A nice start to the story. It will be good to see a bit more backstory for Twist, she's at least a decent character in the show.

Interesting. You've got my favourite and upvote. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Twist?

This is actually the very first piece of literature I have read involving our favorite sweet-toothed lisping filly. Onward, my friend.

I firmly believe you've struck literary gold with this one, Dusty. After the heartfelt prose and whimsy found in the various Sparkle Chronicles stories, it hardly strikes me as a surprise - you've definitely created something wonderful and deep, just as you have in the past.

I can’t wait to see where you take us next!

I know of one other recent Twist fic: A Wild Twist Appeared!   There may be others, but I haven't read them.

Even at this stage in the proceedings, the feels are starting to flutter. Not full, tear-jerking feels, but I have a feeling that they'll be getting there. Carry on, my friend.

The potential FEELS levels of this fic are enormous.  

I'm just hoping I don't wreck the whole thing in Chapter 3.

Incidentally, Hoopy McGee (in Project: Sunflower) originally conjured up that "Fetlock Express" bit; I hope I can be forgiven for this blatant expropriation.

I figure the last two detractors were wondering: "Does it really take two whole chapters to cover one simple date?"

Twist is my second favorite pony :3 now i must read

I love this story. Absolutely love it.

Just a niggling matter:

Twist pondered for a moment.“I haven't have any problem adjusting to the absence of chaos.”

Oh Dusty, you are an exceptional quality that I have only ever hoped to witness. I'm so very glad you actually exist.

... unless I'm abusing my medication. Sigh! Although you've artfully thrown up the complete sign, I sort of selfishly wish this could continue to its rightful end - my headcanon insists Spoke and Twist become emotionally engaged.

- JUST GO WITH IT!

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Do everyone a favor - tell your legions of fans to read this beautiful story, would you? I wish I could exact that sort of justice. You can, KoS. Please?

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There are times when one can't help but niggle.    

One inevitable question, I suppose: "How many rewrites did it take?"

My answer is always the same: "Not quite enough."

This was planned for 6000 words, three chapters.  You can see how well that worked out.

Worked for me! WOO!

Incidentally, according to the I Write Like site, this text (the first chapter, anyway) is vaguely reminiscent of Neil Gaiman.

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Incidentally, Hoopy McGee (in Project: Sunflower) originally conjured up that "Fetlock Express" bit; I hope I can be forgiven for this blatant expropriation.

I don't mind at all

Also, this is a very sweet, well-written story, and it's got nowhere near the attention it deserves.

A good work on a short story, see you around!

I especially liked "a hundred words a minute with gusts up to one-forty" and "they conducted their business in the tall buildings that scowled down on the streets of Baltimare."

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Thanks.  Once in a while I manage not to sound like everypony else.