The 2012 version of The Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles and Master Splinter become bronies and use a portal that Donatello created to go to Ponyville in the land of Equestria where thy have adventures with The Mane Six.
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Oy, THIS guy...
1651587 Actually, in crossover fics, the characters from the other source material don't get a tag, according to the blog D posted about the OC and other tag.
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I completely forgot that. I don't agree with it, but them's the rules, so . . . mea culpa. Edited.
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Exactly.
No point in reading badly written trollfics.
I am sorry but this is really bad I couldn't bare to read more than a few paragraps but I know how you feel my stories sucks to I just hope for a second chance
I actually think the 2012 TMNT is pretty cool..
But really, get some writing help.
Bring in Babs Seed into this story and then you'll really have a CMC ninja squad.
With Babs being Ralph and Scoots as Mikey. Sweetie Belle is Donnie and Applebloom is Leo.
It would be fun to see this idea continue on into the next chapter and see the girls gain some training.
Still, please do keep up the good work on such a great idea.
1820255 Pretty good idea that can happen on the next chapter/ episode like for example Babs Seed is stopping by for another visit at the same time AB, SB and S are training then she can say in the Boston accent that she talks in "hey I don't know what's going on but can I join in?"
Okay... first few paragraphs and there are already a few problems.
Okay, HOW? What was it about the show that appealed to them? Why did Raphael and Master Splinter take so much longer than the others? Actually, how would they know about the show in the first place? I can't imagine that they watch all that much TV down in the sewers.
Wait, what? WHEN? You can't just throw this at the readers and expect them to accept that Donatello was somehow able to perfect a portal that leads to another fictional world. Donatello does machines, but Donatello doesn't do magic. You're throwing way too much at the reader in too little time.
Wait, what? WHY? How do they even know about Donatello's portal and why are they so hell-bent on committing genocide on another universe? Yes, I know they're evil, but there has to be some logic.
I think they'd already be creeped out by the fact that there are four giant talking mutated turtles and a giant talking mutated rat walking through their town.
Okay, I'm no expert on TMNT, but I know enough about the show to know that Master Splinter would never say that.
Anyway, to conclude, the story concept has some potential, but the story itself needs some work.
Cowabunga Dudettes. Cowabunga indeed.
Truly a great update in spotlight the training of the Cutie Mark Crusaders Ninjas. Some self-defense moves would be a bit good for the fillies in the future.
Plus, some partial knowledge from the turtles would be nice to know as well.
I cannot wait to see how Shredder comes back to attack Equestria in the next installment.
......well I don't see any of you other fuckers writing a MLP/TMNT crossover!
This is physically painful to read more than one or two lines of text. I can't even give reasons why, since I can't make it past the first two lines, due to an utter lack of punctuation, paragraph formatting, and many other things. I'm down for a trollfic, but at least trolls put SOME time into their stories. This looks like an unedited copy from a speech-to-text program that doesn't recognize your voice half the time. So, yeah, down voted before Donatello could even be interrupted by the Krangs.
Sorry, but there are sixth and seventh graders I've helped edit stories with that can write a better chapter than this whole story. In fact, one of his chapters would have at least 75% of this story's total words in one chapter. It hurts to even stay to comment on this story. I'm trying to not be rude, but damnit... Your story concepts are good. I love a good crossover, but I repeat myself at the risk of being crude: I love a good crossover. I'm sorry, but this is far from good. Work on... EVERYTHING; spelling, grammar, punctuation, paragraph formatting, tense mistakes, and for Luna's sake, throw some proper ellipses and em dashes in there! Not en dashes or hyphens, actual em dashes. And if there are ellipses, nothing, and this is imperative, nothing over three periods, and a space after it if it isn't ending or starting a sentence or dialogue.
And a chapter isn't really a chapter if it's anywhere near under 2500 words. Your eight chapters should be less than four or three. Page breaks aren't taboo to use if you want a scene to end on a certain note. I like TMNT, and I wouldn't be here if I didn't enjoy a crossover. If I ever see an author's note or a blog from you saying this story has been heavily edited, I'll give it a shot again. As for now, though... it's a thumbs down for me.
2002774 I can't believe you made it that far.
WALL OF TEXT! *wall of text crushes TheaterCritic*
2065158 because we have taste
Ahhh... Ow... My brain... It hurts!
2065158 Challenge complete!
ahahahaha! oh my god, kid...
I love how you just won't give up despite the feedback you're getting.
EVERYONE! this is the willpower rarely seen in everyone, we should look at him that way and learn from his 'never say die' attitude...
but seriously... kid. you can do better than this! I think.
Good lord. I don't like being rude to people in general, especially people who try really hard, but it's like you don't even try at all. Where's the grammar in this story? Why is every sentence a run-on? It's like a six year old just wrote every word that came into his mind.
Need more appearance of the Kraang.
Okay, I have to stop, this is just too painful.
hmm wow alot of dislike. i can see why you cancelled it
Oh my god I laugh at this. I mean TMNB really? I have seen better crossovers then that XD
This is absolutely garbage