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Seran

Joined December 2011
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Stories (3)

  • The Pink Haired Woman
    A man finds a strange looking woman with a Butterfly tattoo and take her in. her origin is unknown.

    44,480 words · 1,942 views · 120 likes · 16 dislikes
  • Polka Time
    Pinkie Pie's musicaly inclined uncle Polka comes to visit. (a "what if Wierd al had an episode
    3,872 words · 371 views · 11 likes · 1 dislikes
  • I May Be Derpy, But I'm Not Useless.
    Derpy aves the town in spite of being the joke of the town
    2,332 words · 169 views · 2 likes · 3 dislikes

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John’s life had taken a turn for the worse since he moved from the bustling city of Los Angeles to a quiet mountain town named Dewford. He had expected a change of scenery and a calmer state of living.

That was not the case, as he’s had to deal with racist citizens, money problems, and several people who won’t get off his back. Life had gone wrong so far. Now he has to deal with a strange hippie girl with a butterfly tattoo.  John just hopes this new addition doesn’t complicate things further.

Edited by:

A Dumb Door [chapter 1-2}

Sqarishoctagon [chapter 3-]

First Published
23rd Dec 2012
Last Modified
1st Jul 2014

Comments ( 73 )

#1 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

please feel free to comment.

I want to know what  you guys think of the story.

#2 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · 1 · 1 ·

It has some potential. Although I think that Fluttershy would start to wise up to the situation pretty fast. While she might not understand what things are, she would at least get some understanding within the first day.

Otherwise, as my picture illustrates, I like this, more please!

#3 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

not all that bad though the grammar needs some ruffening up

#4 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1841629 I did get an editor. I guess I should talk with him.

#5 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1841659 an editor should be able to catch what I can being as I am rather far from being an editor

#6 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

I'd say, first things first, put some capital letters in your summary. I don't even want to read the story itself because your opening pitch for your writing skills includes a complete lack of the shift key.

#7 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1841754 That was cold.:rainbowlaugh:  But I tried my best. Now edited as much as i could see.

#8 · Chapter 1 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

This was Great!

#9 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · · ·

He gonna fucking rape her then murder her. I just know it. Poor Fluttershy.

#10 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

>>1844006 I'm not the kind of person who would write that.

your scaring me.:raritydespair:

#11 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 3d ago · · ·

Seriously. Why all the hate?:pinkiesad2:

#12 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 3d ago · · ·

Not hatin. I love this fic. The rape and murder thing was just a joke. I didn't mean to send a message of distaste. This has been great so far. Needs a little more meat on it, but it's good nonetheless.

#13 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 3d ago · · ·

I hope you will continue.

#14 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1844527 Sure, no worries. I just was reminded of a classmate that said my stories need more hookers and death. I promise the story will get more meatier as it  progresses, whatever that means.

I am on chapter 6 at the moment and it just needs to go through the editor to get it up.

#15 · Chapter 2 · 83w, 3d ago · · ·

Good to hear! ^^

#16 · Chapter 1 · 82w, 4d ago · · ·

Edit 1 complete. Hopefully there is less of a distraction this time.

#17 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

Whenever I find girls with butterfly tattoos, that tattoo is a surprise, and it's never on their shoulder.

#18 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2060020 I'm not sure if that is a suggestion for the story, or a crude joke.:facehoof:

#19 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

Awww!!!!!:heart:

#20 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2060052 Which part?

#21 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2060071 to how she was so... Fluttershy? The blushing was alway's cute!:twilightblush::yay::heart:

#22 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2060108 Ah, well I try to keep in character as much as possible. A bit hard sometimes when I'm a stone hearted person. Still, the way she is in touch of her emotions, always displaying shyness or worry, makes her my favorite pony.

#23 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

*GASP* It updated????? *SQUEE*:pinkiehappy:

#24 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2060158 :twilightsheepish: yes... through much trial I managed to update. I plan to update every two to three weeks from now on.

hopefully....:twilightoops:

#25 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2060177 I see you had problems with editing, I would love to help with this if you are interested.

#26 · Chapter 3 · 77w, 4d ago · · ·

>>2060862 Sorry, but the position has been filled.

I am subscribed to a help forum for specifically MLP fan fiction. I got help there from someone who has read my story before it was published.

#27 · Chapter 4 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·

No comments yet? Really? Alright.

Well, I loved the story so far. I do however hope to see longer chapters and more so a better building of Fluttershy and who she is, aside from just her discomfort in real life.

Keep up the good work.

#28 · Chapter 4 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·

i like the story, and i'm very interested in his past. i cant wait for the next chapter.:pinkiehappy:

#29 · Chapter 2 · 69w, 5d ago · · ·

I want to reveal several awkward bumbs in the story... but that Derpy with some kind of hunting rifle won't let me formulate what I'd like to say...

#30 · Chapter 5 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·

>>2344822 Go ahead, I need to expand as a writer. I'll calm down Derpy with a muffin cart

#31 · Chapter 6 · 67w, 15h ago · · ·

I will brake that officers balls if he even tried!!!

#32 · Chapter 6 · 67w, 14h ago · · ·

>>2443447 don't be mean to the rookie. He means no harm.

I'm more worried about the racist bully.

#33 · Chapter 6 · 67w, 13h ago · · ·

>>2444098

Dont worry about the bully he'll get a 45. Up his ass

#34 · Chapter 7 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·

Damn right I cried

#35 · Chapter 8 · 61w, 5d ago · · ·

this story is stared get interesting, Please continue.:trixieshiftleft:

#36 · Chapter 1 · 61w, 1d ago · · ·

"he simply reached onto his hip, lifting his shirt and exposing his hidden handgun " people like this bug the shit out of me...

#37 · Chapter 8 · 61w, 13h ago · · ·

>>2646278 I tried to make him unlikable. And the fact that I have friends in the NRA that would do this to protect themselves made it interesting.

#38 · Chapter 9 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·

Wooo!!! Love this story. :heart:

#39 · Chapter 7 · 56w, 20h ago · · ·

The feels from this. :fluttercry:

#40 · Chapter 11 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·

Aww BUCK yeah an update! :rainbowkiss:

#41 · Chapter 11 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·

Can't wait for more. This story is soooo awesome :rainbowkiss:

#42 · Chapter 12 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·

Make me cry why don't you.

#43 · Chapter 12 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3197450 I'm...Sorry :fluttershysad:

#44 · Chapter 12 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3197458

No need for that crying face. Sometimes it feels good to cry.

#45 · Chapter 10 · 45w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Anyone feel like you are reading Tarzan?

John want food. John felt relief. John said. Etc...

#46 · Chapter 3 · 35w, 2d ago · · ·

“But nothing! You took a cow from her life! She probably even had a name, something like Mooriella and had hopes and dreams! But you took her, a harmless animal, and ATE her!” Her screams became louder.

Calm the fuck down, Flutterbitch. You've killed animals before, too

#47 · Chapter 12 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3197524 I know what you mean. Unfortunately, my habit of being direct doesn't make me the best writer. Plus my limited understanding of the English language makes it hard to know what words fit where.

I just hope people understand the story I am trying to tell.

#48 · Chapter 13 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·

First YES! :pinkiehappy: I was kind of wondering what happened to this story, until I saw the 'on Hiatus', anyways, good chapter, keep it up :ajsmug:

#49 · Chapter 13 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3553651 I was on hiatus due to both the editor and I being  very busy with our lives, still on hiatus because I don't know when I can post the next chapter.

#50 · Chapter 13 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·

>>3554497 Hey no problem here, If you have a life that needs tending to you get to that, projects come after, :ajsmug:

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