Sequel! Yay! And it was good!

... Thank you... Very much... Like a ton... HUG! I guess it's time to wait and speculate on part 2 next...

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

I'm eager for the next chapter!!!

Wow a few words come to mind while reading this and they are Amazing, fantastic, Great. This is a true work of art, you have created an amazing master piece of a story. You are a very talented writer and I can not wait too read more of your writing.

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEPIC!!!!

This was so cuuuuuute! I loved it loved it loved it! Pip and Dinky forever!!

hhhhnnnnnnnnggggggggggg, dddddaaaaawwwww, its just too much for me to handle

tooooo ccccuuuuttteeee!!!!

D'AWWWWWWW young love

Oh man, this is going to suck!

d'awww so cutee! i was going to comment on how weird it was that they're like, at LEAST 3rd base and they never said 'i love you', but then i remembered that me and my gf had a VERY strange relationship, and that this is more common than i imagine. yes, i am crazy. yes, i would like fries with that. oh, you werent asking? oh.. thats okay then...

Oh god, that Sad tag. Why does that have to be there? Make it go away.

wait... THIS I A SEQUEL!?! I MUST FIND THE PREQUEL!!! NOOOAAA!!!!

I admit.  When I saw this was a sequel to Pirates for a Day, I squealed with joy.

>>114369114369 the prequel is called pirates for a day. hope it helps

As I said before, I approve of this ship.  Such tenderness handled masterfully, and the winter scenery you painted made it even more so. Can't wait for the next chapter!

...............mmmmmmmmmmmooooooooooooooooooAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Well I normally hate shipping. I also normally hate stories that open with characters in bad. Normally. You've broken the trend. I like adolescant/teen pip you've given him an intresting character. I've tracked it. Maybe I'll give this one a review when its finished.

>>114579114579

Bed

>>114205114205

on every story i see you comment on it is always something degrading, no matter how good or bad the story may be. i really suggest that if you don't have anything good or any constructive critisisim to say.........then don't

thanks

Give me a moment... Its just too beautiful... My eyes are watering...

... 'Tis beautiful... I love this. Can't wait for the next update.

There are only two words for this: Beautiful, DAWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Aaaaaand you changed tenses at the very end and killed the mood. Nice.

You still get 4.5 stars, though, cuz THAT WAS AMAZING.

>>114749114749

Thank you for pointing out my mistake. It shall be rectified immediately :)

D'aaaaaaawww so cute!

My reaction:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BVYlp3WiSGM&feature=related

based on the reactions i shall not read it till it is done

to provent me form going insane with waiting

Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwww  

Y'know what? I'm just going to accept Dinky / Pipsqueak future romance as canon.

Why? Because IT'S TOO DARN CUTE TO IGNORE, that's why.

Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwww!

I don't like most shippings, but this is beautiful.

I just... LIKED a shipping story? Amazing.

Clap clap, well done, monsieur. You may need to go through with a prereader, I noticed a few words that were misspelled/misplaced, but they were few, and it is hard to find them again.

Well done.

*sees "Sad" tag*

I'm not sure I'm going to like what comes next...

Sad tag? Nooooooo!

But for now, d'awwwwwww...

The amount of Dawww here is indescrible

Oh, look, a new ship I like!

What have i just read?

A first chapter.

A continuation of a previous story.

A good story all in it's own right.

A story with a few errors.

A D'WAAAA filled story.

A Pip/Dinky shipping.

An example of literary genus.

Prose beyond what i could even begin to imagine writing.

A reason to hang up my keyboard for good, and stop writing.

A story I actually WANT to have the honor of reviewing.

So, here I go!

*Procures sonic fine-tooth comb*

Spelling/Grammar:

“I like your mum,” she said Don't the two already know one another?

into the soft whiteness so Pipsqueak stepped closer, A comma might be in order.

The evening sun was dulled behind clouds yet the parts it still reached glowed as See above. Perhaps two, one before and after 'yet'

, staring at the ghostly yet friendly trees. See above. Comma before and after the 'yet' would make it flow better.

photograph like the ones COMMACOMMACOMMA

justice in his opinion and he had trouble thinking COMMACOMMACOMMACOMMACOMMACOMMA

“Yes mother.” Dinky poked his flank as he pulled himself up and he squeaked, making her burst out laughing. “Not fair!” he called down, holding out a hoof to help her up. Overuse of pronouns, don't 'cha think?

branch as it bent warningly under his hoof. FIRING ORBITAL COMMA CANNON!

the ones they made and the ones they will make, Strange.... Use of 'will'? Perhaps 'Were going to make'

Story: I don't feel worthy to say anything about this. But I'm going to anyway!

It seemed well executed, but I, as a reader, would like some back-story as to what has been happening in the last 5 or so years. EX: How long they've been together, a flashback of sorts at the tree for their first kiss? It seems in order for such an amazing story.

As for furthering this into their latter years... I look forward to it!

Socks: Not present....

***

And so concludes my review. Hope it helps!

-The Librarian

I'm either gonna die from diabetes or my heart giving out due to so much cuteness...

I think my heart is going to explode

Wow, this is great! It almost is poetry!

I think I know why the sad tag is there....

Oh please tell me I'm wrong...

Excellent! I hope that 'Sad' tag is there for trhe same reason I used it on 'School Daze;' drama and heartstrings-tugging, and not out and out tragedy. If it IS...well, it's your story, good sir. You have the right to obey the urge your fingers tap out.  Follow your muse to whatever ending fits for you, and I'll read it.

Beautiful.  I never thought this amount of d'aawww was posible!

sooo sweet dawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww i cannot express this in words it is too sweet for words.

i have never read any fic like this this totally blew away all of the competitors in my books [still warm and fuzzy feeling in me]

This is pretty... Ok it's 'n fantastic! pretty in depth writing, your style is both captivating and emotional. cool story bro.

Image: http://s3-ak.buzzfed.com/static/imagebuzz/web03/2011/12/7/14/my-money-take-all-of-it-10256-1323284662-26.jpg

"Because Love is everywhere, and everyone deserves it!"

    -Delta-

Oh God this is so tender. If it was a steak, it would be the best thing I've ever eaten.

I love this. Thank you, my dear sir. Willing to continue?

I don't read shipping ever, but I was intruiged after PfaD, and this was thoroughly adorable. 5/5.

I'm not good at saying what I think so I'll just say amazing keep it up.

>>115652115652

Commas are not needed in any of the instances you suggested. If anything, they would only make the sentences clunky. Believe me, I used to overuse commas in my writing and I always got called out for it, even getting a B on a paper that would have otherwise gotten an A.

How does "I like your mum" at all imply that two ponies DIDN'T know each other?

The pronouns are being used properly. I really don't see why you would think they're being used too much.

And backstory is not at all required. Little facts like how long they've been together are completely incidental.

Moar preeze?  Prrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeze?  Really awesome story.  IDK why, but i love shipping with the fillies and colts of MLP when their older.  They just seem so amazing.  5/5 mah friend.

>>117023117023 Relax, it's just my opinion on what should be changed. Weather the writer uses my comments is irrelevant. I review to try and help, and offer SUGGESTIONS as to what i think could be changed. So Derp.

>>117248117248

But proper grammar is not a matter of opinion. The fact is that inserting commas where you suggested would destroy the flow of the sentence by adding unnecessary pauses, and as such it is bad advice. I am trying to help YOU now, because it seems like this is something you enjoy doing, but there are certain things you are doing that need to be refined if you truly want to assist writers.

This is fantastic. The imagery is beautiful, everything was well written and well thought out, and Pip still seemed like Pip, and Dinky still seemed like Dinky, even though they're older.

Bravo. I'll be watching eagerly for the next chapter.

wow,

i cryed a tear of joy

PLEASE DAWN! KEEP WRITING ON THIS! PLEASE!!!

-loves this story!-

okay this is going to drive me crazy WE NEED MORE PIP ON THE ACTUAL SHOW HE IS TOO AWESOME AND ADORABLE AND BRITISH TO BE A ONE SHOT CHARACTER

>>118418118418

The second chapter is complete and I shall post it on the morrow! :)

>>118986118986

This news makes me a happy pony. c:

All I can say is that this was just beautiful and heartwarming, even though some things almost made me tear up.

Your writing is beautiful, it flows so smoothly as its read; my mind just kinda glides through the story.

Excellent work, as always dear sir/madame

Beautiful and very heart warming. Congrats on the good work!

Many tears were shed. Can't wait for the next one! Literally! My suggestion is to post this to EqD if not already. Just absolute amazing.

Look. This is a sack of stars. I'm just going to leave it here and walk away so you don't see the manly tears. Because MAN.

Pip had to grow up. I love how wise and comforting Dinky is. You did an amazing job with these characters and made them all feel unique. I was on the verge of tears at the end of this chapter.

Peace out.

I gladly shed a manly tear at words of such power and wisdom.

wowzah

Manly... tears... It gave me slightly warm yet sad feelings. Everything I could say has already been said ^^ One more chapter to go, and I am sure... I will cry.

this made me cry and i got goosebumps at the raw emotion that it evoked.

if you keep writing this well you will be responsible for many tears.

i for one cant wait to shed them

Oh no....They-.....They're gonna...."go", in the next chapter.....aren't they.....

NOT PIPSQUEAK!!!!NOT DINKY!!!!WAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!

when i saw then wearing scarves i instantly thought of new york i miss that place

Absolutely gorgeous.

Words... words cannot describe this feeling.

I applaud you.

beautiful.

oh sweet celestia, i sound like meta knight...

That's really all I can say. This is so beautiful. Thank you for writing this.

Deep.

Yayz, I wuv this story

That. Was. The Most.

Sad

'Depressing

Age-fearing-

ly awesome chapter EVAH!!!

You should add the D'aww tag. Oh wait, it doesn't exist yet. Everyone tell the admins to make d'aww tags!

>>121265121265

Oh man, I know that feeling completely.  Also I can't help but feel we have at the most, two chapters left (possibly epilogue?).   I am both excited and terrified about it...  Excellent work.

You took my critique of pirates for a day into account! It all comes back to the tree! Well done. Admittedly I'd have liked to have seen some more of the how on Dinky and Pip's relationship rather than just finding out it happened. Still very nice.

Absolutely wonderful!

Absolutely loved this story from the moment I started reading.  It's so touching, and it made me miss my girlfriend.

... I'm sad... I'm happy... Buck, I'm sappy, aren't I?

... That was awesome. While it had good, happy notes, I could only seem to focus on the sad parts more, how he's grown up now, can't climb his tree... Quite excellent... A very good taste of what the next chapter is sure to have...

Thank you for actually doing the sequel. This isn't what I had in mind, but it's still VERY excellent! *Waits patiently for the last installment*

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

That was probably one of the most beautiful things I have ever read.

Congrats to you keep doing what your doing

Huh, that got downright depressing pretty quick. A reminder that much of what made our childhoods wonderful disappears through time and growth. You presented that reminder well, and at the same time reminded us that those wonders still exist, just in a different generation. I really like the direction you're going with these chapters. Can't wait for the exciting (and potentially heart-rending) conclusion!

I cant explain myself at all for this. Because there is no way to explain how amazing this story is, This will be a legendary story. No It already is one.

I shed tears of manliness.

Absolutly amazing. This chapter was perfect.

Is Patch a reference to Brotherly Bonds?

>>121545121545

Very well said, it captured what I wanted to say.

You better not kill them in the next chapter.