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Part two/chapter 9 tomorrow! :pinkiehappy:

We really need a "murderous Twi" emoticon!

Zis iz murrderrauz! :raritycry:

Loved it. :raritywink:

...:yay: Take all my internets.
You are a God.

I couldn't bring myself to read past the intro :fluttercry:

That was very much like a horrible car accident. Painful and gut-wrenching to look at, yet so much so that I simply cannot look away from it.
So...
I'll just go ahead and track this, you keep writing, and I'll keep staring in terrified wonder.

I kind of want to see Celestia give in to the Lunacy herself. >.> Nightmare Sol... Nightmare Blaze... Nightmare Corona...

Nightmare Blaze and Chaos God Discord vs. Nightmare Flare. Gogogogo.

okay this is promising, better than the other endings, although I don't like the idea with Q. He's a bitch.

gory ends are good.

I don't want to see Discord die :raritycry:

This is intresting. I OBVIOUSLY like the original better, but this is fun to watch. Go Discord!

Discord against alicorn-psychotwi?
This is the best!:yay:

This is delicious.

Giving Discord the World. Dayumn. Shit got real fast.

This just raised the bar for all Grimdark stories....
...
Good work! :pinkiehappy:
Although have to add: Shit is getting real.

DISCORD
Are we your prey alone,
Or are we just a stepping stone for taking back the throne?
Thank you SO MUCH for bringing in Discord! Please tell me he doesn't die, even if... I've got nothing. Just don't kill Discord!

I laughed. Was that wrong? Should I not have done that?

This is so over-the-top. I love it.

I wanted a Grimdark-as-fuck ending and I got a Grimdark-as-fuck story :raritydespair:

Excuse me while I go read something ridiculously happy.

As dark and tragic as it is the story is pretty awesome. Keep it up!

holy shit best cliffhanger ever

Oh you are clever I was wondering if discord was going to be one of the tools celestia would have used to defeat flare...

celestia+discord+luna?/nightmare flare= death, lots and lots of death

Words cannot describe how freaking amazing this grimdarkness is... Oh my gosh, it makes me sad to think that there's an ENDING!!! Damn... Well, at some point you got to stops killing ponies, I guess... still, I wish you didn't have to.

Even So awesome can not describe this.

This story is beyond awesome.

IT IS AWESOME+INFINITY!

Yes, THAT'S how awesome this is. The first one was great, and this is great. :D

...not feeling anything. Rainbow factory felt worse. I couldn't get through the first chapter of The Experiments of Twilight Sparkle.

There's something wrong with you RainbowCrush... :pinkiecrazy:

Anyway, I'm going to track this but I can't bring myself to read it read it right now... something about me being in a good mood and not wanting in ruined... I will read it later though... :ajsmug:

The only thing I don't like about this is that we know that twilight is gonna win. It takes the "what's gonna happen" and "will twilight survive the attack" out of the story...

Other than that, I like it, it's not overly gory... nothing is after cupcakes, (or saw or Nightmare on elm street or Final Destination or Hostel or Friday the 13th or the human centipede or Teletubies... Not that I've seen all of them, in fact I've only seen about 3/34 (in my calculations, might be more) and read the plot lines on Wikipedia to (some of) the others (If I watched them I would find them gross and stupid... well, even more so) I just read about them so I can point out how over the top they are.

ANYWAYS,
There are way more over the top things than this...

OK then...

....

Bye

and then the world exploded from all the epicness.........

I think I will go back to reading the super happy ending over and over now...

I hate discord... But when he makes a truce for a bit... WHO BLOODY CARES?! DISCORD FOREV!!! (I can't believe I just said that)

FUCK YES! ATL- *cough* RISCO- *sneeze* DISCORD IS HEAR TO SAVE THE DAY!!

I will be honest:
I did not read the actual story.
But I have a fetish for grimdark and gore.
Reading this now makes me realize why my fanfiction never got featured yet, although it is a pretty good one and has many folowers.
I admire your vocabulary, your writing style, your sheer amount of detail you put into each sentence.
A person who learned english as a foreign language like me can only dream about getting such a standart.
But really, this is amazingly horrible. I don't even feel bad for laughing out loud each time a pony died.

i seem to have many stars, here take FIVE!!!

Hm.. I'm reading all these coments saying how Grimdark this is? I guess I got jaded after reading Cupcakes, Rainbow Factory, and Ask Lil Miss Rarity... but this doesn't feel that grimdark... Although, as previously mentioned, I am now horribly horribly jaded..

Nothing will make me vomit, or cry (thanks to My Little Dashie)

Meh, ive read worse stories in terms of Grimdark.

But you still get points for this one man, thats about as brutal as an ending can get.

Lol, I love how confused Discord sounded. "Whats the real deal here?"

Keep on writing man, this shit is GOLD!

My thoughts when Rainbow Dash was launched out the window.

Omg. Just when I thought the story couldn't get any better… Fluttershy gets her face eaten, and Rainbow Dash gets super speed whipped out a fucking window. Those two are my favorite ponies, and I have no clue why I laughed so hard. Although, I do wish that Rarity had gotten a more gruesome death. I just don't like her. Anyways, Good bucking show, chap. Tracking this shit. Oh. Two more things. One, now we need a faceless Fluttershy emoticon, and two…

I bet Rainbow dash looked like this.:derpyderp2:

More of the awesomesauce we have come to love!

I had desperately hoped for discord to join the fray, and now i have my wish.
if you want more points for grimdark, go into excruciating detail about the deaths for everyone, a bit like you did for RD, but really describe the pain

Otherwise keep it going

also, we need an option to 6-star this shit:duck:

i cant stop myself from reading this help!

i was smiling and laughing as i read this.........and i dont give a shit! i read cupcakes all the way through and i LAUGHED! BWAHAHAHA!
(jesus fuck im cold.)

Oh come the hell on Discord. Do you really expect TrollCelestia to give you Equestria FOREVARGH.
5 stars for awesome.

I figured this was coming, if not from smayds then somene else. Good fic thus far.

On a side note though, the whole Cupcakes as a standard for grimdark deal needs to stop. It's really not. Call me jaded or cynical, but cupcakes is the quintessential torture porn. By that I mean that its a cheap thrill with very limited emotional content behind it. Without that, it can't really be disturbing. There are only so many ways to chop something up. I give credit to smayds, there's just a better set up for grimdark here. Conflicting emotions, issues beyond the next way to convey "damn that hurts." Even the gore that was there was done better, in a darker style than cupcakes. Personally, I found it infinitely colder the way Twi casually offed everyone and moved on. It was nearly clinical, other than Fluttershy.

One criticism. I did think it was getting a little old with the mass murdering of background ponies. It loses shock value when every attack results in another several hundred ponies dead or maimed. I get the reasoning behind it, but its overplaying the hand.

Derpy Hooves would have gotten away anyway, so Derp :scootangel:!

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I laughed too! :pinkiecrazy:

Mostly because Celestia controls the sun ,right? the sun is ball of fire. Why is Nightmare Flare killing her? you'd think she'd get burns from raising the sun, or immunity to fire.

I'm sorry, but I was laughing the whole time through this fic. I love your writing style, and as much as I didn't like Cupcakes, RocketToInsanity, or Rainbow Factory, I had to like this, mainly because it was based off of another story. :rainbowlaugh:

I laughed my ass off the whole time I read this. I've had much worse.

Wait did this get edited?
/ragequit

117688 Sorry, just a spelling mistake. No matter how many times you proof-read something...

Discord was talking about his "day-drip" which sounds a lot more medical than it should. :derpyderp2:

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