The Galactic Union, a conglomeration of dozens of races, Humans, Vurkuristar, Kugs, Vernid and more. Constantly waging wars of apocalyptic proportions against their vile foes.
Equestria, a world of equines who value peace and friendship above all else and who never know true hardship.
One unexplained malfunction in the computer-brain of the flagship of the Fifth Expeditionary Fleet of the Union brings Equestria into the light of a blood-soaked galaxy. For good or ill.
(huge thanks to Carnelian for the cover art and telling me how to submit)
(Huge thanks to 'the guys' who participated in my Venture Command strategy game that inspired this fic)
Chapters (3)
Moar
moar please
This fic, I like it.
MOAR!
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I see...
And yet another spaceship arrive to eqestria fic, not that its a particularly good or bad thing. Just yet another one Ive read I guess I have a thing for those kinds of stories.
But sadly from what I read this seems to start like how most of the other ones Ive read. Being that this is still very early this could go many different directions one being something good and the other end of the spectrum a cliche one. And like the other ones Ive read it features a several mile long militarized spacecraft. Now I'm not saying that this story sucks, you can have virtually any premise in any fic and depending how it is executed determines the merit.
“But you know it in your mind.” Said Ugor. “It would end in war. Religious zealotry would raise it’s ugly head yet again and there would be war.”
And I can see the conflict coming a mile away. Not that its bad just mind your execution.
I guess what I am saying is be careful where this one goes. I'd like to see it go somewhere good but its too early to tell.
I do however like the multi species thing you've got going on here with the other aliens besides humans. Hopefully you can make something good out of it.
Like I said, too early to tell, I await more additions to this story.
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Thanks for giving this a shot, I've been going through the other stories like this on the site and trying to avoid the cliches, I do however, unlike most of my stories, have the general plot and story planned out beforehand.
cant wait until twilight and the others find out its not a star thats going to smash into there planet but a space ship full of aliens
I see...
I do like the fact that unlike most si if stories you don't just straight up give them FTL (faster than light) travel and instead go the long term sub light suspended animation route as a means of travel. While neither are bad choices I see why many more people (including myslef) go the FTL route rather than yours. The reason bieng that if an entire spacecraft were to be suspended for an extensive amount of time the worlds that they are traveling between still operate at normal time. So when the crew reach their destination much time has past and I can't feel that whatever they had traveled for would still be relevant. The sublight suspended animation method is good for things where there is only a single species trying to reach a distant target and current events between other worlds are not an issue.
Though it doesn't seem to be too much of a problem here, that was just my preference more or less.
But enough of me babbling what did I think of this chapter.
Well, ponies are in character, thats always good.
The multi species is working out nice.
"The pants were a stark grey camo color, square patterns of varying sizes in fifty shades of gray"
Why man? just why?
One question why are the transitions in setting separated by about 50 spaces? is there something wrong with your word processor?
i though 50 shades of said color was just a saying meaning there were a lot of variants of it.
You made me look it up. *shudder* I suppose that's what I get for using a term without really knowing it's meaning.
Back to the story. The cryo thing was to set the scene but I see how it could break the flow. Maybe I'll blog stuff about the galaxy instead.
The FTL thing is kind of inspired by the Colonial Era. Where vessels would take years to get places. I've always liked 'hard sci fi' and the planets themselves change but a war for an entire planet, for instance, would likely be waged over centuries at least.
I'll check out your story.
As much as I don't want to be a reposter, MOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRR
nice job with this one. :D
To my readers, sorry for the slow going, I'm having internet outages and what have you. I'm finalizing the third chapter, should be up tomorrow night or the next.
Aaarg...
Yeah, I'm pushing the deadline back another day, I originally was just going to copy edit and such but decided a 3,000 word chapter isn't really a chapter and added another 5,000 words.
the good news is that they finally land on Equestria but the bad news is I'll be up all night copy-editing and rewriting the chapter (8,000 words.) because I can never quite get that 'perfect' feel until I've rewritten the bloody thing five times. And even then...
Ah well.
In any case, the new chapter should be up within the next couple of days, heck, maybe even today.
Does the 10k chapter come with a rag to wipe all this fanfiction glory off my screen?
11/10
Moar moar moar MOAR PLEASE OH PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF GOD MOOOOOORE
Sorry for the delay. I've got a lot on my plate. Other stories (2, for completely different sites) and looming school applications. I might be able to get this up in about two days, then shorter updates with less time in between them.
Is this cancelled?