had heard Razorwing, but she simply could not be bothered to respond. Deep inside, she knew that after this, there would be no way to change his opinion.

       

            She bit her lower lip, looking at the ground. The city had lit up already, the screams of terror echoing throughout its streets as Canterlot’s inhabitants panicked at the sight of the monster that hovered above them.

       

            Being more than a thousand years old, Celestia had seen her fair share of monsters, spirits and other kinds of evil creatures. She had lived through the reign of Discord, witnessed wars, and had had to banish her own sister to the moon when she turned into a monster. Even considering her life experiences, this was completely out of her grasp; there was no prophecy, no legend, nothing. “Perhaps... perhaps it is finally the end of days?” she thought to herself.

       

            She banished that last thought from her mind.“No,” she thought. The Alicorn mare lifted her head and put on a stern expression.

       

            “No!” she said to herself out loud. “I do not care what that monster’s purpose is; I will not allow it to hurt my subjects. It shall face me first.”

       

            With her newfound determination, Celestia unfurled her wings and leaped into the air.

       

       

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    Luna took in a deep breath, filling her lungs with the sterile air of the medical facility she was in. She then spent a few seconds adjusting the white overall that was covering her body, making sure the attire was sealed and leaving no room for anything to come into contact with her dark blue coat. Once done, she sighed through the surgical mask placed over her muzzle.

    She mentally prepared herself for what was about to come, gathering all of the calmness she could manage. The Princess examined her surroundings for anything she might have missed, but everything was just as before. The group of four unicorn guards standing between her and the metallic door had not moved an inch, and the nurse by her side scratched her head, waiting for the Princess to continue.

    “Are you certain it is ready?” Luna asked, looking to the nurse.

    “Yes,” the mare responded. “It stopped thrashing about an hour ago, and even... talked to us.”

    “I see...”

    Luna looked at the door guarded by the four ponies, and gulped. It would have been a blatant lie to say that she was not scared, but she had to keep herself calm, especially considering what was waiting for her beyond the door. Her mouth was dry, but she nodded at the guards regardless of her fear.

    The four armored ponies saluted her, then turned around. Each of them inserted their horns into a series of holes in the metallic door, and shortly after a mechanical click sounded, signaling that the door had been unlocked.

    Slowly, the Princess trotted towards it, and the guards stepped aside for her. “Stay outside, I wish to be alone with it.” She gently slid the door open with her magic, and walked into the adjoining room.

    As she closed the door behind her, her eyes were immediately locked onto the creature lying on the medical table located in the center of the room, which was composed entirely of white tiles. She slowly began her approach, the sound made by her hooves as they hit the floor resonating through the chamber.

    She stumbled back as the creature lifted its head and looked at her with its red eyes, its stare drilling into her soul. She frowned and moved closer to it, swallowing her fear.

    “You... look different,” the creature said, its voice raspy and distorted. “What are you here... for?”

    “I am Princess Luna, ruler of the night.” She began pacing around the bed. “But the biggest question is: who are you?”

    “I... am nobody,” the creature replied. “Nothing but a distorted reflection of what I used to be...”

    “Very well, then. What were you?”

    “They took that away from me...”

    “Took what?”

    “The memories... only shards now.”

    “Are you saying you were not always like this?”

    “Yes... they turned me into a monster.”

    “Who are ‘they’?”

    “The machines...” The monster let its head rest on the bed’s pillow, looking up into the ceiling. “All that’s left... is pain. I remember the pain... only pain.”

    “Why are you here? Why did you attack us?”

    “That was not me... it was them, controlling me... But the signal is gone, now I control... It is a twisted joke; to let you see what you are doing, but be incapable of stopping yourself...”

    “You did not answer my first question.”

    “Nor did your disciples answer mine...” The monster sighed, “Where am I?”

    “You are in our land, Equestria.”

    “What... is the name of this planet?”

    “Earth.”

    “You... what are you?”

    “We are ponies.”

    “Are you... synthetic?”

    “No. Why?”

    “I am... on Earth, but with your kind instead... and speaking the same language... Luna, I must warn you...”

    “About what, exactly?”

    “If... if I made it here, then others can do so as well...”

    “What do you mean?” the blue Alicorn asked, her voice taking a tone of wariness.

    “I am merely the first...” It coughed, fluids beginning to seep out of its mouth. “Of the inevitable many. This world is not yours... not anymore.”

    “Why do you say that?” Luna stopped pacing around, trotting closer to the creature.

    “Pray to your gods...” The creature took in a deep breath, then sighed it out as steam, “That your kind will live to see another day.”

    “What will happen!?” the Princess asked, furrowing her brow and looking directly into the creature’s eyes. “Where did you-” Right on cue, a deep growl shook the room, making dust fall from the ceiling.

    “I recognize that sound... The gears... they are already turning.”

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            The object hovered above Ponyville and Canterlot, and as it ceased to advance, it released a final growl, the loudest yet. Everypony on the plaza dropped onto the ground and plugged their ears with their hooves.

       

            Twilight could faintly see the dust being lifted off of the ground as the shock wave advanced towards Ponyville. She closed her eyes shut as the wave hit the town, making the windows vibrate loudly, yet they did not break. She slowly stood back up, and so did everypony else. Everything was perfectly silent until a mare decided to change that.

       

            “The horror! The horror!”

       

            That was enough to trigger the panic button on the rest of the ponies. They began running in every direction, some of them crashing into each other. Several of the Royal Guards that had been stationed in the town were attempting to calm them down, with no luck. The best they could do was to keep them from running out of the town and into the woods. Twilight was surrounded by the multitude of panicked ponies. She was confused; she had to hide somewhere, but her brain was refusing to comply.

       

            “Twilight!” a familiar voice called out to her.

       

            The unicorn turned to the source of the voice, Sugarcube Corner. She could see that Rarity was standing at the entrance, waving at her. Twilight began galloping, closing her eyes and hoping not to crash into anypony. Halfway to the building, she crashed into another pony, making her fall and roll a couple times on the ground. She quickly stood back up, her coat dusty, and continued to make her way towards the bakery, galloping as fast as her legs allowed her to.

       

            Twilight came crashing into the store, followed by a series of gasps as she collapsed onto the floor, panting. Rarity sat down next to her.

       

            “Are you okay, Twilight?” she asked, to which Twilight replied with some frantic nodding. “Oh, nonono. You are NOT okay darling. Your coat is all dusty and your mane... Oh no, I must do something about this!” She levitated a brush and began to adjust Twilight’s mane.

       

            Occupying the store, aside from Twilight and Rarity, were Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, and the Cakes. Pinkie Pie, Applejack and Rainbow Dash were looking out the window, observing the behemoth that floated above the ground. Fluttershy was sitting by one of the tables, her mane covering her face.

       

            Carrot Cake trotted out of the kitchen, carrying a small plate that had a cupcake on it. He placed it on the table in front of Fluttershy, who looked up at him and gave him a small smile. “Thank you,” she whispered.

       

            Carrot Cake smiled. “No problem, sweetie.” Afterwards, he walked back into the kitchen.

       

            Rainbow was sitting in front of one of the windows, looking at the object that currently obscured the stars and recently emptied the streets. She looked up with a confused expression, then stood up and walked over to the table where Fluttershy was, noticing that she had been joined by Rarity and Twilight.

       

            Rainbow cocked an eyebrow, looking at Twilight. “Uh, Twilight? Do you know anything about what just happened? I mean you must’ve read something about it in one of your books and stuff, right?”

       

            “I was just talking to the girls about that... My books have never said anything about such a thing. I don’t know if it’s dangerous, or if it’s even alive for that matter! All I can say is that it must be using a HUGE amount of magic to keep itself in the air.”

       

            “Uhm... Twilight?” Fluttershy nervously clopped her forehooves together. “I need to tell you something... It might be important... I guess... I mean, it’s okay if you don’t want to...”

       

            “No, it’s okay. What is it?”

       

            “Uhm, well... do you remember the meteor shower a few nights ago?” Fluttershy asked, looking at Twilight from behind her pink mane.

       

            “Yes...” Twilight got closer, eager to hear what her friend had to say.

       

            “And the one meteor that landed nearby...?” Fluttershy inquired again.

       

            “Yes, the one I wasn't allowed to see because of the guards that kept saying it was royal business, the meteor the Princess told me not to worry about...” Twilight huffed, then rolled her eyes.

       

            “Uhm, yes, that one... You see, I was up that night watching the meteor shower with Angel Bunny... And when the meteor landed, I kind of... Uhm, I hid under my couch... And then...” She took a deep breath, “And then I looked out the window and saw... something... It had two red eyes that... that glowed, I think... When I saw it looking at me, I screamed, and then it just disappeared.”

       

            “I see...” said Rarity, “That is indeed, somewhat creepy. But what does it have to do with the meteor? Do you think that-” She was cut off by Fluttershy.

       

            “Yes, I think it came from the meteor... Later that night, some guards came by, and told me it wasn’t safe... and since I had nowhere else to go, and couldn't leave all my little animals behind, they offered to stay to make sure nothing happened.”

       

            “Oh, wow.” Twilight conjured both a quill and a piece of paper, and started taking notes.

       

            “But... that’s not the most important part. The next day I snuck out and made my way to where the meteor had landed, and hid in some bushes. There were... a lot of guards around it, but it turns out it wasn’t a meteor at all...”

       

            The three mares looked at her, dumbfounded. “Well, what was it then?” said Pinkie Pie, and Fluttershy turned around to see that Pinkie and Applejack had been listening as well.

       

            “Oh...well... uhm... It wasn’t alive... but, it was so weird... the only thing I can say is that it gave off the same feeling that other big floating thing does... They are... similar...I couldn’t see anything else because one of the guards caught me... He told me to never ever talk about it...” She finished by hiding behind her mane once again.

       

            Twilight placed the quill and paper on the table, and scowled, “If they are related... I wonder how many of those red-eyed things Fluttershy talked about could fit inside that huge thing above us.” The mares shot each other some worried glances.

       

            Applejack cleared her throat. “Twilight, ah was meanin’ to tell ya’ll ‘bout somethin’. Y’see, ah was watchin’ the big floaty thing, and ah noticed that on its side it had summin’ written on it. Though it was kinda wierd lookin’, y’know. Ah couldn’t really make out much of it.”

       

            Twilight stood up, and trotted towards the window, followed by the other five mares. She looked up at the massive contraption, her mouth hanging open due to to its sheer size. Applejack was right; there was something written on its side. Due to the size of the object, the letters were big enough to be visible from quite a distance. Twilight began scribbling the words into the paper she had brought. Upon finishing, she took a look at it. “It sorta looks like Equestrian. It’s only slightly different...”

       

            Pinkie Pie began bouncing up and down. “Oh! Oh! Does it say ‘Doom’? Or something like, ‘The Eater of Worlds’?”

       

            Twilight shook her head, dismissing Pinkie’s crazy antics. “N-No, It says U-S-S... Vector?”

       

            Rainbow Dash cocked her head to the side. “ ‘Vector’? The hay is a ‘Vector’?”

       

            The lavender unicorn scratched her head. “It's supposed to be some sort of mathematical concept, not... whatever this thing is. I’ll have to go to my library and see if I can find anything... “

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    Comments ( 51 )

    #1 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    ooooo this reminds me of the plot in Heroes and Allies  humans appearing right before or at the start of a war with the griffons/other race and the story is awesome as always cant wait for more, keep up the great work :pinkiehappy:

    #2 · 69w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    Wait wait. Did they seriously conscript a new mother? Doesn't that seem a little...unrealistic given the setting?  I mean yeah the circumstances are extreme but that seems to be one hell of a stretch. Also they're conscripting the mane 6 but they're not being taken separately? I mean they do represent pretty much the ultimate magic item, wouldn't they be getting orders from the princess herself rather than conscripted into the general military?

    What rank is Atlas? I mean he's talking to an admiral shouldn't he be a bit more polite? Or formal?

    The whole thing felt a bit rushed to me. I think this could have used a lot more thinking. Though the meeting bit was cute, I'm surprised none of the adult ponies got involved after they saw the kids not turned into swiss cheese.

    #3 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>143916 Carrot Cake was conscripted, not Miss Cupcake. And the mane six are conscripted, too, yeah, but you'll learn more about that. Besides, the elements can't make an entire country of angry Gryphons back away.

    I understand your feeling about this chapter feeling like it could've been much better, I feel the same way, I just couldn't find a good source of inspiration for this one, I even re-did it a couple times.

    Oh, and these 'Adult' ponies were scared to death by a zerba wearing a cloak. How about three creatures with no faces, twice their size, that came from what they think is the eater of worlds?

    And about Atlas, that'll be explained, soon...I guess

    #4 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>143981

    Ahh, my miss. I thought she was. Ok I can buy all of that. But even then, I can't believe that Applejack wouldn't have chased after Applebloom. I wouldn't expect death itself would stop her from protecting her little sister. If any of the girls had parents that were regular characters I imagine they would have gone out there but since Applejack's the closest thing and given her fierceness I'm surprised you didn't have her pop out.

    I'd still imagine they'd take volunteers before before going straight to conscription, especially with the amount of loyalty most ponies show towards their country I can't imagine conscription would be necessary.

    One thing I didn't quite get, did the Vector appear in the atmosphere proper or are they closer to space? If they're in the atmosphere I'm also surprised the Vector hasn't pulled back out to a further distance at this point. Seems like they'd be awful vulnerable to, well, anything at that low an altitude from a military perspective and probably are doing a very good job at terrifying all the residents. Seems like the brass should be thinking of this stuff a bit more.

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    >>144036 "Twilight? Oh, she’s with mah sister, and the rest of her friends over at the farm" That's why AppleJack didn't do anything.

    Yes, I agree that Ponies are loyal, but war is still a terrifying thing to them. Some of them had to be conscripted, the army has to be built, fast, it's been made clear the Gryphons aren't slow at raising armies.

    While the Vector is in the atmosphere, the whole crew woke up about fourteen hours after the ship got there. And if I were the Admiral, I too would probably want to make sure i'm not sorrounded by laser gorillas before trying to get my ship out of the atmosphere.

    Imagine their laser eyes cutting into the Vector as it makes its escape

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    >>144111

    Alright fair enough. I obviously missed a couple of things in my zeal. I'm very glad I was wrong because I've lost a couple of fics I've been watching to just unbelievable stuff lately :pinkiesad2:.

    I don't buy the Vector argument but it hasn't thrashed my sense of disbelief enough for me to really harp on that so I'll just give up on that side.

    I have to say I'm still going "D'awwwww" from the image of some dude in massive powered-armor bending down and petting Applebloom. Maybe reminds me of that image of a US solider petting the kitten. Just a pony instead of a kitten and a massive metal behemoth. You get the idea.

    Oh yes, please please please please please have Atlas call the Admiral at least "Sir," it just seems so weird for him not to. The ship is primarily military correct?

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    I just want to clear out that there will be a few things that wont make sense during the story, but dont fret, alot of things will be revealed when the time comes. :ajsmug:

    Patience is a virtue. I mean, it would be a boring story if I told you guys everything, right? :unsuresweetie:

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    I got to say Kriegor, I have been looking forward to the new chapter and I was not disappointed.  

    Hope the pressure you were feeling lightened up some.  

    #9 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Boyo, I would make the USS Vector act as a peace envoy between the two sides, or failing that, a third side.

    #10 · 69w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>144858

    Or use the USS Vector to, as Durandal put it, introduce the Griffons to "the magic of orbital bombardment."

    #11 · 69w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>146062 "My Little Vector: Orbital Bombardment is Magic"

    #12 · 68w, 11h ago · · ·
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    So...It's been a bit more than a week now. Can we start pestering for a new chapter?:unsuresweetie:

    #13 · 68w, 10h ago · · ·
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    >>173488 It's been a pain to make this one, mainly because I keep coming up with new things and I have to start all over again in order to add them.

    But yeah, feel free to pester me. I think some pressure could be good for me to shake off that laziness that's taken over me for the last week or so. :scootangel:

    #14 · 68w, 9h ago · · ·
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    >>173820

    Nooooooooooooo :pinkiegasp:! Therein lies the path to madness!

    Yours is the only story with ponies and powered armor that has kept my attention. The fact that even with ponies and powered armor the D'awww factor has been significant sure doesn't hurt. Keep at it though, don't get stuck in the 'well it's not good enough' loop, or into constantly revising it. Gotta make some headway sometimes. Nothing wrong with taking some time to plan stuff out but before you lose your steam it might be a good time to 'lock things down' so to speak.

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    >>173820

    Pester pester pester :pinkiehappy:

    #16 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Due to me being overrun by bugs at night, I've been forced to use a VERY strong bug spray every time I go to sleep, with the results being me waking up with a sub-form of hangover the next day.

    This has been going on for a couple of days, and my head hurts so much I haven't really been able to write anything :fluttercry:

    I wont use that damn spray again, i'm pretty sure i've lost a good lot of brain cells and they're (Sadly) a necesity when it comes to writting

    Let the mosquitoes attack tonight, for I shall be writting tomorrow :twilightangry2::flutterrage::flutterrage::twilightangry2:

    #17 · 66w, 5d ago · · ·
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    My friend, i saw this chapter

    Got a pistol, shotgun,and a uzi

    got two other people

    bashed down your door

    and said "you better make more chapters or i will say

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    > “The sun here actually orbits the planet instead of it being the other way around... It’s not even a particularly big planet, and the sun is still much bigger... I think.”

    That is the best way to yell "fuck knowledge!" at the world.

    You can't say that "something orbits something when it should be otherwise". In any orbiting system members orbit system's center of mass. In case of solar system Sun dominates mass composition and so saying "Earth orbits the Sun" is not so far from truth. If suddenly someone educated sees star-like object orbiting planet they will assume that star is seriously lacking in mass. The next step would be to study the way to replicate such suns for that's goddamn nifty.

    PS: There are several sci-fi universes that would instantly imply the story of some extremely advanced civilization going around "progressing" life around the universe.

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    Interesting.  I wonder if those earlier out of control vehicles were escape pods that got caught in the Vector's jump or something?

    And I thought ponies knew about guns, since they know about tanks and bullets.

    Scootaloo would be all :scootangel: "That's a funny looking sword.  Why would you even make one that looks like a rifle?"

    And those Gryphons.. or is it griffins.. or are they different races?

    See strange thing in sky, decide it's pony treachery.

    And if the princesses do have the unimaginable power to make the sun orbit the planet and keep the forces from ripping both apart or out of orbit, then I'm sure they can take the relatively tiny starship with an insignificant fraction of a star's mass and crush it like an empty beer can on a frat guy's forehead with a tiny burst of their power before flinging the exploding mess away.  I'm guessing they're just curious, and don't like showing off.  

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    I hate how I have to manually check for updates because its a rewrite...

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    The Gryphons just declared war on Equestria.

    Well thank the goddesses a heavily armed starship just defolded above Canterlot, filled to the brim with war-ready soldiers... :P

    Keep going. But I think this first contact is going to better than most think, what with the whole "We can fight better than they can" thing.

    #22 · 42w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Painkiller - Judas Priest

    Now that's pretty metal.

    #23 · 42w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>125885

    You totally stole the armor suiting up machine and stuff from the Starcraft trailer didn't you... DIDN'T YOU! :twilightangry2:

    #24 · 42w, 5d ago · · ·
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    ... :facehoof:

    Sorry, apparently we missed something in the second paragraph: "scroll,mentioned" without a space.

    Other than that, looking really good!

    #25 · 42w, 5d ago · · ·
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    JESUS CHRIST THIS IS ... I DONT EVEN ... ALL MY INTERNET .... IT HUUUUURTS CLIFFHANGERS:fluttershysad::fluttershysad::fluttershysad:

    #26 · 42w, 5d ago · · ·
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    i can definately feel the increase in quality in this re-write:twilightsmile:

    keep up the good work:pinkiehappy:

    #27 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yay, I want moar :) This is cool, and if it turned out, that these bipedal creature-thingies were friendly, and would ally with Equestria against  Gryphons , it would be cool :rainbowlaugh:

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    >>974246

    I don't even remember that trailer, until people like you mention it. Besides, it's an efficient way to suit up, what with it needing to be airtight and whatnot.

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    >>974250  ....ugh.  :facehoof:

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    >>973926

    My take on that would be what seems to now be fanon with most HIE story’s. Where Humans come from a place / reality where magic doesn’t exist so it has no effect on any matter form their universe or is limited to the point of being almost immune. i.e. it takes Celestia’s power to heal a simple cut or using magic on matter form our place / reality causes pain or can just be fatal (for the ponie or human depending on the needs of the story. Some times certain spells don’t work where its convenient to the plot or to solidify the idea. I do think I remember Luna couldn’t lift the doll with her magic. So if im right in thinking Kriegor is going this way trying to simply kill the ship with magic would be like trying to use magnets against wood even If she could crush them with a thought it just wouldn’t work.

    Another note and something that tweaks me in most science fiction, a ship designed to traverse space would have to nearly be immune to all forms of weapons we know now just to survive the trip itself.

    1-Nukes wouldn’t work on any ship built for space because the travel alone would expose the ship to more radiation, heat or simple bombardment of particles than any nuke not to mention a small meteorite hitting the hull let alone while traveling near if not faster than the speed of light (wormhole travel aside) would unleash more kinetic energy then any nuke or turret like shell.

    2- A laser would have to be thousands of times stronger ‘hotter’ than the sun itself to hurt such a ship and a power source would have to be something like a ZPM form Stargate that mightn’t also help with the rail gun but means a shot would easily go through a planet.

    Simply put most weapons we know of and some of those in sci fi would actually be mute against a ship possessing the means to withstand space travel either because of a protective shield or some future material used or a mix but most likely a shield which would leads to a 2005 war of the world’s scenario if the ponies attacked it.

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    >>976837

    That's the most unimaginative way of thinking about imaginary spaceships I've encountered.

    Protection against meteorites would most likely be achieved by using deflection shields. To think about stopping those kinds of bullets by building armor you have to be... well, daft. The stronger your armor will be the more energy will it actually absorb. And in space absorbing energy is generally a bad idea.

    Space travel doesn't have heat as a problem. Space is hot in terms of particle energy, but is as cold as you can get in terms of meeting the aforementioned particles. As for regions that are actually dangerous in that regard we have a working deflection shield prototype called Earth.

    Lasers are by far the least feasible weapons for space fights. They leave most of the energy on board of firing ship in form of heat. There is a proposed design of nuclear pumped x-ray lasers that might overcome the problem.

    Nukes in space are very different to nukes in atmosphere. Nukes in higher layers of atmosphere are very different to low altitude nukes. In space they have to be quite close to the surface of the ship to make a dent, but a dent they will make. Even more so if there's a complex delivery system that actually punches a hole in the armor for a nuke to plant itself.

    The amount of energy a regular ship receives from wave collision over time is immense. That doesn't make them invulnerable to a finely placed torpedo.

    All in all, this is a can of worms you do not want to open. A lot of things that were OK sixty years ago would look pitiful to a modern hard sci-fi fan.

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    >>976990

    Ok I will leave that particular can of worms alone. Simply because It’s just a pet peeve I tried compressing into as short a wording as possible off the top of my head and not even really relevant to the point of whether the ship would simply be curbstomped by magic. Infect it was an impulse that stopped me deleting it before posting. One I will probably correct next time I have 5 min.

    #33 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>977266

    It's worth considering such ideas, they do tend to crop beautiful solutions when exposed to third-party criticism. Just be ready to have them demolished a lot.

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    >>144111

    Because staying closer to the hypothetical laser gorillas is safer than putting distance between you and them?  Even if your worry is that moving the ship is going to attract unwelcome attention, you're going to get that anyway when the shuttle heads down, a far more aggressive act than moving the ship up.  At least assuming the drive won't do horrible, horrible things to the people below, but that seems unlikely since the automatic station-keeping hasn't broken Equestria yet.

    >>976837

    Um... no.  There's a large, large difference between "I can sit in direct sunlight from a half AU out without frying" and "I can withstand a hydrogen bomb exploding on the hull."  There's this whole double the distance, quarter the energy thing going on.

    And lasers are all about putting the energy in a small spot; again, being able to survive direct sunlight at planetary distances is nothing compared to the energy a modern (much less FutureTech) laser can focus on a single location.  How effective a laser might be depends on how effectively the ship can pump heat away from a targeted location; it's a far simpler problem for the firing ship, since they know exactly where and how much heat they need to deal with when designing the ship.

    The only weapon that's really been defined so far is Atlas's Gauss rifle; the Vector mounts some turrets for shooting at starships, but they've not been defined past that.

    Plus, it's worth pointing out that from what we've seen starships seem able to navigate through FTL to locations quite close to planets, which means they generally neither have much use for relativistic speeds nor the shielding such speeds require to be survivable (although there are some fun tricks you can pull off if nobody expects that sort of thing).  Hyperspace might require that sort of shielding, but we don't know enough about how it works

    >>976990

    I dunno that lasers are the worst solution for space weapons, though I don't have a real problem with claiming that they're less-than-ideal.  But what is?

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    Hopefully the writing in this gets better.

    As for the whole space combat thing, it really boils down to what kind of sensors you have and what kind of engines you have.  Those determine both engagement range and how easy it is for you to dodge attacks.  Kinetic weapons inflict more damage than beam weapons, but are trivially easy to dodge at  .  Beams are much harder to dodge.

    #37 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Just reading this story is making my mouth water for high-tech action sci-fi. I keep wanting more. If you ever decided to write some original fiction in the same genre, I might even be inclined to hold off on the Star Trek, Star Wars, StarGate, and Halo novels on my reading list to take a look at it. The introduction of robots is pretty interesting (was having Sweetie Belle talk to Mac a Friendship is Witchcraft reference?), and could add some layers to the aliens' interactions with Equestria.

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    I'm reading the re-written version and I must say, NOW they can fell fear toward the humans, the alien just told Luna that he was being controlled and IN THAT EXACT MOMENT the vector arrives.:facehoof:

    Now Luna's thoughts the moment she sees the humans for the first time shall be interesting. :ajsmug:

    LOVE THE STORY!!!:flutterrage:

    But you already knew that.:twilightblush:

    LOVE THE CHANGES AND EXTRA CONTENT ON SITUATIONS PAST!!!!!!:flutterrage:

    Keep it up.:twilightsmile:

    #39 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Ok so, rewrite. This is an alternate universe or simply another planet named Earth?

    #40 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·
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    no body hitting the window and getting zapped off? boo :twilightangry2:

    anyways, i like the rewrite, especially if all the chapters are going to be this long

    #41 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·
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    love the ominus conversation with the dieing guy:twilightsmile:

    #42 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Much more well planned this time through, keep up the good work!

    #43 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·
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    So you took off all the chapters, just to tweak them a bit, and then re-upload them?

    I am disappoint:duck:

    #44 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Hmmm, so then...

    Very nice re-write, but there is a couple a questions:

    - Is that "Earth" is a pony Earth in our universe or they jump to (-sarcasm - how original -sarcasm-) other universe and this is alternate Earth?

    - In original version, it was Ubor who was caught in the Everfree. Now, this is human who was controled by Ubor?

    - Is this human/Ubor was talking about USS Vector or about Ubor invasion in future?

    #45 · 35w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Ohh, like the shiny new updated chapter. :duck: More please!

    #46 · 34w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I must say, at the beginning with the orbital station, I was thinking 'Necromorphs'. But you were all, "Nope!". :rainbowkiss: I am loving this stuff!

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    What the hay?! Since when is fluttershy the kinda pony that would snoop around like that in other pony's business... That's Rainbow's thing!

    #49 · 30w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Okay I'm really confused, lets clear something up: The first ship that crashed was one of the enemy ships that attacked the U.S.S. Vector, correct? I feel like I may have missed something before though...

    #50 · 23w, 16h ago · · ·
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    Eater of worlds

    :rainbowlaugh:

    also the mane 6 seem to be taking the appearance of a truly MASSIVE alien spacecraft very well

    :moustache:

    #51 · 17w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I do not under stand how the Gryphon thought they built the massive (wait that is an under statement I cannot describe how big it is) anyway how the Gryphons thought the ponies biult that without seeing it?

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