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  • T A Bluebird's Song

    Rainbow Dash is struggling against her own past. Is it time for her rising star to fall?
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  • T The Shadow of a Doubt

    Nights in Canterlot are for sharing secrets. Ten years have passed, and the six friends have begun to walk their own paths. A burdened princess meets a friendly face among the crowds.
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  • 49w, 4d
    In Her Blood is Back

    Hey guys,

    First of all, sorry if this is sort of a blunt blog post. I just wrote out this whole entire 1500-word post and then my computer decided that the page desperately needed refreshing. So right now I have literally no desire to try and remember what I said (although I do have a pretty severe desire to direct my computer window-wards, or make an entire blog post consisting of 1500 words' worth of AAAAAAAAAAAA). But I digress.

    Anyway, you know what they say, a 9-month hiatus can do a story good.

    No, wait. That's not what they say. Nobody says that because it would be a silly thing to say.

    The good news is, however, that In Her Blood is back! The hiatus mostly happened in the first place due to an unhealthy dose of exams and university application nonsense, which sapped most of my time and all of my motivation. Once the momentum stops on a story like this, getting it back again is pretty difficult, which is why I decided to write the relatively-short Shadow of a Doubt, before jumping back into a big multi-part project. However, the essays are written, the results are in, the nails are bitten, the paperwork is sent and then interviews have been sat. Until next summer (which will be infinitely less insane) it's over, for now.

    Which of course means I can get back to writing on a more regular, committed kind of basis. Honestly, I can't apologise enough for leaving you all hanging for so long on this story. I'm ridiculously sorry, it completely sucks. So anyway, without any more waffling, have a new chapter! The one after this is already 2000 words deep in the writing mill, so with any luck you won't be left waiting until September 2014 for it to happen.

    Also, to make up for making you wait for so long, I'm also currently working on another project, namely the multi-part AppleDash story I plotted out with Tchernobog several aeons ago. The first chapter is written and the second one is on the way; my plan with this story is to write the whole thing (probably 5-6 chapters) and then post the whole thing, rather than posting each chapter as it's done. That way I get to go back and edit earlier parts, look at the finished thing and make any necessary changes, and generally avoid all the godawful and unchangeable early-chapter-plotting-errors that plagued me with Bluebird's Song. I'll see how that works out. All it needs now is a title! In other news, it contains a pair of Only Fools and Horses-style cockney merchant ponies who are far too fun to write.

    Obviously, I'm writing this on the assumption that anyone still remembers/cares about In Her Blood. To anyone who's still here and reading this, thank you so ridiculously much for sticking with the story. To anyone not reading this, I can completely understand why.

    Once again, sorry for the 9-month hiatus. I swear I've not been pregnant.

    Pony on, etc.

    14 comments · 294 views
  • 61w, 6d
    The Shadow of a Doubt

    Hi guys!

    Okay, long story short, I realise I've been pretty useless these last few months in terms of actually putting out fresh poni-words. However, I've finally gotten back on the horse dammit gotten back to the keyboard and finished up that one-shot I've been talking about for years.

    Originally it was planned to be a shortish one-shot of around 3000 words, but it went and did a Bluebird on me and ended up around 18,000 words instead, hence the irritatingly long writing time. It's still technically a one-shot, but I've split it up into 2 parts so it's a little more readable.

    Anyhow, the story is currently in the approval mill, so if all goes well a healthy dose of RariLight should appear sometime tomorrow.

    Sorry again for being absent from the write-o-sphere for so many months; it wasn't a loss of interest, it was more a case of real life and varying degrees of exam stupidity getting in the way. It's actually really nice to be writing again, and I'll hopefully keep doing so for the foreseeable future. For those of you who've stuck around and are reading this, an enormous thank you. It really means a lot.

    Onwards to horse romance!

    8 comments · 222 views
  • 67w, 6d
    A Progress Report, and In Her Blood info!

    Bonjour peoples.

    Obviously there's been quite a long silence since my last blog, for which I apologize loudly; these last weeks have been packed up with everything from learning to drive to personal statement writing. However, they've also been filled with writing of a more poni-ish variety, so here's a quick blog to keep you guys informed as to where and what I'm up to with my stories. I know I've not posted anything new since the last blog, but I've written about 25,000 words of various well-on-the-way projects since then, so the time has by no means gone to waste.

    3 ongoing projects at this point, really, so I might as well trot them out in the order they're likely to appear.

    Firstly, that time-skipped Rarity and Twilight story I mentioned. I can finally drop out a title for that, which will be 'The Shadow of a Doubt'. Set roughly 10 years after the first episode, when the Mane 6 have begun to go their separate ways, it follows Rarity taking a down-in-the-dumps Twilight out for an evening in Canterlot. It's a bit experimental; hopefully it works out. It got a little out of one-shot territory and is currently floating at about 18,000 words, so I may chop it up into two or three chapters, although it was written (and should be read) as one continuous chapter. In any case, it's about 95% done, and should be baked, seasoned and ready to serve up soon enough.

    Next, a project I discussed in quite a lot of length with the AppleDash deity Tchernobog more than half a year ago... It's an AppleDash story (naturally!) and is set shortly after Dragonshy. The first chapter of that is about 80% complete. I wanted to write something a bit more lighthearted after my recent spate of dark/psychological stuff, and an old-style Season-1 AppleDash romance-comedy seemed just the thing. It's given me a chance to write some dragon lore, which was fun.

    Now, finally, In Her Blood. The hiatus on that one has really gone on for entirely too long by now, and to tell the truth, it was because I didn't know where to go with it. Don't get me wrong; I know exactly where the narrative is headed, but I couldn't figure out a good way to make the next couple of chapters work, plus I wanted to make a bunch of changes to Trixie's character which may require a bit of early-chapter editing. As a result of a whole bunch of little worries combined with the great big sense of 'well damn, how do I make these chapters work?', the story got shelved and, quite honestly, I've procrastinated getting back to it.

    However, I'm about to get back to it now. I've figured out a much easier way of making the new chapters work, and I finally feel motivated to pick up the keyboard on this one once again. I'm going to be away for another week from tomorrow, although I'll have my laptop meaning I can make progress while I'm away. So expect a healthy fix of TrixieShy in the near future! :yay:

    So now y'all know what's going on! Sorry once again that I've not dropped out any new writings since May-ish, however the writey dry spell will soon be over.

    Pony on, etc.  

    29 comments · 296 views
  • 77w, 1d
    Not-deadness, new stories and rusty turnips.

    Hey guys,

    I'm back, in typical Ardensfax fashion, a month too late with a pack of excuses. I'll simply say this, however; screw exams. Screw exams in every available orifice with a rusty turnip. Okay, I think I got that out of my system; basically, exams are over, things are easing off a little, and story stirrings are happening. Assuming anyone's still here.

    To be honest, after two solid months of writing nothing but politics and history essays which are about as dry as toasted sand, I feel like it's taking a bit of time to get into the old process of creative writing again. However, things are happening.

    Firstly, to deal with the elephant in the room; In Her Blood. It isn't cancelled, but I don't honestly feel confident or motivated enough to continue it right at the present moment. I'm honestly sorry, I'm not normally one to start a project then leave it hanging, but I honestly don't want to mess up the last act, and I also need to re-evaluate what I have currently and decide if it needs salvaging or not. However, I'm currently 5000 words deep in an unrelated one-shot (to give a short summary: Twilight, Rarity, ten years in the future) so I will be coming out with some fresh pony-words soon enough.

    In addition, I'm planning on finally undertaking those rewrites to A Bluebird's Song which I've been putting off for so long. Hopefully when they're done, the grammar should be fixed, a few new early chapters should be added to pad out the relationship a little, and the plague of one-word 'thankyou's should be eliminated. It might take a while, but on the whole I'm pretty proud of Bluebird, but whenever I look back on it, I just remember the godawful rushed romance in the first few chapters. I guess I just don't want to remember it as 'that one fic that wasn't quite right'.

    Also, I'm vaguely considering something else entirely new, hopefully a bit of a departure from the dark stuff my longer stories have turned into. No concrete facts yet, but suffice it to say it will be two things; extremely weird, and multi-chapter.

    Hope you people are all okay, sorry again for my absence, and equally sorry if this blog reads like half-drunk musings, because right now it's 2 in the morning and the sleep madness is punching me in the middle of the face.

    Also, I realise this is like a corner shop advertising for Wal-Mart, and that it hardly needs the signal boosting, but if you've not read University Days and like VinylTavia shipping, you really ought to. Seriously, that fic is pure gold (and it makes me wish I could write comedy).

    Anyhow, keep ponying on.

    15 comments · 322 views
  • 86w, 6d
    In Her Blood - Possible Hiatus

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In an otherworldly night, a sleeper train is making its way back from the frozen north. Sleep, however, is eluding two travelers. One has a hurt that needs to be mended, the other has a dream that must be remembered. It is the perfect night for secrets to be shared.

A FlutterDash one-shot, set at the end of The Crystal Empire, on the overnight train back to Canterlot; uncomplicated romance with slight sad and comedy elements.

Enormous thanks to NATOstrike and Shadowsreached for their awesome proofreading and feedback-ing! Thanks also to Tarantad0 for letting me use that amazing Jousting Fluttershy picture.

First Published
20th Nov 2012
Last Modified
20th Nov 2012
#1 · 105w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

gotta love these season 3 canon fics :heart:

#2 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Similar to a FlutterDash fic set on the train back after Season 2 ending...why is such a simple concept so awesome!? :pinkiehappy:

#3 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Trippy, man.

#4 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1651404 You're seemingly everywhere. Could you write my exam tomorrow ?

Nice story, btw ^^ I liked it!

#5 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1651540 What's it on?

#6 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1651544 Math...'nugh said

#10 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Pure adorable sweetness and passion here - so touching and gentle! Thank you so much for this piece! :heart:

As always, pacing and descriptions are perfect allowing the reader walk in the horseshoes of our cute couple with ease!

And yes - it's SO CANON!

My eyes are glistening with tears of joy - and I thank you for bringing some aurora borealis timid light into my dark and sleepless night.

I'd give you a most warm friendly hug you If only I could - at least have my thanks and words of appreciation.

Thank you.

#11 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

This was wonderful! I have to admit, the quality in FlutterDash fanfictions can be lacking sometimes. :fluttershysad: But this was a great little story! It felt so well to the characters, to the very episode it takes place after, and just about everything in between. I just loved every second of it. The sweet build up to their growing romance, the past elements, and everything else in between was nicely done. This was, in every sense, a lovely FlutterDash fanfic. I can honestly say that this has to be one of my favourites now. :pinkiehappy:

And hey, I wrote a similar fanfiction where they're together on the train after the events of A Canterlot Wedding. :rainbowlaugh: I was pretty amazed at the similarities, but how you managed to make the concept your own and very well-done. :twilightsmile:

Again, a very nicely written FlutterDash story. Sweet, adorable, and so real to them. Absolutely well done! :pinkiehappy: It made my day.

:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

#12 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

YESYESYESYESYESYEYSYESYEYSYEYSYESYYEYEYSYYYDJHkfGS DJUDF6AJWEGF

ha ha... oh Twilight...

#13 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

It would seem trains make dash soppy.

I liked it, deserves more reads.

Twilight should quit walking in on people, I don't wanna know what pinkies up to in her cabin.

#14 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

I enjoyed this. I have been waiting for a fic where Rainbow realizes she was hurting Fluttershy and felt bad about it. Most fics just have RD brushing it off as if it was no big deal.

#15 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Dang.  How you manage to put so much emotion so eloquently in such a short space suffuses my brain with stupefaction. (Try saying that 5 times fast. :pinkiecrazy: )  Regardless, I loved the whole story, but the ending was just so... perfect.  :yay:

#16 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

You know what infuriates me about this fanfic? As a commenter, as a reviewer, as the Review King, it is my duty to deliver just reviews that cite positives and criticisms to encourage a writer's strengths and to help them overcome their weaknesses. :twilightangry2: Why does this one-shot have to be so bloomin brilliant?

Let's start with the obvious; this fanfic is astonishing. In its writing, in its pacing, in its characters, its romance, even its little dips and dabs of humour it is simply a wonder to behold. I was captivated by the writing; spellbound into reading on further even though its start is uneventful the sheer quality of its description and how much you care for detail compelled me to read on. Then, when the story kicks in, everything is executed with perfect precision and timing, keeping the characters true to themselves and having the story progress with immense levels of patience. The story is a sparkling jewel of an idea and I'm sure it took great strength to not rush to a single line, to get to the point where Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy burst forth with emotion. Everything is explored with immense levels of depth and despite how lengthy this one-shot is every scene feels like it belongs, each scenes quality of writing upping the size of the podium this fanfic stands upon. The concept was nice to look into, the idea that Rainbow Dash had unintentionally hurt Fluttershy in the jousting having a lot of different ways to explore it and I feel the way you did so was true to the characters. Finally, the comedy was not exactly in great amounts but this is not a comedy and what you had was not only satisfying but led to a charming ending that brings me nothing but joy :pinkiehappy:.

As I tried to think of ways for this fanfic to be improved, I looked to several moments but realised that following events slayed my attempts to provide critique like a sword to a dragon's heart. Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash are going into this relationship somewhat suddenly and seemingly out of nowhere-wait, there's backstory behind this and feelings never expressed. Fluttershy's acting awfully bold here, almost out of character levels-wait, she goes back to being shy again after the events but seemed to have carried some of her sudden action boldness from the day before into a more balanced progression of the character. In the end there were only two little things I can think of suggesting (there's not even anything wrong with the story to highlight); the potential added humour if you were to add Pinkie Pie to the end scene as I'm sure the ruckus would have woken her up and I can think of some good ideas involving her. I wouldn't suggest Spike though as your addition of RariJack adds a whole other element to this story if Spike becomes involved (saves entire kingdom, doesn't get the girl :fluttercry:). My other suggestion would be to shorten the opening a little, the Rainbow Dash leaves train and flies for a bit scene as while it is stupendous, it doesn't have much to do with the main plot. Its wonderfully written as everything else is, but to some it may run on a little bit too long and it wouldn't hurt for it to be shorter (forgive me if this sounds like nit-picking but I'm wanting my comment to serve a purpose by offering advice and this is the best I can come up with for a story of this calibre).

I love FlutterDash (:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:), and I really like RariJack (:raritywink::heart::ajsmug:) despite my head canon of them both being heterosexual and the least likely of the mane 6 to date another mare, but even if I wasn't a shipper of these pairings I would still be praising this fanfic. This one-shot is good and you should feel good. Astonishing job, keep up the fantastic work! :twilightsmile:

#17 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1651915

...man why do you have to be such a good reviewer? I have nothing more to say now.

#18 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Congrats on hitting the 'non-mature' feature box, Arden. Gives me a warm fuzzy feeling when I get a chance to work on a fic that is so well recieved.:yay:

As always, it's a pleasure to work with a writer of your talent, and I can't wait to get working on the next chapter of In Her Blood.

*edit: don't forget about pedobear and them falling eyeballs! :trollestia:

#19 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

That was really really reaaaaally cute :twilightsmile:

and the ending almost made me bust out laughing :rainbowlaugh:

Love it.

#20 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Thanks so much, everyone! :twilightblush: Seriously, the response to this story has been amazing, you guys are teh awesomesauce. :rainbowkiss:

>>1651815 Hot Pinkie/Sombra action going on in the next carriage. Called it. :pinkiecrazy:

>>1651830 Actually confronting Dash with the consequences of brushing off her friends' feelings was part of the reason I decided to write this, actually. All too often she seems to get away with it, and I thought it might be interesting to bring her down to earth a bit, so to speak.

>>1651915 Okay, I will now flail my arms and go "AAAAAAA" for several minutes in an inarticulate yes dance. :pinkiecrazy: In all seriousness though, thank you so much! Coming from a reviewer of your standard, it honestly means a lot that you like it such a lot. :twilightblush: I've got to agree, I can just imagine Pinkie reacting in any number of brilliant ways, not least among which is the option of: 'remain perfectly silent, but acquire popcorn and sit in the doorway with a "go on" expression'. :derpytongue2: I know what you mean about the flight scene at the start; in all honesty it was probably a little self-indulgent, given that I love writing descriptive passages of Dash flying, so I'd agree it could probably have gotten away with being cut down somewhat! Making over-detailed descriptive stuff is something that I'm kind of prone to, so it's good that you've flagged that up. Thanks once again for taking the time to post such a fantastic comment! Have an appreciative yay: :yay:

>>1652348 Thanks a lot! Mind you, I consider myself pretty damn lucky in the proofreading department, so it's a pleasure to work with you too! :pinkiehappy: Also, woo, feature! (I also now have the indelible image of a badly decomposed zombie-pedobear with droopy eyeballs stuck in my head... Someone needs to make a Left 4 Dead mod of that.) :pinkiecrazy:

#21 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

This fic minus the flutterdash is now my headcanon.

Not that the flutterdash is unwelcome ;)

Very well written and enjoyable! Thank you!

Also surprise RariJack for the win! After all, good things are better when they're a Rarity ;)

#22 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

This is another excellent story. I wanted to see you write FlutterDash since I read "A Bluebird's Song", and it's even better than I had hoped, especially considering its length.

#23 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1652943  *ahem*  I don't suppose you'd be willing to write the Rarijack that you hinted at, sil vous plait?

#25 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

HAHAA. That ending was great. Great job on this story. Really enjoyed it.

#26 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

That was quite awesome

#27 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

You know, I'm starting to think Flutterdash is the Mane 6 equivalent to Lyra/Bon-Bon.

#28 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Considered reading it.

Then author read "Ardensfax."

So I'm like: "... Isn't he the author of 'A Bluebird's So'-- MUST READ!!!"

And now, I also realize...

YOU'RE HERE TOO!

>>1651591

Wazzaaaahhhh?! :trollestia:

#30 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

I like this side of Dash that you portrayed in the story - she's sweet and gentle, yet still believable. Overall, this was a very beautiful story.

#31 · 105w, 3d ago · · ·

Poor Twilight, that's almost like walking in on your parents

#33 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1656194 Best movie ever.

#35 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

Great story. Very charming. :pinkiesmile:

#36 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

I don't know what I can say about this that hasn't been said already so...have a moustache. :moustache:

Seriously though, this was fantastic. (Not at all biased because it featured two of my headcanon ships :derpytongue2: )

Now if only there was some TwiPie :twilightblush:

#37 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

At first I was like "you in trouble for hurting fluttershy rainbow dash!":flutterrage:

But then I was like" all right . . . But I'm still keeping my eye on your ass!"

#38 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

Awesome~~~!

Beautiful story, i just wish i could see the look on Twilight's face. :rainbowlaugh:

Makes me wonder where Pinkie is though. Usually she is the one dropping on by during her friends intimate moments.

Upvote and Fav'd this is just wonderful. :twilightblush:

#39 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

Great job! Looks like it went as well as we always expected it would! ^_^ Also, it got featured? 0.0 I missed that :twilightangry2:

#40 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1658490 Thanks! :pinkiehappy: Actually it's still there, but only if you uncheck 'View Mature'. (The feature box works in mysterious ways..) :rainbowwild:

#41 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

This is so good I have to read it again. And again after that. :heart:

#42 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1658629 Got it! Thanks! Congratulations!! :raritystarry:

#43 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1658975 Thanks! And also, yay. :yay:

>>1656194 I have saved that gif forever and will use it as a reaction to anything and everything. Seriously, that is awesome. :pinkiecrazy:

>>1654281 *Gandalf voice* Do not tempt me! Actually, do. I need to write a RariJack at some point, love that pairing.

>>1656162 And then your grandparents immediately after. :derpytongue2:

#44 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1659769

I just made an author very happy by making a comment that has absolutely nothing to do with his story!

Btw, great story.

... A Bluebird's Song was better.

#45 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1659800 Eeeyup. :pinkiecrazy: And I should damn well hope Bluebird was better, considering it was 25 times the length of this! :rainbowwild:

#47 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

Great story, I very much enjoyed it.

#48 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1659769  Please write the Rarijack portion of this story?  It would be a wonderful companion to this cute, sweet story.  :3

#49 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

It's been far too long since I read a good FlutterDash. This was awfully physical though, which isn't a bad thing, I enjoyed it. I'm just surprised you didn't decide to take it all the way and make it a clop.

#50 · 105w, 2d ago · · ·

Ha, Twilight rolled a 1 both times she opened the doors.:rainbowlaugh:

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