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Rarity's rejection was merely the start down a slippery slope as a landslide of self-doubt drives Spike to find solace in the only pony who seems to understand. Of course, Pinkie Pie has some problems of her own in the form of an unpleasant alter-ego...
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A spike x pinkie
instant fave!
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although there were a few glaring errors, the grammar is very fluent, so my compliments to you for that
I think I'll just keep an eye on this, and see what happens
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Errors, you say? Would you mind giving me an example, if that isn't too much to ask?
You should be complimenting my proofreader/spell checker for my fluency in grammar.
While I do try my best to keep out errors he catches the ones I tend to miss.
Can you even write a fic that I don't like? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
Possibly one of the best things to come home from work and read!
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I'm flattered.
I'm sure I'll write something that doesn't catch your fancy eventually. But, until then, enjoy!
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I will enjoy! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Colgate_bedroomeyes.png
Also, to your statement about writing something eventually that doesn't catch my fancy:
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Beavis and Butt-Head?
Hell. Yes.
All the Feels. ALL. OF. THEM.
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Guess who's back~ Back again~ PD is back~ For the win!~
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My mission has been accomplished. Onto the next objective.
Very adorable!
(You could probably have shoe-in'd a kiss before the last line, though. Would have been fiting)
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Soon, my friend, soon. Have to keep you all interested somehow.
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Hehe sorry for the long wait for a reply, I was on my phone reading, earlier
And now the battery's dead 
And I'll just say I'm a sucker for irresistible romance such as this, and you have my two favourite characters too!
Right! examples? I'll try and make sure this stays short; I've a habit of writing longer comments than fanfics
I'll just add, after running back through this comment (which is too long, damnit, Vexy!) that you make use of colloquial language throughout, so anything I say that should be corrected below should recieve a pinch of salt before digestion.
Spring shouldn't be capitalized in this context.
'He inhaled a deep breath', Or 'He inhaled deeply'.
You could probably get away with leaving it, but it just sounded more fluid in my head.
'She did not, however. Instead she restrained herself with considerable effort, and waited.'
Shuffled a few words, rephrased the 'trouble', and corrected the tense at the end.
Don't answer your own rhetorical question, silly!
My eye twitched. The spines on his head and back are green, but the scales on his skin (which I assume are the ones you're referring to here) are purple.
Those are the few I could pick out while skim-rereading. Otherwise it's very well-written! A refreshing read.
I just want to talk a 'lil about the plot, though. Mainly because I love Spike and Pinkie, I love ships, and I love talking about plots.... *Giggle*
First thing I wanted to say, was your introduction: Spike had already been to see Rarity, and the reader finds out that it didn't go well. I was surprised you didn't include the actual scene beforehand (and feared you weren't going to at all!), but luckily it was all unfounded, and you included the scene later on. I expected that to be kind of anti-climactic, considering the we already know the outcome, but I didn't find it too bad. I didn't find it terribly satisfying, but that might be due to the entire 'rejection scene' being a mere 500 words long. Personally I think you could have expanded on this a little. Poor Spike-Wikey's being rejected!
Another thing I wanted to add, was Rarity and Spike both seemed... kinda harsh. I mean Rarity's scene: she didn't really let Spike down gently. She just sort of said "Nnnnnope!"
It kind of echoes in Spike, as he coldly tries to brush Pinkie off, each time he asks for help. I can understand he's hurt, and he wants to get home. But he's certainly no master at hiding his feelings.
Maybe I'm looking too hard into this.... Maybe.... and wow, I need to stop writing this
But I wanted to add this final point!
I just wanted to say what I tell myself every night before I go to bed: show, not tell. You should show Pinkie's feelings through her actions, rather than just her thoughts. That way the reader can truly understand how Pinkie feels. At the moment I have no idea whether she's been fantasizing over him for months / stalking him, or whether it's just a passing crush.
Just my 2000 cents...
Don't hate me...
Also, how come your story also has a 'Sad' and 'Slice of Life' tag? Just out of curiosity.
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How could I hate you for helping me so greatly? I'm serious when I say I love criticism. While it might not be all that motivating it is helpful and if you take the time to point out the mistakes it just means you care enough to do so.
I think I'd have to remove the 'Sad' tag, but the 'Slice of Life' tag is there for a reason. I was under the assumption that Slice of Life meant something akin to just a walk through life with the characters. There's no real big adventure to be had in this tale, instead its a sort view of the characters as they go from day to day. Is that wrong?
A Pinkie Spike? YES!!!!!! Rarity's a bitch, but that's my option, I'm very glad that Pinkie is there to pick up the pecies but then I think that what Spike ays is true.....other then the Princesses themselves, he will have no one after the very least....100 years?
Maybe Peewee though hopefully. But the point of the matter being is that what would Spike do if he gave all of his entire bieng toPinkie (or some other mortal pony) ans she died? Then what?
Poor Spike....Dragons are not gods or goddesses are they? I know the ponies have their own gods (Princess Celestia, Luna and even Discord) but what of Dragons, or Griffions, or even Zerbas? Damn...I need to stop over thinking this, but it's so much bucking fun
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Hehe that's good
which isn't really what I go for!
I don't like being the guy who writes a really long review, and then the author just thinks bad of me - then I just feel like a really bad troll
As for the tags, I suppose this would suit a Slice of Life then.
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So there you go
Can't wait for the next chapter, if it motivates you at all!
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Rarity is just boring to me, I'm so tired of reading Sparity that I actively avoid it now.
I remember reading a fic about Spike becoming a godking because he was dragon royalty and by extension he was immortal. I recall it being very well written, but I can't remember for the life of me what it was called. I read it during the wait for season 2, I think.
1615507 To me personlly, Rarity is my least favorite of the Mane Six and of anypony, she just so bucking annoying and really gets on my nerves, unlike Pinkie Pie where I know that how she acts and she has humor in it, Rarity is just as snoobly and stuck up as Diamond Teria and Sliver Spoon (which is kind of sad for I like Sliver Spoon) but I dislike Rarity a lot...least favorite pony ever.....though when it comes to her being romanticly pairied then I'm ok, she's still a bitch but I look towards who she is with (long as it's not Spike or Twilight) then the whore herself, you know?
But that's just my option, everyone is allowed to have some creature they like and dislike correct? Hope I did not change anyone mind about her if they like her.
And damn...that sounds like a story I really would enjoy reading, if you ever find it please let me know so I could give it a shot.
Best day ever. Promethuwhatever is back!!!
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You can call me PD if it's easier.
And I'm glad to be back, where was I? 
One can't guess the lifespan of a magical pony. Also Spike is literally the only dragon of his kind so far, who knows what that means for how he lives and grows. Lastly, if the show did go by real world lifespans then Twilight and Rarity would outlive the others by several hundred years.
All my megusta, take them
We really need to see more Spinkie
You see, I really hope to see an episode talking about this Sparity issue for real. It will be Sweetie's turn, then
A Spikie Pie fic, well I'm sold and of course I think I know why Pinkie Pie's friendship with the rest of the mane six is going to be in danger, it's because she's in love with Spike.
I can see it now:
"Hey girls did I ever tell you I had a crush on Spike?"
"You what?!"
"You're jokin right sugercube?"
"Haha good one Pinkie Pie, you almost had me there!"
"I'm being serious!"
"Oh my!"
"I'h don't believe it!"
"Why did he fall for you?"
"Because I was there for him in his time of need."
"You liar! You seduced him I know you did!"
"I did not! You on the other hoof rejected him and crushed his feelings!"
"It's called letting them down gently darling."
"That's a load of horseapples Rarity!"
"B-But I"
"I don't think your Spike's type Pinkie."
"Trying to take Spike away from me huh Dashie? Well it won't work because I love him and he loves me!"
"It's true."
"No way!"
"Sorry girls but the proof is in the pudding!"
"Oh Spikey Wikey I love you!"
"And I love you Pinkie Pie!"
And then they kissed.
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And then Spike's evil twin, Ekips, showed up to steal Pinkie away from him!
1616875 But he got stopped by Eip Eiknip who wanted something more than a kiss.
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Though Ekips is a greedy dragon, so he tried to take them both for himself.~ He attempted to fool Pinkie with chocolate ice cream.
I really enjoyed this read! There are a few errors, such as the replacement of "than" for "then". Other than these tidbits, the story is very interesting! I love the buildup! You better keep writing this story! Put all of your resources into this story! Literally put every ounce of effort! This has great potential, and could become an amazing Spike shipfic! Thank you for inviting me to read it! PinkieSpike is a cute shipping! Of course, Spike x Any Mare is a cute shipping! Hahahahahaha!
Keep it up, my friend!
(If I were to change anything? Add more detail to the Ice Sapphire! It might not be significant to the story, but it is the incentive for Spike to relay his woes to Pinkie Pie. Providing a description of the "rare" gem allows the reader to understand what makes the gem so special in the first place.)
1616924 But Eip Eiknip wouldn't let him, she said that if he did so he'd be cheating on her and Ekips just couldn't do that. So they left and Pinkie Pie and Spike kept kissing unaware that anything had happened.
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This might sound stupid, but I hate editing chapters after they've been posted outside of fixing up the spelling or grammar. It just seems to me like it would confuse anybody who didn't go back to read the updated chapter, which would involve skimming through to find the one paragraph which had been added. Though, I will explain more about the Ice Sapphire in the chapters to come.
Given how the Fire Ruby was said to be aged in the show it leads me to believe it may cause a sort of... Intoxication... When ingested by a dragon. Sort of like a dragon's alcohol. I may be completely wrong, but I don't have anything telling me otherwise. So, if the Ice Sapphire (and Fire Ruby) were to have an intoxicating effect on Spike... The scenes practically write themselves.
I may have given too much away, but oh well!~ Thank you for your input, friend!
SpikexPinkie Pie.......Heck Yes!
Totally diggin this story so far, really looking forward to what happens next.
I normally don't drop lines here before reading, so I can give any kind of advice. But you owe me so I'm just gonna say this. OMG U R BAK
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I have been resurrected as PD 2.0, 20% Cooler then the old PD.~
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I have a taste for the odd, as I've said before. I'm knee deep in the second chapter, though I haven't found much time to write it given my current job-hunt.
I like it, even if the pacing seems a bit fast for my tastedl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png
Moar plzdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
That new cover art
Mmm each day leaves me more and more eager to see where you take this!
Love the ship, love the story so far. But wait, Pinkie Pie hugs Spike in attempt to bring him comfort and causes him to nearly vomit? Doesn't sound like a very good start to their relationship.
I do hope you'll be continuing this one.
Hey Spike, why do they call it a hacksaw? I just don't get it.
dat face
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Oh boy, this relationship is NOT going to be a pretty one.
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Very sly, friend. I'm watching you.
Ive read both your a Mallajong's stories and I have to say, I like yours more.
His are funny with sometimes real, sometimes awkward, romance thrown in.
You make stories with a different air about them. They're funny when they need to be but hold the relationship above that on priorities. Id be hard pressed to find a story of yours that I don't like.
-Sturrn
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Thank you for the kind words. A lot of people seem to think of me as a less popular Mallajong... It's a little grating, but hey.... What can I do? I try to keep things interesting. There's more then enough mindless fluff out there without me adding to it. Though don't get me wrong, I respect Mallajong. He's good at what he does. I just don't think we're really comparable outside the fact we both write Spike fiction.
SpikeyPie???!!!!
Must follow!!!! 
Oh and DAT cover... 
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another watcher! Soon my army shall conquer the interweb! Mwhahaha!
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Everyone keeps saying that about the cover. It makes you want to just hug em, doesn't it?
What, why did you change it from Spike accepting Pinkie's feelings to Spike rejecting her?
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Because the story has a plot now and it needs to be taken in a different direction for me to make it work.
If there's a thing I truly HATE about this fandom, it's THAT. Please, don't follow that sick path
when i think about it, there's more room for development story wise this way, no cutting to the chase thing going on.......hopefully update quicker ....
1713679 Right there with you, Bud.
*Shudders* Anything but references to that. 
I like the way this story was going, then it changed, anyone got the old chapter two saved?
I'm unsure... is this a gore story ?